2024届北京东城区高三英语一模书面表达讲评课件

东城一模书面表达假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。今年世界地球日的主题为“Planetvs.Plastics”，你校将举办相关活动。你的笔友Jim发来邮件，询问该活动的情况。请你用英文给他回复，内容包括：1．活动内容；2．你的任务。写作目的：写作背景：写作对象：写作内容：介绍活动WorldEarthDay；学校举办活动笔友Jim能来参加吗？要点1>要点2要点1：我们学校组织的与plastic相关的具体可实行的活动要点2：与活动相关联的我的任务！时态：一般现在时、一般将来时作文中不要有任何圈、方框等标记，分段直接开头空5个字母。作文写15行，第一段3行以内，最后一段2行，详写要点6-7行，略写要点3-4行。Schoolactivities:givelecturesontheseverityofplasticpollutiondo

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plasticsinourschool’ssciencelabholdaworkshoptorecycleplasticbagsandusethemtomakehandmadedecorations.pickupplasticbagsoncampusLinkingexpressions:asformytask/job;asa….,mytask/jobisto..Identity:theleader/thepresidentofthestudentsunion/labassistant/oneoftheorganizers/therepresentativeof…DearJim,

Howiseverythinggoing?Asyouknow,thethemeoftheWorldEarthDay2024is“Planetvs.Plastics”.Ourschoolisorganizinganeventtoraisestudents’awarenessofplasticpollutionandinspireustomakeadifference.Theeventwillfeaturesomeactivitieslikepresentationsbyenvironmentalexpertsanddiscussionsabouttheimpactofplasticpollutiononourplanet.Thehighlightoftheeventwillbeahands-onworkshop.Tohelpwithit,Iwillgotothenearbyneighborhoodwithmyclassmatestocollectplasticwaste,whichwillbecreativelymadeintoartworksintheworkshop.Afterthat,wewillgivethembacktotheneighbors.Iameagerfortheevent.Waitformypictures!Yours,LiHua暴露问题VS-debate，twopartsPl-plantJim-invite内容过于宽泛,不可行，详略不得当-目的，时间，地点要点之间的内在逻辑，和主题的相关度和可操作性时态人称要点齐全详略得当语言准确句式多样表达得体条理清晰行文连贯优秀

刘凯老师解析：内容完整、丰富，与主题相关度高；语言有少许错误，条理清晰、行文连贯，有一定的交际。二档上刘凯老师解析：内容完整，与活动主题基本相关，句式略显单一。及格

日常积累，有效迁移独家范文赏析1：Ihopethisemailfindsyouwell.I'mdelightedtohearfromyouregardingourschool'supcomingactivitiesrelatedtoWorldEarthDay,withthisyear'sthemebeing"Planetvs.Plastics".Theactivitieswillincludeeducationalworkshopsonplasticpollution,beachclean-upcampaigns,andseminarsonsustainablelivingpractices.Myassignedtaskistocoordinatetherecyclingprogramatourschoolandraiseawarenessabouttheimportanceofreducingplasticwaste.I'mexcitedabouttheopportunitytocontributetosuchameaningfulcauseandmakeapositiveimpactonourenvironment.Lookingforwardtosharingmoreupdateswithyousoon.独家范文赏析2：I'mgladtoreceiveyouremailinquiringaboutourschool'seventthemed"Planetvs.Plastics"forthisyear'sWorldEarthDay.Theeventwillbeavibrantone,filledwithvariousactivitiesaimedatraisingawarenessabouttheharmfuleffectsofplasticsonourplanet.Wewillhaveinformativelecturesontheenvironmentalimpactofplastics,interactiveworkshopswherestudentscanlearnaboutsustainablealternatives,andarecyclingdrivetoencourageeveryonetoreducetheirplasticwaste.Asformyrole,Ihavebeenassignedthetaskoforganizingtherecyclingdrive.Thisinvolvescoordinatingwithdifferentclassestocollectplasticwaste,arrangingforitsproperdisposal,andpromotingtheimportanceofrecyclingamongmypeers.Ibelievethisexperiencewillnotonlyhelpmegainvaluableorganizingskillsbutalsodeepenmyunderstandingoftheimportanceofprotectingourplanet.I'mlookingforwardtoparticipatinginthismeaningfuleventandhopeyoucanjoinusifpossible.独家范文赏析3：Ihopethisemailfindsyouwell.I'mexcitedtosharedetailsaboutourschool'supcomingactivitiesincelebrationofWorldEarthDay,whichfocusesonthetheme"Planetvs.Plastics".Therewillbevariousengagingactivitiessuchaseducationalworkshopsonplasticpollution,beachclean-upcampaigns,andseminarsonsustainablelivingpractices.Notonlywilltheseactivitiesraiseawarenessaboutenvironmentalissues,buttheywillalsoencouragestudentstotakeactiontoprotectourplanet.Ibelievethatparticipatingintheseactivitieswillprovideuswithvaluableinsightsintotheimportanceofenvironmentalconservation.Myassignedtaskistocoordinatetherecyclingprogramatourschoolandtoadvocateforreduc