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Chapter9RevisingandeditingContentsThequalityofgoodwriting;Makingyourwritingcoherent;Makingyourwritingclear;TipsforgoodwritingThequalityofgoodwritingClarity:grammar;vocabularyAccuracy:preciselyandexactly,avoidambiguityFluency:smoothlyflowingideasthroughunityandcoherence,avoidbrokensentencesorabruptswitchesofideas;Correctness:grammaticalmattersWhenyouarerevising,checktosee:Iftheideasareallrelatedtoyourthesisstatement?Ifalltheseideasarelogicallyandcoherentlystructured?Iftheseideasareexpressedingoodenglishsentences?Iftheformatandstyleareappropriate?MakingyourwritingcoherentthroughrevisingWhenyourevise,focusonyourattentiononcontentandorganization.Generalquestions:Thethesisfocusandadequatelysupportyourthesisstatement?Haveaclearintroduction,bodyandconclusion?Logicalandclearinstructure?Coherentthroughtransitions?Introduction:Engagethereaders’attention?Presentyourthesisstatementclearly?Backgroundinformation?Body:Presentevidencefromavarietyofreliablesources?Arematerialspresentedinacombinationofsummary,paraphrase,quotation?Anygapsinyourargument?Anyinadequatelysupportedpoints?Anyunnecessaryorirrelevantmaterials?ConclusionSummarizethemainpoints?Repeatthemajorargument,orrestateyourthesis?Arealllooseendstiedup?Haveallthepartsbeensupported?Addressedallthosemostlikelyquestionsaboutthetopic?StyleVarietyinstylebyusingdifferentkindsofsentences?Avoidwordiness?Deletedunnecessarywords,phraseandclauses?Clearconcreteexamples?Definedthekeyterms?Avoidcolloquiallanguage,slang,jargon,anddialect?

Avoid1stpersonpronouns?Makingyourpaperclearthroughediting1)Wordchoiceandperspectivesonsentences:Avoidbeingtoochattyorconversational;Avoidusingclithes,jargon,euphemism,pretendinglanguage,sexistlanguage,andChineseEnglish.Trytowritesentencesthataremore-variedandcomplexinstructure:avoidsentencefragments:Alongwithpopulationexplosionmanyproblemsoccurred.Forinstance,naturalresources,education,etc.(×)Alongwithpopulationexplosionmanyproblemsoccurred,forinstance,naturalresources,education,etc.(√)avoidrun-onsentences(缺乏连词或标点符号的长句):Wehadnolackofentertainmentduringthetimewhichwespentinthecity,whichseemedverygayandattractive.(×)ThecityseemedsogayandattractivethatWehadnolackofentertainmentduringourstaythere.(√)avoiddanglingphrases:Openingthedoor,anamusingscenecaughtmyeye.(×)Openingthedoor,Isawanamusingscene.(√)Tobeadmittedtocollege,theentranceexaminationmustbepassed.(×)Tobeadmittedtocollege,thecandidatemustpasstheentranceexamination.(√)avoidthecommafault:Itwasraininghard,theycouldnotplaybasketballoutside.(×)Itwasraininghardandtheycouldnotplaybasketballoutside.(√)Becauseitwasraininghard,theycouldnotplaybasketballoutside.(√)2)edityourthesis:Forclarity:grammar,vocabularyForvariety:Varietyisthespiceofwriting;trytovaryyourchoiceofwordsasmuchaspossible;lookforanywordsthatarerepeatedmanytimes,espwithinthesameparagraph,thenselectalternatives.Forsymmetry,balanceandparallelism:grammar,logicForeconomy:useasmanywordsasyouneed,butnomorethanyouneedtoaccomplishyourgoal.Everythingshouldbepartofthemaineffect.Nowordshouldbewasted.Everyexcessiveverbiage(冗词)shouldbeeliminatedduringrevision.3)recognizingimprecisionAmbiguity:theresultofvaguelge;nowordisinherentlyvaguebutwordscanbeusedindifferentways.Wordiness:4)writingconcisely:wordinessisasurewayoflosingareader’sattention.Substitutethespecificwordsforgeneralones,avoidthesuperfluousmodifiersbeforeanounorverb:atruefactbasicfundamentalsafreegiftforeignimportsfutureprognosisgreenincolorincloseproximityAvoidthefollowingVerb-objectcombination:Madeadecision=decidedexpressedadenial=deniedventuredanattempt=triedgrantedpermission=permittedAvoidthefollowingbloatedexpressions:Atnotime=neverAtthetimethat=whenDuetothefactthat=becauseDuringthetimethat=whileatthispointintime=nowTipsforgoodwritingRespectyourselfandyourideas:yourideasarethemostimportantpartofyourthesis.Spenttimeandefforttodevelopsophisticated,smartideas.Strivingforclarity:trytomakeyourthesiseasytoreadbyhavingawell-balancedstructure,logicalorganization,andcoherentwriting.Avoidcommongrammaticalerrors:avoidlgefragments,run-onsentences,ambiguousreferences,danglingmodifiers,splitinfinitives,tensechoice,wordiness,andspellingerrors.Sayitwithstyle:everypieceofwritinghasitsowndistinctivestyle.Thestyledependson:thechoiceofwords,thesentencepatterns,andth