读后续写AMother'sDaySurprise课件高三英语一轮复习

AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE【2021.06新高考一卷】2021年6月全国新高考1卷AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jemafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jefturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJeftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear！Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右：2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Step1.

通读全文，

理清脉络1.读六要素2.读情节3.读情感4.读故事主题记叙文的六要素：1.Who2.Where3.When4.Whathappened5.Why6.HowWTC原则审题1.Who2.Where3.When4.Whathappened5.Topic/Theme6.Conflict/Problem考试时把WTC的三个板块梳理清楚，才叫把文章读透了，尽量将这些细节融入到续写里，这样才能更好地呼应全文。2.Where3.When1.Who4.WhathappenedinthekitchenAt6:00amThetwinswantedtomakebreakfastformomasaMother'sDaysurpriseupstairs：inthebedroomtwins--Jenna（agirl）&Jeff(aboy),mother,fatherConflict/Problem1.thebreadturnedblack;2.theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire;3.touchedthehotburner.Themeexpressgratitudeandlovetotheirmom

AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.2.读情节

3.读情感双胞胎想到母亲节为妈妈做早餐制造惊喜而兴高采烈excited

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridge

first.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.2.读情节

3.读情感双胞胎准备早餐，刚开始进展顺利confident/happy

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamess

now.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Then

shecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.2.读情节

3.读情感粥溢，火灭，手伤，面包焦，双胞胎慌乱disappointed/panicked双胞胎想到母亲节为妈妈做早餐制造惊喜而兴高采烈双胞胎准备早餐，刚开始进展顺利粥溢，火灭，手伤，面包焦，双胞胎慌乱2.读情节

3.读情感excitedconfident/happydisappointed/panicked“3衔接、2过渡、1主题”来确定写作框架3衔接是指续写第一段首句后的衔接句1，续写第二段首句前后的衔接句2和3.2过渡是指续写第一段衔接句1和段末衔接句2之间的过渡，以及续写第二段衔接句3和文末主题句之间的过渡.1主题是指续写第二段文末的主题句.Step2:依据首句，构思框架Para1：Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.衔接句1Para2：Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.衔接句2衔接句3过渡句1过渡句2主题句续写首句

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.情节设计——ARE原则（Action、Response、Emotion）①father’sresponseandemotion(--)②Howthefatherhelpedthemmakethebreakfast

③Thebreakfastwasready.1.衔接father的回应或反应2.衔接早餐已经做好过渡句13.衔接mother的回应或反应①Howtheirmotherreactedtothebreakfastandthemother’semotion②whatthetwinsandfatherdid.圆满结局（主题句）Para1

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Para2

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Step3:增加细节，展开续写Howfatherreactedtothemessinthekitchenandhowhehelpedthetwinsmakebreakfast.Howtheirmotherreactedtothebreakfastandwhatthetwinsandfatherdid.按“所见、所闻、所说、所思、所感、所做”构想5-8个合理细节。FatherThetwins1.爸爸了解情况.（所闻）2.爸爸安慰他们。(所做）3.爸爸帮助他们做早餐。（所做）1.在爸爸的指导下，他们成功把早餐做好了。（所做）2.他们迫切的想让妈妈品尝。（所感）Howfatherreactedtothemessinthekitchenandhowhehelpedthetwinsmakebreakfast.第一段续写细节:1.爸爸看见厨房的脏乱，父亲感到惊讶（所见所感）第二段续写细节:ThetwinsMother2.妈妈很感动，拥抱他们。（所感/所做）3.妈妈品尝早餐，表扬他们。（所做）Father1.爸爸假装惊讶。（所感）1.他们拥抱妈妈并对妈妈说“