技巧02 如何构思情节-高一英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练

高一英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练技巧02如何构思情节情节是叙事性文本的构成要素之一，由一系列相互关联的事件构成，是叙事性文本中最为典型、最为生动的内容。解读叙事性文本，不仅应抓住情节的起因、发展、高潮、结局，更应抓住情节的内在冲突、矛盾等。一方面，高考续写内容主要集中在情节的高潮和结局部分。此部分反映个体经验及思想上的困惑与冲突、危机的出现或转折、矛盾冲突以某种方式得到解决及事件的最终结局。因而，合理的续写情节应包括矛盾冲突、危机转折、问题解决和最终结局。另一方面，高考读后续写不是独立存在的，它是已有叙事情节的延续，这就要求学生在主题、情感、人物和事件等方面与已有情节保持一致。读后续写中，学生可以利用如下步骤进行故事的情节分析及设置：1.研读续写源语篇，确定故事话题与主题读后续写，首先在于“读”。“读”的一个重要意图在于确定材料的主题。主题也称之为“中心思想”，是语篇的灵魂。因此，续写情节应紧紧围绕主题这个核心，突显主题的现实价值和情感意义。主题的确定有两条途径：一是提炼，二是感悟。认识事物是由浅入深、由表及里的过程。我们要对已有材料进行分析、归纳、筛选，并从不同的角度进行比较鉴别，去粗取精，由感性到理性，这样才能提炼出事物的本质和深刻的主题。感悟来自苦思而产生的灵感。苦思的过程就是对材料信息进行去伪存真、由表及里的感悟过程。主题始终蕴藏着作者的意图或价值取向。主题一般包括中心内容与价值取向两个方面。中心内容是文章所负载的信息。价值取向是作者想要通过作品传达的思想。作者可能会用标题、一个词、一句话或一段话呈现主题，而学生需要敏锐地获取这些关键信息以提炼出主题及作者的价值取向。一般来说，作者的价值取向包括历史意义、伦理意义、人生意义、现实价值、情感价值等。2.寻找语篇的隐性话语，发现隐藏在故事背后的问题隐性话语（隐性话语（伏笔））是上文看似无关紧要的事或物，对下文将要出现的人物或事件预先作出的某种提示或暗示。隐性话语（伏笔）有以下三种作用：为故事的展开服务，给予读者暗示；制造悬念，提高读者继续阅读的兴趣；强调伏线必须有始有终，前文的迹象提示必在后文中体现。阅读材料中的隐性话语（伏笔）在续写部分得以体现，才能使得续文情节合情合理，即学生在续写中要遵循“寻找隐性话语（伏笔）—回应隐性话语（伏笔）”的写作规则。然而，隐性话语（伏笔）经常零星散落在试题材料中，不易发觉。有时，试题材料中看似“闲笔”之处却是重要的伏笔信息。学生如何才能精准地找出“潜伏”在试题材料中的隐性话语（伏笔）？通过梳理历次高考读后续写试题材料，我们发现，隐性话语（伏笔）通常体现在特定的人、物(事件)、语言、情感、主人公期待和反常情境六个方面。通过关注这六个方面，我们就能找到隐性话语（伏笔），进而通过回应隐性话语（伏笔）来设置合理的情节。需要注意的是，试题材料中可能会有很多隐性话语（伏笔），而续写内容不可能回应所有隐性话语（伏笔），这就需要学生选取有助于推动情节发展或能突显试题材料价值取向的隐性话语（伏笔）来设置情节。例如，以2021年6月浙江卷读后续写试题的隐性话语（伏笔）及其回应为例进行详细阐述：【物(事件)】隐性话语（伏笔）：①Mydadearnedmoneytopayfamilyexpensesfromage14.②Ididn’treallyunderstandhisworld.③IthoughtthatIwouldsurpassanythinghehadaccomplishedafterhighschoolgradua-tion.④IplannedtodowiththepayasIwished.⑤Iwasn’tinterestedmorework.⑥Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.⑦thetruck回应：①Heexertedallhisenergiestosupportthefamilywithoutanybitterwords.②Inowunderstandalltheeffortsmydadputintothefamily.③Iwouldneversurpasswhatmydaddidforthefamilyduetomylittleresponsibilitytak-enforthehousehold.④Idecidedtocontributeallmymoneytomendthetruckinsteadofbuyinganewbasket-ball.⑤Thatnight,beforeIwenttobed,IdecidedtocontinuemyworkifIcouldbecauseIlearnedthetruemeaningofgrowingup.⑥⑦Myparentshadintendedtofixthebro-kentruckbutcouldn’tgetenoughmoneytoaffordit.通过梳理试题材料中人、物(事件)、语言、情感、主人公期待及反常情境等隐性话语（伏笔）信息，我们能够快速把握叙事的情节，找到矛盾冲突的原因，进而发现亟待解决的问题。3.丰富故事情节的内涵，突出问题解决的实际意义历次高考读后续写试题材料多为遇险脱困、生活趣事等常见的个体经历，其情节主线并不复杂。学生三言两语便能写完情节主线内容，而这又引发了另一个问题：学生写出的情节徒有主线骨架，并无“血肉”。例如，2021年新高考I卷读后续写试题中写完Jenna和Jeff做好早餐送到母亲床前，看着母亲吃完早餐的时候，是否就应该结束续写呢？其实不然。我们还可以从环境、心理、动作、语言和情感等五个方面着手，丰富情节内容，推动问题的解决。4.聚焦事件发生始末，确保叙事的层次性叙事文本就是叙述人物活动、事件发生经过、作者抒发情感的语篇，其结构一般遵循以下三种顺序：（1）时间顺序：叙事主要用来叙述过去发生的事件，这个事件既可以是真实的，也可以是虚构的。叙事的特点是，叙事中事件发生的时间顺序就是事件实际发生的时间顺序。如果叙述的时间发生改变，那么叙述的事件也会发生相应改变。例如：事件一：Onthewayhomefullofexcitement,Ithoughtabouthowtomakeuseofthe“huge”sumofmoney.“Ineedanewfootballinthefuture.”Iwhisperedtomyself.Approachingmyhouse,Inoticedmydadandmomstandingbesidetheoldtruckofmyfamily,lookingsad.事件二：Onthewayhomefullofexcitement,Ithoughtabouthowtomakeuseofthe“huge”sumofmoney.Approachingmyhouse,Inoticedmydadandmomstandingbesidetheoldtruckofmyfamily,lookingsad.“Ineedanewfootballinthefuture.”事件一是基于2021年6月浙江卷读后续写试题材料进行的续写，其传递的是作者可能会改变钱的用途，将钱用于解决家里的困难。而事件二则恰恰相反，其传递出作者即便知道了家里的困难，仍然想买新足球的想法。事件一、二传达的意义之所以大相径庭，原因就在于改变了叙述的时间。（2）空间顺序：叙事文本尤其是关于景物的叙事文本，常常会出现空间位移的现象，这在一定程度上是由于景物都是以一定的空间为背景的。空间位移一般可以分为两种：一种是以作者的位置为中心，推向其他人或物的位置；另一种是作者在行动中，按行动路线所涉及的空间逐个叙事状物，即人们常说的“移步换形”。例如： (2018年6月浙江卷读后续写)Iknewwehadgottenhopelesslylost.Afterseeminglyages,therecamealoudcryofmydad.Asaquickresponse,Ishoutedinaloudvoice.“Dad,I’mhere!”Tracingmyvoice,Dadfinallyfoundmeandwegotreunited. (2021年6月浙江卷读后续写)Onthewayhomefullofexcitement,Ithoughtabouthowtomakeuseofthe“huge”sumofmoney.Approachingmyhouse,Inoticedmydadandmomstandingbesidetheoldtruckofmyfamily,lookingsad.Thatnight,beforeIwenttobed,IdecidedtocontinuemyworkifIcouldbecauseIlearnedthetruemean-ingofgrowingup.（3）情感顺序：情感顺序指将客观事物固有的逻辑关系巧妙地组合在思想情感发展的线索中，组成一个层次式的语篇，体现了人在认识事物过程中的情感变化与不断成长的心路历程，以及面对矛盾冲突时的思想转变和情感变化。情感层次的不断提升不仅有助于推动情节的发展、矛盾冲突的解决，更有助于突显语篇的情感价值，进一步升华主题。例如： (2021年6月浙江卷读后续写)Fromage14,mydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.Ididn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither.Athome,mydadsaid,“Ajob’sabigsteptogrowingup.I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.”Mydad’swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn’tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.Myparentshadintendedtobuyanewtruckbutcouldn’tgetenoughmoneytoaffordit.Suddenly,IrealizedwhatIshoulddomypartinthefamilyresponsibilities.Hold-ingthemoney,Isaid,“Dad,hereiswhatIgotformywork.Ihopeitwouldhelp.”Thatnight,beforeIwenttobed,IdecidedtocontinuemyworkifIcouldbecauseIlearnedthetruemean-ingofgrowingup.2021年6月浙江卷读后续写试题材料体现出作者情感层次的不断递进和升华。首先，语篇描写了作者情感的第一层次---自私。作者不理解为何父亲从小就赚钱养家，对父亲暗示他要将打工赚来的钱用于补贴家用较为抵触。两周后，作者便萌生了不愿再工作的想法，并认为将自己辛苦赚来的钱用于补贴家用是不公平的。接着，语篇描写了作者情感的第二层次---责任。当作者意识到父母因没有足够的钱购买全家赖以生存的卡车而担忧时，他主动把赚来的钱交给父母。最后，语篇描写了作者情感的第三层次---成长。作者决定继续工作，主动承担起一份家庭责任。上述语篇通过情感描写的不断递进，既推动了情节的发展，又突显了主题。5.基于故事进展引入新角色，以合理解决矛盾冲突续写内容中最主要的情节就是故事的高潮部分。所谓高潮就是矛盾冲突激化最激烈、涉事各方最终角力即将分出胜负的关键节点。一旦矛盾冲突得以解决，叙事就走向结局。在有些情形下，主人公会碰到自己无法解决的矛盾冲突，此时就需要叙事材料中其他涉事人或物来帮助主人公走出困境。如果协助主人公走出困境的其他人或物已在试题材料中出现，我们称之为介质。介质在高考读后续写试题中经常出现。介质就是作者安排的某个人物或事件为下一个人物或事件的出现埋下的隐性话语（伏笔）。如果协助主人公走出困境的人物或事件没有出现在试题材料中，或试题材料只是暗示这一人物或事件即将出现，我们称之为第三方角色。第三方角色引入的唯一目的就是帮助主人公脱离困境，使叙事朝着主人所期待的结局发展。例如，2020年7月浙江卷读后续写试题最后解决人熊大战这一矛盾冲突的第三方角色是护林员(rangers)。护林员这个角色虽然在所给材料中并未出现，但试题材料已对其进行了暗示“Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway.”。叙事情节中矛盾冲突的解决要遵循“意料之外，情理之中”的原则，即无论作者设计的情节多么惊险曲折，介质的回应或第三方角色的引入必须合乎情理，并能助力问题的解决。6.点明人物或故事的结局，回应源语篇的隐性话语结局是指一系列事件的结束，包括人或物的下场、目的的实现或失败等。叙事的结局是指主要矛盾冲突解决后至故事结束的阶段。在此阶段，事件最终以符合主人公预期的结局收尾，即便结局不符合主人公预期，那也对主人公有着重要的意义或价值。结局是建立在开端、发展、高潮基础上的对整个故事情节所做的最后完结和交待，其不是孤立存在的，具有不可替代性。结局若设置巧妙则对作品的内容、主旨都具有画龙典型句式之用；结局若草率结束则成狗尾续貂之憾。结局的设置有虚实两种情况。虚的结局是指作者不直截了当告知读者事件的准确结局，而是留有空间让读者去想象；实的结局是指作者明确告知读者事件的结局。例如，在2018年6月浙江卷读后续写试题中，对于“we”能否找到回农场的路，虚的结局可以设置为“Andjustwhenallhopeseemedlost,anxiousshoutswereheardinthedistancewithtorchescomingintosight.”，实的结局则可以设置为“Finally,UnclePaulfoundusandwewereback,safeandsound.”。因此，成功的结局只是叙事活动在时空上的暂时停止，其文本的现实价值与精神意义由读者去想象和阐释，从而赋予文本更长久的生命力。1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。Annawastheschool'sbestdancerandthiswaswhatshetoldherparentseveryday.“Mrs.KellysaysIamverygifted,”shesaid,“ShesaysmaybeIwillbethebestdancerinourballet(芭蕾)team.”Mrs.Kellyhadsaidthesethings,butshehadsaidsotoanumberofdancersinordertoencouragethembecauseshebelievedit’simportanttogetstudentsinspired.Annawasalsoinspiredbyherwordstobewinnerandbeateveryoneelse.However,MrsKellyactuallypreferredthatAnnajustlikedtodanceonthestage.“Students!Students!”Mr.KellycalledtothesmallgroupofgirlsaroundAnna.“I’dliketointroducetoyouournewstudent,Sally.Shelovesdancingasyoudo.Ihopeyoualltaketimetosayhitohernicely.”AnnalookedatSallywithdancingshoesinherhands.Sallydidnothaveadancer’sbody:Shewasshort,withlegsthatlookedliketheybelongedtoafroginsteadofaneleven-year-oldgirl.Annafeltrelaxedandwassurethisgirlwouldnotdancewell.Inthefollowingweeks,however,itturnedoutthatAnnamadeawrongguessaboutSally’sdancingperformance.Infact,Sallywasnotjutagooddancer,butanamazinglygifteddancer.ShedancedinbeautifulwaysthatAnnathoughtwasimpossibleforsuchashortgirl.What’smore,Sallywasanicegirl.Sheoftenhelpedgirlswithdifficultdancemoves.Shewasactive,Shewassmart,andeveryonelikedher.ItseemedthatSallywastakingeverythingawayfromAnna.Annawassadandmad.Theschoolballetteamwouldpickoutthebestdancerinonlytwoweeks.SheworriedthatSallywouldwinthecontestandbecomethebestdancer.注意：1.所续写短文词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1Annafeltupsetandthenshethoughtoutaplan.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2Sallyputonherdancingshoes,feelingsomethingwrongwiththem.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Ieverstudiedataschoolthatwasdownthestreetfromahomelessshelter(收容所).Theshelterwasrightnextdoortoalittlegasstationwheretheysoldbreakfastdaily.Iwouldrodemybiketothestation.Iwouldbuyasandwichandacokeeverymorningfromthestore.Therewasalwayssomeonestandingaroundoutsideaskingformoneytogetsomethingtoeat.Asmyfamilywasn’trich,Ihardlyhadmoneytospare,butsometimesIwouldgivethehomelessmychangeuntilInoticedmostofthemwouldgoinsideandbuyabeerwiththemoneyinsteadoffood.IstoppedgivingoutmychangeandjusttoldthemIdidn’thavemoney.Oneday,asIwaswalkingoutofthestore,Inoticedanoldmanwhowasobviouslyhomeless.However,interestingly,hewasalwayswearinganicesuit(西装)andatieandjustsittingonthesidewalkwatchingthecarsgoby.WhenIwalkedpasthim,heaskedmeinaverykindvoicewhetherIhadanychangetosparesothathecouldgetasandwich.BeforeIcouldsayaword,headdedthathewasn’twanting“beermoney”.Ihadjustenoughmoneyinmypocketthatdaytopayforanothersandwichandacanofcoke.So,Ijustwalkedbackinsidethestoreandboughthimsomebreakfast.WhenIcameoutandgaveittohim,hiseyeslitup.Hesaid,“Thankyouverymuch!”WesatandtalkedforaminutebeforeIhadtogotoschool.Itbecameaneverydayritual(习惯).IlearnedthathisnamewasMasseyandfromAfrica.WheneverIhadthetospare,Iwouldbuytwosandwichesandtwocokes.Wewouldsitoutsidethestore,haveourbreakfasttogetherandtalkforawhileuntilitwastimeformetogotoschool.Forawhile,Istoppedbuyingourbreakfasteverymorningbecausemybrother’sbirthdaywascomingup.IwantedtosaveupsothatIcouldbuyhimagift.IexplainedtoMasseythereasonandhesaidheunderstood,butstillsatandtalkedwithme.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Mybrother’sbirthdayfinallycameandIfeltdepressedbecauseIhadn’ttoomuchmoneytobuyhimagift.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thenextdaywhenitcametimeforourmorningchat,IaskedMasseyifhehadleftthegiftonmybike.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Myfatherisapracticalman.Hecan’texplaincalculus(微积分),buthecantellyouhowmuchpressureboilerneeds.Heputhimselfthroughnightschooltobecomeanengineer,butthatwasonlyafterheworkedasanelectricianandamechanic.Onedaywewalkedbyatoystorewindow.Sittinginthecornerwasthemostunusualdollhouse(玩具屋)I’deverseen.Itwasshapedlikeanupturnedlog.“Oh,Daddy,”Isaid,“isn’titbeautiful?DoyouthinkSantaClauswillbringittome?”Dadlookedatthe$100pricetag—anexorbitant(过高的)figureinthosedays.“IthinkevenSantacouldn’taffordthishouse,”hejoked,hikinguphisbeltasheoftendoeswhenhe’snervous.“Maybeoneday,sweetheart.”OnChristmasmorning,Iawokeearlyandraceddownstairs.Inthedim(昏暗的)light,Imadeoutsomewrappedboxesunderthetree—butnonelargeenoughtocontainmydollhouse.Dadcouldseemydisappointment.Hepulledmeontohislapandgentlytoldmehow,asaboy,hehadwantedaredwagon,buthisfathercouldn’taffordone.Hesaidhemadehisownfromwoodandoldwheelshefound.“I’llmakeoneforyou,”Dadpromisedme.AndrightafterChristmas,despitealltheunfinishedprojectsathome,hestartedit.Ihadthoughtitwasaneasytoytomake,buteverystepofthelongprocesswasmorecomplex(复杂的)thanIhadexpected.Nightafternight,Dadwouldcomehomefromhisjobdeadtired,yethe’dalwaysfindtimetoworkontheloghouse.Inthedimlight,dadwasalwaysbusycreatingmydollhouse.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡上的相应位置作答。Ihesitated(犹豫),wonderingifIshouldhelpmуfather.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Inall,ittookonemonthofhardworkbyus.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Thirtyyearsago,Cayleywasgreatlysurprisedtofindthatshehadabrother.Shemadeuphermindtofindhim.Sincethensherefusedtoleavethehomeshegrewupin,hopingthatherbrotherwouldknockonthedooroneday.LittledidCayleyknowthatherbrother,NickRhoades,hadbeenlongingtodoso,butonlytowalkawayatthelastminute.ButthankstotheTVprogrammeLongLostFamily,thepairhaveenjoyedanemotionalreunion.Cayley’smumJacquelineleftthefamilywhenherdaughterwasonlyseventostartanewlifeinAmerica.CayleywasbroughtupbyhergrandmotherVictoria,whodiedin2001,andsheclearlyrememberedfirstfindingoutaboutherbrotherNick.Cayleywasquiteangrywiththefactthatwascoveredup.Soshewasdeterminedtofindherbrothernomatterwhatdifficultiesshewouldmeetwith.Manyyearslater,Cayley,herhusband,Colin,andtheirchildrenwerestillstayinginthehousewhereshegrewupbecauseshealwayshadhopethatonedayherbrotherwouldknockonthedoor.HerhusbandColinwasveryunderstandingandeventhoughtheyhadtwootherhousestomoveto,theystayedinthesamehouse.Shenevergaveuphope.Meanwhile,whenNickknewhewasadopted,hedidaskhisparentsquestionsandtheytoldhimeverythingtheyknew.Hisadoptiveparentsweresolovingandhismumhadadoptedhundredsofchildren.Nickhadbeenoneofthoseluckykids.Hehadlivedareallyveryhappychildhood.Sadly,whenNickwas18hisadoptivemumdiedofcancer.Afterseveralyears,hisadoptivefatheralsodied.Nickwasextremelysadduringthatperiodoftime.Onceagain,hebecameapoororphanwithoutparents,whichledhimtomakethedecisiontofindhisbirthmumJacqueline.Nickhadbeengivenhisbirthcertificate(出生证)byhisadoptiveparentswithanaddressonit.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。NickandhiswifeSandradecidedtofindhismother’shouse.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thankfully,Nick’ssisterCayleyandNick’swifeSandrabothturnedtoLongLostFamilyforhelp.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Shoesaremadeforwalking.ButAamir,ahomelessIndianboy,doubtedit.Wanderingthenoisyrailwayplatform,hefoundoneofhisflip-flops(人字拖鞋)brokenagain.Hehurriedtoacorner,satdownandtriedtofixit,hisbarefootpressingawkwardlyagainsttheground.However,itwasbeyondrepair.Hegaveupandlookedaroundaimlessly,staringatpeople’sshoes.Suddenly,hiseyesweredrawntotwoboyishlegswearingflawlesslywhitesocksandequallyperfectblackleathershoes,whichwereglitteringinthemid-daysun.Itwasaboyofhisage.Hecouldn’ttreasurehispossessiontoomuch,obviously,becauseeverytenseconds,hestopped,bentdownandcarefullywipedadustortwofromhisshoes.Hisfatherwasconstantlyglancingoverandurginghim,“Hurryup!Thetrainiscoming!”Aamir’seyesfollowedthefatherandson,butmostlytheleathershoes,asifenchanted(被施魔法的).Imagininghimselfwearingthem,thecomfortfromthegoodleather,jaw-droppinglookonhisfriends’faces,hecouldn’thelpcrackingabigsmile.Thebellofthetraindrewhimback;thefancy-shoeboyandhisfatherwereabouttogetaboard.Theytriedtocrowdintothedoorway.However,theinstanttheboyenteredthecompartment(车厢),oneofhisshoesfelloffandbeforehecouldpickitup,thetrainbegantopullaway.Theshoewasnowlyingaloneontheplatform.Aamir’seyeslitupwithexcitement.Likeanarrow,heshotfortheshoeandthenpickeditup,holdingitwithbothhandsasifholdingtheQueen’scrown.Afterafewsecondsofhesitatingandlookingfromtheshoetothetrainandback,hebeganracing--withonlyonegoodshoe,hisflip-flop.Heheldtheleathershoeup,tryingtopassittotheboythroughthewindow,whowasdesperatelyreachingouthishandaswell.However,itwasnevercloseenough.Para1:ThatleftAamirnochoicebuttothrowtheshoeontothetrain.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2:Butwhenheraisedhishead,Aamirsawtheothershoethrownoutofthewindow.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________参考答案1.【参考范文】Somehow,sheevenwasalittleexcitedabouttheplanwhenthinkingthatmaybeshewouldbethebestdancer.Shebegantothinkoftheplancarefully.Firstly,shethoughtSallymustperformbadlyandleaveaterribleimpressiononaudienceonthestage.Therefore,shedecidedtoputsomethingthatcouldn’tbefoundinSally’sshoes.Anideahither:sand,whichseemedtobethemostsuitablethingforthisplan.Asaresult,AnnaputsomesandinSally’sshoessecretly.However,sheinsistedondancingwiththesmilingexpressiontopresenttheperfectcondition.AllthesethingswerecaughtbyAnnawhowasstandingonthewing.Lookingatherinsistencewithpain,Annafeltasenseofguiltinsteadofthepleasurefromsuccessoftheplan.So,AnnatoldthetruthinshameandchosetowithdrawfromthecompetitionafterSallylimpedpainfullyoffthestage.Tohersurprise,Sallysmiledandsaid,“it’sthefriendshipratherthanthebestdancerthatmatters.”Annawasmoveddeeplyandheadedforthestage.【写作指导】本文以人物线索展开，讲述了自傲的芭蕾舞者Anna接受不了转来的舞蹈生Sally，但是出乎意料的是，Sally不仅是一位很有天赋的舞者，而且活泼聪明，大家都很喜欢她。得知学校要在两周内挑选出最好的舞者，Anna担心Sally会赢得比赛。1.段落续写①由第一段首句内容“Anna感到不安，然后她想出了一个计划。”可知，第一段可描写Anna的计划是如何生成和落实的。②由第二段首句内容“Sally穿上舞鞋，觉得有点不对劲。”可知，第二段可描写Sally坚持表演，Anna对自己的行为感到内疚。2.续写线索Anna计划的生成过程以及落实——Sally察觉不对劲但坚持表演——Anna感到内疚并退赛——Sally安慰——Anna深受感动3.词类激活行为类①留下印象：leaveanimpressiononsb./impresssb.②坚持：insiston③退赛：withdrawfromthecompetition情绪类①感到内疚：feelguilty/feelasenseofguilt②感动的：moved/touched【典型句式】【高分句型1】Somehow,sheevenwasalittleexcitedabouttheplanwhenthinkingthatmaybeshewouldbethebestdancer.(运用了when引导的时间状语从句的省略，宾语从句)【高分句型2】Lookingatherinsistencewithpain,Annafeltasenseofguiltinsteadofthepleasurefromsuccessoftheplan.(运用了现在分词短语作伴随状语)2.【参考范文】Mybrother’sbirthdayfinallycameandIfeltdepressedbecauseIhadn’ttoomuchmoneytobuyhimagift.Thatmorning,Idecidedtobuytwosandwichesandtwocokes.IwantedtosharebreakfastwithMassey.However,Ididn’tseehim.Ifeltupsetandwenttobuyasandwich.Tomysurprise,whenIwalkedoutfromthestore,Ifound,ontheseat,anelectricaltrainandabirthdaycardthatsaid“HappyBirthday”withalittlesmileyface.WhenIlookedaround,IcouldseeMasseywalkingintotheshelter.

Thenextdaywhenitcametimeforourmorningchat,IaskedMasseyifhehadleftthegiftonmybike.Heavoidedthequestion.Heaskedifmybrotherhadagoodbirthday.Inevergothimtogivemeastraightansweraboutthebirthdaygifts,butIknewitwashim.Ishowedmygratitudeforwhathedidforus.Nottoolongafterthat,Masseymovedaway.However,everyyearonmybrother’sbirthdayandmine,wewouldgetacardinthemailwithnoreturnaddressthatsaidnothingbut“HappyBirthday”withalittlesmileyface.【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在读书时总是会给无家可归的人零钱，但在注意到大多数人用钱来买啤酒而不是食物后，就不再给他们零钱了。一天，作者遇到一位需要零钱来买食物的老人，用自己的零钱给老人梅西买了食物，这形成了一种日常习惯，作者总是给老人买早餐并和老人聊聊天。作者在为哥哥准备生日礼物的时候，向梅西解释不再给他准备早餐了，梅西表示理解，并继续坐着与作者交谈。1.段落续写①由第一段首句内容“我哥哥的生日终于到了，我感到很沮丧，因为我没有太多钱给他买礼物。”可知，第一段可描写作者准备和梅西一起吃早餐时没有看到梅西，但是在自己的座位上发现了生日礼物和生日贺卡。②由第二段首句内容“第二天，当我们早上聊天的时候，我问梅西是否把礼物忘在我的自行车上了。”可知，第二段可描写虽然梅西没有承认是自己送了礼物，但是作者知道是梅西，并对其表示感激。2.续写线索感觉沮丧——去见梅西——看到礼物——询问梅西——表示感激——生日贺卡3.词汇激活行为类①决定做：decidetodo/makeupone’smindtodo②买：buy/purchase③知道：know/beawareof情绪类①失望的：upset/disappointed②表示感谢：showmygratitude/expressmythanks【典型句式】【高分句型1】Heaskedifmybrotherhadagoodbirthday.（由连接词if引导宾语从句，作asked的宾语）【高分句型2】Ishowedmygratitudeforwhathedidforus.（由连接词what引导宾语从句，作介词for的宾语）3.【参考范文】

Ihesitated,wonderingifIshouldhelpmyfather.ButheseemedtoknowwhatIthoughtandonenightsaidtomewithasmile,“Ineedyourhelp.Let’screatethedollhousetogether.”“But,daddy,Idon’tknowhow,”saidI.“Thatdoesn’tmatter.Iwillteachyou,”saidmyfather.Soeverynightwhenheworkedonthedollhouse,Iwouldsitbyhissideandhewouldpatientlyandlovinglyteachmehowtomakesuchatoy.Itwasreallynoteasy,butoureffortspaidoffandwefinallymadeit.Inall,ittookonemonthofhardworkbyus.Myjoywasbeyonddescriptionatthatmoment.ThenIheardmyfathersaying,“Icanbuildalotofthings,butIcan’tbuildyourlife.AllIcandoistohelpyoubuildyourown.”Iwouldalwaysrememberhiswords,sothedollhousebecamethemostspecialgifttome.LongafterIgaveupplayingdolls,Iwouldoccasionallybringitdownfromtheatticjusttoadmireitandrememberthosedayswhenweworkedtogethertobringmydreamtolife.【写作指导】这是一篇记叙文。文章讲述了作者和父亲一起路过一家玩具店的橱窗，看到一个玩具屋，作者很喜欢，但是价格很贵，最后作者和父亲一起经过一个月的辛苦，完成了一个玩具屋的制作。1.段落续写：①.由第一段首句内容“我犹豫了，不知道我是否应该帮助我的父亲。”可知，第一段可描写父亲看出作者的想法然后主动和作者说让其帮忙的场景和之后他们一起制作玩具屋的过程。②.由第二段首句内容“总之，我们花了一个月的时间辛勤工作。”可知，第二段可描写玩具屋做成之后作者的喜悦之情和父亲对作者的教诲以及作者自己的感悟。2.续写线索：不知是否应该帮忙——想法被看出——一起制作玩具屋——一个月后做成——心情喜悦——父亲教诲——感悟3.词汇激活行为类①.创作：create/produce②.教：teach/instruct③.欣赏：admire/appreciate情绪类①.亲切地；充满爱意地：lovingly/affectionately②.愉悦；高兴：joy/delight【典型句式】[高分句型1].ButheseemedtoknowwhatIthoughtandonenightsaidtomewithasmile.(运用了what引导的宾语从句)[高分句型2].Iwouldoccasionallybringitdownfromtheatticjusttoadmireitandrememberthosedayswhenweworkedtogethertobringmydreamtolife.(运用了when引导的定语从句)4.【参考范文】

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