高二上学期期末读后续写专项课件

阅卷反馈：（读后续写）A.故事线：1、学生对已给故事内容理解不到位，导致后面续写出现前后矛盾现象：1）把鸭子挖出来煮熟吃了。2）鸭子受伤，被带回家。3）把鸭子重新挖出埋掉。2、没有设置故事的矛盾冲突和高潮，平铺直叙，缺少过程描述，直接陈述结果。3、没有理清故事中的人物，出现了第一人称I的叙述。4、人物主次不分，强化了sister这一角色。5、故事场景缺失或不准确：例如在奶奶的卧室，在农场等，没有和前文场景进行呼应。6、故事节外生枝，没有突出主干。7、故事的主题偏题或没有揭示主题：honesty，而写成了和睦的家庭关系等。阅卷反馈：（读后续写）B.情感线1、情感线缺失，多数学生没有用到形容词、副词来描述人物的心理活动。2、一些学生用到了下列的表达：

Tearsfilledhiseyes.

Tearswerewellingupinhiseyes.

Withhiseyesfilledwithtears.Hisfaceturnedred.阅卷反馈：（读后续写）C.语言运用1、时态错用：一般现在时，过去完成时。2、多数学生使用过多的简单句，缺少较高档的句式，例如，状语从句、定语从句，非谓语动词短语等。3、太多的无意义的对话。4、动词过去时的变形错误太多：hug、give、hide、tell等5、动词搭配错用：knockatthedoorat的漏写；saytosbsth;6、抄写前一段文字，没有新的语言表达。D.试卷整体情况1、多数学生的书写潦草，有涂改过多现象。2、少数优生作文从卷面到内容都体现出较高水平，只是占比太少。

Duringthathotsummer,littleSammyandhissisterMariespenttheirvacationattheirgrandparents'farm.Thefarmwasfilledwithfunandadventure,butoneday,anunfortunateaccidentoccurred.Whileplaying,Sammyaccidentallyshothisgrandmother'sbelovedpetduckwithaslingshot(弹弓).Panicked,hequicklyhidtheduckbehindapileofoldwoodintheyard.Hewasafraidtotellhisgrandmotherthetruth,worriedaboutbeingpunished.

However,whathedidn'tknowwasthathissisterMariehadseentheentireevent.Thenextday,whenGrandmaaskedMarietowashthedishes,MarieseizedtheopportunitytoshifttheresponsibilityontoSammy.Shesaid,"Sammytoldmehewantedtohelpinthekitchentoday,Grandma."Sammywasshockedandconfusedbecausehehadnotsaidsuchathing.Marieapproachedhimandwhisperedthreateningly,"Remembertheduck?"ItwasthenthatSammyrealizedMariehadseenhissecretandwasnowusingittomakehimdothehouseworkshedidn'twanttodo.

Thissituationcontinuedforseveralcay..Whenevertherewerehouseholdchorestobedone,MariewouldthreatenSammywith"Remembertheduck?".Sammyfeltanincreasingburdenofguiltandresponsibility.注意：续写词数应为80左右。

Finally,hecouldn'tbearthesecretandpressureanylongeranddecidedtotelleverythingtoGrandma.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ContinuationWritingIIADuck2024年2月19日WhilewritingPrewritingPostwritingContent123行业PPT模板http:///hangye/Prewriting011.ReadformainideawhenwhowhatwhywhereDuringthathotsummerSammy,Marie,GrandmaaduckSammyshottheduckandhidit.Atafarmintheyard2.ReadformaincharactersMarieSammyGrandma3.ReadforplotsWhathappenedtothepetduck?para.1WhathappenedtoSammy?Para.24.ReadforthethemeSolutionThemeEndingConflictSammykilledaduckaccidentally.Hehidtheduckimmediately.Mariethreatenedhimtodohousechoresseveraldays.HedecidedtotelleverythingtoGrandma.HonestyWhilewriting02Finally,hecouldn’tbearthesecretandpressureanylongeranddecidedtotelleverythingtoGrandma.WhatwouldSammydonext?WhatwasGrandma’sreaction?WhatchangeshappenedtoSammy?衔接过渡结局QsWhenItakeoffmywigandmyrednose,I’mstillwearingabigsmile,asIrememberallthefunandlaughteroftheday.When...(did),Sammywas....,asSammy(did)...WhenSammywalkedtowardsGrandma,Sammywassobbing(抽泣),asSammywasafraidofbeingpunishedfortheaccident.衔接Sentencestructures“Whatdidyousaytomyanimals?”saidtheemperor,astonished.“What....?”saidGrandma,(adj.).“Whathappenedtomypet?”saidGrandma,confused.过渡Withtearsofgratituderollingdownhischeeks,Petersaidthankfully,“You’vesavedmetoday.Icouldn’tthankyouenough”.Withtearsof______rollingdownhischeeks,Sammysaid______,“.....”Withtearsofworryrollingdownhischeeks,Sammysaidinalowvoice,“Ishottheduckaccidentally.”过渡ItwasalongthisroadthatStephen’sgrandfatherbuiltasimplebasketbyattahchingapieceofplastictoatelephonepole.Itwas....thatSammy(did).ItwasintheyardthatSammy(did)....Itwasintheyard/farmthatSammylearnttheimportanceofhonesty.主题Afterall,itreallyistruethat“laughteristhebestmedicine.”Afterall,itreallyistruethat“honestyisthebest...”Afterall,itreallyistruethat“honestyisthebestgift.”主题Finally,hecouldn’tbearthesecretandpressureanylongeranddecidedtotelleverythingtoGrandma.WhatwouldSammydonext?WhatwasGrandma’sreaction?WhatchangeshappenedtoSammy?衔接过渡结局QsWhenSammywalkedtowardsGrandma,Sammywassobbing,asSammywasafraidofbeingpunishedfortheaccident.

TakingadeepbreathbehindGrandma,Sammysaidintears,“Grandma...Iwanttotellyousomethingaboutyourduck.”“Whathappenedtomypet?”saidGrandma,confused.Withtearsofworryrollingdownhischeeks,Sammysaidinalowvoice,“Ishottheduckaccidentally.”Then,allthattheycouldseebehindapileofoldwoodwasarottendeadbodywithsomewhitefeather.93Postwriting03Riewtherules高级好用的句型

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