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Task:CharityworkWhatdoesthislogostandfor?HowdoesORBIShelp?Wouldyouliketobeoneofthem?FreetalkORBISdoctorsandnursesdoimportantworkforpoorpeoplewitheyeproblems.TodaywearegoingtomeetDiana.
Let’slookatthepictures.TheywillshowthechangesinDiana'slife.Canyoudecribethesepicturesinyourownwords?So
Dianaisanofficelady.Doesshelookhappy?--WhatwasDiana'sjob?--Shewasasecretaryofacompany.--WhichdoesDianalikebetter,travelling,bycarorbyplane?--Bycar.Becauseshewasafraidoftravellingbyplane.[ˈsekrətrɪ]--SomethingaboutORBIS.Soshetrainedasanurse.--Whichprogrammeisshewatching?--WhydoesshelearnaboutORBIS?--ShewantstojoinORBIS.DianaworksforORBISnow.Isshehappynow?**Listenandcompletethetable**
AmywroteareportonDianaandhercharitywork.ListentoAmy'sreportandfinishthetable.ChangesinDiana'slifeInthepastworkedasa(1)_________wasafraidof(2)_________learntaboutORBISon(3)_________trainedasa(4)_________andattended(5)_____________afterworkAtpresentgetusedto(6)______________byplane(7)_____________beingabletohelppeopleseeagainmakesherlifemore(8)_______________secretaryflyingTVnursecoursestravellingenjoysmeaningfulParagraph1:WhatwasDiana'slifelikeinthepast?Paragraph2:Paragraph3:Paragraph4:WhatchangedDiana'slife?Whatisshegettingusedtonow?WhatdoesDianathinkabouthernewlife?MainideaofeachparagraphComparethelivesinthepastandatpresentworklifestylewayoftravellingsimilarstructureLanguagepoints开车上班/上学drivetowork/school到许多地方旅行traveltomanyplaces害怕飞行(不敢乘飞机)beafraidofflying下决心(做某事)makeupone’smind(todosth.)决定做某事=decide/makeadecision
todosth.Languagepoints受训当护士并在下班后参加课程学习.trainasanurseandattendcoursesafterwork习惯于乘飞机旅行get/beusedtotravellingbyplane同以前有一样多的钱haveasmuchmoneyasbefore很高兴能够帮助人们重见光明begladtobeabletohelppeopleseeagain2024/2/22ShareyourwritingWritestep-by-stepChooseatopicCollectdetailsWriteafirstdraft:abeginning+amiddle+anendingImproveyourwritingCheckforerrorsWriteafinalcopyHowtowrite?Chooseatopic/CollectdetailstheworkofUNICEFSubject:Form:Purpose:Audience:areportforclasspresentationtoshareatrueexperiencetheclassmatesChooseatopicTopic:areportontheworkofUNICEFChooseatopic/CollectdetailsCompletea5W’schartWho?What?When?Where?Why?MandeepandaUNICEFofficerHelpMandeepenteraschoolInIndiaOneday...UNICEFwantstohelpthelocalchildren.IdeasAnexperienceincludes(1)thebasicdetailsofwhathappened;(2)sensory(感官)detailsaboutwhatpeoplesaw,feltandheard;and(3)dialoguestoshowwhatpeoplesaid.Chooseatopic/CollectdetailsPutthingsinorderTopic:areportontheworkofUNICEFSheusedtoworkonthefarm.Hecameandlearntabouttheconditionsofthelocalpeople.Sheenteredaschool.Shehopestobecomeateacher.Shecanreadandwrite.Shecouldn’treadorwrite.OrganizationForanexperience,youshouldarrangethedetailsintimeorder,theorderinwhichtheyhappened.Createyourtimeline.WriteafirstdraftBeginningMiddleEndingOpeningsentences●Inthepast,she...●Oneday,...●Now,she...ClosingsentencesTheendingtellshowshefelt.Themiddlegivesdetailsaboutwhathappened.Thebeginningcatchesthereaders’attention.Shehopestobecomeateacher...Mandeep...Inyourfirstparagraph,youshouldgetthereaders’attentionandintroducetheexperience.Herearethreewaystobeginyourparagraph.▉Startwithdialogues.▉Beginwith
afactoraninterestingstatement.▉Introduceaspecificexample.
“Ialwaysdreamedofgoingtoschoolwhileworkingonthefarm,”Mandeepsaid.“Nowitfinallycomestrue.”WhenMandeepwastoldthatshecangotoschoolinsteadofworkingonthefarm,shecouldn’tbelieveherears.WriteafirstdraftUNICEFhashelpedthousandsofpoorchildrengobacktoschoolandgreatlyimprovedtheirlives.Writetwoorthreebeginningsforyourfirstparagraphandchoosethebestone!WriteafirstdraftThemiddleparttellsthestory.Itshouldbeorganizedintimeorder.Herearesomeotherthingstokeepinmind.▉
Includesensorydetails.▉
Usequotationsanddialogues.▉
Sharethefeelingspeopleexperienced.Beforeyoustart,reviewyourdetailstomakesureyoudon’tforgetanything.WriteafirstdraftMandeepisagirlfromIndia.Sheusedtoworkonthefarmallday.Herfamilyhadmanychildren.Shewasverypoor.Shecouldnotreadorwrite.Oneday,aUNICEFoffficercametoMandeep’svillageandlearntabouttheconditionsofthelocalpeople.Hewantedallthechildreninthevillagetolearntoread.Threeweekslater,Mandeepenteredaschool.Nowshecanreadandwrite.Shegoestoschooleveryday.SheenjoysschoolandisgratefultoUNICEF.
Transitionwordshelpputthestoryintimeorder.Sensorydetailshelpthereader“see”and“feel”theexperience.Don’tworryaboutthemistakes!WriteafirstdraftThefinalparagraphshouldbringyourstorytoaclose.Herearethreepossiblewaystoendyourstory.▉
Tellwhatyoulearntfromtheexperience.▉
Explainhowtheexperiencechangedyou.▉
Tellhowyoufeltabouttheexperience.
MandeepenjoysherschoolandisverygratefultoUNICEFforhelpingher.
UNICEFtotallychangedMandeep’slife.Nowsheusuallyreadsforherfamilies.Shesaysthatshehopestobecomeateacherandhelpmorepoorchildreninthefuture.“It’sgreattohelpothers,”Mandeepsays.“I’lltrymybesttostudy,sothatmaybeinthefutureIwillbeabletohelpotherstoo.”Useoneofthesewaystoendyourstoryandifyoudon’tlikeit,tryanotherone.Improveyourwriting1.Readyourreportagaintoseehowyoufeelaboutit.2.Revieweachpartcarefully—thebeginning,themiddleandtheending.3.Askaclassmatetoreadyourfirstdraft.4.Changeanypartthatneedstobeimproved.Improveyourwriting“Ialwaysdreamedofgoingtoschoolwhileworkingonthefarm.”Mandeepsaid,“Nowitfinallycomestrue.”MandeepisagirlfromIndia.Sheusedtoworkonthefarmallday.Herfamilyhadmanychildren.Shewasverypoor.Shecouldnotreadorwrite.Oneday,aUNICEFoffficercametoMandeep’svillageandlearntabouttheconditionsofthelocalpeople.Hewantedallthechildreninthevillagetolearntoread.Threeweekslater,Mandeepenteredaschool.Nowshecanreadandwrite.Shegoestoschooleveryday.SheenjoysschoolandisgratefultoUNICEF.UNICEFtotallychangedMandeep’slife.Nowsheusuallyreadsforherfamilies.Shesaysthatshehopestobecomeateacherandhelpmorepoorchildreninthefuture.
Shereallywantedtochangebutshedidn’tknowhow.—AddandmovepartsHesaiditwasimportantforchildrentoreceive
education.moredetails.totherightorder.Improveyourwriting—RewritepartsTrytomakethesesentencesbetter.1.Herfamilyhadmanychildren.Shewasverypoor.Shecouldnotreadorwrite.Herfamilyhadmanychildrenand
wasverypoor,so
shedidnotgotoschool
andcouldnotreadorwrite.(manyshortsentences)(alongsentence)Transitionwordshelpconnectevents.First,then,nextBefore,after,finallyNow,then,soonAssoonas,atlast,intheend...................................................................................................CheckforerrorsPunctuationCapitalizationGrammarerrorSpelling“Ialwaysdreamedofgoingtoschoolwhileworkingonthefarm.Mandeepsaid.Nowitfinallycomestrue.”MandeepisagirlfromIndia.Sheusedtoworkonthefarmallday.Herfamilyhadmanychildren
andwasverypoor,soshedidnotgotoschoolandcouldnotreadorwrite.Shereallywantedtochangebutwhatcouldshedo?Oneday,aunicefoffficercametoMandeep’svillageandlearntabouttheconditionsofthelocalpeople.Hesaiditisimportantforchildrentoreceiveeducation.Hewantedallthechildreninthevillagetolearntoread.Threeweekslater,Mandeepenteredalocalprimaryschool.Nowshegoestoschooleverydayandshecanreadandwrite.SheenjoysschoolandisgreatfultoUNICEF.UNICEFtotallychangedMandeep’slife.Nowsheusuallyreadsforherfamilies.Shesaysthatshehopestobecomeateacherandhelpmorepoorchildreninthefuture.
UNICEFwasgrateful”“2024/2/22√DidIfocusononeevent?DoIincludeenoughdetails?HaveIchosenthespecificnouns,vividverbsandcolourfuladjectives?DidIhaveaninterestingbeginningthatcatchesthereaders'attention,amiddleorganizedintimeorder,andaneffectiveending?Domysentencesreadsmoothly?DidIfollowtherulesforcapitalization,punctuation,spellingandgrammar?AssessingthefinalcopyDidIsoundlikethepersonwho’stellingthestory?2.Thepartthatstillneedsworkis:____________________________________________________________MystoryReflectingonyourwriting3.ThemainthingIlearntaboutwritingastoryis:____________________________________________________________4.ThenexttimeIwriteastory,Iwouldliketo:____________________________________________________________1.Thebestpartofmystoryis:____________________________________________________________Name:MandeepCountry:IndiaFamily:manychildren,poorInthepast:workedonfarm,couldn'treadorwriteOneday:aUNICEFofficercame,learnabouttheconditionsNow:enteraschool,canreadandwriteFuture:hopetobeateacherMakeanoutline.Usethephrasesandwordstoformwholesentences.BackgroundMandeep'slifeinthepastChangesMandeep'slifeatpresentMandeephopes…usedtoworkonthefarmalldaycouldn’treadorwriteaUNICEFofficercame;learntabout....;help...
tobecomeateacherenteraschoolcanreadandwritefromIndia,hasmanychildren,poorShareyourwriting____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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