读后续写2021年6月浙江省高考真题讲解课件【知识精讲精研】 高考英语作文复习专项

EnglishContinuationWriting读后续写2021年浙江省高考真题主讲人：Cathy考情分析能基本读懂故事，对原文本分析不够具体到位。写作情节偏离，逻辑混乱，衔接不当。句式简单，描写生硬。教学目标通过阅读圈，引导学生从主题语境，篇章结构，故事情节词汇处理等多角度去深度解析文本，帮助学生理顺情节发展。通过主述位推进帮助学生搭建文章逻辑结构。通过提供语料，作文互批表，明确批改润色要求，反复练习，指导学生写出更自然合理、衔接得当的作文。文本分析part1Let’swatch.What’syourdaddylike?Pleaseusethreewordstodescribeyourbelovedfather.Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn'tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.

01Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworldeither：Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超过）anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.02Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone（长号）.03ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.04Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb's-quarters,foxtails,andthekingofweeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.04Athome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.05Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn'tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.06阅读小组长DiscussionLeader组织小组讨论，并针对阅读内容提问。篇章大师PassagePerson讲解阅读内容中有意思、重要或较难的段落。生活实际联结者Connector将阅读内容与生活实际相联系，分享经验。单词大师WordMaster讲解阅读内容中的生词、重点单词及词组。篇章概括者Summarizer用自己的话概括篇章的主要内容。文化采集者CultureCollector寻找阅读内容中与自己国家文化相同或不同之处。ReadingCirclesvt.超过；胜过

surpass单词大师WordMaster[səˈpɑːs]Hehassurpassedallourexpectations.他超越了我们所有的预期。vt.捐献，捐助，捐赠

contribute单词大师WordMasterWecontributed£5000totheearthquakefund.我们向地震基金捐赠了5000英镑。n.一家人，家庭

household单词大师WordMasterMosthouseholdsnowownatleastonecar.大多数家庭现在至少有一辆汽车。记叙文Athome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished. 篇章大师PassagePerson文体一般过去时第一人称时态人称篇章大师PassagePersonAthome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished. “Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.”语言描写:篇章大师PassagePersonAthome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.

心理描写:Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.

篇章大师PassagePersonAthome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.

“I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.”线索：篇章大师PassagePersonAthome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.因为爸爸的话，我担心不能自由支配自己打工赚的钱。事件：亲情，父爱，成长人与社会阅读小组长（DiscussionLeader)人物分析情节发展主题语境主旨Rereadthestoryandfigureouttheplot.Ididn’tunderstandmyfatherandneitherdidhe.discontentIworkedformyneighbortoearnmoney.tiredbuthappyIcouldn’tdealwithmyearningsasIwishedandlostinterest.disgruntledHowdidtheauthorfeel?Handoverornot?

Whatwilltheauthordo?thesummerbeforemyeighthgradehomeandthefieldmyfatherImyneighboringfarmermylaborsonweedinginmyneighboringfarmer’sfieldtoearnmoneybutthenIlostinterestinit故事要素WhenWhereWhat Who WhyImisunderstooddadwouldtakethemoneytopayfamilyexpensessoIcouldn’tusethemoneyasIwished本文情节线setting背景risingaction发展climax高潮dadandI

summervacationhomeandfield

Iwashiredtoworkinmyneighboringfarmer’sfieldtoearnmoney.Mydad’swordsmademerealizeIcouldn’tdealwithmyearningsasIwishedandIlostinterestinmylabors.resolution解决ending尾声续写部分续写部分DadandIhaddifficultywithmutualunderstanding.本文情感线risingaction发展climax高潮resolution解答ending尾声setting背景Aquietman,hedidn’tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay....butIwasn’tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.续写部分续写部分Ididn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither.DadGeorgeAquietman,hedidn'tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.amanoffewwordsDadGeorgeFromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.diligent;bearthefamilyburdenwillinglyDadGeorge“Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.”silentbutdeeploveforhischildIIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超过）anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.lookdownuponmyfatherIshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,IreadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombonehasawiderangeofhobbiesIItwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.tough,hard-working,fullofhopeIMydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.discontent;depressedItheremightbemorework,butIwasn'tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.allhopewasextinguished;disgruntled

生活实际联结者ConnectorWhatcanwedotoformagoodrelationshipwithdaddy?篇章概括者Summarizer八年级暑假，我和一群孩子给邻居家除草赚钱。我满心欢喜期待工作结束可以拿到报酬，直到我爸爸跟我说......Thesummerbeforemyeighthgrade,myfriendsandIwerehiredtoworkforaneighboringfarmertoearnsomemoney.Iwasmorethanthrilledtolookforwardtothepayuntilonedaymyfathersaid...写作构架part2平行性延续性三种叙述模式浙江省高考真题2021年6月Paragraph2Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.Paragraph1Thepaydayarrivedatlast.01thrilledatthebigfortune02recalldad’swords04dragfeethomeParagraph1Thepaydayarrivedatlast.PlotDesign05overheardad’sworry03wishdadhadforgottenthepayParagraph1Thepaydayarrivedatlast.89dollars!

Iwasthrilledatthebigfortune,watchingthecoinsearnedthroughthetiringwork.However,Isuddenlyrecalledmyfather’swords,“I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold”.HowI

wishedmyfatherhadforgottenmypay.Idraggedmyfeethome.Ioverheardmyfathersighing,“Wecan’taffordanewtruck.Weonlyhadonehundreddollarsleft.”0201Iwasthrilledatthebigfortune,watchingthecoinsearnedthroughtiringwork.Isuddenlyrecalledmyfather’swords,“I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold”.I

wishedmyfatherhadforgottenmypay.Idraggedmyfeethome.Ioverheardmyfathersighing,“Wecan’taffordanewtruck.Weonlyhadonehundreddollarsleft.”040503平行叙述浙江省高考真题2021年6月Paragraph2Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.Paragraph1Thepaydayarrivedatlast.01betornbetweenkeepingthepayorhandingitover02stepintotheroomandhandoverthemoney04Paragraph2Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout…PlotDesign05decidetocontinuemylaborsunderstandthemeaningofgrowingupdai03dadpullmeintoarmsParagraph2Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.Iwastornbetweenkeepingthemoneyorhandingitovertodad.Eventually,Isteppedintotheroomandhandedhimthepay,“Don’tworry,dad.I’vejustgotmypaymentfromthefarmer.”“Bigboy,proudofyou!”Iwaspulledintomydad’sarms,tearsmistinghiseyes.Iunderstoodthemeaningofgrowingupjustattheexactsamemoment.Idecidedtocontinuemyworkandcontributetothehousehold.平行叙述0102040503Iwastornbetweenkeepingthemoneyorhandingitovertomyfather.Isteppedintotheroomandhandedhimthepay.Iwaspulledintomydad’sarms,tearsmistinghiseyes.Iunderstoodthemeaningofgrowingupjustattheexactsamemoment.Idecidedtocontinuemyworkandcontributetothehousehold.润色批改part3词汇润色whispertomyself悄声说inasoothing/tendervoice轻声说murmuredathankyou小声嘟囔addsoftly轻轻地说一般动词细节动词说词汇润色turningmygazetowardsdad凝视gazeatthecoins

凝视stareatmetearfully含泪凝望一般动词细节动词凝视词汇润色wrapmysweatyhandstightlyaroundthebills紧紧攥着钱countthecoinsoverandoveragain

一遍遍数硬币reachintothecrumpledbanknotesinmypocketandpresentthemtodad伸进口袋，拿出皱巴巴的钞票给父亲一般动词细节动词关于钱的动作词汇润色echoinmymindwhatmyfathersaidwaslingeringovermyhead一般动词细节动词声音回荡词汇润色dragone’sfeet拖着脚步走throwmeintoaworldofsadness陷入悲伤heaveasigh叹气myeyelidsdrooping眼皮耸拉着myheartsank心沉下去theirforeheaddeepening额头加深情绪状态身体表征不高兴词汇润色

pullmeintoatighthug拉入怀抱herbodyshakenwithsobs身体颤抖

tearsblurredhisvision眼泪模糊视线withthousandsofbutterfliesinmystomach七上八下betornbetween...and/or...

摇摆不定keepponderingoverthequestion不停考虑这个问题

情绪状态身体表征感动犹豫词汇润色myeyessparkled眼里放光shinelikeadiamond钻石一样闪耀myeyestwinkledwithjoy眼睛闪烁着快乐amusementgleamedinmyeyes眼睛流露出愉快laughter

lingeredaroundtheroom笑声萦绕

情绪状态身体表征高兴词汇润色passingthroughthecorridorsighingandfrowningItookadeepbreath,steppingintotheroomandgivingmypaytodad.Imanagedasmiletocheer

himup.Hearingthis,dadwidenedhiseyes,staringatmewithtearsmistinghiseyes.非谓语动词单一状语多样状语词汇润色underacloudofgloomanddespair绝望afterroundsofinnerstruggle内心挣扎withtearswellinguphiseyes感动介词短语单一状语多样状语词汇润色asif

suddenlyjerkedtorealityfromaterriblenightmareIwillcontinuetoworkif

chancesareavailable.句子单一状语多样状语Paragraph1Thepaydayarrivedatlast.【1】Lyinginfrontofmyeyeswas89dollars,whichwasabsolutelyabigfortune.【2】Eyessparkling,Iwrappedmysweatyhandstightlyaroundthebills.【3】“Youwillbecontributingtothehousehold!”saidavoiceinmyear,throwingmeintoaworldofsadness.【4】HowIwishedmyfatherhadforgottenmypay.【5】Acloudofgloomanddespairhoveringabovemyhead,Idraggedmyfeethome,eyelidsdrooping.【6】Whenpassingthroughthecorridor,Ioverheardmyfathersighing,“Wecan’taffordanewtruck.Weonlyhadonehundreddollarsleft.”细节动作lyinginfrontofmyeyes因为倒装提前，到邻居家后钱映入眼帘，描写出了自己盼望已久的情绪。Paragraph1Lyinginfrontofmyeyeswas89dollars,whichwasabsolutelyabigfortune.01身体表征sweaty生动地刻画了看到钱后的激动和紧张。多样状语独立主格结构：eyessparkling做状语Paragraph1Eyessparkling,Iwrappedmysweatyhandstightlyaroundthebills.02细节动作sparkle描绘了看到劳动所得后的开心，wrap表达出害怕上交的不舍之情。细节动作throwmeintoaworldofsadness,throw一词刻画了作者想起爸爸的话突然悲伤的情绪。多样状语非谓语动词：throwing做状语Paragraph1“Youwillbecontributingtothehousehold!”saidavoiceinmyear,throwingmeintoaworldofsadness.03虚拟语气虚拟语气的使用，更加凸显出作者想自由支配钱的强烈欲望。Paragraph1HowIwishedmyfatherhadforgottenmypay.04细节动作dragfeet,eyelidsdrooping描写出了作者不愿回家的沮丧心情。多样状语独立主格：acloudofgloomanddespairhovering和eyelidsdrooping都是独立主格结构做状语Paragraph1Acloudofgloomanddespairhoveringabovemyhead,Idraggedmyfeethome,eyelidsdrooping.05细节动作sigh描写出了父亲凑不够钱的沮丧多样状语whenpassingthroughthecorridor是时间状语，是whenIpassedthroughthecorridor的省略形式Paragraph1Whenpassingthroughthecorridor,Ioverheardmyfathersighing,“Wecan’taffordanewtruck.Weonlyhadonehundreddollarsleft.”

06Paragraph2Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.【1】Iwastortured,tornbetweenkeepingthemoneytobuysportsshoesIhadbeendesiringandcontributingmypaytothehousehold.【2】Afterroundsofinnerstruggle,Isteppedintotheroom，reachingintothecrumpledbanknotesinmypocketandpresentingthemtodad.【3】Tearswellingupinhiseyes,hepattedmeonmyshoulder,proudandrelieved.【4】“Bigboy,proudofyou!”【5】ItwasatthatmomentthatIunderstoodthetruemeaningofgrowingup.【6】Touchedvastly,Ideterminedtocontinuemyworkandeaseburdenonmyfamily.细节动作tear表达出了作者面临两难选择时内心的挣扎。多样状语非谓语动词做状语：tornParagraph2tortured写出了作者内心的煎熬。形容词Iwastortured,tornbetweenkeepingthemoneytobuysportsshoesIhadbeendesiringandcontributingmypaytothehousehold.01细节动作step,reach,present连续的三个动作表现出作者理解爸爸的辛苦，愿意为家庭付出。形容词crumpled描写出想自由支配钱的渴望。多样状语介词短语做状语：afterroundsofinnerstruggle非谓语做状语：reachingpresentingParagraph2Afterroundsofinnerstruggle,Isteppedintotheroom，reachingintothecrumpledbanknotesinmypocketandpresentingthemtodad.02细节动作tearswellingup表达出父亲的感动。身体表征patmeonmyshoulder描写出父亲的欣慰。多样状语独立主格：tearswellingup形容词做状语：proudandrelievedParagraph2Tearswellingupinhiseyes,hepattedmeonmyshoulder,proudandrelieved.03语言描写bigboy表达出父亲的欣慰，暗示孩子内心的成长。proudofyou表达出父亲的骄傲和感动。Paragraph2“Bigboy,proudofyou!”04强调句对atthatmoment强调，既实现了句子升级，也表达出听到父亲夸奖，突然理解了父亲，内心获得了成长。Paragraph2ItwasatthatmomentthatIunderstoodthetruemeaningofgrowingup.05细节动作determine,continue,ease表达出作者情感转化和态度转变，真正实现了自我成长。多样状语非谓语动词touchedvastly做状语Paragraph2Touchedvastly,Ideterminedtocontinuemyworkandeaseburdenonmyfamily.06Lyinginfrontofmyeyeswas89dollars,whichwasabsolutelyabigfortune.Eyessparkling，Iwrappedmysweatyhandstightlyaroundthebills.0102非限定性定语从句倒