2023学年完整公开课版作文复习

EnglishWriting11年BreakfastIsImy_____Teacher中考书面表达贴近生活，贴近时代,作文题目由限制性题目到半开放性题目，提示性词语越来越少，而给同学们的空间越来越大影响作文分数的因素：

题目要求、内容要点；句子准确、通顺；层次结构清晰；拼写、语法等错误；卷面整洁度；Howtowriteagoodcomposition?书面表达六步法一、审题体裁，时态，人称，要求，提示我们每个人都应该懂得感恩，学会感恩，在你成长的过程中，老师对你帮助很大，根据下列表格写一篇短文

TheteacheryouwanttothankPersonalitykind,easygoingHelphelp...with,encourage,cheerupFeeling...Wishes...体裁时态人称要求提示审题记叙文一般现在时，一般过去时第三人称题目补充完整，感恩personalities,help,feeling,wishes书面表达六步法二、列提纲，抓要点我们每个人都应该懂得感恩，学会感恩，在你成长的过程中，老师对你帮助很大，根据下列表格写一篇短文

TheteacheryouwanttothankPersonalitykind,easygoingHelphelp...with,encourage,cheerupFeeling...Wishes...分几段根据段落整理写作要点1.教师个人特点信息(综述)（Who...easygoing,kind...）2.教师事迹（正文）（Why...help...with,encourage,cheer...up）3.我的感受，希望（结尾）（feelings....thanks，wishes...）Outline三、扩展成句书面表达六步法在提纲的基础上补充要点,把要点扩展成句，（在无把握情况下尽量使用简单句，有把握的情况下句式可以多样化,选好词句，美化文章）选好词句，美化文章例如；1.我喜欢爬山，我妹妹喜欢游泳，我哥哥喜欢音乐。Ilikeclimbingsisterenjoysswimming,whilemybrotherisfondofmusic.Eg:尽力去做。。。tryone'sbesttodo(makeeffortstodo)玩得开心enjoyoneself(haveagoodtime)

避免重复选好词句，美化文章例如；2..thank.teacher.Jack。IwanttothankmyEnglishteacher,hisnameisJack.--TheteacherIwanttothankmostisJack,myEnglishteacher.

3.he,handsomeboy,humorHeisahandsomeboy.Hehasasenseofhumor.Heisahandsomeboywithasenseofhumor.

better用介词短语替换句子可以使用复合句选好词句，美化文章,workinXindeSchool,graduatefromcollege--Afterhegraduatedfromthecollege,heworkedinXindeSchool.--HeworkedinXindeSchoolaftergraduatingfromthecollege.用分词替代从句5.感谢他为我所做的。Thankhimforwhathedidforme.I'mgratefultohimforwhathedidforme.使用高级词汇1.教师个人特点信息(综述)（Who...easygoing,kind...）2.教师事迹（正文）（Why...help...with,encourage,cheer...up）3.我的感受，希望（结尾）（feelings....thanks，wishes...）根据提纲扩展成句TheteacherIwanttothankmostis...,my...teacher.She/Heiskindandeasygoing.Sheismyteacher,sheismyfriends,too.ShealwayshelewithmyEnglish.WhenIfailed,he/sheencouragedme....He/Shecheersmeuveryhae.Ihoorestudentslikeme....扩展成句Walkingtoschoolisawonderfulwaytoexercise.Nowletmetellyousomeadvantagesofit.Second,it’sgoodfortheenvironment.Itdoesn’tcauseairpollutionanditcansaveenergy.Third,whenwewalkwithourclassmates,wecantalkaboutsomethinginterestingandknoweachotherbetter.Also,wehelpeachother.What’smore,ifwewalk,ourparentsdon’thavetosendustoschool.Wecanlookafterourselves.Asaresult,therewillbefewercarsinthecity.Thenthestreetsarenolongercrowed.Ihooreandmorestudentswillgotoschoolonfoot.First,it’sgoodforhealthandit’ssafe.四、连句成文时间空间细节连贯呼应注意常用承接，过渡词语以使行文连贯,美化文章书面表达六步法注意过渡，美化文章例如；Everycoinhastwosides.It'seasyforyoutobuygoodsontheInternetShoaycauseawasteofmoney.

betterEverycoinhastwosides.Ontheonehand,it'seasyforyoutobuygoodsontheInternet.Ontheotherhand,shoaycauseawasteofmoney.常用连接词表示原因表示结果表示顺序表示总结表示目的because;for…;becauseof…;thankstoso;asaresult;so…that…;such...thatfirst...second...then...afterthat...finally;...sothat…;inorderthat…;(inorderto)inall/short;inaword;lastbutnotleast;last;...MyEnglishteacherTheteacherIwanttothankmostisMissWang,myEnglishteacher.SheiskindandisnotonlymyteacherbutalsomyIfailedtheexam,sheencouragedmeandhele.Withherheladegreateuverygladtobeherstudent.Thanksforwhatshehaddoneforme.Ihopeshewillbehappyandhealthyforever.1.词数是否达到90词2.要点是否齐全3.语法(grammarmistakes)主谓是否一致动词的时态是否合理语态的使用是否正确词组的搭配是否合乎习惯4.单词拼写(sistakes)5.大小写(caistakes)...五、查错改错书面表达六步法MyEnglishteacherIlikeEnglishteacherbecausesheiskindandeasygoing.Whenshegaveuslessonsforthefirsttime,Shesaidshehoeyoufriend.WelistenedcarefullyinherEnglishclassandshe,sheencouragesmeandcheeredmeoftenhelewithmyEnglish.SomyEnglishmadeyEnglishteacherhappy.ourplayedencouragedSoImadegreatyEnglishwillbehappyhelps六、誊写用水笔誊写,注意字迹要求整洁端正.书面表达六步法卷面整洁一定会加分，卷面潦草一定要扣分！课堂练习Writetheoutline我们每个人都有许多朋友，在你成长的过程中，哪个朋友对你帮助、影响最大。根据下列表格写一篇短文(词数90左右)

MybestfriendPersonalitywarm-hearted,easygoing,patientrelationshipgetalongwith,learn...from,help...introublelooks...Feeling/Wishes...SharingTimeWhodidbest!1.朋友个人特点信息(综述)（Who,warm-hearted,easygoing,...）3.我的祝愿（结尾）（feelings....thanks，wishes...）OutlineSummary审题，列纲扩句，连文查错，抄誊书面表达六步法HomeworkFinishyourcomposition

Thankyou！请不吝赐教！2014福州市质检作文评分标准第一档（12-15）包含所有信息，内容完整，语句通顺，意思连贯，没有或基本没有拼写，语法错误，书写规范，词数符合要求。第二档（8-11）包含大部分信息，内容比较完整，表达基本清楚，语句较通顺，有少量语法，拼写错误，书写规范，词数基本符合要求。第三档（4-7）写出基本信息，语句较通顺，但句子比较简单，表达不够清楚，有部分语法和拼写错误。第四档（1-3）仅能传递个别信息，通篇只有个别句子可读。第五档（0分）只字未写，通篇不知所云或写的内容与所要求的内容无关。MybestfriendJaneismybestisverybeautifulwithlongblackhair.(2分)Sheiswarm-heartedandeasygoing.(2分)Soshegetsalongwellwithherclassmates.(2分)Besides,JaneisalwaysreadytoheleIhads,Ialwaysturnedtoher.Shewaseandgavememuchhelakeuymindtolearnfromher.I'dliketosaythankstoherforthekindnessshehasshown.（只要能写出"感受"句子没错就给2.5分）Ihopeourfriendshipcanlastforever.（只要能写出"希望"句子没错就给2.5分）

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