2023年高考前英语静悟材料模板 -写作

第三章写作

一、应用文

活动报道

假定你是李华，上周日你校举办了5公里越野赛跑活动。请你为校英文报写一篇报道，内容包括：

1.参加人员；2.跑步路线：从校门口到南山脚下：3.活动反响。

ACross-countryRunningRace

Inordertoenrichourcampuslife,ourschoolorganizeda5kmcross-countryrunningracelastSunday.

Ninetystudentsfromtwentyclassesparticipatedintherace,amongwhomthirtyweregirls.Participants

setoutat9amfromthegateoftheschool,throughtheRenminPark,andfinallyarrivedatthefootofNanshan

Mountain.

Theracewashighlyihoughlofaidwefeltihalnotonlydidiheevenlimproveouvphysicaland

psychologicalquality,butitalsohelpedusbuildapositiveattitudetowardslife.Wedohopethattheschoolwill

carryoutmoresimilaractivitiesinthefuture.

演讲稿

你校将举办英语演讲比赛。请你以Besmartonlinelearners为题写一篇发言稿参赛，内容包括：

1.分析优势与不足；2.提出学习建议。

Besmartonlinelearners

Learningonlinehasbecomeanimportantwaytostudyrecently.However,eachcoinhastwosides.Sois

learningonline.

Ontheonehand,itissurelyconvenientandflexiblefo)ustolearnonline、becauseit'suptoustodecide

whatwelearnandwhereandwhenwestudy.What'smore,wecanlearnthelessonsrepeatedly.Ontheother

handJearningonlinehassomeweaknesses,Ihebiggestofwhichislowefficiencycausedbyalackof

self-discipline.

Sohowcanwebesmartonlinelearners?First,it'snecessarytohaveaquietandcomfortableroom,which

contributestofocusingattention.Second,goodtimemanagementcanimproveourlearningefficiency.More

importantly,weshouldformalearninggrouponlinetomotivateeachother.

Let'smakejointeffortstobesmartonlinelearners!

通知

假如你是李华，是学校英语协会的负责人。最近，你校准备邀请英国心理学专家CurrySmith就学习

减压举行一个讲座，请你用英语出一则通知。要点：

1.讲座地点、时间；2.讲座专家、内容。

Notice

Alectureconcerningrelievingstudypressureisscheduledtobeheldattheschoolauditoriumfrom3:00p.m.

to5:00p.m.thisFriday.

AfamousEnglishpsychologistnamedCurrySmithisgoingtodeliverthelecture,inwhichhewillhelpus

analysethecausesofstudypressure.Additionally,heintendstoofferussomerelaxingandinterestingwaysto

reducepressure.Definitely,everyattendeeiswelcometoaskquestions.

Duringthecourseofthelecture,beingpoliteandactiveisamust.Also,itiscrucialnottolitterormakenoise.

Youareboundtobenefitalotfromit.

建议信

（江苏省南通市2022-2023年高三一模）假设你是红星中学高三学生李华，你的英国笔友Jim在给你的邮

件中提到他最近沉迷于网络游戏，日常生活受到影响，他为此感到苦恼，请给他回复邮件，内容包括：

1）表示理解2）你的建议

DearJim,

Iamsorrylolearnihalyouareaddicledlovideogamesandihalithasaffecledyourlifegrcally.Butyouarenot

alone,asIwasonceinthesamesituationasyousoIcanfeelhowupsetandstressedyoumustbe.Herearesome

suggestions.

First,trytolimitthetimespentonvideogameseveryday,soyoucaohavemoretimetodosomethingmeaningful

andtakeUDgoodhobbies.Anotherstepistofindpurposeinreality,fromenjoyingface-tofaceconversationswithyour

familyandfriendstohavingawalkinthesunshine.Immerseyourselfinthepliasureofrealliferatherthanavirtual

world,andyouwillfeelmorecontentandrefreshed.

Lifeisfulloffunandsurpriseandjustputawayyourcellphoneandgetouttogetit.

Yours

LiHua

推荐信

（浙江省名校新高考研究联盟2023届高三第一次联考）假定你是新华中学李华，你的外籍朋友Michael来

信表示对中国文化很感兴趣，正巧这学期你校要开设“话说中国节（FestiveChina）”的线上课程，请你回信向他推

荐此课程。内容包括：I.开设时间；2.课程内容；3.报名方式。

DearMichael,

LearningthatyouareanenthusiastforChineseculture,Iamwritingtorecommendanonlinecourseentitled

“FestiveChina"toyou.

TopromotetraditionalChineseculture,ourschoolwillsetuptheonlinecoursesnextterm,whichisscheduledto

takeplaceat2pmeverySaturdayfromSeptember10th.Consistingof10one-hoursessions,eachoftheminvolvesan

introductionofadistinctiveChinesefestival.Youmaylearntheorigins,backgroundsandcustomsofthefestivals.To

signupforthecourse,youneedtovisitourschoolwebsiteandcompletetheentryform.

Idoguaranteethatmyrecommendationwillneverfailtoamazeyou.Bostwishes.

Yours,

LiHua

邀请信

（2020年1月•浙江卷）假定你是李华，你校将举办外国学生中文演讲比赛，请给你的英国朋友George

写封邮件邀请他参加。内容包括:1.比赛时间；2.演讲话题；3.报名方式。

DearGeorge,

I'mwritingtoinviteyoutojoinusinthe"Chinesespeechcontestforfbreigners^^tobeheldinourschool.

Theactivityisscheduledat8:00a.m.onJanuary20lhinthelecturehall.

Thethemeofthespeechcontestis“differencesbetweeneasternandwesterncustoms",throughwhichthe

foreignsludenlsareboundlogainabetterunderstandingofChinesesplendidtraditionalcultureandstrengthen

theirloveofChina.

Immenselyfascinatedbyitsmysteriouscultureandage-oldhistoiy,youcan,undoubtedlygiveusa

wonderfulandimpressiveperformance.Youareexpectedtosignupforthecontestatwww.

Chinesespeechcontestfbrfbreigners.coin.Iydappreciateitifyoucouldacceptourinvitation.

Yourssincerely,

LiHua

申请信

（2023•江西高三专题练习）假定你是李华，你校国际部打算举办“教外国学生下中国象棋（Chinesechess）”的

活动，现正在招募志愿者。你有意向成为志愿者，请你用英语写一封申请信，内容包括：

1.写信目的；2.你的优势；3.期待同意申请。

【参考范文】

DearSir/Madam,

Learningf?omtheschoolnewspaperthattheInternationalDeDartmentwillholdanactivitytitled“Teaching

ForeignStudentstoPlayChineseChess”,withgreatinterest、I'mwritingloappl、lobeavolunteer.

Beinganoutgoingstudent,I'vebeenlookingforwardtomakingfriendswithforeignersandenhancingmysocial

skill.Afteracarefulconsideration,IthinkI'mqualifiedforthejob.Foronething,I'mgoodatspokenEnglish,which

playsanimportantroleinteachingforeignstudentstoplayChinesechess.Foranother,Ihaveagoodcommandof

ChinesechessandIwonthefirstplaceinthecitychesscontest.

Iwouldappreciateitifyoucouldgivemethechance.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.

Yourssincerely,

LiHua

感谢信

（假如你是新华中学的学生会主席李华，你校学生会应英国WestminsterSchool邀请，下星期将到该

校进行交流访问，向该校学生介绍中国传统文化。请你给该校联系人Mr.Smith写一封邮件，信的要点如

下：1.感谢对方的邀请；2.询问活动安排和说明要介绍的传统文化内容；3.祝愿交流活动成功。

DearMr.Smith,

IamLiHua,chairmanoftheStudentUnionofXinHuaHighSchool.Thankvouforinvitingustovisityour

schoolnexlweek,forwhichwedofeelhonored.NowIamwritingformoredetailedinformation.

SinceitwillbeourfirsttriptoBritain,wewouldliketoknowdetailsaboutthearrangementofthevisit.

Couldyoupleasee-mailourscheduletomeatyourconvenience?Besides,intermsofChinesetraditionalculture,

consideringthatthereisgrowinginterestinTangPoems,weplantointroducethisgreatculturaltreasure.For

betterinteraction,fellowstudentsofyourschoolcanpreparesomerelativequestionsbeforehand.

Edappreciateitifyoucouldgiveusanearlyreply.Wishourinteractionactivityagcealsuccess!

Yours,

LiHua

道歉信

（2021•北京卷）假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你和英国好友Jim原定本周末一起外出，你因故不

能赴约。请你用英文给他写一封电子邮件，内容包括：1.表达歉意并说明原因；2.提出建议并给出理

由。

DearJim,

I'msorrytoinformyouthatIcan'tgooutwithyouthisweekend.I'veiustbeentoldthatIhavetogoand

visitmysickgrandfatherinthecountryside,whowassuddenlyadmittedtothehospital.Ihopethechangewon't

causeyoutoomuchtrouble.

HowaboutgoingoutnextSaturdaymorning?Ifit'sconvenientforyouJet'smeetattheschoolgateat9:00.

Pleaseletmeknowwhetheritsuitsyoubest.Ishouldbeavailableanytimenextweekend.

Inaddition,nextSaturday,therewillbeaflowershowinBeihaiParkandwecangotoseetheflowers

together.

Iamlookingforwardtoyourearlyreply.

Yours,

LiHua

求助信

（2020•全国卷III）假定你是李华，你和同学根据英语课文改编了一个短剧。给外教MissEvans写封

邮件，请她帮忙指导。邮件内容包括：1.剧情简介；2.指导内容；3.商定时间地点。

DearMissEvans,

Howiseverythinggoing!Iamwritinginsinceritytoaskyouafavorregardingaplayweadaptedaccording

tothetextbook.

We'dliketocombineyourculturewithoursbyadaptingtheclassicnovelTheSteamboatforashortEnglish

play.Theplayissetonabigstormaftermidnight,ontheraftdowntherivernavigation,weseeasteamboatthat

isgoingtosink.Wesavedascaredboy.However,theadaptionisquiteachallenge.HavingwrittentheEnglish

script,wedon'twantanythinginappropriatetospoiltheplay.Sowouldyoupleasesparesomelimeloreviewihe

draftscriptattachedtothisemailandmakenecessarychanges?Ifilisconvenient,mayIpayyouavisitalyour

officenextTuesdaytogiveyoumoredetails?

I'dbeveryappreciativeifyouoffertogivesomeprofbssionaladvice.Lookforwardtoyourearlyreply.Best

regards!

Yourstruly,

LiHua

告知信

（2022届江苏省苏锡常镇四市高三教学情况调查英语适应卷）假定你是李华，下周你校将举办一场科技展，

希望所有学生积极参与。请你发邮件告知因病请假的外国交换生Andy,内容包括：

1.展会目的、时间和地点；2.展会内容；3.表达期待。

DearAndy,

Howareyoudoingthesedays?Topromotethestudents'interestinscientifictechnology、ourschoolwillholda

scienceandtechnologyexhibitionfrom9a.m.to5p.m.nextSaturdayintheschoolhall.

Tobeginwith,somevideosandpictureswillbeprovided,throughwhichwewilllearnmoreabouthowthescience

andtechnologyaffectpeople.Thencamethehighlightoftheexhibition:alectureabouthowAIisappliedinvarious

areas.Lastbutnotleast,we'Henjoysomescientificinventionsfromstudents.Wecanalsocommunicatewitheach

otheraboutourownthoughts.

I'mconfirmedyouwilllovetheexhibition.Hopeyouwon'tmissthechaece.

Yours,

LiHua

图表类作文

（2022年全国乙卷）学校英文报正在开展以LearningEnglishBeyondtheClassroom为题的讨论。请使用图表中的调查结果写

一篇短文投稿，内容包括:

1.学习活动状况描述；

2.简单评论；

3.你的建议。

【参考范文】

LearningEnglishBeyondtheClassroom

Nowadays,withthegrowingpopularityofsmartphonesandcomputers,anincreasingnumberofstudentsare

choosingtolearnEnglishbeyondtheclassroominvariousways.

IlcaneasilybeseenIhal（hepercentageofsludenlswhochooselisteningloEnglishsongsandwatching

Englishmoviesisrespectively65%and50%.However,thosechoosingreadingEnglishbooksandvisiting

Englishlearningwebsitesonlyaccountfor18%and12%.

AsfarasI'mconcerned,itisadisturbingtrend.Forstudents,whatbenefitsmosttotheirstudyisreading

Englishbooks.Becauseoftheirlackofself-discipline,they'remoreeasilyaddictedtochattingonlineorplaying

games.It'surgentforstudentsthemselvestoimprovetheirselOdisciDline、andit'salsourgentforparentsand

teacherstost】e呷hentheguidance.

二、读后续写

自我成长类

1.真题链接1

（2022年新高考I卷）

Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthe

smalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute（路线）throughthickevergreenforest.

1lookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewas

smallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn't

withtheotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!

Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschoofscoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.t4Iwasafraidthat

kidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughatheexplaineduncomfortably.gavehimthechoicetorunornot,

andlethimdecide.^^

Ibitbackmyfrustration（懊恼）.Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.

AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbody

rockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhis

classmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheywere

doing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam

Itjusttookhimlonger-that'sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrun

longaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,Iwasfamiliarwith

thechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn7lookatme.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

2.试题解析

2.1整体把握

主题人与自我-生活与学习-个人、家庭、社区及学校生活

语境

本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者是一名特殊教育教师，在大型越野赛跑那天，发现患有大脑疾病

的大卫独自站在一旁。作者问其原因，他说准备放弃比赛。从教练口中得知，因为担心同学们会嘲笑

语篇

大卫，所以教练想让大卫自己去决定是否参加赛跑。作者让大卫追寻自己的内心，不理会别人的看

话题

法，大卫最终参赛，尽管遇到困难，他战胜了自己，这已经无关名次，而是他的勇敢和坚定让这一切

成为可能。

when：thedayofthebigcross-countryrunwhere：theracespot(aplacewiththickevergreen

forest)

who：I——aspecialeducationteacherofDavid'sschool

情节

David---aten-year-oldboywithabraindisease

梳理

what：Onthedayofthebigcross-countryrun,IsawDavidstandingaloneattheracespotandfoundout

thereasonswhyhehesitatedtotakepartintherace.

why:Davidworriedhemightbelaughedbyothers

由第一段首句内容“我们挨着坐着，但大卫不愿看我一眼”可知，第一段可描写作者鼓励大卫继

续完成比赛，大卫经过强烈的心理斗争，最终决定参加比赛。

情节

走向

由第二段首句内容“我看着大卫和其他选手一起走到起跑线上”可知，第二段可描写大卫开始参

赛，虽然中途遇到困难，仍然坚持到最后，完成比赛。

2.2例文赏析

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn7lookatme."Whydoyougiveuptherun,David?^^I

whisperedtohim."Iwillbealoserandotherswilllaughatme,“hemurmured,withhisfaceflushing.Ihugged

himtightly,saying,utYouareadeterminedboyandIbelieveyoucanfacethechallengebravely.More

importantly,itisparticipationratherthantheresultthatmatterstoyou."InspiredbywhatIsaid,Davidlookedup

andsaidfirmly,4€Iwillrun.^^Risingandturningaround,heheadedforthestartingline.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Hearingthegunblasting,they

rushedoutlikearrows.However,Davidfellbehindsoondespitegreatefforts.Everytimehewasabouttoquit,I

shoutedcrazily,€tComeon,David!^^Hekeptrunning,sweatyandexhausted.Finally,whenDavidstruggledto

crossthefinishingline,astormofcheersandapplauseeruptedfromthepeoplepresent.Dragginghisheavylegs,

Davidapproachedme.Heembracedmeandsaid,“Thankyou!”Iwasoverwhelmedwithjoyforhiswonderful

performance.

3.素材积累

3.1情绪类素材积累

满脸通红：withhisfaceflushing汗流淡背非常疲惫：sweatyandexhausted喜悦：wasoverwhelmedwith

3.2动作类素材积累

各种“说"：whisper;murmur;saidfirmly;shoutedcrazily飞奔：rushoutlikearrows

挣扎着越过终点线：struggletocrossthefinishingline

爆发了雷鸣般的欢呼声和掌声：astormofcheersandapplauseerupted

1.真题链接2

（2023广东一模）

Hectorstoodinthefrontofhisfifth-gradeclassroomasoneofthelasttwocompetitorsintheRoomFive

GeographyBee.Hisopponenthavingmissedthelastquestion,itwasHector'sturn.Ifheansweredhisquestion

correctly,hewouldbetheRoomFivechampion.

“WheredidIputthatsecondsheetofquestions?”Mr.Adlerwhisperedwhilesearchingthroughathickpile

ofpapersonhismessydesk.Mr.Adler,thoughagreatteacher,hadareputationofbeingdisorganizedwithalong

historyofmisplacingthings.4tOhwell,Iapologizefbrthedelay.^^saidMr.Adlerafterwhatseemedlikealong

time."Hector,pleasetellusthecapitalcityofBrazil.^^Hearingthequestion,Hectorsmiled.Then,therewasthe

answer.

Laterthatdayinthecourtyard,manyclassmatescongratulatedHector.Wearingaproudsmile,hegreetedand

thankedthemall.Oh,thesweettasteofvictory.

Asitwasgettinglate,thecourtyardbecamedeserted.ButHectorstilldidn'twanttoleave.ThenhesawMr.

Adlercrossingthecourtyardandholdingahalf-openbagfullofpapers.Ashehurriedpast,anenvelopedropped

outbutMr.Adlerwasunaware,turnedacorneranddisappearedoutofsight.Hectorpickeditup.Ontheenvelope

werethewords“FifthGradeGeographyBeeQuestionsandAnswers"Hectorstaredwide-eyedattheenvelope.

Beforeheevenhadtimetoreflectontheconsequences,heopeneditandreadthequestions.

AssoonasHectorhaddoneit,heknewitwasthewrongchoice.He'dcheatedandwhateverhedidnow,he

couldn'tchangethefact."WhatifMr.AdlerthoughtIstolethismorning'squestionstoo?”Hectorthought."He'd

takeawaymyRoomFivevictoryfbrsure."Littledidheknowthatoneofthebestdaysinhislifewouldbeturned

intotheworstsoquickly.Tornbyhisconscience,Hectorwastotallyatalosswhattodo.

Beforeherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler'sroom.

ThenextdaytheentireschoolcametowatchtheFifthGradeGeographyBee.

2.试题解析

2.1整体把握

主题人与自我-生活与学习-个人、家庭、社区及学校生活

语境

本篇读后续写为记叙文，文章大意为讲述了Hector参加地理知识竞赛，通过班级初赛后，意

语篇

外拾到一个信封，里面装着年级决赛的题目及答案，他打开读了题目后，知道自己做了不诚

话题

实的事情。接着他去到了老师办公室，他会怎么做呢？

when：thedaybeforethefinalcompetitionwhere：inMr.Adler'sroom

情节who：Hector&Mr.Adlerwhat：Hectoraccidentallypickedup“FifthGradeGeographyBee

梳理QuestionsandAnswers.

Afterreadingthequestions,heknewitwasthewrongchoice.

通过第一段首句“Befbreherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler'sroom.“可预

情节测，续写思路为：向老师坦诚交代一找到补救办法。

走向

通过第二段首句"ThenextdaytheentireschoolcametowatchtheFifthGradeGeogr叩hyBee."可

预测，续写思路为：Hector的表现比赛结果f感悟到诚实的宝贵。

2.2例文赏析

Beforeherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler'sroom.aHector!Comeandhelpmelook

f0r・・・”“This?”HectorstoppedMr.Adlermid-sentence,holdingouttheopenenvelope.Mr.Adler'sbrowswere

smoothedbutthenknittedagain.Beforeheformedquestions,Hectorstartedunbosominghisregrets.Ifhehad

waitedanothermoment,theywouldhavetornhimintopieces.<4CanIstillbeintheBee?”askedHectortimidly.

"Absolutely,myhonestboy,"Mr.Adlerpattedhisshoulder.4tIdon'tbelieveinpunishingpeopleformakingthe

rightdecisionsandcorrectingtheirmistakes.vImmensereliefwashedoverHector.

ThenextdaytheentireschoolcametowatchtheFifthGradeGeographyBee.Havingbeenuplatestudying,

Hectorlookedexhaustedbutextremelyexcited.Sodidalltheothercompetitors.Alltheeyesfixedonthestage,

Hectorfeltbloodrushingontohischeeksandhisheartbeatingfast.Unfortunately,thequestionsMr.Adler

rewroteweresotoughthathewasknockedoutinroundthree.ButHectorrealizedtohissurprisethathedidn't

feelbadaboutlosingatall.Whetherothersknewhewassmartwasofnosignificance.He'dsetouttolearn

everythingabouttheworldandendeduplearningmoreabouthimself.

3.素材积累

3.1情绪类素材积累

面带自豪的微信Wearingaproudsmile胆怯的timidly极其兴奋extremelyexcited

面红耳赤,心跳加速feltbloodrushingontohischeeksandhisheartbeatingfast

3.2优秀句型积累

分词作状语：

HectorstoppedMr.Adlermid-sentence,holdingouttheopenenvelope.

Hector打断了Mr.Adler的话，伸手递出了打开的信封。

Havingbeenuplatestudying,Hectorlookedexhaustedbutextremelyexcited.

虚拟语气Ifhehadwaitedanothermoment,theywouldhavetornhimintopieces.

无灵主语句：ImmensereliefwashedoverHector.（夸张修辞）他如释重负

倒装句Sodidalltheothercompetitors.其他的比赛选手亦然。

亲情感悟类

X.真题链接1

（广东省梅州市2023届高三一模）

Tom'sfamilywasasmallfamilyonthecoastallineofasmallvillage.Tomwas11yearsold.Hewastall,

darkandhandsomeandhadalotofdreams.Hehadalwaysdreamtoflivinginacity.Hewasalwayshisdad's

charm,ashewasnotquitehappytospendlimewithhismom.Allhecouldrememberabouthismomwasher

scars,redandwhitescarsonherface,neckandhands.Healwaysfeltunpleasanttoseehismom'sface.Butwhat

hedidnotknowwasthathismomscratchedherbeautytosavehimfromafirewhenhewasoneyearold.Not

wantingtoburdenhimwithit,Tom'sparentskeptitasecret.

HismomMariausedtodrophimtoschoolandpickhimupeveryday.Hefeltawkwardtoseehismomwith

thatscarredfacestandinginfrontoftheschoolgate.Ashewaslaughingandchattingwithhisfellowschoolmates,

allofthembecamesilentandstartedstaringatthegate.So,Tomturnedtowardsthegatewithalotofcuriosity.

Hefrozewhenseeinghismom,facecoveredwithapieceofcloth.Tomfeltashamedandrushedoutoftheschool

withlotsofanger.

Withdayspassingby,Tomstartedtodislikehismommore.Hedidnotliketogetpickedupordroppedby

hismom.Hefeltthatshewasuglyandsoabnormal.Ashegrewold,hestoppedgoingoutwithhertothemarket

oranywhereoutside.Kamalatriedherbesttomakehersonhappy,gothimeverythingthathewantedandgave

himhisspace.Sheunderstoodwhathersonwasgoingthroughandfeltpityforherselfandsadforherson,asshe

washelpless.

WhenTomturned16,hewassenttoacityhighschool80kilometersawayfromhiscoastalvillage.Thevery

thoughtofnotbeingwithhisuglymothermadehimveryhappy.

Threeyearslater,thencameTom'sgraduationceremony.Hisparentsdidn'twanttobeabsentfromsuchan

importantoccasion,sotheymanagedtobetherewithoutinformingTom.

Tomwasshockedwhenhesawhisparentsappearattheceremonyhall.

Hesitatingforamoment,Tom'sfathertoldhimeverythingthathappenedmanyyearsago.

2.1整体把握

主题语境人与自我一做人与做事一个人、家庭、社区及学校生活

本篇读后续写为记叙文，文章大意为因为妈妈的脸上的伤疤，Tom担心被同学取笑，不乐意妈妈去学校接送

语篇话题

他，但他不知道妈妈是因为要救他而毁容。在他的高中毕业典礼上，爸爸妈妈没有告知他就到了学校。

when：Tomwas19,athisgraduationceremonywhere：atschoolwho：Tom,Tom^parents

情节梳理

what：Withoutbeinginformed,Tomfoundhisparentsattendedhisgraduationceremonytogether,whichmightlead

tohisbeinglaughedat.

由第一段首句内容“当Tom看到他的父母到达仪式大厅时，他很震惊。”可知，第一段可描写Tom的反应和

做法，他很生气，努力地控制着自己，走向爸爸跟前，但是听到别人议论妈妈的外表，他把妈妈推出了仪式

大厅，看到妈妈伤心地离开，爸爸跟了出去。

情节走向

由第二段首句内容“父亲犹豫了一下，把多年前发生的一切都告诉了他。”可知，第二段可描写Tom得知真相

后感到后悔，从此以后不再因为妈妈的伤疤而疏远妈妈，感恩妈妈无私的爱。

2.2例文赏析

Tomwasshockedwhenhesawhisparentsappearattheceremonyhall.Hestoodrootedtothefloorfora

moment,notknowingwhattodo.Secondslater,hetriedtocontainhimselfandawkwardlywalkeduptogreethis

father,ignoringhismother'sexistence.Butwhenheheardotherswhisperingabouthismum'suglyface,

embarrassmentcameoverhim.Withangerwrittenallonhisface,hepushedhismumhardoutofthehall.Seeing

Tom'smumleavewithdeepsorrow,hisfatherfollowedherout.

Hesitatingfaramoment,Tom'sfathertoldhimeverythingthathappenedmanyyearsago.Hismumgot

burntseverelytosavehiminaterriblefire.Tearsstreameddownhisfacewhenherecollectedhowmuchhehad

hurtheralltheseyears,howhehadignoredherandherealizedtheamountofpainandagonyshehadgone

through.Aftertheceremony,hefoundhismumandembracedher,saying“Sorry“againandagain.Fromthenon,

hethoughtofhismom'sfaceevenwithscarsasthemostbeautifulfaceintheworldandhismomasthemost

respectedwomanintheworld.

3.素材积累

3.1情绪类素材积累

尴尬：embarrassmentcameoverhim生气：withangerwrittenonhisface哭：tearsstreameddownhis

face

3.2动作类素材积累

——动不动地站着：standrootedtothefloor/standrootedtothespot/standstill/standmotionless

压制住自己：containoneselfVkeepone'stemper/holdone'stemper拥抱：embrace/hug

1.真题链接2（2023广东春季开学考）

WhenIwasinGrade10,myfamilyhadatoughtime.MyparentslosttheirjobsduringtheDepression.Dad

wastooilltoworkoutside,whilemumhadahardtimeraisinguskidsonherowninoursmallcommunity.We

reliedonourcommunityassistancetokeepusclothed,andalthoughourclothesweresecond-hand,wethought

theywerebeautiful.

Lookingback,IrealizewhatMumwentthroughforsendinguskidstoschool.Everymorningshewouldput

anewpieceofcardboardinourshoes,becauseourshoeswerewornout.Constantmovingwastypicalformy

familyinthesetimes.Rentwastwenty-fivedollarsamonth,butMumcouldn'tpayit.Thesewerehardandsad

years,butwenevercomplained.

NewYearwasapproaching,andwewereentitledtoatwenty-fivedollarfund