高考英语读后续写救人故事铁轨救婴儿课件

高考英语读后续写语篇练习救人故事——铁轨救婴儿1题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part1题目呈现3续写原文Itwas7a.m.on12May1998.Mohrhadalreadyscannedseveralpackageslistingdangerousmaterialsaboardthetrain.Thepresenceofgaswouldmeantakingextraprecautionwhenbrakingthe6,200-tontrain.Withexplosivegasonboard,itwouldbedisastrousifthetraincameoffthetrack.Afterafinalinspection,Mohrjumpedaboard.Hewasheadingeast,intoasunthatpromisedabeautifuldayfortheir276-kmruntoPeru,Indiana.Ataroundnoonthatday,Marshallpreparedtotacklesomeyardwork.Itwasabeautifuldayforit,shethought,gazingpastthehousesacrossthestreet.Some45metersaway,railroadtracksshoneinthesun.Marshallbeganworkinginapatch(地块）ofsoil.Sittingnexttoher,cheerfullyrunningherhandsthroughdirt,washer19-month-olddaughter,Emily.Forawhile,shekeptturningtocheckonEmily,whoplayedcloseathand.Eventually,though,Marshall'sabsorptioninherworkbecametotal.MohrapproachedthetownwhereMarshalllivedatabout1:45p.m.andslowedthetraintothe40-kmphspeedlimit.Heactivatedtheflashinglightsandwarningbell.Mohrhadbeenthroughthetownhundredsoftimes,buthegrewextracautiousroundingthefirstcurve.4续写原文Asthetraincameoutofthecurve,Mohrnoticedasmalldotonthetrackabout200metersahead.Hethoughtitmightbeadog.Althoughitwasagainsttherulestodosointhetown,hebeganlightlytappinghishorn."Comeon,puppy,move,"heurged.Thetoots(嘟嘟响）ofatrainwhistlestartled(使受惊吓）Marshallfromheryardwork.That'sodd,shethought.Theydon'tusuallyblowthewhistlethroughtown.Sheglancedovertocheckherdaughter,andherheartskipped.Emilywasnowhereinsight.Now,asthetrainapproachedwithin100metersoftheobjectontherail,Mohrnarrowedhiseyes,tryingtomakeoutwhatexactlywaslyingahead.Thenshockranthroughhimlikeelectriccurrent.5段首句6Part2题目分析7点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点8续写思路分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了火车司机Mohr，在一次驾驶火车全速前进时，他注意到远处的铁轨上有个黑点，他以为是一条狗，后来证实这个黑点是一个婴儿。他要在保证火车安全的情况下，救下这个婴儿。9续写思路分析Para1："MyGod!"heyelledasatinyfaceturnedtowardshim.“It'sababy!“由第一段首句内容“我的上帝!”当一张小脸转向他时，他大叫起来。“是个婴儿！”，可知，第一段可描写火车司机Mohr的心理感受及其采取的措施，同时可以描写婴儿妈妈Mashall的现场反应。10续写思路分析Para2：Thechildwasnowjust36metersahead.由第二段首句内容“这时火车距离婴儿只有36米了。”可知，第二段可描写火车司机Mohr努力减速火车直至火车停下，然后救婴儿，最终婴儿平安得救。11续写思路分析续写线索看见婴儿——决定刹车——跳车救孩子——孩子得救12续写素材可用词汇：行为类①.做决定：makeadecision/makeuphismind/keepinmindthat②.刹车：pullthebrake/stopthetrainwitheffort③.救孩子：savethechild/rescuethechild/savethebaby'slife情绪类焦急：anxious/haveone'sheartinone'smouth13续写素材可用句型：[高分句型1].Mohrhadaninstantdecisiontomake,applyingfullemergencybrakeswithhalfthetrainstillwrappedaroundacurve.（applying...为现在分词作状语）[高分句型2].Hardashetry,thetrainkeptmovingjustasacatsawafish,whoseenticingsmellattractedthecattoapproachthebaby.（as引导的让步状语从句，whose之后为非限制性定语从句）14Part3范文呈现15范文呈现"MyGod!"heyelledasatinyfaceturnedtowardshim.“It'sababy!"Mohrhadaninstantdecisiontomake,applyingfullemergencybrakeswithhalfthetrainstillwrappedaroundacurve.Hehadtoriskanemergencystop.Hardashetry,thetrainkeptmovingjustasacatsawafish,whoseenticingsmellattractedthecattoapproachthebaby.Meanwhile,Marshallrushedtowardsherdaughter,nervousbutdesperate,fearingthetrainwouldrunintoherbeloved.16范文呈现17范文译文“我的上帝啊！”他像一张小脸转向他时大声喊道。“这是个婴儿！”莫尔立即做出了决定，实施了紧急刹车，一半的火车仍然绕在弯道上。他不得不冒着紧急停车的危险。在他的努力中，火车继续移动，就像一只猫看到了一条鱼，它诱人的气味吸引了猫接近婴儿。与此同时，马歇尔冲向紧张但绝望的女儿，担心火车会撞到她的爱人。18范文译文这个孩子现在只有前面36米远。莫尔竭尽全力地拉下了刹车。车轮撞击铁轨的声音响彻天空。情况很危险。当火车快停下来时，他立即打开驾驶室的左门，迅速从行驶的