新题型读后续写第篇

第十二篇读后续写3曲折性原则凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。2正能量原则故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，等等。1原文一致原则内容要前后衔接，上下连贯,语言表达风格一致。三大原则增加细节开始写作细读首句构思框架四个步骤修改润色整洁誊写读懂大意理清脉络1.4.3.2.读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题，理清故事的主要人物和事件。仔细阅读所给两段的首句，结合正能量结尾，思考大致框架。依据情节发和常识，在确定的框架内，可按“所见/遇所想，所为所感”等构思具体细节。思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地写入答卷。读后续写

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇

完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。

DadandMomhadgottogoonafour-daybusinesstrip.TheytaughttheireldersonDanielandyoungerdaughterJanehowtofeedandlookaftertheirdog,Spot,howtotakegoodcareofthemselves—learningtocookiftheycould,ororderingpizza—withmoneyleftonthetable—iftheywerebusy,andtoldthemtokeeptheirroomscleanandtidy.TheyaskedDanieltobeincharge.

Ontheverymorningwhentheparentsleft,MomkissedthemandsaidtoDanielgently,“Youngman,dotakecareofSpotandJane.”Danielpromised,“Iwill,Mom.”

Tooexcitedtofallasleepagain,DanielandJanejumpedoutofbed,callingouteachothertogetup.Theirpetdog,Spot,heardthesimilarvoiceandrushedin,withaballinitsmouth.Janestuck(伸)herheadintoDaniel’sroom,“Spotgotupanhourearlier.Let’swalkit.”Danielsaidexcitedly,“I’mcoming,but,Jane,don’tforgettokeepyourroomcleanandtidy.”“Iwill.”TheyranwiththedogintheyardandthrewtheballawayforSpottobringitback.TheyhadfunplayingwithSpotthewholemorning.WashingSpotwasslowandtiring

asitwasthefirsttimetheyhaddoneit.ThenDanielsettleddowntohishomeworkwhileJanedidherreadingwithinterest.

Thefollowingday,Janebeggedherbrothertoorderpizzaforlunch.Danielagreedexcitedly,“Wehaven’ttastedthatforlongandwebehaveourselves,right?”Afterawhile,headded,“Weshouldsavemoney,too.”

Withinhalfanhour,theytreatedthemselvestoabigpizza.However,intheafternoon,Spotlookedsick,lyinglazilyandunwillingtomove.DanielwasconcernedaboutthedogandtookittothepetclinicimmediatelywithJaneastheirparentshaddone.

Paragraph1：WhenDadandMomarrivedadayearlier,theywereamazedtofindeverythinginamess.Paragraph2：Danielranintohisroom,withtearsinhiseyes,“Jane,thereisnoneedtoexplainandMomwon’ttrustmeanylonger.”主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的人物，时态(通常是一般过去时)，事件(故事的起因和经过)，语言特色(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保持不变)，等等。1、读懂大意，理清脉络人物时态和事件语言特色不要变CharactersTenseEventsmom,dad,Jane,Daniel,SpotsimplepasttenseDadandMomhadgottogoonafour-daybusinesstrip.TheytaughttheireldersonDanielandyoungerdaughterJanehowtofeedandlookaftertheirdog.TheyaskedDanieltobeincharge.Tooexcitedtofallasleepagain,DanielandJanejumpedoutofbed,callingouteachothertogetup.TheyranwiththedogintheyardandthrewtheballawayforSpottobringitback.TheyhadfunplayingwithSpotthewholemorning.theytreatedthemselvestoabigpizzaHowever,intheafternoon,Spotlookedsick,lyinglazilyandunwillingtomove.DanielwasconcernedaboutthedogandtookittothepetclinicimmediatelywithJaneastheirparentshaddone.5Daniel像他们父母以前做的那样赶紧带Spot去了宠物医院。4然而，到了下午，Spot似乎生病了，躺在地上一动也不动。3Jane和Daniel叫了pizza的外卖；他们吃的特别香。2在父母离开后，Jane和Daniel早早起了床并和Spot在花园里玩了一上午，并给它洗了个澡，这是他们第一次给狗狗洗澡。1因为爸爸和妈妈要出差四天，所以他们教大儿子Daniel和小女儿Jane如何照顾他们自己和狗狗Spot，并叫Daniel主管家里的事物。事件梳理语言特色02/01/分词短语做状语：

DanielandJanejumpedoutofbed,

callingouteachothertogetup.

Spotlookedsick,lyinglazilyandunwillingtomove.with复合结构：

—withmoneyleftonthetable—

Theirpetdog,Spot,heardthesimilarvoiceandrushedin,withaballinitsmouth.03/状语从句：

...asitwasthefirsttimetheyhaddoneit

Daniel...tookittothepetclinicimmediatelywithJane

astheirparentshaddone.

1、细读句首，构思框架两段首句定一框

由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。二框二首正能量

第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。两段首句定一框

从第一段首句可知在Jane和Daniel把Spot送去医院后爸爸妈妈提前一天回来了，而且房间也没有收拾，而从第二段首句可知应该是妈妈责怪了Daniel，所以他哭着回了房间并说妈妈不会再相信他了。第一段应该是写妈妈责怪Daniel的内容，而第二段应该有个反转，表示妈妈错怪了Daniel。Paragraph1：WhenDadandMomarrivedadayearlier,theywereamazedtofindeverythinginamess.(当爸爸妈妈提前一天到家时，因为家里的一团乱而大吃一惊。)Paragraph2：Danielranintohisroom,withtearsinhiseyes,“Jane,thereisnoneedtoexplainandMomwon’ttrustmeanylonger.”(丹尼尔流着泪跑进了自己的房间，“简，不用解释了，妈妈不会再相信我了。”)二框二首正能量

由第二段首句中：妈妈不会再相信我了。说明妈妈责怪了Daniel，第二段应以正能量结尾，妈妈表示自己错怪了孩子们，并道歉，还表扬了孩子们做的事情。Paragraph2：Danielranintohisroom,withtearsinhiseyes,“Jane,thereisnoneedtoexplainandMomwon’ttrustmeanylonger.”(丹尼尔流着泪跑进了自己的房间，“简，不用解释了，妈妈不会再相信我了。”)2、增加细节，开始写作

在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做等给每段增加5至8个具体细节，我们称之为叫“58细节添加法”。构思Paragraph1：WhenDadandMomarrivedadayearlier,theywereamazedtofindeverythinginamess.(当爸爸妈妈提前一天到家时，因为家里的一团乱而大吃一惊)根据构思的大致框架，推断故事中人物所见、所思、所说、所做等每段增加五至七个具体细节或叫“57细节法”。母亲生气，责怪儿子交代看家，房间凌乱饭钱花光，狗仍饥饿质问钱去何处，女儿解释带狗看病，故钱花光构思Paragraph2：Danielranintohisroom,withtearsinhiseyes,“Jane,thereisnoneedtoexplainandMomwon’ttrustmeanylonger.”(丹尼尔流着泪跑进了自己的房间，“简，不用解释了，妈妈不会再相信我了。”)根据构思的大致框架，推断故事中人物所见、所思、所说、所做等每段增加五至七个具体细节或叫“57细节法”。父亲说话，安慰母亲母亲了解原由，后悔责怪拥抱儿子，道歉表扬根据一致性原则，除内容上要语义衔接，上下连贯外，语言风格也要一致，应使用分词语短和各类从句。3、修改润色，整洁誊写

审读初稿，注意语义是否衔接，前后是否连贯，事件是否符合逻辑，语言特色是否与前文一致。在修改润色之后，整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。参考范文Paragraph1：WhenDadandMomarrivedadayearlier,theywereamazedtofindeverythinginamess.

Momwasangryandshouted,“Listentome,youngman—Ileftyouincharge.Wethoughtyouwouldactlikeanadult,butlookatthemess.ThemoneyforfoodhasbeenusedupbutwhydoesSpotstilllookhungry?Whatdidyoudowiththemoneyweleft?”Janeexplainedanxiously,“Mummy,Spotissick,sowespenttherestofthemoneytakingittothepetclinic.”Paragraph2：

Danielranintohisroom,withtearsinhiseyes,“Jane,thereisnoneedtoexplainandMomwon’ttrustmeanylonger.”

ComfortingMom,Dadsaidcalmly,“Thereisprobablyagoodexplanationforeverything.”Hearingthelittledaughter’swords,M