写作描述性文章剖析

写作——描述性文章描述性文章是把人物、事件、景观、地点、环境等用生动的语言,形象地描绘出来。描述性文章的结构(1人物:开头应有简明的介绍文章的主体部分可按时间或事件的主次进行描述结尾进行评论或谈感受(2地点:要学会准确地表示方位的词或短语描述地点的位置通常由上至下,从里到外,从左至右,从远到近。总之,无论是描述人物,还是地点、环境、都要详略得当,重点突出。学习并牢记下面的短语和句型表空间顺序infrontof,inthefrontof,atthebackof,ontheright(leftsidecloseto,nextto,opposite,across,inside,outsidein(tothesouth/east/west/northononeside...,ontheotherside(of常用短语和句型:方位Thereisatallshelfontheleftofmyroom.(ontherightof,inthefrontof,nearthewindow,Abovethebed,thereisalargepaintingofthebluesea.(Ontherightoftheroom,Nexttoitisabed.(Infrontofit,Atthebackof,Inthemiddleof,TotherightofTheyareoppositethedoor.(ontheleft/rightoftheroom.Theofficebuildingisintheeastofthecampus.(inthesouthof,tothewestof,infrontof,behind,atthebackof,Themonument,whichwasbuiltin1894,standsinthecenterofthesquare.描述国家,城市等ChinaislocatedinAsia.(beSituated…besurroundedby,lietotheeastofItcoversahugeareaof9,600000squarekilometers.Thepopulationofthiscityis100,000.路线WhenyouComeoutof…(getto…reach…Crossthestreet(river(keepwalkingalong…walkdown…TurnrightattheendofBridgeStreetintoRiversideRoad.(thesecondtrafficlights,thefirstcrossing,Takethefirstturningonyourleft.(takethepathwhichcrossestheriver.Gostraightontothetrafficlightandthenturnright.You’llsee(findit人物Mygrandpa,kindandpatient,enjoystalkingwithkids.Heisabout5feetand7inchestall.Shehasaroundfacewithtwobigeyes.描述物品Thisropeis100meterslong.=Thelengthofthisropeis100meters.=Thisropeis100metersinlength.(inweight,inwidth,inheight,insize,incolor,inshapetisaroundyellowhatwithpinkflowersonit.It’smadeofstraw.21.Therearethreebooksintheherdrawer.1999年NMET书面表达假设你是李华,在一所中学读书。最近收到美国朋友Smith先生的来信。他三年前参观过你校,听说现在变化很大,希望了解有关情况.参照下图,给他写一封回信,介绍你校的变化。注意:1回信须包括图画的主要内容,可适当增减细节,使内容连贯。2词数100字左右。三年前图1图2审题:①一封信(体裁②谈学校的变化(三年前图1,三年后图2③重点在三年后的描述题纲及常用结构①开头语:收到来信hearfromsb./get(receiveyourletter….②学校的变化:新教学楼:anewschoolbuilding图书馆:ournewlibrary新操场:thenewplayground树木环绕:lotsoftrees③表述方位的词:ononeside(ontheothersideontheright(leftTherebe….,infrontof,inandaround将以上要点扩展成句并连文,注意句与句之间的过渡。DearMr.Smith,Iwassopleasedtohearfromyouandamwritingtotellyousomethingaboutmyschool.Youareright,Quiteafewchangeshavetakenplace.Ononesideoftheroadthereisanewclassroombuilding.Ontheotherside,wheretheplaygroundusedtobenowstandsanothernewbuildingourlibrary.Initthereareallkindsofbooks,newspapersandmagazines.Theplaygroundisnowinfrontoftheschool.Wehavealsoplantedalotoftreesinandaroundtheschool.Ihopeyoucomeandseeforyourselfsomeday.Bestwishes.Yours,LiHua假如你作为崔剑锋的同学接受美国一家报社记者的采访,请你介绍有关他的事迹。根据所给提示,写一篇100词左右的短文。Name:CuiJianfengBirthday:8,15,1971Birthplace:Heze,ShandongprovinceEducation:1989---1993,BiologyDepartment,PekingUniversity1996Doctor’sdegree,PrincetonUniversity,NewJerseyDeeds:1977diedforsavingaboyon16thSept.范文分析:L产FrinceturLUniversityA.审题:①文字和图画综合表达的一篇文章;②文章可分为两大部分B.题纲及常用短语:①第一部分,谈他的经历:talkabouthisexperience.Experience•name•Birthday•Birthplace•EducationWordsandphrasescouldbeused.graduateform/goabroad/receivetheDoctor’sdegree②第二部分:谈他的救人及牺牲的故事HiSDeedsWordsandexpressions:goouting/goforapicnichearthecryforhelpseesb.doingsth.jumpintotheriverloseone'slife③第三部分:结尾ConclusionHisstoryinspiredlotsofpeople.We’llrememberhimforever.Heisalwaysinourhearts.…C.成文写作答案:CuiJianfengwasborninAugust,1971,inHeze,Shandongprovince.AftergraduatingfromBiologyDepartment,PekingUniversity,hewentabroadforfurtherstudiesinPrincetonUniversity,NewJersey.Therebestudiedveryhardanditwasin1996thathereceivedtheDoctor’sdegree.Onthe16th,September1997,hewentoutingwithhisclassmates.Neartheriver,theywerehavingapicnicwhenheheardthecryforhelp.Hesawaboysinkinginthewater.Withouthesitation,herushedtowardstheriverandjumpedintothewater.WiththehelpoftheotherAmericanstudents,theboywassaved.Cuiwasabouttogetoutofwaterwhenarockhithimonthehead.Cuilosthislife.Hisheroicstoryspreadalloverthecity.We’llrememberhimforever.练习.假如你叫AliCe,你本应去机场接Danial,但你不得不去医院接你的母亲回家,你的朋友Mary主动提出替你去机场接Danial,你给Danial写信说明上述情况,并描述Mary的外表。AgeinherLwenti-esLooks.slim4ofmediumheigh[τwavyhair.withghsFiesɑɑthesIT-sbirtSlicesIiigh—heeledshoesPersonalitykindandcheerful.假设你是李华,你的美国朋友Mike将于6月底到北京作短暂停留,请你帮他安排一天的活动。要求用所给的示意图写一封信向他提出建议并对各地点加以简单的介绍。颐和园饭馆北京大学宾馆图书城【参考译文】DearDanial,I’mverysorryIcan’tcometomeetyouattheairportsinceIhavetotakemymotherhomefromhospital.MyfriendMaryhaskindlyofferedtomeetyouandbringyouhome.Asyouhavenevermetherbefore.I’lldescribehertoyou.MissMaryisayoungladyinhertwentieswithglasses.Sheisofmediumheight.ShehasaroundfacewithWavyhair.Shelikeswearinghigh-heeledshoes.ItiseasytorecognizeherbecausesheisusuallydressedinT-shirtandaskirt.Sheisalwayscheerful.IdohopeyoumanagetorecognizemyfriendMarywithoutanydifficulty.I’mlookingforwardtoseeingyou.Yoursincerely,AliceDearMike,I’mgladtohearyouarecomingsoon.I’veplannedaone-daytripforyouinBeijing.InthemorningyoucanfirstgototheSummerPalace,whichisoneofthemostbeautifulparksinBeijing.Thereyoucangoboatingandclimbing.It’salsoaniceplacefortakingpictures.TheninthemiddleofthedayyoucanenjoyaChineselunchinarestaurant.Intheafternoon,IsuggestyouvisitBeijingUniversity.Asyouknow,itisfamousbothinChinaandintheworld.Beforeyougobacktoyo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