读后续写动作细节描写课件

动作细节描写by

Kevin

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OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom.“I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace.sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesaw

nothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”

shecried."Help!"

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)

somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow.Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.

(2016.10浙江) OneweekendinJuly,Janeand2小结动作细节的描写应该围绕着一个中心展开，否则会导致叙述散乱，内容混杂；动作细节的描写应该组织一系列的动词，以动作的次第发生来叙述整个过程；动作细节的描写应该有相应信息的支撑，以丰富细节内容，增强可读性。小结31.上周日李华坐公交车去新华书店买书，过程却不太顺利。请设计一个情节，描述具体经过，词数80左右。Last

Sunday,

Li

Hua

went

to

Xinhua

Bookstore

to

buy

a

book.

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.上周日李华坐公交车去新华书店买书，过程却不太顺利。请设41.上周日李华坐公交车去新华书店买书，过程却不太顺利。请设计一个情节，描述具体经过，词数80左右。去书店的路上不顺利在书店买书不顺利出门》公交车没来》发现公交车停开》换车》车子故障》很晚到达书店喜欢的书只剩一本》其他顾客拿到那本》询问售货员》售货员又找到一本》书本破损》买到后发现对面商店有同款1.上周日李华坐公交车去新华书店买书，过程却不太顺利。请设5Last

Sunday,

Li

Hua

went

to

Xinhua

Bookstore

to

buy

a

book.

After

breakfast,

he

came

to

the

bus

stop

near

his

home.

As

was

scheduled,

the

bus

should

arrive

in

5

minutes.

However,

he

waited

for

about

10

minutes

but

no

bus

came.

A

few

minutes

later,

he

and

other

passengers

were

told

to

get

on

another

bus

which

went

on

a

different

route.

Halfway,

the

bus

broke

down.

As

a

result,

he

had

to

change

the

bus

again.

Finally,

he

got

to

the

bookstore

at

the

lunch

time,

almost

two

hours

later

than

expected.LastSunday,LiHuawenttoXi62.

Jeff是一位非常关心学生的老师，昨天午饭后班里同学Kate突然鼻子流血不止。请设计一个情节详细描述Jeff采取的行动重点体现他对学生的关爱。约80词。Yesterday

Jeff

was

in

the

classroom

talking

to

a

student

after

lunch.

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.Jeff是一位非常关心学生的老师，昨天午饭后班里同学72.

Jeff是一位非常关心学生的老师，昨天午饭后班里同学Kate突然鼻子流血不止。请设计一个情节详细描述Jeff才去的行动重点体现他对学生的关爱。约80词。Jeff在教室里解决了问题Jeff未能解决问题，因而求助医生体现出Jeff的急切和关爱。2.Jeff是一位非常关心学生的老师，昨天午饭后班里同学8Yesterday

Jeff

was

in

the

classroom

talking

to

a

student

after

lunch.

Suddenly

Kate’s

nose

started

to

bleed.

Jeff

rushed

to

Kate

in

no

time.

He

told

Kate

to

lean

her

head

backwards.

After

that,

he

got

some

tissue

from

a

student

and

tried

to

clean

Kate’s

mouth

and

cheeks.

Finding

her

bleeding

impossible

to

stop,

Jeff

phoned

the

doctor

to

ask

what

to

do.

The

doctor

advised

Kate

to

be

sent

to

him

as

soon

as

possible.

Immediately,

Jeff

went

to

the

doctor

with

Kate.

He

stayed

there

with

her

until

she

was

fine

two

hours

later.YesterdayJeffwasintheclas9实战演练实战演练103.王涛即将大学毕业，正在寻找工作，上周他参加了一次面试。请设计一个情节详细描述他进入面试房间后的动作，突出当时相对压抑的氛围。80词左右Hearing

his

name

called,

Wang

Tao

opened

the

door

and

stepped

in.

_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.王涛即将大学毕业，正在寻找工作，上周他参加了一次面试。11Hearing

his

name

called,

Wang

Tao

opened

the

door

and

stepped

in.

He

immediately

felt

stared

at.

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