2022年新高考作文二续写故事-2024届高考英语作文复习专项VIP

读后续写高考试卷中读后续写题总分为 25 分,按 5 个档次给分。第五档(21-25分) 与所给短文融洽度高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理; 内容丰富,应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语;所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但完全不影响意义表达; 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分.第四档(16-20分) 与所给短文融洽度较高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理; 内容比较丰富,应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语;所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但完全不影响意义表达; 比较有效地使用语句间的连接成分.找到矛盾冲突点~矛盾是故事的起点~人与自然

外界

灵感一闪

借助外力人与社会

误解

沟通让步人与自我

自己

自我意识觉醒-改过自新

情节构思负转正的行文思路段首句的前后影响找到可呼应的细节

2021新高考~阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.在父亲的帮助下顺利地完成了早餐。父亲要发货了解了情况没有发货一起做早餐

情绪描写动作描写动作描写动作描写+情绪描写祝福节快乐开心注意到Jeff的手感动+收尾语言描写心理+环境描写动作+情绪描写FourFactors故事线Storyline01突破点Target02亮点OutstandingPoints03基本点Pindownthetheme041故事线SGothroughthetextandgetthestoryline5WWHATWHOWHEREWHENWHYTHEMEOneweekendinJuly,Jane

and

herhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightby

alake

intheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasant

subjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforus

tocamp”andwalked

away.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedon

forquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,she

turnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbut

forestand,farbeyond,asnow

cappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealized

thatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.Ifonlyshehadnotlefther

mobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewasso

tiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,Janewanted

verymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhow

muchshelovedhim.夫妻野外徒步后争吵，妻子独自出行迷路森林，等待救援。WhoJaneTomWhatJanewaslostWhereinaforestWhenOneweekendinJulyWhyAquarrelwithTom，herhusbandSummaryJanewaslistintheforestforthreedaysandsurvivedintheendThemeJanelearnedhowtocontrolemotionsanddealwithconflicsButnomorehelicopterscameanditwas

gettingdarkagain.__________________________________ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.___________________________________________2.Target借助段首突破内容。Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwas

gettingdarkagain.Jane是如何熬过这个夜晚的？1.HowdidJanefeelthen？2.Howdidjanemakeitthroughthenight3DidshefallasleepandwhatwasshethinkingofItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.___________________________________________Jane还未获救，今天会发生什么？1.wasJanerescuedandwhorescuedher？2.Howwassherescuedandhowdidshefeelthen？3.OutstandingPoints刻画细节语言

环境

心里

动作描写丰富的句式

非谓语

从句

倒装

独立主格

虚拟语气

强调句

感叹句修辞丰富

比喻niren夸张1.环境描写

Immediately/suddenly,anabsolute/acomplete+n.+ruledthe+地点N.+andawaveof+情绪n+washed/sweptoversb.Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforestandawaveofterrorsweptoverher.2.动作+心理描写One’sheartpoundingfiercelyandone’spalmsweating，aninnervoicetoldsb.that（独立主格）Herheartpoundingfiercelyandherpalmsweating，aninnervoicetoldherthatshehadtofindasafeplace.adjandadjassbwas，didsth，doingsth（非谓语）尽管又..又...Sb依然做sth...Tiredandterrifiedasshewas，Janestruggledtiherfeet，tryingnottohaveabreakdownbothphysicallyandmentally.3.语言描写Luckily/fortunately，itdidn’ttakelongbeforesbdid...Luckily，itdidn‘ttakelongbeforeshefoundacave.Sighingwithrelief,shesensedaglimmerof__________andfeltasifsth.hadbeendoingandsaying，“......”如释重负的叹了口气，Sb感到一丝...sighingwithrelief，shesensedaglimmerofhopeandfeltasifthecavehadbeencomfortingherandsaying，“Comein，youmustbeexhausted”with...,sbdid....,+非限定从withthat，shewenttosleep，inwhosedreamherhusbandkepthercompany.随着发生的一切，她进入了梦乡，在她的（inwhose）的梦里她丈夫陪伴着她连接第二段段首，新的一天来了Judgingfromthe__________,itwasevidentthatsb.wasstilltrappedin_________(withoutanyhelp).sb.wasatalosswhattodo.Judgingfromthequietsurrounding,itwasevidentthatJanewastilltrappedintheforestwithoutanyonecomingtotherescue.Janewasatalosswhattodo.转机出现Itsuddenlydawnedonsb。thatsbshoulddo...Itsuddenlydawnedonherthatsheshouldfindabigopenarea.Toone’sgreat________情绪名词Tohergreatjoy，itdidn’ttakeherlongtospotsuchaplaceandsheheardthedeafeningnoisecomingcloser.Toone’sgreat________情绪名词救援来了！Seeing/hearingsth,sb,feltagreatsenseof+情绪+wellingupinsb’sheartandsurgingthroughsb.听到sthsb感到一种强烈的+情绪

涌上某人心头

并且涌动全身Lookingupandseeingahelicopter，Janefeltagreatsenseofexcitementwellingupinherheartandsurgingthroughher.求救情绪+and+情绪sbsparednoefforttodo...soasto...Eagerandexcited，sheflaggedheryellowblouseandsparednoefforttoyellsoastoattractother’sattention.求救情绪+and+情绪sbsparednoefforttodo...soasto...Eagerandexcited，sheflaggedheryellowblouseandsparednoefforttoyellsoastoattractother’sattention.基本点

回扣theme感叹句强调句夹叙夹议喃喃自语在Para2欢喜大结局Luckily/fortunately/eventuallyFortunately，shewasnoticedandbroughtintothehelicopter。here，shesawherhusban，amanstaringather，wearinganexpressionofrelief.回归主体Itwasatthemomentthatsbdidnotdo----anymorebutdid----Itwasatthemomentthattheydecidednottoquarrelanymorebutlearnedtocomprom.Whatavaluablelessonforthecoupletolearn!1.他决定要上场比赛！2.转折*矛盾

矛盾属于

人与自我&人与人我与Mike的互动：

安慰

鼓励....1.比赛。（前-中-后）2.结局&升华中：

主角的表现&旁人的反应嘲笑

or不嘲笑2.结局&升华结局

：

成绩

好和以前一样没有必要最后一名，但是可以收获别的Paragraph1Wesatdownnexttotheeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Judgingfromhisexpression,itwasevidentthathewastrappedinadilemma.”Allofusthinkyouarethebest.Youknowthat,right?”Itriedtogivehimsomecomfort.Hearingthesewords,Davidfinallyturnedhishead,tearsshininginhiseyes.”Iknowyoudo.Butthekidsfromotherschool.””Oh,boy,therearealotofthingspeopledon’tknow,”Icuddl