例谈如何在续写前进行有效阅读

例谈如何在续写前进行有效阅读浙江省湖州市教科研中心 费胜昌Nov.2017有效阅读是续写的前提——以2016年10月新高考首考试题为例阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。One

weekend

in

July,

Jane

and

her

husband,

Tom,had

driven

three

hours

tocampovernight

by

a

lake

in

the

forest.

Unfortunately,

on

the

way

an

unpleasant

subjectcame

up

andthey

started

to

quarrel.

By

the

time

they

reached

the

lake,

Jane

was

so

angry

that

she

said

toTom,

“I’m

going

to

finda

better

spot

for

us

tocamp”

and

walked

away.With

no

path

to

follow,

Jane

just

walked

on

for

quite

a

long

time.

After

she

had

climbed

toa

high

place,

she

turned

around,

hoping

to

see

the

lake.

To

her

surprise,

she

saw

nothingbutforestand,

far

beyond,

asnowcapped

mountain

top.

She

suddenly

realized

that

shewaslost.“Tom!”

she

cried.

“Help!”No

reply.

If

only

she

had

not

left

her

mobile

phone

in

that

bag

with

Tom.

Jane

keptmoving,but

the

farther

she

walked,

the

more

confused

shebecame.

As

night

was

beginning

to

fall,Janewas

so

tired

that

she

had

to

stop

for

the

night.

Lying

awake

in

the

dark,

Jane

wanted

very

muchto

be

withTom

and

her

family.She

wanted

to

hold

him

and

tell

him

how

much

she

loved

him.Jane

rose

at

the

break

ofday,hungry

and

thirsty.She

could

hear

water

trickling(滴落)somewhere

at

a

distance.

Quickly

she

followed

the

sound

to

a

stream.

To

her

great

joy,

she

alsosaw

some

berry

bushes.

She

drank

and

ate

a

few

berries.

Never

in

her

life

had

shetastedanything

better.

Feeling

stronger

now,

Jane

began

to

walk

along

the

stream

and

hope

itwouldlead

her

to

the

lake.As

she

picked

her

way

carefully

along

the

stream,

Jane

heard

a

helicopter.Is

that

for

me?Unfortunately,

the

trees

made

it

impossible

for

people

to

see

her

from

above.

A

few

minutes

later,another

helicopter

flew

overhead.Jane

took

off

her

yellow

blouse,

thinking

thatshe

should

gotoan

open

area

and

flag

them

if

they

came

backagain.Butnomorehelicopters

cameanditwasdark.

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

1.

Analyze

the

material⑴.Type

of

writingNarrative

记叙文⑵.

In

what

order

is

the

material

developed?⑶.Three

elements(要素)for

anarrative:CharacterSettingPlotJane,

TomIn

the

forestTimesequenceOne

weekend

in

July,

Jane…As

night

was

beginning

to

fall,

Jane…

Jane

rose

at

the

break

of

the

day,…But

…

and

it

was

getting

dark

again.It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.方法1：绘制思维导图Beginningdrank

ate

stoppedmissed

(wanted)

lost

quarreledwalked

awaymissed

a

chance

(heard)got

a

plan

(thinking)ClimaxFind

out

the

key

verbs

showing

the

development

of

the

plot.PlotEndingquarreledwalked

awayBeginningdrank

lost

ate

nohelicoptersgetting

darkstopped

missed

missed

a

chancegot

a

planClimaxEndingwoke

upstruggle?fear？daybreak

rescue?Jane,

Tom,

lake,walked,

climbed,stream,

at

a

distance,to

her

greatjoy,helicopter,

yellowblouse2.Plot

Deduction（推理）Jane,

Tom,

lake,

walked,

climbed,

stream,

at

adistance,to

her

great

joy,

helicopter, yellow

blousekey

words

givenClue:

Characters:

Behavior:

Places:

ments:helicopter;

yellow

blouseJane;

Tom;walked;

climbedlake;

stream;

at

a

distanceto

her

great

joyTip:

Classify

the

10

key

words

to

help

plottingDifficulties:get

injured, cold

night,

wild

beasts,suffer,

tired,

lack

of

confidence…Qualities:

calm,

firm

belief,

courage,

cleverself-assured…Emotions:

regretful,

homesick,

miss,

in

despair,anxious,

give

up,

panic,

lonely,

desperate,

breakdown,

cheerful,

to

her

great

joy…Actions:

catch

sight

of,

wave,

flag,

laugh,

burst

intotears,

dash,

hug,

shout,

struggle,

attempt,

reunite…3.

Brainstorm

for

words

and

expressions4.

Writing

Tips★Let

the

surroundings

speakAmid

the

dreadful

darkness,

strange

sounds

of

wild

beastswere

heard.hugged

each

other

tightly

in

the

warm

light

of

the

setting

sun★Describe

actions

specificallyShe

rushed

to

the

rock,

climbed

onto

it

and

waited.She

waved

her

yellow

blouse

madly

to

the

passing

helicopter.★Add

proper

mental

activities1.

“If

it

weren’t

for that

stupid

quarrel,

I

wouldn’t

be

trapped

here,”she

thought

to

herself.develotpimede?1By

thetime…After

she

had

…As

night…to

fallAt

the

break

of

dayA

few

minuteslater…it

was

darkWhatHowOn

the

Hwaoy

w

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awayangrygot

lostscaredregretfulstopped…nightfound

a

streamand

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hopefulheard

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helicoptertook

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blousehopefulTimWehelnine2As

she

picked…3

It

wasdaybreak…Reading

for

Comprehension方法2：制作表格Para.

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no

morehelicopterscame

and

itwasdark.Feeling:

disappointed Find

a

place

to

sleepTime:

the

night

before

sleptPara.

8It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.try

to

get

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the

DevelopmentPara.

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no

morehelicopterscame

and

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the

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a

placecold,

scared…regretful…tired,

hungry…it

was

darkto

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about

Tomfall

asleepJane,

Tom,

lake,

walked,

climbed,

at

a

distance,stream,

To

her

great

joy,

helicopter,

yellow

blousePredicting

the

DevelopmenttheyJane

took

off

her

yellow

blouse,

thinking

that

sheshould

go

to

an

open

area

and

flag

themif

helicopters

came

back

again.

(Para.

6)Para.

8It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.What

would

Jane

do?try

to

get

rescued

by

thehelicopterJane,

Tom,

lake,

walked,

climbed,

at

a

distance,stream,

To

her

great

joy,

helicopter,

yellow

blousePredicting

the

DevelopmentJane

began

to

walk

along

the

stream

and

hope

itwould

lead

her

to

the

lake. (Para.

5)What

would

Jane

do

iftherewere

no

helicopteror

shefailedto

benoticed?follow

the

stream

to

find

the

lakeJane,

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lake,

walked,

climbed,

at

a

distance,stream,

To

her

great

joy,

helicopter,

yellow

blousePredicting

the

DevelopmentShe

wanted

to

hold

himand

tell

him

how

much

sheloved

him. (Para.

4)Would

Jane

get

out

of

the

forest?Yes.How

would

she

react

when

seeing

Tom?held

Tom

and

told

him

she

loved

himWhenWhatHowit

was

dark…Find

a

place

to

sleepthink

about

Tomfall

asleepcold,

scared,tired,

hungry,regretful…It

was

daybreak…try

to

get

out(by

the

helicopter

/

thestream

to

the

lake)hold

Tom

and

say…(disappointed

ifno

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the

storyPossible

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only

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only

she

had

not

left

her

mobile

phone…Never

倒装句Never

in

her

lifehad

she

tasted

anything

better.V-ing

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awake

in

the

dark,

Jane

wanted

very

much

to

be……so…that…As

night…,

Jane

was

so

tired

that

she

had

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结构With

no

path

to

follow,

Jane

just

walked

on

....The

more…,

the

more……the

farther

she

walked,

the

more

confused

she

became.形容词作伴随状语Jane

rose

at

the

break

of

day,

hungry

and

thirsty.Readingfor

LanguageParagraph1:But

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

getting

dark

again.

Amid

thedreadful

darkness,

strange

sounds

of

wild

beasts

were

heard.

Jane

was

lonelyand

seized

by

extreme

panic.

“If

it

weren’t

for

that

stupid

quarrel,

I

wouldn’t

be

trapped

here,”

she

thought

regretfully

and

then

burst

into

tears.

Many

times,Jane

was

on

the

edge

of

breaking