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Atfirst,Surrelldidn’tseetheblacksmokeorflamesshootingfromthewindowsofhisneighbors’home.HeandhiswifewerejusthavingadinnerintheirownhouseinAllentown,Pennsylvania,whentheyheardsomeonescreaming:"Thehouseisonfire!”Hewenttoinvestigate.That'swhenhesawtwowomenandagirlcrazilyatalossontheirporch(走廊).Itwashisneighbor’shouse.“Thebaby’sinsidethere!”oneofthewomencried.Thoughthefiredepartmenthadbeencalled,Surrell,then64,instinctively(本能地)raninside.“Thebaby"was8-year-oldTiaraRoberts,whoalwayscalledhimUncleSurrell.Shewasthewoman’sgranddaughterandaplaymateofSurrell’sthreeyoungestkids,8,10,and12.TheothertwoontheporchwereTiara’sauntandcousin.Enteringtheburninghousewaslikerunninginto“abucketofblackpaint”.ThethicksmokecausedSurrelltowalkblindlyaround,burnedhiseyes,andmadeitimpossibleforhimtobreathe.Hefelthisthroatandlungsburned,andeveryblinkstung(蛰)hiseyes.Theconditionswouldhavebeenverydangerousforanyone,butforSurrell,whohaschronicobstructivepulmonarydisease(慢性阻塞性肺病)andwasinhospitaljusthalfayearago,theywerelife-risking.Afterafewminutesinthesmoke-filledhousesearchingbutinvain,heranoutsidetocatchhisbreath.“WhereisTiara?”heaskeddesperately.“Thesecondfloor.”herauntshoutedbackSurrellknewhecouldn’tholdhisbreathforlong.Soheutteredalittleprayer:“Well,God,thisisit.Yougottohelpme,becauseI'mnotcomingoutwithoutthatlittlegirl.”原文再现whowhenwherewhatwhyhowCharacter(s)Setting(s)PlotsSurrell;Tiara;twowomentime:dinnertimeplace:neighbourhoodevent:TiarawastrappedinthefireandSurrelltriedtohelpherout.1st：六要素Atfirst,Surrelldidn’tseetheblacksmokeorflamesshootingfromthewindowsofhisneighbors’home.HeandhiswifewerejusthavingadinnerintheirownhouseinAllentown,Pennsylvania,whentheyheardsomeonescreaming:"Thehouseisonfire!”Hewenttoinvestigate.That'swhenhesawtwowomenandagirlcrazilyatalossontheirporch(走廊).Itwashisneighbor’shouse.“Thebaby’sinsidethere!”oneofthewomencried.Thoughthefiredepartmenthadbeencalled,Surrell,then64,instinctively(本能地)raninside.“Thebaby”was8-year-oldTiaraRoberts,whoalwayscalledhimUncleSurrell.Shewasthewoman’sgranddaughterandaplaymateofSurrell’sthreeyoungestkids,8,10,and12.TheothertwoontheporchwereTiara’sauntandcousin.Enteringtheburninghousewaslikerunninginto“abucketofblackpaint”.ThethicksmokecausedSurrelltowalkblindlyaround,burnedhiseyes,andmadeitimpossibleforhimtobreathe.Hefelthisthroatandlungsburned,andeveryblinkstung(蛰)hiseyes.Theconditionswouldhavebeenverydangerousforanyone,butforSurrell,whohaschronicobstructivepulmonarydisease(慢性阻塞性肺病)andwasinhospitaljusthalfayearago,theywerelife-risking.Afterafewminutesinthesmoke-filledhousesearchingbutinvain,heranoutsidetocatchhisbreath.“WhereisTiara?”heaskeddesperately.“Thesecondfloor.”herauntshoutedbackSurrellknewhecouldn’tholdhisbreathforlong.Soheutteredalittleprayer:“Well,God,thisisit.Yougottohelpme,becauseI'mnotcomingoutwithoutthatlittlegirl.”kind,brave,selflessdetermined2nd:细节信息3rd:尾段&段首句

Enteringtheburninghousewaslikerunninginto"abucketofblackpaint".ThethicksmokecausedSurrelltowalkblindlyaround,burnedhiseyes,andmadeitimpossibleforhimtobreathe.Hefelthisthroatandlungsburned,andeveryblinkstung(蛰)hiseyes.Theconditionswouldhavebeenverydangerousforanyone,butforSurrell,whohaschronicobstructivepulmonarydisease(慢性阻塞性肺病)andwasinhospitaljusthalfayearago,theywerelife-risking.Afterafewminutesinthesmoke-filledhousesearchingbutinvain,heranoutsidetocatchhisbreath."WhereisTiara?"heaskeddesperately.“Thesecondfloor."herauntshoutedbackSurrellknewhecouldn’tholdhisbreathforlong.Soheutteredalittleprayer:"Well,God,thisisit.Yougottohelpme,becauseI'mnotcomingoutwithoutthatlittlegirl.”Para.1Takingadeephealth,hewentinasecondtime.

Para.2Surrellwokeupinthehospitalacoupleofdayslater.thefirstattemptHowtodescribethesurroundings?Howdidhefind/saveTiara?Whathappenedtohim?Para.1Takingadeepbreath,hewentinasecondtime.Howtodescribethesurroundings?

Howdidhefind/saveTiara?五种知觉Thethicksmoke/theroaringfireswallowedhim.Hewasnearlychokedtodeathbythethicksmoke.Cracklingofburningwoodcamefloodingintohisears.…原文：Hefelthisthroatandlungs

burned,andeveryblinkstung(蛰)hiseyes.火辣辣地痛，发烫runblindlyinthedarknessstumbletofeelhiswaystruggletoscrambleupstairshearamoan/cry/voicerun/crawltowardsthesound

动作描写Para.1Takingadeepbreath,hewentinasecondtime.Whathappenedtohim?Para.2Surrellwokeupinthehospitalacoupleofdayslater.结合下一段pickup/hug/hold/carrythegirlloseconsciousness/faintfalldownwithoutconsciousnessWhodidhesee?WhatdidTiara/Tiara'sfamily/otherssaytohim?Howdidherespond?两段的字数要基本持平回应原文，但不要太过！两段字数差距太大！脱离现实！偏离主题！逻辑问题！改为:archedhisbackHefoundtherewasapersonunderthebed.ThatwasTiara.不建议Para.1:Takingadeepbreath,hewentinasecondtime.

Hecoveredhisnoseandmouthwithawetcloth,and

ranblindlyintheblackness.FinallySurrell

struggledtoscramble(迅速而吃力地攀登)upstairs,wherehewasmetbyintenseheat.Hewasalreadyoutofbreath.Allhecouldhearwasthecracklingofburningwood.Suddenlyasoftbutdistinctmoan(呻吟)emerged.Hequicklycrawledtowardsthesound.Thenhetouchedsomething.Ashoe,thenanankle.Hepulled

Tiaratowardhim,huggedherandrushedtotheentrance.Uponthethreshold(门槛),hefelldownwithoutconsciousness.参考范文Para.2:Surrellwokeupinthehospitalacoupleofdayslater.KnowingTiarahadrecoveredandwasreleasedfromthehospital,hefeltasenseofrelief.However,hehadtospendanothertwoweeksinhospital,becausehebreathedtoomuchsmokewhichcausedfurtherdamagetohislungs.Tiara

wenttovisitSurrelleveryday,talkingwithhim,thoughSurrell,whosethroatclosedoff(封住),couldn’tspeakanyword.“Thankyouforsavingmylife,UncleSurrell.”Tiarasmiled.“It’sasmallpricetopay,”Surrellthought.“butIneverregrettedit.”参考范文blaze(烈火C.)flames(火焰C.)1.大火：adj.the__________________firedevastating(毁灭性的)enormous(巨大的)roaring

(熊熊燃烧的)massive(巨大的)violent(猛烈的)具体描写2.烟:v.Blacksmokeandflameswereshootingfromthewindows.Thesmokedriftedaroundtheroom.Blacksmokehungintheair.Theairwasfilledwiththick,blacksmoke.…Hewasnearlychokedtodeathbythethicksmoke.Thesmokewasoverwhelming,whichalmostmadehimfaint.Blindedbythedensesmoke,hestumbledtofeelhisway.…3.情绪Shivering/tremblingwithfear,Tiarayelledloudly.Thethoughtoffearcrossedhismind.Asenseofstrengthimmediatelyreplacedthemountingfearandanxietyinhismind....整理与火灾相关的表达，如:建议：大火，火焰，着火消防员，消防局爆炸，吞噬喘口气，深呼吸，大口喘气，上气不接下气火苗从窗户里串出来。跑进着火的房子就好像跑进一桶黑漆中。浓烟使得他只能在黑暗中摸索