高中英语外研版高中必修Workbook作文讲评

WritingAnalysis:平均分：10.85分最高分：18分（罗婷婷）最低分：0分0—6分：15人6—12分：14人12—18分：32人19分以上：0人假设你是李华，你的英国笔友Henry最近来信，询问你今年寒假的安排。请根据以下要点，用英语回一封信，说明你的计划,并简述理由。内容：

1．休息； 2．读书； 3．陪伴父母；4．参加社会活动。注意：1.词数100左右，信的开头和结尾已为你写好（不计入总词数）；2.可根据内容要点适当增加细节，使行文连贯；3.参考词汇：社会活动——socialactivityWriting评分依据：寒假计划：3分休息：4分读书：4分陪伴父母：4分参加社会活动：4分适当的结尾：2分书写：2分自认过度和整体语言素养：2分Factorsthataffectyourscore:1.HandwritingSomeexamplesofyourwriting2.Content1.Ithinkreadbookscanhelpmystudy.2.Iwillplayingbasketballwithmyparents.3.Iwillreadbook.4.Iwanttowithmyparentswatchamovie.5.Youknowreadingisainterestingthings.6.Iwilldosomeinterestingthingssuchasgoshopping,walkaroundinmyhometown.Somesentencesfromyourwritingreadingplaywatchamoviewithmyparent.walkingangoingthingbooks1.Iwanttobeavolunteertohelpsomehomelesspeople.Iknowit’sdifficultforme,butIwilltrymybest.2.IthinkIwillkilltimeathomeorhangoutwithmyfriends.3.Iwanttoreadsomeinterestingbooks.Itisimportantformetoimprovemyreadingskills.4.Iwillstayathomewithmyparentsandwecandosomeinterestingthingssuchasplayingsports,watchingTV,goingshoppingandsoon.Somegoodsentencesfromyourwriting3.Paragraphandformat审题Writingguide体裁人称时态要点书信I将来时1.寒假计划4.陪伴父母myplanaboutmywintervacationIwill…/I’mgoingto…havearest/takearest/relaxmyself2.休息开头：I’mgladtohearfromyou./I’mgladtoreceiveyourletter.How’sitgoing?/How’severythinggoing?I’mwritingtotellyou…3.读书Firstly,Secondly,Thirdly,Finally/Lastly.Firstofall,Besides,What’smore,Atlast.链接词readsomebooks/dosomereadingstaywithmyparents/keepmyparentscompanyspendsometimestayingwithmyparents结尾：I’mlookingforwardtoyourletter.Bestwishes！5.参加社会活动takepartinsomesocialactivitiesDearHenry,I’mgladtoreceiveyourletter.Iamwritingtotellyoumyplanaboutmywintervacation.

Firstofall,IneedtohaveagoodrestbecauseIdofeeltiredafterthehardworkofseniorhighschool.Ofcourse,I'lldosomereadingforfun,andforknowledgeaswell.Besides,I'llspendsometimestayingwithmyparents,chattingwiththemanddoingsomehousework.They’vedonesomuchforme,youknow.Lastly,I’lltakepartinsomesocialactivitiessothatIcanknowmoreaboutthesociety.Howaboutyou?Iamlookingforwardtohearingfromyou.Bestwishes!Yours，LiHua寒假计划休息开头参加社会活动结尾衔接词陪伴父母阅读DearHenry,