读后续写：个人成长类-帮助生病的邻居讲义 高考英语作文复习专项

广东省湛江市高考二模读后续写题目：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。OneNewYear'smorning,aswecamedowntobrenkfast,withveryshinyfacesandspendyaprons（围裙），wesurprisinglyfoundfatheraloneinthediningroom.“HappyNewYear,Papa!WhereisMother?"wecried.“Alittleboycamebeggingandsaidtheywerestarvingathome,soyourmotherwenttoseeand-ah,heresheis.”AsPapaspoke,incameMamma,lookingverycold,rathersad,andverymuchexcited.“Notfarawayfromhere,liesapoorwomanwithalittlenewbornbaby.Sixchildrenarehuddled（挤在一起）intoonebedtokeepfromfreezing，fortheyhavenofire.Thereisnothingtoeatoverthere,andtheoldestboycameheretotellmetheywerestarvingonthisbitterlycoldday.Mylittlegirls,willyougivethemyourbreakfast,asaNewYear'sgift?”Wesatsilentaminuteandlookedatthenice，hotporridge（粥），creamymilk，andgoodbreadandbutter;forwewerebroughtuplikeEnglishchildren,andneverdrankteaorcoffee,orateanythingbutporridgeforourbreakfast.“Iwishwe'deatenitup,”thoughtI,forIwasratheraselfishchild,andveryhungry.“MayIgoandhelpcarryittothepoor,littlechildren?"askedBeth,whohadthetenderestheartthateverbeatunderaspendyapron.“Icancarrythatlittlepot,”saidlittleMay,proudlygivingthethingshelovedbest.“AndIshalltakealltheporridge,"Iburstin,heartilyashamedofmyfirstfeeling.“Youshallputonyourthingsandhelpme,andwhenwecomeback,we'llgetsomethingtoeat,”saidMother,beginningtopilethebreadandbutterintoabigbasket.注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Weweresoonreadyandsetout.Aswemadeourwaybackhome,Ifeltasenseofwarmthinmyheart.试题分析:这是--篇记叙文。文章主题为人与社会之做人与做事。讲述了在-一个新年早上，妈妈回家告诉孩子们，不远处有--家人在这个寒冷的日子里快要饿死，让们把自己热气腾腾的精美早餐送给他们作为新年礼物“我”起初不乐意，但是“我”另外的两个姐姻高兴地同意母亲的提议，并积极主动帮助母亲提食物我很快意识到自己的错误，接受母亲在她们的影响下，的安排，“我”们整理好食物就出发前往小男孩的家。故事体现了乐于助人，奉献爱心的情操，符合新时代社会王义价值观，适合高中生写作。五要素分析：Who--主要人物:I;mother;次要人物:father;mysistersBethandMay,apoorwomanwithalittlenewbornbabyandsixchildrenWhen--oneNewYear'smorningWhere--athomeWhat--giveourbreakfasttothepoorfamilyasaNewYear'sgiftWhy--Thepoorfamilywerecoldandhungry人物情感和性格分析根据第四段incameMamma,lookingverycold,ratherMylittlegirls,willyousad.andverymuchexcited经givethemyourbreakfastasaNewYear'sgift?”可看出母亲是根据文本第五段Wesatsilentaminute可知孩子们开始是再根据第六段Iwishwe'deatenitup,thoughtl,forIwasratheraselfishchild,andveryhungry和第段Iburstin,heartilyashamedofmyfirstfeeling可知“我”是--个看起来是个孩子，根据第七段“MayIgoand但实际上是个helpcarryittothepoor,littlechildren?’askedBeth,whohadthetenderestheart和第九段“Icancarrythatlittlepot,saidlittleMay,proudlygivingthethingshelovedbest我”的姐姐们的性格。场景分析本篇文章是以始在--个新年的早晨，光彩照人的孩子们发现妈妈到妈妈回家告诉孩子们所看所感，要求孩子们把早餐送给我”是再到姐姐们的个看起来是个但实际上是个孩子当初想法。所以根据语篇协同性原则，同学们在续写的的候，也要把给写出来。根据第-一段首wewereweresoonreadyand--家人的场景最后应该有描写(与续写第二段街接》。根据续写第二段首Aswemadeourwaybackhome,Ifeltasenseofwarmthinmyheart可设想“我”有可知，故事应发生和,从而引出主旨，续写第二段场景开放性较大，同学们可以自己思考，进行合理安排。动作分析原文动作描写不多，第--段surprisinglyfoundfather的背景，第二段camebegging，werealone描述了starvingathome,satsilentaminuteandlookedatthenice.hotporridge等展示了小男孩--家人场景，第六段satsilentaminuteandlookedatthenice,hotporridge腰现了但通过第七段goandhelp孩子们对新年美餐的carryittothepoor及第段proudlygivingthethingshelovedbest看出姐姐们的因此续写动作描写主要集中在而且要注意语言协同。心理活动分析文章第--段withveryshinyfacesandspendyaprons(围裙wesurprisinglyfoundfatheraloneinthediningroom展现了全家人非非常热切心理。第四段incameMamma,lookingverycold,rathersad,andverymuchexcited塑造了-一个亲的形象;根据第七段hadthetenderestheartthateverbeatundera第\段proudlygivingthethingshelovedbest及第力spendyapron,段heartilyashamedofmyfirstfeeling可知，看见姐姐们的:我”决心这为续写第--段我”如何埋下伏笔。因此，根据语篇协同续写第二段--定要有帮助后的.对话分析文本对话描写占较多篇幅，用对话根据文中第二、二段HappyNewYear,Papa!WhereisMother&Alittleboycamebeggingandsaidtheywerestarvingathome,soyourmotherwenttoseeand.-ah,heresheis通过第四段liesapoorwomanwithalittlenewbornbaby.willyougivethemyourbreakfastasaNewYear’sgift?弓i出故事冲突:妈妈让孩子们把新年早餐根据Iwishwe'deatenitup.看出“我”的MayIgoandhelpcarryittothepoor.MayIgoandhelpcarryittothepoor及AndIshall我”受到姐姐takealltheporridge司知们的帮的当初想法，决心助中，最后--段的对话内容推动故事高潮因此续写内容对话不应太过冗长，语言对话言简意赅，风格应直接简洁.文章的铺垫和伏笔伏笔是作为在续写下文时可能出现的人物或事件的预先提目的达到“前有伏笔，后有照应”的效果。文本Six示或暗示，childrenarehuddled(挤在-一起)intoonebedtokeepfromfreezing,fortheyhavenofire.Thereisnothingtoeatoverthere续写“我”和母亲--起到穷人家打下伏笔。通过)wasratheraselfishchild,andveryhungry,heartilyashamedofmyfirstfeeling的态度对比，为“我”做好最终了铺垫。还有whenwecomeback,we'llgetsomethingtoeat为续写“我”父亲的反应铺垫。提出问题，确定续写方向由第-一段首句内容Weweresoonreadyandsetout我们很快就准备好出发了可设问如下1.Whatdidwedotohelpmother?2Whatdidwefindandhowdidwefeelafterarrivingthere?3WhatdidIdotohelpthepoorfamily?4Whatwasthefamily’sreaction?(这个问题结合第二段首句设计)根据第二段首句Aswemadeourwaybackhome,Ifeltasenseofwarmthinmyheart(当我们回家的路上，我感到--种温暖的感觉在我的心)可设问如下5WhatdidIthinkonthewayhome?6Whenwewentbackhome,whathappened?7WhatlessondidIlearnfromtheexperience?组织续写情节根据六要素和自己的想象，借助文本资源，创设续写两段故事的情节，创设画面要有动作、情绪、心理、语言等描场Paragraph1:[开端准备好出发。[故事发展1我们给小男孩家提供帮助(送早餐)-来到门前一妈妈开始热粥，“我”们给六个孩子发放面包和黄油一他们--边吃--边感谢我们一，彼此告别。Paragraph2:[高潮1回家的路上感想。[结局]“我”感恩所拥有的-一切，感恩自己有机会有能力帮助别人。[感悟1给予比索取重要得多。范文：Weweresoonreadyandsetout.Motherledtheway,carryingthebasketofbreadandbutter,whilewefollowedwithourbreakfast.Iwalkedbehind,feelingashamedformyselfishthoughtsearlier.Arrivingatthepoorwoman'shome,we'remetwithsixchildrenhuddledtogetherinonebed