2022年广东深圳二模英语读后续写试题解析及范文讲解课件（守护绿色公园）

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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。OnahotSeptemberafternoon,PeterandhisfriendIsabelwereontheirwaytothelibrary.WhentheypassedbyTubmanpark,Isabelsuggestedcuttingthroughittogettothelibrary.Astheyenteredthepark,thesightoftheswings(秋千)andthemerry-go-roundbroughtbackafloodofmemoriesoftheirchildhoodspentthere.Butnoweverythinglookedsoold,sad,anddirty.Litterlayonthegroundnexttoanoverflowingtrashbin.Therewerestillyoungschoolchildrenplayingtherebuttheyhadtoavoidthetrashthatlitteredtheplayground.Alittleboytoldthemthatthecitytooktheothertrashcansawayandtheremainingonenevergotemptiedoften.Astheyheadedtowardthelibrary,thetwohighschoolstudentswrinkledtheirforehead.Inthelibrary,theyencounteredMrs.Evans,theirkind-heartedfifth-gradeteacher,retiredyetstillpassionate.Mrs.EvanslistenedasIsabelandPetereagerlyexplainedwhatthey’dseen.Finally,sherecommendedthemtogototheCityHalltovoicetheirconcerns.Thenextday,IsabelandPeterwentintothebuildingoftheCityHallbutweremetwithanimpatientofficer.Theywereinformedthatthecitycouldn’thelpwiththeirproblemduetoatightbudget.Discouraged,theyleftandturnedtoMrs.Evansforhelp.Underherguidance,theydecidedtoaskGoGreen,anon-profitorganizationwhosegoalistoprotecttheenvironment,forhelp.“Thisgroupisgoodatraisingmoneyforprojectsjustlikeyours,”saidMrs.Evans.ShepromisedtoarrangethemtopresenttheirideastoGoGreen.Hearingthis,theirfacelitup.Twomaintasksremainedahead:researchingwaystocleanuptheparkandpreparingaconvincingpresentation.AsIsabelwasgoodatresearchingwhilePeteralwayshadatalentforspeaking,theycooperatedquitewell.Isabellearnedfromasciencemagazinethatanewtypeoftrashbincansqueezethetrashdownwithoutbeingemptiedoften,whichsavestime,money,andenergy.Basedonthis,Peterpracticedhispresentationoverandoveragain.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Aweeklater,PeterstoodnervouslyatthebackofthehallwhereGoGreenwasmeeting.______________________________________________________________________Afterthemeeting,IsabelexcitedlytoldPeterthegoodnews.____________________________________________题型分析：这篇文章是个记叙文。本题是续写部分围绕两名高中生为守护记忆中的绿色公园，尝试说服说服当地的非盈利组织GoGreen筹集资金保护他们儿时的公园环境而展开。这样的话题非常符合高考对于“人与社会——环境保护”主题语境的考查。但是，真正参加这样的非营利性组织的环保活动的同学还是有限的，因此本题难度较大，同学们既要关注续写故事的合理性又要关注自己的语言点。StorywhenwherewhowhathowwhyinhotSeptemberpark,library,atthebackofthehallPeter，IsabelandtheirretiredteacherMrs.EvansPeterandIsabelfoundtheparkwasnotcleananylongerandtriedtochangethesituationwithMrs.Evans’shelp.Thecitywouldnothelpwiththeirproblemduetoatightbudget.

1.浅层信息理解

首先要审题：⑴体裁：_______；⑵人称：_______________；⑶主体时态：____________；主题语境：__________________。记叙文第三人称一般过去时人与自然之环境保护一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件

2.深层信息理解①理清故事的发展线索（How）PARAGRAPH（段落）Behaviors（行为）Topic（段意）passedby，entered，broughtback，lookedsoold,sad,anddirty，lay，hadtoavoid，tookawayPeterandIsabelpassedbyTubmanparkandfoundthatlitterlayaround.Para.12.深层信息理解①理清故事的发展线索（How）PARAGRAPH（段落）Behaviors（行为）Topic（段意）wrinkled，encountered，recommended，wentinto，couldn’thelp，turnedto，presenttheirideastoGoGreen，litupTheirretiredteacherMrs.EvansofferedthemcertaintipstoraisemoneyfortheTubmanpark.Para.2—42.深层信息理解①理清故事的发展线索（How）PARAGRAPH（段落）Behaviors（行为）Topic（段意）wasgoodatresearching，hadatalentforspeaking，cooperated，cansqueezedown，savesPeterandIsabelmadegoodpreparationsforcleaningupthepark.Para.6…WhentheypassedbyTubmanpark,Isabelsuggestedcuttingthroughittogettothelibrary.Astheyenteredthepark,thesightoftheswings(秋千)andthemerry-go-roundbroughtbackafloodofmemoriesoftheirchildhoodspentthere.Butnoweverythinglookedsoold,sad,anddirty.Litterlayonthegroundnexttoanoverflowingtrashbin.…Alittleboytoldthemthatthecitytooktheothertrashcansawayandtheremainingonenevergotemptiedoften.②挖掘故事情节和情感续写伏笔，后续故事一定会发生某不喜悦之事ShowingthatbothPeterandIsabelhadagoodmemoryhere,whichhintsthedevelopmentofthestoryThecontrastbetweentheirmemoryandthefactmakesthemdecidetodosth.Themainproblemoccurs冲突1，暗指后续故事一定会出现一系列解决举措…thetwohighschoolstudentswrinkledtheirforehead.Inthelibrary,theyencounteredMrs.Evans,theirkind-heartedfifth-gradeteacher,retiredyetstillpassionate.Mrs.EvanslistenedasIsabelandPetereagerlyexplainedwhatthey’dseen.Finally,...…Theywereinformedthatthecitycouldn’thelpwiththeirproblemduetoatightbudget.Discouraged,theyleftandturnedtoMrs.Evansforhelp.②挖掘故事情节和情感indicatingtheirdownspiritsindicatingthattheywillgethelpfromtheirteacherindicatingthey’reenthusiasticindicatingtheirdownspirits冲突2，暗指后续故事一定会出现其他解决举措Underherguidance,theydecidedtoaskGoGreen,anon-profitorganizationwhosegoalistoprotecttheenvironment,forhelp.“Thisgroupisgoodatraisingmoneyforprojectsjustlikeyours,”saidMrs.Evans.ShepromisedtoarrangethemtopresenttheirideastoGoGreen.Hearingthis,theirfacelitup.…AsIsabelwasgoodatresearchingwhilePeteralwayshadatalentforspeaking,….Peterpracticedhispresentationoverandoveragain.②挖掘故事情节和情感Thesolutiontothesecondconflictwasfoundindicatingshe’senthusiasticandhelpfulindicatingthey’reenthusiasticandhelpful为故事续写最终冲突最终成功解决做好了铺垫3.整合本篇的故事情节和情感线索：

九月份的一个下午，比特和伊莎贝尔一起去图书馆，途径他们儿时的公园，发现曾经干净的地方变得非常糟糕，垃圾到处都是，在退休老师伊万建议下，他们去政府部门寻求帮助，但是被告知因为财政紧张不能解决公园的问题。老师又给他们介绍了非盈利组织GoGreen。为了说服该组织筹集资金，他们做了充分的准备……二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向

由第一段首句内容“Aweeklater,PeterstoodnervouslyatthebackofthehallwhereGoGreenwasmeeting.”（一周之后，彼特紧张地站在了GoGreen即将集会的大厅的后面。）可知，彼特要开始他的游说了。设问如下：①Whichwordsorphrasesshouldbefocusedon?(stoodnervously)②WhatdidPeterdotoavoidhisnervousness?③WhatdidPeterpresentatthemeeting？④Howdidheperformonthestage?二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向

由第二段首句Afterthemeeting,IsabelexcitedlytoldPeterthegoodnews.(会议之后，伊莎贝尔兴奋地告诉了彼特这个好消息。)可知，这一段将主要描述会议之后的情节。设问如下：⑤Whichwordsorphrasesshouldbefocusedon?(excitedlytold，goodnews)⑥Whatwasthegoodnews?⑦HowwouldtheirteacherandPeterreacttotheirbehavour?⑧Whatwastheresult？

根据六要素和自己的想象，借助文本资源，创设续写两段故事的情节。[开端]彼特紧张地站在集会大厅。[故事发展]试着缓解紧张神经→伊莎贝尔鼓励彼特→谈论了公园的糟糕状况→评委们似乎对彼得项目很感兴趣。[结局]GoGreen已经同意捐款，伊莎贝尔把好消息告诉了彼得→老师代表GoGreen询问彼特和伊莎贝尔是否愿意做志愿者。三、运用和原文相一致的语言风格组织续写情节四、高分范文Aweeklater,PeterstoodnervouslyatthebackofthehallwhereGoGreenwasmeeting.①Closinghiseyesandtakingadeepbreath,Petertriedtorelaxhistension.②“Takeiteasy,Peter!Ibelieveyoucanmakeit.”Isabelwinkedathimandencouragedhim.ItwasjustthenthatPeterheardhisnamecalledtomakeapresentation.③Hestrodeontothehallstageandstartedhisdetaileddescriptionofthedilemma,expressinghisworriesabouttheTubmanParkandofferingtheirresearchabouttheadvancedtrashcans.④SeeminglyquiteinterestedinPeter’spassionateproject,thejudgessmiledandnoddedfromtimetotime.四、高分范文Afterthemeeting,IsabelexcitedlytoldPeterthegoodnews.GoGreenhadagreedtodonatemoneytobuytheadvancedtrashcansforthepark!Hearingtheinspiringnews,theybothleapedintotheairwithjoy.⑤Whatwasmoreexcitingwasthattheywouldgofurthertofindwhatelsetheycoulddotomaketheparkmorepicturesqueforthelocals.⑥BeforetheycouldsharethethrillingnewswithMrs.Evans,Peter’sphonerang.⑦ItwasfromMrs.Evans,whowascallingtoaskPeterandIsabeliftheywerewillingtoworkasvolunteersforGoGreenonbehalfoftheorganization.五、高分范文英译中

一周之后，彼特紧张地站在了GoGreen即将集会的大厅的后面。闭上眼睛，深呼吸，彼特试着缓解他紧张的神经。“放轻松，彼特。我相信你可以做到的。”伊莎贝尔朝彼特眨了眨眼睛