写作1：高分作文写作技巧

1、书面表达高分技巧 考场作文展示佳作欣赏28分 28 分20 分较差作文18+23+22仲裁作文 答卷中出现的问题一：卷面不整，字迹潦草。不少考生书写潦草， 有涂改、增补现象，书写不规范。二：要点不全，内容混乱。有些作文内容空洞， 表达单一，结构散乱，字数不达标，甚至偏离主 题。照搬二卷的阅读理解，或者写关于华西村的 变化和小狗阿福的故事。三：小错不断，大错不绝 作文中常见错误小错：1.latter(letter) relize (realize)/ pullution (pollution) 单词拼写错误2.be grateful for you 介词使用错误 大错1. Smog had be

2、en happened in my hometown last winter. (时态语态错误)2. Suffered the danger, people began to know smog。 (非谓语使用错误)3. Im pleasure to receive your letter . (pleased) / to our happy (happiness) (词性混淆)4. I think cycling do good to our health and the environment. (主谓不一致)5. My hometown happened several smogs.(汉

3、语化表达) 备考建议1、加强书写。在阅卷时间紧、任务重的情况下，书写是我们必须要考虑的一个因素。要让学生在平时养成书写 认真、规范、尽量避免过多的涂改的好习惯。2、合理利用作文模板。一般说来，只有议论文可以做出比较通用的作文模板，书信的开头和结尾可以做出模板。要合理得体地使用各种模板和句式，避免生搬硬套。3、加强写作在英语备考中的比重。阅卷中我们发现很多同学想表达的意思很好，但不会用英语表达，有些同学甚至用汉语拼音标注。紧张的备考过程中要避免学生写老师改然后学生再犯错的怪圈。要学生学会和日常生活息息相关的常用英语表达方式。词汇,句型 （高级）和语法多样化（较复杂） 1.覆盖了所有的要点 2.

4、应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 3. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 4. 语言得体要点全连接词如何算是一篇好文章？语言地道，规范a compositiontopic sentence （主题句）supporting sentences （扩展句）ending （结尾句 ）过渡词：first, second, finally , and, besides, also, but, however, whats more Writing a composition is just like making a sandwich.一 改变句子的开头方式，不要一味地都是主语开头，接着是谓语、宾

5、语，最后再加一个状语。可以把状语置于句首.The boy is very hungry and he hurried home.Hungry, the boy hurried home.The boy, hungry, hurried home.二. Transformation of sentences in writing(写作中的句型转换)A.合并为简单句。简单句的四种基本句型1. 主语 + 系动词+表语2. 主语 + 谓语 + 宾语3. 主语 + 谓语 + 间接宾语 + 直接宾语4. 主语 + 谓语 + 宾语 + 宾语补足语任务 开始积累词条：分别找例句，记录在笔记本上。把其中一句改为

6、分词短语He had finished supper.He went out to have a walk then.Having finished supper, he went out to have a walk.2. 把其中一句改为介词短语He was brought in. His hands were tied behind his back.He was brought in with his hands tied behind his back. B. 合并为复合句复合句的分类:名词性从句定语从句状语从句主语从句宾语从句表语从句同位语从句时间状语从句地点状语从句条件状语从句原因

7、状语从句让步状语从句方式状语从句目的状语从句 The Chinese artists were to perform here that night. The news cheered everyone of us.把这两句句合并为定语从句The news _ the Chinese artists were to perform here that night cheered everyone of us.C. 把复合句改为简单句1. 把从句改为分词短语 She was anxious to find a job after she finished her studies. Having

8、finished her studies, she was anxious to find a job.2.把从句改为介词短语I insisted that he should go.I insisted on him going.三. 在整篇文章中，避免只使用一两个句式，要灵活运用以下结构：倒装句强调句主从复合句分词状语With 复合结构Though he is wealthy, he works hard.Wealthy as he is, he works hard.In spite of /Despite his wealth,he works hard.He didnt get up

9、 until 7 oclock.It was not until 7 oclock that he got up.Not until 7 oclock did he get up.I had a good idea.A good idea occurred to / struck / came to me.I came up with a good idea.注意使用词组、习语谚语、表强调的词来代替一些单词，以增加文采。 四.use “ complicated / advanced words” Lets have a competition把下面的句子按照顺序排列使之成为一篇完整的作文。A.

10、 Second, twenty years ago, teenagers listened to music with tape recorders. Differently, today we use mp3, mp4 and even mp5 which are easy to take.B. Another change is in communication. Instead of writing letters, teenagers nowadays prefer writing e-mails or calling to keep in touch with friends.C.

11、First, teenagers of twenty years ago learn from Lei Feng and Zhang Haidi, while now we consider Bill Gates and as our role models. D. What great changes they are!E. Great changes have taken place in teenagers life during the past twenty years. Correct Order : _E-C-A-B-Dsummary同学们，如何写好一篇作文呢？一，改变句子的开头

12、方式二，句型转换A.合并为简单句把其中一句改为分词短语把其中一句改为介词短语B.合并为复合句C.把复合句改为简单句把从句改为分词短语把从句改为介词短语三，避免只使用一两个句式，要灵活运用诸如倒装句、强调句、主从复合句、分词状语、with 复合结构等. 四，注意使用高级词汇代替一些单词，以增加文采。五.有效使用连接词，过渡自然，连贯通顺，使文章结构紧凑。 1 汉式英语 2 句式单一 平铺直叙 3 基础词汇掌握不牢 4 书写不规范Common mistakes9分6分24分make sentences 3 determine what to write1copy6check 5Writing st

13、eps:4 edit2 think out the key wordsAttention1. 格式 2. 人称3.时态 4. 要点5.语法 6. 字数 7. 书写书面表达（满分30分） 你校学生会准备办一期英语墙报， 主题为： 保护环境从我做起。 请你根据下图所示写一篇英语短文。注意：1. 词数100左右，开头语已为你写好；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。What can I do for our environment? Everyone can do something for our environment.save electricityturn off the lightspro

14、tect our forestsuse paper wiselynot use things like paper cups or disposable chopsticks（一次性筷子）use both sides of paperour show timeWhat can I do for our environment? Everyone can do something for our environment. To love the environment is to love ourselves. As to me, I will try to save electricity i

15、n my daily life by remembering to turn off the lights when I am the last person to leave the classroom in the evening. In order to protect our forests, I will use paper wisely. It is both sides of paper that should be used whenever it is possible. Whats more, never will I use things like paper cups or disposable chopsticks bec