虚拟语气在写作中的提分技巧作文练习评讲课件

1、欣赏下列两个语段，并指出它们的技巧1. Brief as the passage is, it still arouses my endless imagination to the past time. Were I in the past, I would like that I stayed in Britain in the 19th century, where and when the Revolution of Industry was flourishing. With the inspiring atmosphere of the creative times, I woul

2、d try my utmost to do my favorite scientific experiment, since I have great interest in science. Whats more, the scientific lovers would be invited to join my little club to invent some brand-new inventions and create new designs of our daily lifes products, cooperating to put the theory we learned

3、from books to our practical life. In this way I could get inspiration of wisdom and resourcefulness to bring convenience and improvements to our life. 第1页，共28页。2. Should I be given the opportunities to travel to the past, I would like to go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century when China was i

4、n a disaster. Were I back in the late Qing Dynasty, I would make every endeavor to rescue China from the foreign invaders and prevent it from being bullied without resistance. Firstly, I would teach my modern theory and knowledge to the governors, instructing them to fight against the enemies and co

5、nstruct powerful armies. Secondly, all the citizens would be called on to unite together and resist other countries invasion bravely. Whats more, joining some anti-invaders parties would also be my choice. 第2页，共28页。亮点句型写作指导除了虚拟语气外，有许多亮点句型可以应用到写作中，增分添彩。第3页，共28页。比喻A is to B what C is to D. Like the su

6、nshine , kindness can help those in trouble.Kindness is like the lighthouse, which can direct the way for those who are in dim situation.第4页，共28页。排比If I could go back to the past and do the above mentioned things, the last thing my grandpa remembered would not be the indifference and the back of his

7、 beloved grandson. If I could travel back through time, the last memory between him and me would not be his closed eyes and the dead look of half-unconscious suffering. Then now, I would not have to live with this unbearable regret and pain for the rest of my life. If only I could! 第5页，共28页。倒装（赢在写作

8、P37-38）Simple as the story is , Here goes the saying that _.Only when _ can we _.Only in this way, can weOnly by doing -, can we_.Only after doing sth, can we On the west of the school lies a pond, where many fish are swimming.Under no circumstance should we -类似的用法：Never/ By no means / on no account

9、 / in no way / at no time should I . Hardly/scarcely had I got into the room when it began to rain.( no sooner， than)第6页，共28页。 Had it not been for her sticking to being on time, she wouldnt have earned herself a well-paid job and more importantly built up an image of reliability and integrity. 倒装 Sh

10、ould I be given the opportunities to travel to the past, I would like to go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century when China was in a disaster. Were I back in the late Qing Dynasty, I would make every endeavor to rescue China from the foreign invaders and prevent it from being bullied without r

11、esistance. 第7页，共28页。亮点写作的注意事项1. 过多的亮点，显得堆砌对策：亮点分布，尽量首句2.亮点单一，例如全段排比或比喻对策：最好总排比-总的结构。照顾段落的完整性。3.华而不实，不重视内容，徒有框架没有内容对策：先想内容，再想修辞手法4. 过多注重运用亮点，没有注意谋篇，顾此失彼对策：谋好篇，定好每点行数，才能下笔第8页，共28页。亮点句型写作训练练习：1.说明挫折的意义2.你怎样看待老师对学生的影响。3.说说你对母爱的理解4.谈谈决心对人的影响第9页，共28页。使用虚拟语气写作的注意事项：1.确定到底要不要“虚”？2.确定到底使用哪个时态的“虚”？3.所谓“一虚到底”，

12、其实是指在该假设情境中的虚拟的时态的一致性。而非一定是通段都使用虚拟！一切要看情况进行选用。第10页，共28页。说说挫折的意义1. Hard and painful as frustration is, it is of significance in our life. As the old saying goes, “storm makes trees take deeper roots”, without frustration, never could we grow up as a strong-willed person. Were we surrounded by over-pr

13、aise and immersed in the pride and happiness, frustration would be a timely alarm, urging us not to stop at the so-called peak and continue your pace of pursuit. Were we confronted with obstacles, frustration could be a philosophers stone（魔法石）, with which we could transform the temporary setbacks to

14、 great opportunities to become strongerIn a word, life is not only about how to live through the storm but also how to dance in the rain.第11页，共28页。说说挫折的意义2. Never can we emphasize the significance of setback too much. Without setback, our life would be a rose lacking fragrance. Without setback, our

15、life would be a voyage lacking direction. It is no exaggeration to say that frustration has sown the seed of maturity and self-development in my inner heart and has made it possible for me to achieve great success.第12页，共28页。老师对学生的影响 1. Suppose that teachers were absent in our life, students life wou

16、ld be a picture with intense darkness. Without teachers, the laborious engineers of our soul, students personalities and characters would not be shaped. Without teachers, the ladder with selfless devotion, our heart would not be lifted up by encouragement and grow mature. Without teachers, the spark

17、ling lighthouse in the ocean of knowledge, never could teenagers find access to the successful life in the future. 第13页，共28页。老师对学生的影响2. Without the patient and careful teachers, never could students grow from a childish and dependent child into a mature and independent adult. Without the selfless an

18、d affectionate preaching of teachers, never could students step onto a path with a bright and promising future. Without the knowledgeable teachers, never would students master the necessary knowledge and devote them to the construction of a more harmonious society and country.第14页，共28页。母爱的理解1. Witho

19、ut maternal affection, we would change from fragrant flowers into weeds abandoned by others without a shelter and care. Without this ever-lasting emotion, never would we live as full and rich a life as other children surrounded by merriment and happiness. 第15页，共28页。母爱的理解2. Maternal love is like a ci

20、rcle. It has no beginning and no ending. But for motherhood, we would be the little strayed lambs who step on the mistaken track. But for motherhood, never can we be enveloped in warmth and merriment by a patch of sunlight. But for motherhood, we could be overwhelmed by endless darkness and the worl

21、d would fade from colorful and wonderful to dim and cold.第16页，共28页。决心的影响1. Determination is the fuel of ships, without which, never could we arrive at the shore of success. Determination is the walking stick of the climbers, without which, never could we reach the peak of life. Determination is the

22、very condition, without which, never could we get rid of the dark depth of depression. 第17页，共28页。决心的影响2. Without the firm determination, never could individuals grow into strong trees struggling in the wind and rain. Without the steadfast mind, never could teams unite together to create miracle. Wit

23、hout the unswerving resolution, never could countries unite and fight for the flourishing and bright future as well as a harmonious world. 第18页，共28页。第19页，共28页。说说挫折的意义1. Hard and painful as frustration is,（倒装） it is of significance in our life. As the old saying goes, “storm makes trees take deeper r

24、oots”,（名言） without frustration, never could we grow up as a strong-willed person. （虚拟）Were we surrounded by over-praise and immersed in the pride and happiness, frustration would be a timely alarm, urging us not to stop at the so-called peak and continue your pace of pursuit. Were we confronted with

25、 obstacles, frustration could be a philosophers stone（魔法石）, with which we could transform the temporary setbacks to great opportunities to become stronger.(虚拟+排比+非限制性定从) In a word, life is not only about how to live through the storm but also how to dance in the rain.(总结部分可以用现在时)第20页，共28页。说说挫折的意义2.

26、Never can we emphasize the significance of setback too much. (倒装) Without setback, our life would be a rose lacking fragrance. Without setback, our life would be a voyage lacking direction. It is no exaggeration to say that frustration has sown the seed of maturity and self-development in my inner h

27、eart and has made it possible for me to achieve great success.（虚拟反说+比喻+排比）第21页，共28页。老师对学生的影响 1. Suppose that teachers were absent in our life, students life would be a picture with intense darkness. Without teachers, the laborious engineers of our soul, students personalities and characters would no

28、t be shaped. Without teachers, the ladder with selfless devotion, our heart would not be lifted up by encouragement and grow mature. Without teachers, the sparkling lighthouse in the ocean of knowledge, never could teenagers find access to the successful life in the future.（虚拟反说+排比） 第22页，共28页。老师对学生的

29、影响2. Without the patient and careful teachers, never could students grow from a childish and dependent child into a mature and independent adult. Without the selfless and affectionate preaching of teachers, never could students step onto a path with a bright and promising future. Without the knowled

30、geable teachers, never would students master the necessary knowledge and devote them to the construction of a more harmonious society and country.（虚拟反说+排比）第23页，共28页。母爱的理解1. Without maternal affection, we would change from fragrant flowers into weeds abandoned by others without a shelter and care. Wi

31、thout this ever-lasting emotion, never would we live as full and rich a life as other children surrounded by merriment and happiness. （虚拟反说+排比）第24页，共28页。母爱的理解2. Maternal love is like a circle. It has no beginning and no ending. （比喻，多一句进行补充说明，使得比喻更具体形象）But for motherhood, we would be the little strayed lambs who step on the