2021届高考英语浙江十校联考读后续写写作指导

1、2020高考英语浙江十校联考读后续写写作指导阅读下短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。About a half-mile behind our Minnesota farm lay a pond. In summer, my brother Hany and I would run through a stand of oak trees to skip stones there. The pond wore a collar of black mud. It was not a place for swimming.In late summer, the pond would

2、 be covered by a green and bubbly scum （起泡的浮渣）.Sometimes a strong, unpleasant smell rose from it. We stayed away.When winter came, the pond was once again an inviting place. One day when ice covered it, Hany said to me: "Try walking across/"The ice looked solid. No water showed through it,

3、 but I hesitated. "Go ahead.” Hany urged. "Tiy it. You're lighter than I am. If the ice holds, we can run and slide carefully on it. It'll be firn." I wanted to please Harry, and I thought about the fun of a long slide on the ice. I began to slide across the pond.In the middle

4、 of the pond, the ice gave way with a sudden crack （裂 缝）！ I stretched out （彳申展）my arms. The next thing I knew I was hanging on to the edge of a hole in the ice by arms outstretched on the ice. From my shoulders down I hung in icy water. I thought of the bottom of the pond. I knew it would be black a

5、nd awful down there, full of mud and maybe rotting creatures.I tried to climb out of the hole, but when I got a knee on the ice, it broke like window glass. Again and again I tried to get out. Again and again the ice broke into pieces. The hole widened. I was wearing a coat of heavy material. As it

6、became completely wet, it dragged me down. I was tired of the struggle and rested with my arms stretched out on the ice.I looked at Hany on shore. He seemed rooted to the spot. "I can't get out!” I screamed when I caught some breath.注意：1 .所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2 .至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3 .续写部分分为两段，每

7、段的开头语已为你写好；4 .续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraphl:Harry turned and ran from the pond.Paragraph!:The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over.二,写作构思1 .确定文章主题：原文摘自英语沙龙这本杂志，本文以第一人 称进行续写，主要讲述了姐弟两个人在冬天去池塘玩耍，在弟弟怂 恿下，主人公走到结了冰的河水上却掉入水中的故事。所以主题为 主人公“我”吸取经验，不再鲁莽行事。很多学生会把主题误定位 “亲青或者&qu

8、ot;谅解''等,容易写偏题。2 .写作难点：对于提示句的理解和衔接；第二段如何进行结尾Paragraphl: Harry turned and ran from the pond.1. Seeing my brother running away, so surprised was I that I couldn 7 stop wondering, “ is he seeking help or is he lea ving me in the lurch?” （动作+情感+语言的描写三连击，采用.谓语位于 句首做状语，情感部分运用部分倒装）2. However , Harr

9、y came back with an oak limb, slowly and cautiously approaching the pond, and yelling, “please, hold on 力e/”（3个串联动作，谓语，非谓语运用自如，再结合进语言 描写）3. Scarcely had he ar ri ved at the edge of the icy hole when he bent over .pushing the limb toward me. （动作描写， 力口入 scarcelywhen部分倒装句型）4. When a slender top branch

10、was within reach , I immediately grabbed it tightly.5. Hand over hand, I climbed out of the hole , wet and cold from head to toe.6. Harry took off his own coat and gave it tome, murmuring with his headlowered, “lam so sorry 一” （与句2相似，3个串联动作结合进语言描写）7. Unable to utter a single word, I just wanted to g

11、o back home to have something warm.Paragraph2:The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over.1. Worried to know what happened to me , mum raised her voice and asked, " honey, what happened ?f,（情感+动作+语言描写三连 击）2. “I went to the pond with Harry, and "/ explained the w

12、hole thing to mum , and hardly could I contain my tears .（语 言+动 词， 结尾运用部分倒装）3. After knowing that how terrible thing I had met, she was overwhelmed with sadness.4. At the same time, she went to the bathroom, filled the tub with hot water and helped me to have a recovering shower. （ 3 个 串 联 动作）5. Onl

13、y after I finished shower did I feel that I came alive agas.（再次运用部分倒装，整篇文章共运用4种不同类型的倒 装句）6. Of course , mum also didn't forget to give my brother a good lecture and punishment as well it was time for him to get into trouble!7. Since then / / changed . I learned to say no if I didn/t truly want t

14、o do something.（点题）.成品赏析Paragraphl: Harry turned and ran from the pond. Seeing my brotherrunning a way, so surprisedis he seeking helpwas I that I couldn't stop wondering, or is he lea ving me in thelurch?” However, Harry came back with an oak limb, slowly and cautiously approaching the pond, an

15、d yelling , “please, hold on there Scarcely had he ar ri ved at the edge of the icy hole when he bent over .pushing the limb toward me. When a slender top branch was within reach , I immediately grabbed it tightly. Hand over hand , I climbed out of the hole ,wet and cold from head to toe. Harry took

16、 off his own coat and gave it to me , murmuring with his headlowered, “lam so sorry "Unable to utter a single word, I just wanted to go back home to have something warm.Paragraph2:T/?e moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over. Worried to know what happened to me , mum

17、 raised her voice and asked, “honey, what happened“I went to the pond with Harry, and " I explained the whole thing to mum, and hardly could I contain my tears. After knowing that how terrible thing i had met, she was overwhelmed with sadness . At the same time, she went: to the bathroom , filled the tub with hot water and helped me to have a recovering shower . Only after I