专练二十八短文写作(2)

1、专练二十八短文写作(2)【训练题一】请结合所给图片呈现的现象进行分析并提出合理建议， 以 uclean the river and the o让”为题，写一篇 120 词 左右的英语作文。it is well known that the world we live in is getting worse because of the increasing environmental destruction.【参考范文】it is well known that the world we live in is getting worse because of the increasing en

2、vironmental destruction.as we can see, rivers are polluted by waste dump ted in them from factories and cities it，s wrong to develop economy at the price of environmental damage in stead, people should first realize the importance of environmental protection. besides, factories should be banned from

3、 discharging enormous harmful chemicals into rivers without doing onything.as with water pollution, air pollution is also a problem threatening the existence of mankind with morecarbon dioxide added into the atmosphere it would bebetter if people drive less and encourage others to do so.with the env

4、ironmentai awareness strengthened and effective measures taken , we will surely achieve sustainable development.【点评】这是一篇半开放式的习作。从审题的角度看，要结合图 片呈现的现象进行分析并提出合理建议。因此，图片的信息 呈现非常重要，这是审题的关键。这篇习作很好地把握了这 一点，开篇就点出了第一幅图片所呈现的"water pollution"这一问题，就此问题做了合理分析，并提出了 合理建议。接下来，习作第三段呈现了第二幅图片所呈现的 "air po

5、llution"这一问题，就此问题做了合理分析，并 提出了合理建议。最后，习作做了总结，提出了 “achieve sustainable development的想法，起到了深化主题的作 用。在语言上，这篇习作亦可圈可点。过度用语的使用，如 “as we can see" "as with ." "firs t" “besides", 让文章整体连贯，通顺流畅。高级句型和结构的使用，如"it wou 1 d be better if people ." “with the environmentai aw

6、areness strengthened",让文章增色不少。因此，这是 一篇优秀的习作。【训练题二】请你根据以下提示，结合生活中的一个事例，用英语写 一篇短文，谈谈读书学习的作用。reading can help us get a lot of knowledge to make us smarter and more intelligent. reading can not only in crease our knowledge but also open our minds reading can teach us the truth in life. knowledge is

7、 the power for us to meet the challenge in our life注意：1.无须写标题；2. 内容只需涉及一个方面；3. 词数为100左右。【参考范文】i still remember how depressed i was during the first days in the new school two years ago, when i found it difficuit to follow my teacher in the first physics classes what he taught was too much for me, wh

8、ich discouraged me a lot.one afternoon, the physics teacher came to me while i was trying to work out the exercises. after talking with me for a while, he gave a book under the teacher? s instruetions , i read madame curie ， s autobiographyv , whose stories and perseverance inspired me very much. i

9、felt confident and caught up with other classma.tes. a. week later, i volunteered to take charge of physics study in my classthanks to the inspiring book, i gained the power to face the challenges in my study and life as young people, we should try our best to read as more as possible.【点评】这是一篇半开放式的习作。从审题的角度来说，这篇习 作充分考虑了题目的要求。题目要求是结合生活中的一个事 例谈谈读书学习的作用。因此，“结合” “事例”就非常重 要。也就是说，题目要求叙述与议论相结合。倘若泛泛议论 读书的作用，则只是重复题目中的相关提示，偏离了题目的 要求。结构上，这篇习作采用先叙述，后议论的方法，思路 清楚，结构紧凑。内容上，文章一开始概述了 “我”在学习 上的困难，然后展开叙述“我”的老师如何指导“我”阅读 相关励志书籍，帮"我”走出困境。最后，通过这件事情总 结出读书的作用，并且要多多读书