南京市第二次模拟考试英语书面表达讲评ppt课件

1、南京市第二次模拟考试英语书面表达讲评江苏省石庄高级中学 秦建华 请仔细察看以下六幅图,用英语描画其内容,并就图中教师的做法提出他的看法 留意:1.第一幅图的内容已给出. 2.字数120左右 3.签名signature Ma Xiaohu was very careless and often made mistakes in his homework, which made his teacher very angry. One day his teacher had Xiaohu ask his father, Ma Dahua, to sign his name in his exerci

2、se book. 第一步：看图提炼要点第二幅图：儿子在回家路上的想法：怕被父亲惩罚/打第三幅图：儿子蒙上眼睛写字第四幅图：父亲也蒙上眼睛写字第五幅图：儿子乘机让父亲签名第六幅图：在父亲取下蒙眼布前，儿子将本子放进书包第二步：简单翻译要点 第二幅图：儿子在回家路上的想法：怕被父亲惩罚/打 On his way home, Xiaohu thought he would be beaten/punished again by his father. 第三幅图：儿子蒙上眼睛写字 Xiaohu covered his eyes with a piece of cloth and kept writin

3、g something. 第四幅图：父亲也蒙上眼睛写字 His father also covered his eyes with a piece of cloth and wrote something. 第五幅图：儿子乘机让父亲签名 Xiaohu seized the opportunity to put his exercise book under his fathers pen and got his fathers signature. 第六幅图：在父亲取下蒙眼布前，儿子将本子放进书包 Before his father took off the cloth,Xiaohu had

4、already put the exercise book back into his schoolbag.第三步：添加要点，使文章逻辑上衔接 要多问几个什么、为什么、怎样样或怎样办 怕被父亲惩罚/打，心境怎样样： 比如焦虑、担忧、紧张等 怎样办： 想出好主意 儿子蒙上眼睛不停地写什么字： 结合图画内容可以推断是在写本人的名字为下文得到父亲的签名做铺垫 父亲为什么也蒙上眼睛写他的名字： 按常理应该是儿子请他这样做的 第四步：柔进这些要点，并留意合并要点 On his way home, thinking he would be beaten again by his father,Xiaohu

5、 felt worried.Suddenly a good idea occurred to him. As soon as he got home,he covered his eyes with a piece of cloth and kept writing the wordMa Xiaohu on a piece of paper. He asked his father whether he could do it as he was doing.His father did so.Seeing this,Xiaohu seized the opportunity to put h

6、is exercise book under his fathers pen and got his fathers signature.Before his father took off the cloth,Xiaohu had already put the exercise book back into his schoolbag. 第五步：简单论述本人的看法 经过正反分析、因果分析、一分为二地分析并提出建议等方式来陈诉本人的观念或看法。 正面分析：Personally I firmly believe/insist that the teachers method is after

7、all for Xiaohus own sake. 反面分析： It appears to me/occurs to me that/There is no denying that the teachers method is entirely wrong/the teacher is to blame for it/the teacher should improve his teaching method. It is /unnecessary for/not unwise/ advisable of the teacher to take this measure/follow thi

8、s way.因果分析： For one thing,it is of no use to force students to study;for another,some students in this case will tell lies to/take in parents,which has a bad influence on childrens development/would lead to bad results.一分为二分析并提出建议 I dont think the teacher is to blame because he had wanted to let Xia

9、ohus father know something about his sons study at school in order to get Xiaohus parents support in educating their child,but Xiaohus playing the trick was not what the teacher had expected.So I suggest that the teacher go home together with Xiaohu next time to communicate face-to-face with his par

10、ents.构成以下书面表达Ma Xiaohu was very careless and often made mistakes in his homework, which made his teacher very angry. One day his teacher had Xiaohu ask his father, Ma Dahua, to sign his name in his exercise book.On his way home, thinking he would be beaten again by his father,Xiaohu felt worried.Sud

11、denly a good idea occurred to him. As soon as he got home,he covered his eyes with a piece of cloth and kept writing the wordMa Xiaohu on a piece of paper. He asked his father whether he could do it as he was doing.His father did so.Seeing this, Xiaohu seized the opportunity to put his exercise book

12、 under his fathers pen and got his fathers signature.Before his father took off the cloth,Xiaohu had already put the exercise book back into his schoolbag.I dont think the teacher is to blame because he had wanted to let Xiaohus father know something about his sons study at school in order to get Xi

13、aohus parents support in educating their child,but Xiaohus playing the trick was not what the teacher had expected.So I suggest that the teacher go home together with Xiaohu next time to communicate face-to-face with his parents.参考答案 Ma Xiaohu was very careless and often made mistakes in his homewor

14、k, which made his teacher very angry. One day his teacher had Xiaohu ask his father, Ma Dahua, to sign his name in his exercise book. On his way home,thinking he would be beaten/punished again by his father,Xiaohu felt very worried.Suddenly a good idea occurred to him.As soon as he got home,he cover

15、ed his eyes with a piece of cloth and kept writing the wordMa Xiaohu on a piece of paper.He asked his father whether he could do it as he was doing.His father did so.seeing this,Xiaohu hurriedly put his exercise book under his fathers pen and got his signature.When his father took off the cloth,Xiao

16、hu had already put the exercise book back into his schoolbag. I think附学生考场习作一篇原文Ma Xiaohu was very careless and often made mistakes in his homework, which made his teacher very angry. One day his teacher had Xiaohu ask his father, Ma Dahua, to sign his name in his exercise book. Xiaohu was afraid th

17、at his father would punish him.Suddenly,an idea occurred to him.When he went home,he pretended to practice writing his name with his eyes covered by a piece of cloth.Then,he asked his father to do so.When his father had his eyes covered, Xiaohu took his exercise book out quickly and put it in front

18、of his father.By doing so,he got his fathers signature easily without telling his father what had happened.Before his father could see again, he had already put his exercise book back in his schoolbag. As far as I am concerned, the teachers behaviour didnt work at all.He should have educated Ma Xiao

19、hu in another way which helps Xiaohu to overcome his shortcomings.修正后 Ma Xiaohu was very careless and often made mistakes in his homework, which made his teacher very angry. One day his teacher had Xiaohu ask his father, Ma Dahua, to sign his name in his exercise book. On his way home ,thinking that his father would punish him again,Xiaohu felt nervous