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智 课 网 雅 思 备 考 资 料 一起探讨雅思科技类作文之科技改变人类交流的方式 智课教育出国考试 科技类雅思大作文在雅思写作考试中常常出现 考生要多多积累此 类素材并加以练习 今天 考生们就和智课教育小编一起探讨雅思科技 类作文之科技改变人类 交流 的方式吧 说说你的看法 共同进步 雅思作文题目 Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make Has this become a positive or negative development Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience 剑8 test2 task2 范文 1 Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology 2 Yes the technology has changed the people s interaction in very enhanced manner 3 Earlier people use to wait and try to find easy way to contact their friends or relatives leaving far In past there was no quick technology to contact or to establish any communication between one person to another person The Drawback with past communication systems was that it were very slow and were time taking process such as telegrams letter etc People used to afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their love ones due to insecure medium of communication When it comes to professional level the privacy and accuracy should be maintain but to that time there were no secure communications 4 Now the things have changed around people from far distance contact their loves one in an easy and quick ways which improves the Interaction level between two person Quality the level of the Interaction people to people has improved because the people are equipped with high tec technology which enhances the communication There are many many medium which are available now such as Internet Calling Cards etc 5 The technology has provided the mobility faster which help people to talk or to interact at any time anywhere in the world 6 People can contact their friend or relatives any time they want It has become so easier and friendly to be in touch with your friends relatives even with the unknown people 一 话题类型 科技类 二 题目类型 观点类 三 题目简要内容 科技改变人们交流方式 how 积极还是消极的发展趋势 四 素材积累 时代在发展 科技的进步无疑给人们的生活带来了很大的影响 考 生在论述此题时要做具体说明 科技会给人际交往带来影响 但要指出 什么样的科技会带来什么样的影响 以及影响是利大于弊还是弊大于利 要有一个明确的观点 文中的词汇或是句式存在一些错误 考生在备考时要多注意 enhanced 加强的 增大的 use to do sth 过去常常做某事 medium of communication 交流媒介 通讯手段 When it comes to sth 当提到 就 而论 be equipped with 配备有 装有 be in touch with 接触 联系 五 论据积累 文章对题中两个问题虽然都进行了陈述 但第一个问题在人们之间 真正的关系如何发生了改变方面没有进行充分论述展 不过文章观点较 明确 即影响是正面的 并且有一些相关的观点加以支持 总体上有连 续性 有效运用一些时间标志词等 比如 in the past now等等 六 结构分析 写作思路 此题有两个问题 论证时要对两个问题都进行充分拓展 不能忽略 任何一个 段落结构上 可以分为四段 第一段交代背景 引入话题 第二段从多角度分析技术如何对人们之间的交往产生影响 可以采 用举例等论证手法 第三段和第四段分析技术带来的变化是正面的还是负面的 最好正 反两方面的影响都有所涉及并指出利大于弊或者弊大于利 第五段进行总结 具体分析 第一段 Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology 第一段照抄题目 在雅思写作考试中照抄部分要从总字数中扣除 所以本篇文章字数不够 考生会失分 第二段 第二段用一句简单的话提出自己的观点 Yes the technology has changed the people s interaction in very enhanced manner enhanced 加强的 增大的 in very enhanced manner 应改为in an enhanced manner 以增强的方式 第三段 第三段指出人与人之间的交往在过去存在的问题 即速度慢 而且 不够安全 Earlier people use to wait and try to find easy way to contact their friends or relatives leaving far In past there was no quick technology to contact or to establish any communication between one person to another person The Drawback with past communication systems was that it were very slow and were time taking process such as telegrams letter etc People used to afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their love ones due to insecure medium of communication When it comes to professional level the privacy and accuracy should be maintain but to that time there were no secure communications use to do sth 过去常常做某事 文中use to 应改为used to leaving far 应改为living far In past 应改为In the past 意为 在过去 between one person to another person 应改为between one person to another it were very slow and were time taking 应改为it was very slow and were time taking People used to afraid to write 应改为People used to be afraid to write establish any communication 应改为establish communication 实现交流 medium of communication 交流媒介 通讯手段 When it comes to sth 当提到 就 而论 should be maintain 应改为should be maintained 被动语态 第四段 第四段提到互联网和电话等技术的出现改进了人们之间的交往 有 着正面的影响 Now the things have changed around people from far distance contact their loves one in an easy and quick ways which improves the Interaction level between two person Quality the level of the Interaction people to people has improved because the people are equipped with high tec technology which enhances the communication There are many many medium which are available now such as Internet Calling Cards etc two person 应为two people be equipped with 配备有 装有 high tec technology 应改为high tech或者是high technology 第五段和第六段 第五段和第六段具体说明技术更便捷地促进了人们之间的交流 The technology has provided the mobility faster which help people to talk or to interact at any time anywhere in the world People can contact their friend or relatives any time they want It has become so easier and friendly to be in touch with your friends relatives even with the unknown people be in touch with 接触 联系 总体而言 本文的第一段要适当的改进 并对第四段进行一个扩充 要进一步 说明是如何改善的 如果只是从表面去阐述技术带来的改变 而没有说 是如何改变的是很难有一个高分的 因此 我们可以补充到 比如与书 信相比 电话更方便 人们可以随时沟通 拉近人与人之间的距离 此 外 人们也能听到对方的声音 关系会更加亲密 另外 电子邮件 微 博等新的科技也能够增强彼此的交流 虽然结尾段总结了技术带来交往上的便利 但是为了使文章更紧密 可以提到技术在人际交往方面所带来的负面影响有什么 比如如果人 们过度依赖技术可能会忽视这种面对面交流从而会疏远关系等等 参考译文 现在 由于技术的影响 人们互相交往的方式发生了改变 是的 技术以一种不断增强的方式改变了人们相互之间的交往 以前 人们常常等待并试图找到联系远方亲友的便捷方式 在过去 没有什么快速的技术可以用来进行联系 或在人与人之间实现交流 过去通讯系统的缺点在于它们太慢了 而且像电报和