2011高三上学期作文指导.ppt

1、评讲一质作文,基础写作 Every year when it is time for fresh students to come to universities, strange things happen in campuses as follows: some parents are carrying heavy luggage, but their children are walking leisurely. Whats more, some parents even do a lot of things that their children should do, such as

2、filling in various forms while their children just look on. More surprisingly, some parents would live with their children in the university for several days. Parents should offer some help to their children if necessary, but I dont think its right for them to do so much for their children. Instead,

3、 they should give their children more opportunities to do things by themselves, because only by doing so will young people become independent in the future.,现象 phenomenon (复数: phenomena) 行李 luggage; baggage; suitcase 独立的(adj.) independent (反义: dependent) 轻松地走着 walk relaxly walk leisurely,多使用一些连接词 表示

4、递进;在同一话题上补充内容 “另外, 还有”：what is more; besides; furthermore; moreover; in addition 表示转折关系 “但是, 然而, 相反”：but; however; while; yet; instead; on the other hand; on the contrary,怎样使你的文章更出彩？,病句： Parents insteaded of their children to fill in all the forms, but their children just saw on the other side. Pare

5、nts fill in all the forms instead of their children (who just look on). Children just look on, parents fill in all the forms instead. Parents fill in all the forms while their children just look on.,做某事有一些困难 have trouble/difficulty with sth. have trouble/difficulty (in) doing sth. 注意：trouble前可以用 som

6、e, great, little ,much, no 等词修饰,get along/on with sb. 与某人相处 get along /on with sth. 有进展；顺利(多用于进行时态) 你跟新邻居相处得好吗？ Are you getting along well with your new neighbours? 她工作进展得不错。 She is getting on well with her work.,How to write a summary?, 抓住主题句或过渡句, 运用短语such as, and so on 等 将小标题串起来,列举法,The passage pr

7、ovide some learning tips on reading for students , such as making a time table, taking notes, paying attention to reading techniques and so on. 或，The passage give those busy students some advice on reading, such as taking notes, making a timetable, paying attention to reading techniques, increasing

8、their memories and concentration and having a good condition for reading.,养宠物在英国是极为普遍的现象，但是关于这一现象的争论也从未停止过，赞同者有赞同的道理，反对者也有反对的理由。以下是一些常见的理由：,写作要求 只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。内容包括： 1人类养宠物历史悠久； 2人们对此有不同看法； 3赞同者的理由； 4反对者的理由； 5你的态度和理由。 评分标准 句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。,Raising animals as pets enjoys a long history but opini

9、ons on this practice vary from person to person. Supporters believe that it is beneficial because animals get better shelters and foods from their owners and owners are rewarded with joy by playing games with their pets. Opponents hold the view that animals spread diseases which are harmful to peopl

10、es health. They also believe that many people are too busy to look after their pets properly. As for me, animals should not be raised as pets because they should live in their own natural homes.,(对于，)不同的人有不同的观点。 Different people have different opinions (on ). 或，Opinions (on ) vary from person to per

11、son.,Supporters believe (argue, think) that 赞同观点 But opponents hold the view that 反对观点 As for me,I agree with the supporters/opponents.,对立观点式 作文模版,opponent pnnt,评讲周考小作文,Sept.25,预防(v.)_ (n.)_,prevent prevention,可预防的 _,preventable,养成良好的习惯_,form/develop a good habit of ,有营养的 _ 健康食品 _,锻炼身体 _ 多作运动 _,buil

12、d up ones body,do more exercise,此处exercise为不可数名词。 注意：do exercises 做操,勤洗手 _,wash your hands frequently often wash your hands,health food,usually,nutritious nju:tris,注意以下表达：,病句1 H1N1 flu is spreading all over the world, but it can be control, prevent, and cure. H1N1 flu is spreading all over the world

13、, but it can be controlled, prevented, and cured. H1N1 flu is spreading all over the world, but it is controllable, preventable, and curable.,人群密集的公共场所 _ _ _, crowded public places,public places where have many people, public places where there are too many people,降低的可能性 _,reduce/decrease the chance

14、/possibility of , public places which are crowded with people,病句2 The key to prevent H1N1 is to form a good habit of personal sanitation, include have enough sleep, eat health food, do more exercise and wash your hands frequently. The key to preventing H1N1 is to form a good habit of personal sanita

15、tion,which includes,having enough sleep, eating health food, doing more exercise and washing your hands frequently., , including having enough sleep, eating health food, doing more exercise and washing your hands frequently. , such as having enough sleep, eating health food, doing more exercise and

16、washing your hands frequently. 注意：列举不要用for example,病句3 We had better avoid go to crowded public places. We had better avoid going to crowded public places.,三质 语言点积累,完型 compromise (v.) kmprmaiz 与某人妥协/和解 with sb. (on sth.) compare with 与.作比较/对比 combine with 与.结合/联合 whats more 更重要的是 另外; 而且 traditionall

17、y (adv.) 传统上, 照惯例 personally (adv.) 就本人而言;亲自 privately (adv.) 私下地;不公开地,1000 美元对他来说是个小数目. 1000 dollars is a small sum of money to him.,阅读 be awarded a medal 被授予奖牌 think highly of 尊重;对 . 高度评价 process pruses 过程;步骤 make great contribution to 对.做出贡献 false (adj.)错误的;假的 play an important part in 在.中起重要作用,A

18、ug.14 周六考试讲评,to ones disappointment 令某人失望的是 sb. be impressed by 某人对印象深刻 in spite of 尽管 out of control 失控 study abroad 出国留学 communicate with sb. 与某人沟通 the Shanghai native 上海本地人 realize the dream (of/about doing sth.) 实现(做某事的)梦想 9. a key/main factor 一个关键/主要因素,基础写作（共1小题，满分15分） 请根据以下要点用英语写一篇短文。1. 旅行可以获得

19、知识；2. 交谈也可以获得知识，尤其跟伟人谈话；3. 听收音机，看电视；4. 最好的方法是阅读；5. 然而，各种各样的书，有好有坏，好书对心灵有益，坏书有害，所以，要选好书读，拒绝读有害书籍。 【写作要求】 (1)只能用5句话表达全部的内容。 (2)标题：The Best Means to Acquire Knowledge,获得知识,acquire knowledge,听收音机,listen to the radio,心灵,mind/ soul,1 注意要写标题 2 注意一些表达：,对有益,sth. be beneficial to sth do/does benefit to,对有害,st

20、h. be harmful to sth do/does harm to,病句： 1 旅行可以获得知识。 Traveling can acquire knowledge. Traveling can help us acquire knowledge. We can acquire knowledge by traveling. 翻译：多阅读文章可以提高词汇量。 Reading more articles can help us increase our vocabulary. We can increase our vocabulary by reading more articles .,

21、2 要选好书读，拒绝读有害书籍。 It is important for readers to read good books and refuse harmful ones. refuse to read the harmful ones. reject harmful ones. refuse 拒绝做某事 refuse to do 拒绝接受 reject 拒绝；摒弃 （后常接名词）,Best Means to Acquire Knowledge Knowledge may be acquired in many ways, one of which is from traveling an

22、d another is by conversation, especially one with a great man. A person may also become knowledgeable through other ways such as listening to the radio, watching television or, the best way, through reading. But, there exists one problem about reading because there are all kinds of books in society.

23、 Good books are beneficial to our soul while bad ones are harmful to our mind. Therefore, it is of great importance for readers to read good books and reject harmful ones.,读写任务(共1小题，满分25分) We Have Different Ideas! This may be the most important choice - the turning point in my life. Never before hav

24、e I been so serious. For me, a Senior Three student, which university to choose is really a hard question, especially when I hold a completely different opinion from my parents. Im longing for Wuhan University for its long history, beautiful campus and academic atmosphere. Besides, its a good chance

25、 to experience a different culture. But to my great surprise, when my parents heard this, they are strongly against my idea. Moreover, I was shocked to find mum crying! She asked in tears, Why dont you stay in Guangzhou? So young a girl, how can you take good care of yourself? Wuhan, oh! Its too far

26、 away. What if I want to see you or you want to see me? My father also asked me a serious question, Are you sure you can find a good job in Guangzhou after graduation? Actually, Ive thought about all these. As an independent and active girl, I certainly can handle all the problems. I insist on my ch

27、oice, but I really value my parents agreement.,【写作要求】 1概括短文要点，字数为30词左右； 2假设你是这位学生的班主任，该生向你求助，希望你能帮她说服她的父母，请写下你要对家长说的话，字数为120词左右，至少包括以下内容： (1)客观分析去外地读大学和留在广州读大学的利与弊； (2)陈述你支持这位学生的理由。 (3) 题目自拟 (4) 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。,Where to Go for University? The author describes a conflict between her parents and her

28、self on whether to go to Wuhan University. As an independent girl, she wants to experience more in another city while her parents worry a lot.,As her head teacher, I have the responsibility to help solve the problem. Firstly, I should admit I really understand your feelings. Parents always love and

29、care for their children no matter how old they are. It actually is a great challenge for a young girl to study in another city. Whats more, when in the 4th year, she may have to come back to Guangzhou several times to seek a good job here.,As an old saying goes, every coin has two sides. If you see

30、it in a more optimistic way, youll find more benefits. In my memory, shes always independent and strong. No matter what happens, she remains calm. Therefore, I believe she could handle everything. In addition, Wuhan University is a famous university in China, so, if she studies hard, shell certainly

31、 get a good job. Above all, its a good opportunity to broaden her mind and make more friends. （总结） All in all, Im sure that to study in another city is really a good way to enrich ones life experience.,（支持这位学生的理由）,写作万用句型： 1 作者/文章描绘了一场发生在和之间的关于的冲突/矛盾。 The author/The passage describes a conflict betwe

32、en and on + 主题 2 正如谚语所说的，凡事总有两面。 As an old saying goes, every coin has two sides. 3 如果你们能够以一种更乐观的方式去看待它，你们将会发现更多的好处。 If you see it in a more optimistic way, youll find more benefits. 4 开阔某人的视野 broaden ones mind 5 充实某人的人生经历 enrich ones life experience,at the foot of,在 . 的脚下,在 . 的底部,at the bottom of .

33、,at the top of .,在 . 顶部, office (n.) 办公室，职务，事务 official (adj.) 官方的, 正式的 (adv.) -ly fil (n.) 政府官员; 行政官员 区别: officer fis (n.) 官员, 军官 be good at (doing) sth. _ be good for sb./ sth. _ be good to . _,擅长;善于 对有益/有用 对友善/慈爱, 向某人寻求帮助 turn to sb. for help, as 作介词只有一个意思，“作为” eg. Dont treat him as a child.,prov

34、ide sth. for sb.,向某人提供某物,provide sb. with sth.,decrease by 倍数/百分比 _ decrease to 具体数字/数量 _,减少了 减少到,increase/,increase/,增加/ 增加/,第二节：读写任务（共1小题，满分25分） “In addition to teaching here, I also teach at a smaller high school 17 miles down the freeway from where I live. One day a few weeks ago I was driving t

35、o that school when my car broke down just after I exited the freeway. I was only about a quarter of a mile away from the school so I grabbed my books, and started walking.” “As soon as I got there I called a repairman to meet me at my car after class. One of my colleagues asked me what had happened.

36、 This is my lucky day, I replied, smiling.” “ Your car breaks down and today is your lucky day? She was puzzled. What do you mean? ” “I live 17 miles from here.” I replied. “My car could have broken down anywhere along the freeway. It didnt. Instead, it broke down in the perfect place: off the freew

37、ay, within walking distance of here. Im still able to teach my class, and Ive been able to arrange for the repairman to meet me after class. If my car was meant to break down today, it couldnt have been arranged in a more convenient fashion.” I once read somewhere before that every morning when you

38、get up, you have a choice about how you want to approach life that day. And this is what I choose - to be cheerful.,写作内容 最近你的很多同班同学感觉学习压力非常大。假设上文是你的外籍老师今天在课堂上所讲述的自己的亲身经历。听完老师的经历，为了鼓励大家正确面对压力，你决定向学校英文广播台投稿，内容要点如下（文章开头已给出）： 1以约30个词概括老师所讲述的这个故事的内涵； 2以约120个词表达你内心的感受，并包括如下要点： (1) 你听完这个故事的感受； (2) 你所了解到的你自

39、己或他人用积极的态度去面对问题的某个经历； (3) 激励同学们正确面对学习压力。 Today in class the teacher told us a story that really helped me deal with the pressures I often feel in my studies.,用积极的态度面对学习压力,Today in class the teacher told us a story that really helped me deal with the pressures I often feel in my studies. The story te

40、lls us that it is important to be optimistic and maintain a positive attitude when facing difficulty. It is optimism that helps us better cope with the problems in life., After hearing the story, I am deeply impressed by my teachers optimism. I think my teacher was right to have an optimistic attitu

41、de to his problem. This allowed him to stay positive and to perform his job well. If he hadnt done so, this one problem would have turned into many other problems.,听完这个故事的感受,Everything,His story reminds me of my similar experience. I also have a similar experience. Take sbs experience for example. S

42、bs experience serve as a good example.,His experience recalls something that happened to me when I was ,How to introduce the example by using a transitional sentence?(如何使用过渡句引出例子?),were not disabled.,be,the other,Ending (结尾点题) : 激励同学们正确面对学习压力。 紧扣：面对压力；乐观的态度,An optimistic attitude is not a luxury; it

43、s a necessity. As students, we should take study as an opportunity to learn more about the world rather than a source of pressure. Even though there does exist pressure, we should follow the examples of courageous people and face it with courage and optimism ourselves.,Today in class the teacher tol

44、d us a story that really helped me deal with the pressures I often feel in my studies. The story tells us that it is important to be optimistic and maintain a positive attitude when facing difficulties. It is optimism that helps us better cope with the problems in life.,I think my teacher was right

45、to have an optimistic attitude to his problem. This allowed him to stay positive and to perform his job well. If he hadnt done so, this one problem would have turned into many other problems.,His story reminds me of Ruo Yan, a professional dancer who was diagnosed daignuz with cancer. She felt terri

46、ble at first, but soon she made up her mind to fight against the disease. She kept faith in herself and kept a healthy lifestyle, a balanced diet, adequate exercise and most importantly an optimistic attitude. After surgery, she wrote a book titled I Cannot Live without You, focusing on her days in

47、the hospital. Her book helps,other cancer sufferers regain hope and fight against the fatal disease courageously as she has done. It was her disease that drove her to realize her dream, to become a writer. An optimistic attitude is not a luxury; its a necessity. As students, we should take study as

48、an opportunity to learn more about the world rather than a source of pressure. Even though there does exist pressure, we should follow the examples of courageous people and face it with courage and optimism ourselves.,2 当遇到困难的时候，保持乐观和积极的态度是很重要的。 It is important to be optimistic and maintain a positi

49、ve attitude when facing difficulties. 3 正是乐观精神帮助我们解决生活当中的难题。 It is optimism that helps us better cope with the problems in life.,写作句子积累之“乐观态度” 1 如果你们能够以一种更乐观的方式去看待它，你们将会发现更多的好处。 If you see it in a more optimistic way, youll find more benefits.,写作句子积累之“压力” 1 然而，事情总有两面(一个硬币有两面)，包括来自学习的压力。 However, eve

50、ry coin has two sides, including pressure from studying. 3 有压力就有机遇，有机遇就有成功的可能。 Where there is pressure, there is opportunity, and where there is opportunity, there is possibility for success. 4 不管我遇到什么困难，我总是保持乐观并努力把压力转化为动力。 Whatever difficulties I meet, I always stay optimistic and try to turn press

51、ure into force.,5 我相信压力能促使我们更加努力地学习、获得进步并最终到达期盼的目的地。 I believe that the pressure will help push us to study harder, make greater progress and eventually reach our desired destination. 6 随着高考的临近，越来越多的学生倍感压力。他们的压力来自于父母、老师，甚至他们自己。 With the time closer to college exam, more and more students are living

52、under great pressure. Their pressure comes from the teachers, parents and even themselves.,评讲二质作文,Oct.20,第二节 读写任务(共l小题，满分25分) 阅读下面的短文，然后按要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。 I have a friend Monty Roberts who has a horse ranch (牧马场) in San Ysidro. When he was a senior, he was asked to write a paper about what he wanted

53、 to be and do when he grew up. The next day he handed it in to the teacher. On the front was a large red F. The boy with the dream asked, “Why did I receive an F?” The teacher said, “This is an unrealistic dream for a young boy like you. You have no money. You come from an itinerant (四处奔波的) family.

54、You have no resources. Owning a horse ranch requires a lot of money. You have to buy the land. You have to pay for the original breeding stock and later youll have to pay large stud fees. Theres no way you could ever do it.” He stated, “You can keep the F and Ill keep my dream.” The best part of the

55、 story is that two summers ago that same schoolteacher brought 30 kids to camp out on his ranch for a week. When the teacher was leaving, he said, “Look, Monty, I can tell you this now. When I was your teacher, I was something of a dream stealer. During those years I stole a lot of kids dreams. Fort

56、unately you had enough belief not to give up yours.”,写作内容 学校最近组织了一次中美学生交流活动，你参加其中的“坚守信念”的讨论。读完Monty Roberts的故事之后，你准备写一份发言稿， 题目是“Hold on to Ones Belief”，内容要点包括： 1以约30个词概括Monty Roberts的成长故事； 2然后以约120个词谈谈你对坚守信念的看法，内容包括： (1) 坚守信念对一个人成长的重要性； (2) 举例子论证“坚守信念能使梦想成真”。 写作要求 1在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容

57、，但不得直接引用原文中的句子； 2作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。,title （1 point）Hold on to Our Belief,This passage tells us that Monty Roberts, who had such strong _that he didnt give up his dream all the time even though he was _by his teacher, eventually _in owning a horse ranch.,belief,succeeded,discouraged,大作文主要存在的问题： 1 格式错

58、2 没有按要点的顺序写 3 离题（写成“鼓励 encouragement”） 4 例子的时态：记叙故事一般用_ 5 字数不够,一般过去时,2然后以约120个词谈谈你对坚守信念的看法，内容包括： (1) 坚守信念对一个人成长的重要性； (2) 举例子论证“坚守信念能使梦想成真”。 第二段论述信念的重要性： For a person, belief always plays an important role in his/her life. As a saying goes, “Where there is a will, there is a way.” Anyone who has strong belief can realize his dream and enjoy a colorful life. Otherwise, he will lose himself in his way of life.,梦想实现 dream come true （不用