2025年高考英语复习应用文写作与读后续写精讲精练16.读后续写作基本技法

读后续写作基本技法

(2021·新高考Ⅰ卷)

AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE

Thetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningfor

Mother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.

TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthe

kitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlyto

thekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.Theyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleft

ittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsome

milk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthe

secondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstarted

fryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewthe

burntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefireso

itcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,

theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmand

turnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsothey

couldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegave

acryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.

Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.

注意:续写词数应为150个左右。

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.____

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Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup._______

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Step1:厘清主题把握走向

要素描述主题

whenMother’sDay

本文以母亲节为线索展开,讲述了双胞胎

whereAthome

Jenna和Jeff为了献给母亲一份美味的早餐,

whoThetwins—JeffandJenna

自己动手做起早餐来,但不幸的是,他们接

Thepairpreparedbreakfastfortheir

what连失败,后来在父亲的帮助下获得成功,他

mother.

们把早餐献给亲爱的母亲,母亲非常感动的

Theywantedtogivetheirmothera

why故事。

surprise.

Step2:寻找主线深挖要点

文段线索文脉线索

情感线excited→disappointed

First,theyboiledtheporridge.→Next,theymadetheFrenchtoast.→Asliceof

前文

故事线breadturnedblack.→Thentheyfoundtheporridgeboiledoverandputoutthe

fire.→Theotherpieceofbreadturnedblack,too.

续写1.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.

要点2.TheirmotherwassurprisedtofindthebreakfastcookedbyJeffandJenna.

Step3:精研首句起承转合

根据所给续文段落首句产生问题链接,形成续写思路,采用G-N(Given-New)和

Q-A(Question-Answer)策略,做好起承转合,创造新的情节。

Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

Q1:WhatwasFather’sfirstinstinctwhenfacedwiththemess?

Q2:Howdidthetwinsexplaintheirplantotheirfather?

Q3:WhatdidFatherdotohelpthetwinstomakedeliciousFrenchtoastandchickenporridge?

Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

Q1:WhatwasMother’sfirstinstinctwhenthetwinswokeherup?

Q2:WouldthetwinsgiveMotherabigsurprise?Howdidtheyexpresstheirbestwishesto

Mother?

Q3:HowdidMotherfeel?Howcanyoudesigntheendingmoreappealingandmeaningful?

续写第一Theirfatherhelpedthemadjustthefireandtheypreparedbreakfast

段梗概successfully.Howhappytheywere!

续写第二Thetwins’motherwassurprisedtoseethedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontof

段梗概her.Shewasdeeplymovedbyherchildren.

Step4:吃透语言风格一致

为了使所写的内容和语言和原文保持连贯性和一致性,读后续写需要通过在理解原文的

基础上,巧妙利用“拉平效应”,创造性地模仿和使用语言,即继承原文语言表达方面的显著特

征,包括写作手法及语言表达技巧,从而一方面保证写作的效率和流畅度,另一方面保证写作

在各个语言层次和表达风格上和原文保持一致。

通过分析语篇,可以从五个方面理解原文的语言应用技巧:

1.场景描写(Surroundings)

场景描写指的是描写人、物、事发生的时间、地点、自然环境及社会场景等。场景描写可以

充当背景信息,提供人、物、事发生的具体设定。其次,场景描写可以表达角色的感情、情绪,

可以随着情节的发展有所变化,甚至可以提示、推动情节的发展,增强语篇的代入感。

2.动作描写(Actions)

动作描写指的是描写人物在具体情况下的行为举止,是情节发展的具体体现。恰到好处的动

作描写不仅可以塑造生动形象的人物,还可以反映人物的情感态度及心理变化,并最终反映人

物的性格特点及思想品质。

3.心理描写(Feelings)

心理描写指的是描写人物在具体情况下的看法、感受、情感及心理活动,并由此反映人物的

性格特点及思想品质。心理描写除了对心理的直接描写,还可以结合动作描写及场景描写,共

同构成有意义、紧凑的语篇。

4.有效对话(EffectiveDialogues)

有效对话是记叙语篇中塑造人物的一个重要手段。对话的有效性首先体现在符合人物设定,

这样不仅能够有效地推动情节的发展,更能够增加记叙的生动性。此外,对话语言也要符合记

叙语篇的语言特点,即生活化、简化及去书面化。

5.修辞(Figuresofspeech)

修辞是增加语言生动性的最佳手段。它可以引起共鸣,使抽象的情境具体化。常见的可以应

用的修辞有比喻、拟人、夸张和排比等。

考场满分作文1:

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.①Father’s

appearingwaslikeasaviortothetwochildren.②Undertheguidanceoftheirfather,theytook

positiveactionandstartedalloveragain.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncooking

porridge.Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,③whichwasthekeytosuccess.Itwasallrightthis

time.Deliciousbreakfastwasready.④Howhappytheywere!

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.⑤Whentheirmothersaw

thedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.

⑥Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.The

twochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,

⑦“HappyMother’sDay!”⑧Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.

评卷老师点评:

①过渡自然流畅。②时态、语境和前文相互照应。③使用高分句式。④使用高分句式。⑤使

用高分句式。⑥使用并列结构。⑦使用直接引语,生动真实。⑧动作及情感表达真实细腻。

考场满分作文2:

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Facedwiththe

messthetwinshadmadeofthekitchen,Fatherfeltannoyedbuttriedtocontainhimself.Jennaran

uptohim,whispering“We...WejustwanttomakebreakfastforMomasMother’sDaygift.”

Afterhelearnedwhatallwasabout,hisannoyancegavewaytoreliefanddelight.Immediately,he

joinedthemandtheystartedalloveragain.SoontheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.

Thekitchenfilledwiththescentofbreakfastandsweetnessofafamily.Lookingatthework,

thethreeexchangedanunderstandingsmile.Aftersignalingthemtokeepitasecret,Father

slippedintothebedroom,pretendingtoknownothingaboutit.

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Stillalittlesleepy,Mother

failedtofigureoutwhattheywereupto.“HappyMother’sDay!”Thetwinscongratulated.“We

madebreakfastforyouasyoudothatforus.Mom,weloveyou!”Thoughstillinherpajamas,

Mothertookabiteofthetoastandsippedthehotporridge.Lostinthedeliciousbreakfastandpure

lovefromhertwins,shesobbed,withdelightfultearsstreamingdownherface.Lovingly,she

pressedtwogentlekissesontheirforeheads,proudlyenjoyingtheirbestwishes.Theirfatherwas

standinginthedoorway,recordingthistouchingscene.Thewholeroomwasbathedinahappy

Mother’sDayatmosphere.

评卷老师点评:文章用词精准(whisper,understanding,signal,pretend,lostin,streamdown,

proudly等),句式高级(非谓语动词、独立主格和介词with的复合结构等),通过动作、对话和

心理活动等描写,生动、形象地呈现了双胞胎孩子在母亲节为妈妈做早餐,献上一份特别的节

日礼物和惊喜。

考场满分作文3:

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Seeingthe

mess,Fatherfrozewithshock,asifrootedontheground.Fromtheblackbreadandthespilled

porridge,hesuddenlyfiguredouttheirsecret.Asmileofunderstandingflashedacrosshis

face.Herealizedtheirintention.HejoinedtheminpreparingtheMother’sDaysurprise

immediately.Theystartedalloveragain.Everythingwentsmoothly.Thechickenandricewere

dancingharmoniouslyintheboilingwaterpotandbreadsliceswereshowingoffitsmost

tremendousgoldencolor.SoontheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.Thekitchen

filledwiththescentofbreakfastandsweetnessofafamily.Despitetheoilstainsonthetwins’

aprons,nothingseemedimperfect,andallwasinplaceexceptthemostimportantone.

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Stillalittlesleepy,Mother

failedtofigureoutwhattheywereupto,butthecheerful“HappyMother’sDay”fromthetwo

sweetiesbroughtherbacktoreality.Thebreakfastwithlovemadebyhertwinsreallystruckher

heartstrings.Motherkissedthemandgavethemeachabearhug,saying“Ohdear,thankyoumy

sweeties.Whatabigsurprise!”Thenextmoment,shewokeupFather,eagertosharetheblessing

andtheinvitingbreakfastseasonedwithlove.Father,whohadbeenawake,cooperatively

rubbedhiseyesandtookabigbite,winkingatthetwinssecretly.Afterall,thesurprisedid

makeasweetsurprise!

评卷老师点评:文章通过动作、对话和心理活动等描写,生动、形象地呈现了双胞胎孩子在母

亲节为妈妈做早餐,献上一份特别的节日礼物和惊喜。在故事情节推进的过程中,运用语篇分

析的主位推进理论、呼应和修辞等手法来揭示语篇的感恩、互爱的主题,让人豁然明白“我们

平时认为妈妈无条件的爱和支持是理所当然,没什么大不了的。等到自己回报母爱时,却发现

并不轻松”,反映内心触动和成长历程。

【方法运用】

1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Iwasanaveragestudentinmyearlyelementaryyears.Icamehomewithasteadyflowof

B’s,C’sandtheoccasionalF’sinsecondlanguagesubjects.IwastoldthatIwasn’tapplying

myselfand,aseveryreportcardIeverbroughthomeclearlystated,Italkedtoomuch.

Ididn’twritewhenIwassupposedtowrite.Italkedtootherswhiletheteacherwasgiving

instructions.ThatIcouldrecitewhatshehadsaidtotheclasswhileIwastalkingwasnothelpful

becauseIhadanegativeeffectonmyclassmates’learning.SoIregularlybroughthome

disappointingreportcards.

Myparentsandmyteachersdidn’tknowwhattodowithme.Punishmentsdidn’tseemto

work.Rewardsdidn’tseemtoeither.And,frankly,Idon’tthinkIknewwhatIcoulddoto“apply

myself”.AndIcertainlydidn’tknowhowtonotenjoytalkingwithmyclassmates!WhatIknew

wasthatItalkedtoomuch.Untilgrade5.

Thatautumn,wehadasuddenchangeinteachersasourelderlyteachertookamedical

leave.Inhisplace,ayoungsubstitute(代课老师)arrived—MrsRoyal.Shelookedlikeshewas

freshlyoutofuniversityandseemedtooyoungtobecastintheroleofbeingresponsiblefora

classoftween,butthereshewas,chargedwithalivelygroup,andme.

Idon’tremembermanydetailsofthatyearexcepttheafternoonwhenIgotmyfirstreport

cardfromher.Shehandedoutthereportcardsrightaftertheafternoonbreakandinvitedusto

lookthemover.Thensheletusknowthatwecouldalltalkquietlyamongstourselveswhileshe

calledeachstudentuponeatatime,inalphabeticalorder(按字母顺序),todiscussourreport

cardswithher.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右：

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Ilookedovermyreportcard,expectingtheusualresult.

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Thenitwasmyturntotalkwithher.

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2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Tenmilesawaystoodahousewithshinyredwalls,agreengardenandanappletree.A

younggirl’sfacewouldbeseenreflectingfromoneofthelargeglassywindows.Hernameis

Maggie.Hereyesweresparklingandonherfacetherewasasmilewhichcouldlightamillion

candles.Sheseemedtobelongingforachancetoplaylikeayoungchild,butshehadnostrength

inherlegsbecausesheandherfamilymetwithanaccident,inwhichshelostbothherlegs.

Butherspiritwasstrong.Shewouldbeinspiredbyseeingbirdsfly.Theflyingeaglewould

makeherwanttofly.Shewaslonely.Shelongedforatruefriendwhowouldtalktoherandteach

hertoflyoratleasttellherstoriesaboutsoaringintothebluesky.

Oneevening,Maggieslowlyrolledherwheelchairtothegiantwindowandlookedoutto

themanyhousesthatlayacrosstheroad.Suddenlysheheardsomeonesingingandthencouldsee

anoldmaninapilotsuitsinginginglory.Thebeautifulsoundandthemelodymadethelittlegirl

happy.Suddenlyhestoppedandgazeduptowardher.“Whatareyoustaringat?”hesaidangrily.

“YouthinkI’macircusclown?(马戏团小丑)”“No,Sir.Iwasjustlisteningtoyou.Yousingvery

well,”shesaid.“Idon’tneedyourpraises.Idon’tneedanyone!”heshouted.Hestartedtowalkto

hishouseandshutthedoor.Tearsrolleddownfromherapple-redcheeksasthemanshoutedat

her.Shewaslonely.

Nextmorning,Maggiepushedherwheelchairacrossthegardentothestoneroadaslittle

childrenplayedhide-and-seekaroundher.Suddenlyoutofnowherealoadingtruckcame

rumblingacrosstowardher.Terrified,shetriedtomoveawayfromitspathbutthewheelsofher

chairwerestuck.“Ohmy,”shethoughtasthetruckcameinherdirectionfast,withthedriver

unawareoftheobstructioninfrontofhim.Shescreamedloudlybutinasplitsecondshewas

pulledoutofherwheelchairbysomeoneandfellontheground.Sheclosedhereyesandshivered

asthetruckpassedherwhistling.Assheopenedhereyes,shecouldseeamanstandingbesideher.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。

Shegazeduptohimandimmediatelyrecognizedhimasthemanshesawsinginglastnight.

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MaggiegottoknowhisnamewasKenandthathewasaretiredpilot.

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3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Mamawasweavingamat(织垫子)withwild-grassstalks(茎秆)whenshecalledto

Achenyo,“Willyoudomeafavorandfetchmesomewaterforthepaints,Achenyo?”Inthe

cornerwerepotsofcoloringmattershe’dusetopaintthefinishedmats.“Ofcourse,Mama!”

Achenyopickedupaclaypotassheslippedoutside.

Shedidn’tlikemat-weaving,althoughitwasatraditionforamothertopassontheskillsto

herdaughter.Achenyowouldratherbeplayingoutdoorswithherfriends.Outside,Achenyocalled

toAjuma,whosehousewasacrossfromhers.

Bothgirls,withclaypotsbalancedontheirheads,madetheirwaytotheNigerRiver.When

theyarrivedatthewater’sedge,whattheyfoundwasshocking.Theriverwasgone!Initsplace

wasablanketofdarkgreenleavesdottedbycoloredflowers.

“Ohno!”Achenyocried.“Theriverisgone!There’snowaterfordrinking,cooking,or

bathing!Mamawon’thavewatertomixthepaintsforhermats.

Lastyear,therainyseasonbroughtaninvasionofwaterhyacinths(水葫芦).Theplants

coveredtheriverandleftnoroomtoputinapottofetchwater.Therewasnoroomtobatheor

swim.Fishermencouldn’tcasttheirnetsforfish.Andnowthewaterhyacinthswereback

“Howcouldsuchaprettyplantcausesuchharm?”Achenyowondered

Theadultsjumpedintothewateramongthebroad,greenleaves,Theybeganthrowing

themontotheriverbank.AchenyoandAjumajoinedthem.Whenthey’dclearedenoughplants,

thegirlsfilledtheirpotswithwater.ApileofwaterhyacinthslayontheriverbankWhatapityto

wastesuchprettyflowers,Achenyothought.ShepickedsomeforMama,andthenthegirlsheaded

home.

Eachday,theyfoundtherivercoveredbywaterhyacinthsasifnoonehadclearedthe

waterfrontthedaybefore.Oneday,asAchenyomovedanarmfulofdriedwaterhyacinthsoutof

herway,shehadanidea.Carryingtheplantsunderherarm,sheranhome.“Mama,willyouteach

metoweave?

注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Mamawastoogladtopassonthemat-weavingskillstoherdaughter.

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MamaandAchenyothentaughttheirneighbors.

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4．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Mykitchenwasamess.Cloudsofflourdustedthecounters,thefloor,andtheapronsofthe

womengatheredthere.

Peelsfrom40poundsofappleswerepiledinthecorner.Mixingbowlsstickywith

cinnamonandsugartippedmessilyinthesink.Thewrappersfrom12pounds’worthofbutter

spilledfromthetrash.But,wow,itdidsmellsweet.

SixofushadgatheredthatSaturdaymorningtomakeapplepies.Oncecolleagues,now

simplyfriends,wesharedanintensecuriosityaboutallsortsofthings,andwelovedtochat.

Todayourcuriosityandchatterweredirectedtopie-making.WhileIwasnotopchef,I

knewhowtousearollingpinandI’dhadyearsofpracticeservingupstrawberrycakes,coconut

cream,andsourcherrypiestomyfamily.

Pie-makingisalotofwork.Whoevercoinedthephrase“easyaspie”musthavemeant

consuming,notcreating.Wespenthourspeeling,coring,slicing,measuring,andlearningto

handledelicatedough(面团).

“It’sstickingtotherollingpin,”oneofthemsaid,hervoicefullofdepression.

“Ohno,it’scracking!”cameanothercry.Iassuredthemthepatchedcrust(皮)would

simplyserveasareminderthatthesepieswerehome-made.

Outside,anOctobersnowstormstruckheavily.Inside,though,itwasallsteamywindows,

softmusicandhappylaughteraswefinallyputourpiesintotheoven.

Whenplanning“PieDay”,wedecidedthatwewouldeachmaketwopies:Oneforour

familiesandonetodonatetosomeoneelse.

Byearlyafternoon,12pieshadbeenplacedonthecounter,theirperfectlyimperfectcrusts

shininggoldenly.Werushedtopreparefordelivery,packingthepiesmessilyinboxesandbags.

Wemarcheddownthedriveway.Thesnowhadmelted(融化);theroadswereclear.Itwastimeto

deliver.

Then,disasterstruck.Oneofthepainstakinglycraftedpiesmeltedthroughthebagitwas

packedinandfellontothedriveway.Screamsofhorrorfollowed.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Onefriendranbackintothekitchenandreturnedwithforks.

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Thebestpartwasstilltocome:Handingoutpieswasevenbetterthaneatingpies.

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参考答案

1．

Ilookedovermyreportcard,expectingtheusualresult.Buttomysurprise,herfeedback

wasdifferent.Insteadoffocusingonthenegatives,shepointedouttheimprovementsIhadmade.

Sheacknowledgedmyefforts,howeversmall,andencouragedmetokeepworkingonmy

weaknesses.Idouble-checkedandmadesureitwasdefinitelymyreportcard.Eventhoughwe

hadbeengivenpermissiontotalkamongstourselves,IhadverylittletosaytofriendsasIwaited

anxiouslyforhertocallmyname.

Thenitwasmyturntotalkwithher.Shebeganwithawarmsmile,“Youhaveany

questionsforme?”Irememberlookingdownatmyreportcardandsaying,“Idon’tgetA’s,

besides,nowhereonheredoesitsayItalktoomuch.”Shesaid,“Ifiguredyoualreadyknewyou

talkedtoomuch,soIthoughtIcouldtellyousomethingdifferent.Asforthegrades,youearned

theA’s.”Fromthatdayon,IknewIwascapableof“straightA’s”andcouldhavequalitiesother

thanthatofastudentwhotalkedtoomuchinclass.

【写作分析】本文以学生的学习经历和改变为线索展开，讲述了“我”在小学早期是一个成绩

中等且爱在课堂上讲话的学生。由于这种不良习惯，“我”不仅影响了自己的学习，还对同学

产生了负面影响，导致常常带回家令人失望的成绩单。尽管父母和老师尝试了各种方法，但

都没有显著效果。直到五年级时，班里来了一位年轻的代课老师MrsRoyal，她以不同的教

学方式处理成绩单，让“我”对自己的学习问题有了新的认识和期待。

【要点解析】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“我看了看我的成绩单，期待着和往常一样的结果。”可知，第一段可描

写作者得到的成绩单和往常不同。

②由第二段首句内容“然后轮到我和她说话了。”可知，第二段可描写作者和MrsRoyal交流

的具体内容。

2.续写线索：成绩单反馈不同——肯定进步——开始谈话——给于肯定——感动。

3.词汇激活

行为类

①指出：pointout/identify

②鼓励：encourage/inspire

③认为：figure/think

情绪类

①惊讶：surprise/astonishment

②焦急地：anxiously/nervously

[高分句型1]Eventhoughwehadbeengivenpermissiontotalkamongstourselves,Ihadvery

littletosaytofriendsasIwaitedanxiouslyforhertocallmyname.(运用了eventhough引导的

让步状语从句和as引导的时间状语从句)

[高分句型2]Idon’tgetA’s,besides,nowhereonheredoesitsayItalktoomuch.(运用了

nowhere位于句首的倒装句以及省略that的宾语从句)

2．Shegazeduptohimandimmediatelyrecognizedhimasthemanshesawsinginglastnight."

Thankyouforsavingme,"shesaidingratitude,"andI'msorryifIbotheredyoulastnightwith

mylistening."Themanlookedather,asoftnessinhiseyes."Ididn’tmeantobesoharsh."hesaid,

hisvoicefilledwithremorse.ThesoftnessopenedMaggie’sheart.Shepouredoutherstoryofthe

accident,herlongingforafriend,andherobsessionwithflying.Kenlistenedintently,hisheart

goingouttotheyounggirl."AndIdon’tseemtobetheonlyonewholovesflying."saidthegirl,

eyeingtheman’suniform.

MaggiegottoknowhisnamewasKenandthathewasaretiredpilot.Asthesunbegantoset,

MaggielearnedsomuchaboutKenthatsherealizedthatshehadfoundatruefriendinKen.For

thefirsttimeinalongtime,shefeltgenuinehappiness.Thenextday,Kencamebacktovisit

Maggiewithasmallgift,abookaboutflying.Maggie’sfacelitupassheflippedthroughthe

pages,imaginingherselfsoaringthroughtheclouds.Manyafternoonssawtheminthegarden,

laughingandenjoyingeachother’scompany.Theirfriendshipgrewstrongerwitheachpassing

day.

【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了一个名叫麦琪的年轻女孩，因为一次事故失去

了双腿。尽管身体受到限制，麦琪的精神依然坚强。她渴望找到一个真正的朋友，能和她交

谈、教她飞翔，或者至少给她讲述关于蓝天的故事。一天，麦琪在窗前听到一个老人唱歌，

她很开心地欣赏着。但老人却生气地责备她，并走回自己的房子。麦琪感到非常孤独。第二

天，当一辆货车朝她驶来时，她被一个人拉出轮椅并躺在地上，幸免于难。她睁开眼睛看到

的人正是昨晚唱歌的那个男人。他们互相交流，麦琪向他倾诉了她的故事。她发现这个男人

名叫肯，是一位退休飞行员。他们成为了真正的朋友，每天在花园里笑着相处。他们的友谊

与日俱增。

【要点解析】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“她抬头望着他，立刻认出他就是昨晚唱歌的那个人。”可知，第一段可

描写麦琪表达感谢以及向肯讲述她的故事。

②由第二段首句内容“麦琪知道他的名字叫肯，是一名退休飞行员。”可知，第二段可描写麦

琪了解肯的很多事情以及他们成为了好朋友。。

2.续写线索：麦琪抬头望着他并且认出他——麦琪表达感谢——麦琪讲述自己的故事——了

解肯的事情——他们成为好朋友——感悟

3.词汇激活

行为类

①打扰：bothered/disturbed

②.渴望：longfor/yearnfor

③.意识到：realized/beawareof

情绪类

①.感谢：thank/showingherappreciation/showhergratitude/begrateful

②.专心地：intently/attentively

[高分句型1].AndIdon’tseemtobetheonlyonewholovesflying.（运用了关系代词who引导

的定语从句。）

[高分句型2].Maggie’sfacelitupassheflippedthroughthepages,imaginingherselfsoaring

throughtheclouds.（运用现在分词imagining作状语。）

3．

Mamawastoogladtopassonthemat-weavingskillstoherdaughter.Butshewasdoubtful

aboutthewaterhyacinthstalks.Achenyoinsistedthatthewaterhyacinthstalkswouldbestrong

enoughtobemadeintoschoolbagstocarrybooks,andbasketstotakevegetablestothemarket.

So,MamabegantoteachAchenyohowtoseparatethestalksfromtheleaves,howtobendthe

wovenropeintoaroundshapeandhowtotietheropestogether.Achenyolearnedveryquickly

andsoonshecouldweavebagsandbasketsallbyherself.

MamaandAchenyothentaughttheirneighbors.Theywerealleagertomaketheirown

craftsusingthosewaterhyacinthstalks,whichnowseemednotsoannoying.Theymade

schoolbagsfortheirchildren,andbaskets,trays,andchairmatsfordailyuse.Bytheendofthe

rainyseason,thevillage