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那少女披着一袭轻纱般的白衣，犹似身在烟中雾里，看来约莫十六七岁年纪，除了一头黑发之外，全身雪白，面容秀美绝俗，只是肌肤间少了一层血色，显得苍白异常。杨过抬起头来，与她目光相对，只觉这少女清丽秀雅，莫可逼视，神色间却是冰冷淡漠，当真是洁若冰雪，也是冷若冰雪，实不知她是喜是怒，是愁是乐。aloof冷漠的；离群的unemotional不动感情的

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Criteria第五档：（21-25分）在内容上，续写故事首先要“与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理”，续写的每一段要与所给原文融洽，同时续写的每一段要紧贴所给首句的线索来写。dancewithshackles读

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可续写点（continuationpoints)：

一篇完整的文章中，作者通常会围绕(revolvearound)某个主题来写，在篇首,篇中或篇末设置伏笔(ahintforeshadowinglaterdevelopmentsinastory)，这些统称为可续写点。捕捉和照应续写点

品读首段提炼原文主题关注特定情节留意细节描写关注高频词留意原文结尾解读续写所给首句阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

OneweekendinJuly,

Jane

andherhusband,

Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,"I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp"and

walked

away.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehad

climbed

toahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost."Tom!"shecried."Help!"

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoa

stream.

Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janehearda

helicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffher

yellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.

Paragraph1：

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.__________________________________________________Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.______________________________________________________________________1、仔细品读原文首段：故事背景OneweekendinJuly,

Jane

andherhusband,

Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,"I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp"and

walked

away.背景续写点：_________________________________________________________背景照应方式：_____________________________________________________________JulyJane,Tombyalakeintheforest第一段可写天黑后Jane的感受。AlthoughitwasalreadyJuly,Janestillfeltverycoldintheforest,feelingextremelyregretfulforleavingTom.Thegurgleofstreamaddedhercoldnessandloneliness.WhenWhoWhere2、仔细品读原文，提炼原文主题，续写时你会如何照应原文主题。原文主题：

_____________________________________________________照应主题方式：___________________________________________________________OneweekendinJuly,JaneandherhusbandTom,hadanunpleasantbutunforgettablejourney.Fortunately,Janewaseventuallyrescuedandsheandherhusbandcontinuedtheirexcitingandunforgettablejourney.3、仔细品读原文，关注特定情节：对续写有推动或暗示作用的情节。特定情节续写点：

____________________________________________________________照应方式：____________________________________________________________Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.第1段天黑后Jane独自一人感到后悔想念他们的感受。AgainJanelayawakeonlyinthedark,missingTomandherfamilydesperatelyandwantingtobethemimmediately.4、仔细品读原文，留意细节描写：语言描写、动作描写、神态描写、外貌描写、环境描写、情感变化描写

细节描写可续写点

照应方式

动作语言心理语言动作心理I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp.Theystartedtoquarrel.Janewassoangry.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Thebestspottocampistheplacewhereyouare.HowshewishedshehadneverquarreledwithTom!HerangerandtirednessweresweptawaytheinstantshesawTom.Or

HerangerandtirednesswereovertakenbytheloveshefeltforTom.5、仔细品读原文，关注高频词：原文中反复出现或重点描写的特定物品。高频词可续写点：____________________________________________________________照应方式：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________helicopter,yellowblouse续写第二段可写Janewavedheryellowblouseonhearingthehelicopter.Tomspottedheryellowblousefromthehelicopter.6.仔细品读原文，留意原文结尾，捕捉可续写点，续写时你会如何照应续写点。原文结尾续写点：____________________________________________________________照应方式：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Janegatheredherstrengthtowalktoanopenarea,wavingheryellowblouse.Tohergreatjoy,thehelicopterdidn’tflyawaythistime.7.仔细品读原文，留意所给首句：第二段的开头隐藏着第一段结尾所包含的信息。所给首句续写____________________________________________________________照应方式：____________________________________________________________Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Paragraph２:

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.第二段续写可写ShewassafewithTom.Toherrelief,sheneedn’tstayintheforestforanothernight.捕捉和照应续写点

品读首段提炼原文主题关注特定情节留意细节描写关注高频词留意原文结尾解读续写所给首句契诃夫之枪

Chekhov'sGun)Writingtip:Findoutthegunsandfirethem.Respondtothedetailsmentionedinthegivenmaterials.Possibleversions:Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.ItwasevenharderforJanetofindthelake.Shestoppedandrestedagainstatreebythestream.“lshouldn'thavequarreledwithTomaboutthetinythings."sheregretted,"lflhadn’twalkedawayangrily,Iwouldn’thavegotlost."AgainJanelayawakeinthedark,missingTomandherfamily.HerangerwasovertakenbytheloveshefeltforTom.Sheknewhewasconcernedabouthersafetyandwassearchingforher.Gradually,shecalmeddownandfellasleep.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Shebecameenergeticafteranight'ssleep.Aftereatingsomeberries,shemovedontofindthelake.Walkingalongthestream,JanewaswavingheryellowblouseandprayingthatTomwouldfindhersoon.Herprayerwasreallyheard!Tomspottedheryellowblouseinthehelicopter.Tomdashedtohugherassoonasthehelicopterlanded.Theyapologizedtoeachother,forgaveeachotherwithtearsintheireyesandwenthomehappily,planningnextcampintheforestagain.Possibleversions:Paragraph1:

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnig