高考英语读后续写练习写作训练：个人成长类之即将退休教师音乐会对教学和学生的新认知自我疗愈（含解析）

读后续写练习写作训练：个人成长类之即将退休教师音乐会对教学和

学生的新认知自我疗愈（含解析）

读后续写（温州市2025届高三第一次适应性考试）

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Thestagelightsinthemusichalldarkened,asthenextschooFsconcertbandsettledonstage.

TheFirstChair,ayoungviolinist,calleduponeachsectiontoplay,tuningthemwithprecision

andgrace.Themomentthemusicaldirectorappeared,awaveofapplausefilledtheair.

TheannualHighSchoolMusicFestivalwasthehighlightofmyyear.Asamusicteacher,I

nevermissedasession,alwaysamazedbytheextraordinarytalentsthemusicaldirectorsinspired

intheirstudents.Butthisyearmightbemylastvisit.Withagecatchingup,mydesirefor

retirementwasgrowingstronger.

Honestly,therewasalwaysatouchofdissatisfactionandenvyinmyheartasIwatched

theseschoolbands,becauseIhadneverbeenabletodevelopabandtothislevel.Itaughtina

smallprimaryschool.Mystudentsplayedbeginnermusic,andtheywerehappywhenwe

managedtoplayfromthestartallthewaytotheendofapiece,withalltheinstrumentsfinishing

together.Thecomplexitiesoffulltone,dynamiccontrol,andbalancewerebeyondtheirabilities.

Asthebandopenedwiththeirfirstpiece,thestrikingsoundofviolins,accompaniedbythe

livelynotesofpianos,setmyheartpounding.Wouldn'titbegreattobethemusicaldirectorfor

oneofthesemassivehighschoolbands?Ithoughtasthemusictransportedme.Whenthelast

notesrangout,therewasabriefsilencebeforethunderousapplauseerupted.Myagingeyes

scanned（察看）thestage,seekingfamiliarfacesamongtheperformers.Butmyvisionwasno

longersharpenoughtorecognizeanyone.

Duringtheteabreak,Iheadedtowardtheentrancehall."MissJones!^^ayoungman'svoice

cutthroughthecrowd.Irecognizedtheconcertuniformhewaswearing.Itwastheveryviolinist

Ihadbeenadmiring.Puzzled,!searchedhisfaceforfamiliarfeatures.ItturnedouttobeBradley,

aformerstudentofminewhowasdifficulttoforget.Schoolworkhadbeenhardforhim,andhe

hadstruggledthroughallhissubjects.Itwasapleasantsurprisetomeethimhere.Wesatdown

andhadachat.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Irememberedthedaywhenheaskedtojointheschoolband.

IwasstillsmilingasImademywaybacktothemusichall.

积累原文素材，认真审读原文

原文分析：thekighli/htof（积累）

Thestagelightsinthemusichalldarkened,asthenextschoolfsconcertband

settledonstage（状从）.TheFirstChair,ayoungviolinist,calleduponeachsectiontoplay,tuning

themwithprecisionandgrace（非谓语动词做伴随动作）.Themomentthemusicaldirector

appeared（状从复合连词）,awareofaDDlausefittedtheair（积累）.

TheannualHighSchoolMusicFestivalwasthehi史hli史htofmyyear.Asamusicteacher,I

nevermissedasession,alwaysamazedbytheextraordinarytalents（非谓语动词做主语的未卜语）

themusicaldirectorsinspiredintheirstudents（定从）.Butthisyearmightbemylastvisit.With

agecatchingup（非谓语动词做后置定语）,nzydesireforretirementwasgrow加殳stron史er.

Honestly、therewasalwaysatouchofdissatisfactionandinmyheartasIwatched

theseschoolbands（状从）,becauseIhadneverbeenabletodevelopabandtothislevel.Itaught

inasmallprimaryschool.Mystudentsplayedbeginnermusic,andtheywerehappyw/ze王we

managedtoplayfromthestartallthewaytotheendofapiece,withalltheinstrumentsfinishing

together（非谓语动词做后置定语）.Thecomplexitiesoffulltone,dynamiccontrol,andbalance

werebeyondtheirabilities.

Asthebandopenedwiththeirfirstpiece,thestrikingsoundofviolins,accompaniedbythe

livelynotesofpianos（非谓语动词做后置定语）,setmyheartDoundin史.Wouldn'titbegreatto

bethemusicaldirectorforoneofthesemassivehighschoolbands?Ithoughtasthemusic

transportedme（状从）.Whenthelastnotesransout,therewasabriefsilence

beforethunderousaDDlauseerupted.Myagingeyesscanned（察看）thestage,seekingfamiliar

facesamongtheperformers（非谓语动词做伴随动作）.Butmavisionwasnolongersharu

enoughtorecognizeanyone.

Duringtheteabreak,Iheadedlowwdtheentrancehall."MissJones!"aman'svoice

cutthroughthecrowd.Irecognizedtheconcertuniformhewaswearing（定从）.Itwasthevery

violinistIhadbeenadmiring（定从）.Puzzled（非谓语动词做adj主语补语）Jsearchedhis

faceforfamiliarfeatures.ItturnedouttobeBradley,aformerstudentofminewhowasdifficult

toforget（定从）.Schoolworkhadbeenhardforhim,andhehadstruggledthroughallhis

subjects.Itwasapleasantsurprisetomeethimhere.Wesatdownandhadachat.

原文语法、重点词汇短语和续写思路

重点词汇短语

语法现象分析

1.并列句与复合句

-例如:“Thestagelightsinthemusichalldarkened,asthenextschool'sconcertband

settledonstage.^^

-分析：此句是并列复合句，由并列连词“as”连接两个分句。前者陈述舞台灯光暗下来，

后者描述乐队上场，两者表明时间上的相继关系。

2.定语从句

-例如："Irecognizedtheconcertuniformhewaswearing.^^

-分析：这里"hewaswearing”是定语从句，修饰“concertunifdnrT,解释了"unifdrm"的

细节信息。此结构增强了句子的描述性。

3.分词结构

-例如："Puzzled,Isearchedhisfaceforfamiliarfeatures.

-分析：句中“Puzzled”为分词做状语，表明说话人“疑惑”的状态，使句子更加简洁、

流畅，表现人物情感。

4.省略现象

-例如:"Wouldn'titbegreattobethemusicaldirectorforoneofthesemassivehighschool

bands?”

-分析：该句省略了部分主句结构，但完整意思为"Wouldn'titbegreatifIcouldbethe

musicaldirector...这种结构在英语口语及书面表达中常用。

常见搭配与语料积累

1.Settleonstage-登台

-定义：登上舞台，为演出准备就绪。

-近义词：takethestage,getonstage

-例句：Thedancerssettledonstageastheaudiencequieteddown.

2.Waveofapplause-一阵掌声

-定义：观众给予的热烈掌声。

-近义词：roundofapplause

-例句：Awaveofapplausebrokeoutastheleadsingertookabow.

3.Catchupwith-追赶上；(在此处)指"年老体衰”

-定义：用于形容岁月的积累或某种状态的显现。

-近义词：getold,age

-例句：Theyearsfinallycaughtupwithhim,makinghimconsiderretirement.

4.Dynamiccontrol-动态控制

-定义：在音乐中掌控音量的变化。

-例句：Theorchestraldynamiccontrolwasimpressive,shiftingsmoothlybetweensoft

andloud.

5.Cutthroughthecrowd-穿过人群

-定义：从拥挤的人群中穿过或喊出。

-近义词：makeone'swaythrough

-例句：Thesecurityguardscutthroughthecrowdtoreachthefrontofthestage.

生词短语及解析

1.Precision(n.)-精确

-词性：名词

-近义词：accuracy

-反义词：inaccuracy

-例句：Theexperimentrequireshighprecisiontogetaccurateresults.

2.Highlight(n.)-最精彩部分

-词性：名词

-近义词：mainevent

-反义词：lowpoint

-例句：Thehighlightoftheeveningwasthegrandfireworksdisplay.

3.Envy(n.)-嫉妒

-词性：名词

-近义词：jealousy

-反义词：admiration

-例句：Shelookedatherfriend'ssuccesswithenvy.

4.Thunderous(adj.)-雷鸣般的

-词性：形容词

-近义词：deafening,roaring

-反义词：quiet,silent

-例句：Thethunderousapplauselastedseveralminutesaftertheperformance.

5.Striking(adj.)-引人注目的

-词性：形容词

-近义词：noticeable,remarkable

-反义词：unremarkable

-例句：Herstrikingappearancemadeherstandoutinthecrowd.

续写思路与框架

1.提取情节：本段故事的情节围绕一位年迈的音乐教师与曾经的学生重逢的情感。关

键情节包括回忆学生加入乐队的情景及对学生成长的欣慰。

2.确定情感基调：续写要维持温馨、感动的情感基调，表达老师对学生成长的欣慰与

对自己音乐教育事业的反思。

3.框架构思：

-第一段：回忆Bradley加入乐队的情景，可以写老师对他初次加入时的鼓励，或教

学中的点滴回忆。使用细节增强情感，例如学生的努力、老师的指导。

-第二段：老师从回忆中回到现实，带着微笑回到音乐厅，可能对自己曾付出的努力

感到欣慰，也带着继续支持学生们的决心。

4.实施策略：

-情感对比：在回忆和现实中体现出教师从略带遗憾到满足的心理变化。

-使用细节：通过对学生表现、乐曲演奏的细致描写丰富故事。

-合理衔接：续写应与原文情节无缝衔接，尤其注意人物情感的延续性。

注意事项

-人物一致性：确保人物的行为、语言与之前的描述一致。

-情节自然流畅：避免情节跳跃和生硬的情感转变。

-语言风格：保持原文的书面表达风格，适当使用复杂句型和生动的词汇，使得续写

更加真实生动。

重点单词分析

范文中的重点词汇

重点生词短语和常见搭配

1.Clutch-n

-词性：动词

-近义词：grip,holdtightly

-反义词：release,letgo

-例句：Thechildclutchedhismother'shand,refusingtoletgo./Sheclutchedherbag

tightlyasshewalkedthroughthecrowdedstreet.

2.Legacy-遗产，成就

-词性：名词

-近义词：heritage,inheritance

-反义词：none（遗产无反义词）

-例句：Sheleftbehindalegacyofkindnessandgenerosity./Histeachingsbecamealegacy

forfuturegenerations.

3.Encourage-鼓励

-词性：动词

-近义词：inspire,motivate

-反义词：discourage

-例句：Myteacherencouragedmetopursuemydreams./Thewarmapplauseencouraged

theperformertocontinue.

4.Dedication-奉献

-词性：名词

-近义词：commitment,devotion

-反义词：apathy,indifference

-伊J句：Hisdedicationtohisworkwasadmiredbyall./Thevolunteers9dedicationmade

theeventagreatsuccess.

5.Perseverance-坚持不懈

-词性：名词

-近义词：persistence,determination

-反义词：givingup,surrender

-例句：Herperseveranceinthefaceofchallengeswasinspiring./Perseveranceoftenleads

tosuccess.

以下是根据欧路词典整理的词汇表，包括词性、词义、近义词、联想词和例句：

1.darken

-词性：动词

-词义：变暗，使变黑

-近义词：dim,obscure

-联想词：lighten,brighten

-例句：Asthecloudsgathered,theskybegantodarken./Thestagelightsdarkened,

creatingadramaticeffect.

2.settle

-词性：动词

-词义：安顿，解决，定居

-近义词：resolve,establish

-联想词：relax,inhabit

-伊］句：Theydecidedtosettleinthesmalltown./Theconcertbandsettledonstage,readyto

perform.

3.pound

-词性：动词

-词义：重击，心脏跳动

-近义词：beat,hammer

-联想词：strike,thump

-例句：Herheartbegantopoundwithexcitement./Hepoundedonthedoor,demandingto

beletin.

4.note

-词性：名词/动词

-词义：音符，注意到

-近义词：observe,remark

-联想词：tone,record

-例句：Shetooknoteofthekeypointsduringthelecture./Thefirstnoteofthesongwas

perfectlyonpitch.

5.prestigious

-词性：形容词

-词义：有声望的，著名的

-近义词：famous,reputable

-联想词：renowned,distinguished

-例句：Hegraduatedfromaprestigiousuniversity./Theawardisgivenbyaprestigious

organization.

6.rhythm

-词性：名词

-词义：节奏，韵律

-近义词：beat,cadence

-联想词：tempo,flow

-例句：Therhythmofthemusicmadeeveryonewanttodance./Shehasagreatsenseof

rhythmwhenplayingthedrums.

7.clutch

-词性：动词

-词义：紧握，抓住

-近义词：grip,holdtightly

-联想词：grasp,seize

-例句：Sheclutchedherbagtightlyasshewalkedthroughthecrowdedstreet./Thechild

clutchedhismother'shand,refusingtoletgo.

8.audible

-词性：形容词

-词义：听得见的

-近义词：perceptible,clear

-联想词：distinct,loud

-例句：Hervoicewasbarelyaudibleoverthenoise./Thedistantthunderwasjustaudible.

9.unwavering

-词性：形容词

-词义：坚定不移的，不动摇的

-近义词：steady,resolute

-联想词：firm,determined

-例句：Hehasanunwaveringcommitmenttohisgoals./Herfaithinhimwasunwavering.

10.nurture

-词性：动词

-词义：培养，滋养

-近义词：foster,cultivate

-联想词：support,encourage

-例句：Parentsneedtonurturetheirchildren'stalents./Shenurturedherdreamof

becomingawriter.

11.skeptical

-词性：形容词

-词义：怀疑的

-近义词：doubtful,suspicious

-联想词：cynical,questioning

-伊J句：Shewasskepticalabouttheplan'ssuccess./Manypeopleareskepticalofnew

technology.

12.obstacle

-词性：名词

-词义：障碍，阻碍

-近义词：barrier,hurdle

-联想词：difficulty,hindrance

-例句：Thebiggestobstacletosuccessisoftenfearoffailure./Theyfacedmanyobstacles

duringtheirjourney.

13.diligently

-词性：副词

-词义：勤勉地，用心地

-近义词：carefully,conscientiously

-联想词：earnestly,persistently

-例句：Sheworkeddiligentlyonherproject./Hestudieddiligentlyforhisexams.

14.persistence

-词性：名词

-词义：坚持不懈

-近义词：perseverance,tenacity

-联想词：determination,resolve

-例句：Herpersistencehelpedherovercometheobstacles./Persistenceisthekeyto

achievingone'sgoals.

15.timid

-词性：形容词

-词义：胆怯的，害羞的

-近义词：shy,fearful

-联想词：nervous,apprehensive

-例句：Hewastootimidtospeakupinclass./Thelittlegirlgaveatimidsmile.

16.bedestinedto

-词性：词组

-词义：注定要

-近义词：bemeantto,befatedto

-联想词：inevitably,surely

-例句：Shewasdestinedtobecomeagreatmusician./Theyseemeddestinedtomeet.

17.dim

-词性：形容词/动词

-词义：昏暗的，使变暗

-近义词：dark,faint

-联想词：dull,obscure

-例句：Thelightintheroomwasverydim./Hisvisiondimmedashegrewolder.

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