九年级下册 英语 第三模块第六单元《Lesson 5 Writing》课件

Unit6Caring

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yourhealthLesson5Writing九年级下册—上海教育出版社—英语—第三模块第六单元3.运用表示关心、建议和祝愿的表达方法。4.使用“蛛网图”列写作要点并根据写作步骤完成邮件和修改。2.列出“慰问建议类邮件”的格式及内容要素。1.认读和理解单词：recovery。Bytheendofthelesson,Ihopewecan:学习目标

Pre-writing1AnemailtoasickclassmateMary’sproblemWhat’swrongwithMandy?WhatdoesMarywanttodo?Sheissick.ShewantstowriteanemailtoMandy.GettheformatA(P92A)Get

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formatReceiver’snameSender’snameGreetingBodyClosingThanks/Bestwishes,Sender’snameP92AJimhaswrittenanemailtohisclassmateAndyinhospital.①⑥⑤④③②GettheoutlineLearnusefulexpressionsBGettheoutline(body)UsefulExpressions

Howtoshowyourconcern:

I’msosorrytohearthat…Thatsoundsterrible!

I’msoupsettohearthat…Icouldn’tbelievethat!

WhathappenedtoAndy?HowdoesJimfeelaboutit?CauseofillnessshowconcernTheproblemshe/shefacesGettheoutline(body)WhatistheproblemthatAndyfaces?Causeofillnessshowconcern+Thingswecandoforhim/herGettheoutline(body)WhatwillJimdoforAndy?Theproblemshe/shefacesCauseofillnessshowconcernSuggestionsforhim/her+Gettheoutline(body)WhatdoesJimadviseAndytodo?UsefulExpressions

Howtogivesuggestions:

Itisgood/wisetodo…+Thingswecandoforhim/herTheproblemshe/shefacesCauseofillnessshowconcern

Howtogivesuggestions:Youshould/cando...Youhadbetterdo...Remembertodo...Whynotdo...?Whydon’tyoudo…?What/Howaboutdoing...Itisimportantforsb.todo…Doingsth.is…UsefulExpressionsExpresswishesGettheoutline(body)returntoanormalstateofhealth[rɪˈkʌvəri]UsefulExpressions

HowtoexpresswishesIwishyouallthebestforarapidrecovery.Ihopeyou’llgetwellsoon.Ihopeyouwillgetoveritsoon.

Suggestionsforhim/her++Thingswecandoforhim/herTheproblemshe/shefacesCauseofillnessshowconcernn.恢复While-writing2Let’sfinishMary’semailtoMandytogether!theseniorhighschoolentranceexaminationMary’sclassmateMandyisgoingtotake

.Butrecently,shefoundthatshesufferedfromthe

ofit.Shecouldnotsleepwellatnightandoftenfeltnervousinthedaytime.Afewdaysago,Shefellasleepinclassand

.Thedoctortoldhertostayathomeforseveraldays.Marywantstowriteanemailtoher.Writingtask:✭aheadache✭astomachache✭atoothache✭acold✭afever✭asorethroatMandy?SpeakingstresshadacoldMaryandMandyLet’sfinishMary’semailtogether!

Analyze

(审）人称:时态：2.Organize(构）格式:段落:3.List(列）提纲和要点Writingsteps:ThefirstandsecondpersonDependonthetimeoftheaction6parts3paragraphsList（列）TheproblemsMandyfacesSuggestionsforMandyExpresswishesMary’semailtoMandy1.Sufferedfromthestressoftheseniorhighschoolentranceexamination.2.Hadacold.1.Guardagainstthestress:2.Preventacold：Reading✭Bepositive✭Learntorelax✭Takeupahobby✭Takecareofyourbody✭LaughParagraph1Paragraph2Paragraph2Paragraph2Paragraph31..2..3..…1..2..3..…1).2)..…5minutestofinishtheleftpartsThingsMarycandoforMandyCauseofillnessShowconcernMary’semail

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(审）2.Organize(构）3.List(列）4.Connect(连）过渡词、句、段等5.Polish(润）6.Check(查）人称时态格式要点错误（语法、拼写、标点符号等等）Writingsteps:15minutestofinishtheEmailMary’sclassmateMandyisgoingtotaketheseniorhighschoolentranceexamination.Butrecently,shefoundthatshesufferedfromthestressofit.Shecouldnotsleepwellatnightandoftenfeltnervousinthedaytime.Thismorning,Shefellasleepinclassandhad

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cold.Thedoctortoldhertostayathomeforseveraldays.Marywantstowriteanemailtoher.Post-writing3MaryDearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhaveacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlentmynotebooktoyouhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remenbertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthink.Mostofussufferfromit.Youshouldbepositive.Youshouldlearnrelax.Youshouldsleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpresureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMandyChecklistAsamplefrommystudent12345DearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhaveacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlentmynotebooktoyouhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remenbertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthink.Mostofussufferfromit.Youshouldbepositive.Youshouldlearnrelax.Youshouldsleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpresureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMaryMandyEvaluationchart检查项目GoodOkayPoorContent内容邮件格式5个内容要点Language语言语法错误拼写错误标点错误句式多样性Coherence连贯性连贯得体MaryDearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhaveacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlentmynotebooktoyouhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remenbertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthink.Mostofussufferfromit.Youshouldbepositive.Youshouldlearnrelax.Youshouldsleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpresureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMandyChecklistGrammarmistake?hadlendandtoMaryDearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhaveacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlentmynotebooktoyouhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remenbertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthink.Mostofussufferfromit.Youshouldbepositive.Youshouldlearnrelax.Youshouldsleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpresureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMandyMaryEvaluationchart检查项目GoodOkayPoorContent内容邮件格式5个内容要点Language语言语法错误拼写错误标点错误句式多样性Coherence连贯性连贯得体MaryDearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhaveacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlentmynotebooktoyouhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remenbertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthink.Mostofussufferfromit.Youshouldbepositive.Youshouldlearnrelax.Youshouldsleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpresureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMandyChecklistSpellingmistake?severalRememberpressureMaryDearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhaveacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlentmynotebooktoyouhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remenbertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthink.Mostofussufferfromit.Youshouldbepositive.Youshouldlearnrelax.Youshouldsleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpresureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMandyEvaluationchart检查项目GoodOkayPoorContent内容邮件格式5个内容要点Language语言语法错误拼写错误标点错误句式多样性Coherence连贯性连贯得体MaryDearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhaveacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlentmynotebooktoyouhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remenbertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthink.Mostofussufferfromit.Youshouldbepositive.Youshouldlearnrelax.Youshouldsleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpresureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMandyChecklistPunctuationmistake?MaryDearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhaveacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlentmynotebooktoyouhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remenbertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthink.Mostofussufferfromit.Youshouldbepositive.Youshouldlearnrelax.Youshouldsleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpresureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMandyMaryEvaluationchart检查项目GoodOkayPoorContent内容邮件格式5个内容要点Language语言语法错误拼写错误标点错误句式多样性Coherence连贯性连贯得体MaryDearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhaveacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlentmynotebooktoyouhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remenbertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthink.Mostofussufferfromit.Youshouldbepositive.Youshouldlearnrelax.Youshouldsleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpresureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMandyChecklistVariedsentencepatterns?It’simportanttoYouhadbetterMaryDearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhaveacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlentmynotebooktoyouhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remenbertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthink.Mostofussufferfromit.Youshouldbepositive.Youshouldlearnrelax.Youshouldsleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpresureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMandyEvaluationchart检查项目GoodOkayPoorContent内容邮件格式5个内容要点Language语言语法错误拼写错误标点错误句式多样性Coherence连贯性连贯得体MaryDearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhaveacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlentmynotebooktoyouhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remenbertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthink.Mostofussufferfromit.Youshouldbepositive.Youshouldlearnrelax.Youshouldsleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpresureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMandyChecklistTransitionalwords/phrases/sentences?becauseFirstly,…Secondly,…Besides,…Therearestillsomewaystoovercomeit.231MaryDearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhaveacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlentmynotebooktoyouhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remenbertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthink.Mostofussufferfromit.Youshouldbepositive.Youshouldlearnrelax.Youshouldsleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpresureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMandyEvaluationchart检查项目GoodOkayPoorContent内容邮件格式5个内容要点Language语言语法错误拼写错误标点错误句式多样性Coherence连贯性连贯得体Morewritingskills原句：Youshouldbepositive.表达观点技巧：Topicsentences+Supportingdetails（解释或者举例）原句：It’simportanttolearntorelax.Addexplanation:(添加解释)Addexamples:(添加例子)改后：Youshouldbepositiveandbelievethatyourlifeisalwaysfullofhope.改后：It'simportanttolearntorelax.Forexample,youcantakeawalk,listentomusicorwatchafilm.ReadingMaryDearMandy,I’msoupsettohearthatyouhadacold.Doyoufeelbetternow?I’mafraidthatyouwillhaveahardtimestayingathomeforseveraldays.Youmustbeworriedaboutyourschoolwork.Icanlendmynotebooktoyouandhelpyouwithyourstudieswhenyoureturn.Remembertodrinkmorewaterandkeepwarm.Asforthestress,itisnotasterribleasyouthinkbecausemostofussufferfromit.Therearestillsomewaystoovercomeit.

Firstly,youshouldbepositiveandbelievethatyourlifeisalwaysfullofhope.Secondly,It'simportanttolearntorelax.Forexample,youcantakeawalk,listentomusicorwatchafilm.Besides,youhadbettersleepenough.Inaword,don'tputtoomuchpressureonyourself.Iwishyouallthebestforaquickrecovery.Cheers,MaryMandymodifiedversionSummary4Whatmakesagoodemailtoasickclassmate?Receiver’snameSender’snameGreetingBodyClosingSender’snameRightformatGoodcontentCauseofillnessShowyourconcernTheproblemshe/shefacesSuggestionsforhim/herThingsyoucandoforhim/herExpresswishes✭✭ProperlanguageVariedsentencepatternsCoherence

AddsupportingdetailsNomistakes多样的句式增加细节无错误连贯性Homework51.Reviseandimproveyouremailusingtheevaluationchart.2.Exchangeyouremailwithyourclassmateandevaluateit.Thankyou！

Unit6Caring

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yourhealthLesson5Writing(答疑）九年级下册—上海教育出版社—英语—第三模块第六单元答疑时间写作中常见问题和错误：一、无主语例如：1.Haven’tseenyouthesedays.

Ihaven’tseenyouthesedays.2.Afterschool,cantakeawalkwithfriends.

Afterschool,youcantakeawalkwithfriends.

这事是谁做的？改进措施：添加主语。We/They

I/h