01指导性作文之夹叙夹议文-2022年上海高考英语考前写作冲刺强化集训

备战高考作文之夹叙夹议文备战高考作文之夹叙夹议文理论指导及实战演练要点精析要点精析夹叙夹议文是一种比较常见的写作文体,以记人叙事为主,记叙人物的经历或事物/事件发生、发展、变化的过程。兼有总结全文，深化主题。材料常涉及社会生活现象、人物或自然景物。无论记人还是叙事都要通过叙述、描写来加以表达,把人物的经历或行为、发生的事情/事件用一定的顺序和语言技巧叙述出来。在叙述过程中“人以事显,事由人生”,人和事是密不可分的。在一篇记叙文中记人、写景、叙事往往是交织在一起的,不能简单地分裂开。高考作文一般都不会单纯的记叙某事，而是夹叙夹议。课堂典例课堂典例作文要求：你是王海,是学校学生会主席,最近你做了一次调查,发现你校学生都不愿在学校食堂(canteen)就餐,有的则把食物丢进垃圾桶。请你以学生会主席的身份向校长反映你调查的结果,并谈谈你的看法。命题解读：本文属于多种文体综合写作,书信体的格式加上夹叙夹议,要求：1.书信体的格式; 2.对学生就餐情况作陈述或描述; 3.就此现象作议论。DearPrincipal,I’mWangHai,presidentoftheStudents’Union.Iamwritingtoyoutoreportanunpleasantphenomenonthatisgoingonintheschoolcanteen.Recently,I’veconductedaresearchandfoundthatmostofthestudentsinourschooldonotfeellikediningintheschoolcanteen.Someofthemeventhrowthefoodintotherubbishbin.Amongthefactorsthesurveypresented,themajorconcernslieintheslowpaceofthestaffsserviceandtheplaindishesoftheschoolcanteen①.Asstudentsintheseniorhighschool,we’reallbusywiththeschoolwork.Unfortunately,theinefficiencyofthecanteencostsustoomuchtime,whichmakesusturntofastfood.What’smore,wehavequitefewchoicesofdishes,andinfact,they’renotsatisfactoryinqualityandflavor,whichmayresultintheunpleasantwasteaswell.Inmyopinion,itishightimeforourcanteentomakesomeimprovements.First,thereshouldbemorewindowssellingfoodandamoreefficientmanagingsystem.Second,variousdishesshouldbeaddedtothemenuandthefoodqualityneedsimproving.Ontheotherhand,studentsshouldbeeducatedtorespectothers’laborandavoidwastingfoodinthefuture.Withthejointefforts,I’msurethatnexttime,thecanteenwilleasthebestchoicetosatisfythestudents’need②.Yourssincerely,WangHai结构点评书信体的格式：日期、称呼、正文、结束敬语和签名五个部分完整正文部分先描写现象后论述：1. 开门见山点明写信目的：反映学生就餐情况,反映调查结果;2. 分析论述引起不良现象的几个原因;3. 提出解决的措施;4. 对未来学生就餐情況进行展望。语言点评第一段：一短一长句(that引导的定语从句)交代了自己的身份和写信的目的;接着用一长(that引导的宾语从句)一短句描述了学生就餐情况；第二段：①句总启论述;用liein分析原因所在：食堂服务的慢节奏和食堂乏味的菜;用一短一长句(which引导的非限制性定语从句)分析第一个原因;What’smore连接两个并列的原因;用and连接的并列句和which引导的非限制性定语从句分析了第二个原因；第三段：用“itishightimefor...todo...”提出解决的措施;用“First”“Second”论述食堂应采取的措施;“Ontheotherhand”表述从学生的角度应采取的措施;三个并列的“should”表达作者肯定的态度；第四段：“Withthejointefforts”承上启下：概括第三段的三个措施;②句展望未来。实战演练实战演练演练1就你读过的一本书,写一篇读后感。具体要求如下：* 写出书名及作者* 简单介绍书中你感兴趣的人物、情节或思想(选一即可)* 说明感兴趣的理由例文：Asthesavinggoes,goodbootsaregoodteachers.Thebookswereadexertsignificantinfluenceonourmentalgrowthaswegetmature.Asforme,whatimpressesmemostisTheLittlePrincewrittenbyaFrenchwriterAntoineSaintExupery.Undoubtedly,thestoryitselfabouttheprince’sadventureistouching.Butthefoodforthoughtbetweenlinesissomethingmorevaluable.Ofallthethoughtsthatthewriterwantedtoconvey,Iappreciatethisonemost,“Themostimportantthingsareinvisibletoeyes.”Iwasdeeplytouchedbyitatthefirstsight.Therearemanythingsthatwearebusypursuing：keyschools,goodjobs,money,reputation...Thelistseemstobeendlessandthereforeourscheduleisalwaysfulloftasks.However,whatmakesourlifemeaningfulissomethingapartfromthosevisible.Love,friendship,dreamsofrealizingourvalueactuallymakeuptheessenceoflifeandmeanwhiletheeffortsandthespiritsaddthebrightandshinningcolorstoourlife.“Themostimportantthingsareinvisibletoeyes.”Bearitinourmindandletitguideusforamoreworthylife.演练2临近毕业，回顾三年高中生活，你肯定参加过很多班集体活动。请具体描述你参加过的最难忘的一次活动，并简要说明这次活动对你产生的影响。Howtimeflies!ItwillbeonlyamonthbeforeIgraduatefrommyseniorhighschool.RecallingwhatIhaveexperienced,Ikeepthemilitarytraininginmind,whichwasthefirstclassactivityofthelifeinseniorhighschool.Withthesunshininginthebluesky,webeganourmilitarytrainingwithgreatexcitementandconfidence.Sweatfallingdowntheface,westoodlikesoldiers.However,astimewentby,plaintsemergedoneafteranother.“Whymustwetakepartinsuchatoughtraining?”“What’sthemeaningofwalkinglikethat?”Someofmyclassmatesevenpretendedtofeeldizzyinordertoaskforasickleave.Butthemonitorsaid,“Sincewehavebeenhere,whynotpersevereuntilthelastminute?”Ourclassteacheralsoencouragedusnottogiveuphalfway.Inspiredbywhattheysaid,thewholeclasskeptonhardtraining,andwonthefirstplaceinthepetitioneventually,whichwasthebestrewardofthe7dayefforts.Notonlydidthetoughtrainingleaveadeepimpressiononmebutitalsoincreasedmycourageoffacinguptogreatchallenges.Bytakingpartinthisunforgettableactivity,I’vefullyrealizedthatgettingsomethingdoneisjustanacplishmentandgettingsomethingdonewellisanachievement.Fromthenon,wheneverImeetwithdifficultiesinmystudy,Iwillalwaysstrivetothebestadvantage.演练3描述你在学校的一次难忘的活动。具体要求如下： 1. 详细描述活动的情况; 2. 简要表述你在活动中的感受。例文： Thursday,December27th,2020,wasthemostunforgettabledayinSeniorThreeforme.Itwasthefirsttime,aswellasthelasttimethatIhadperformedonthestageofourschoolattheclosingceremonyoftheSchoolArtFestival. Asscheduled,theceremonybeganat7o’clockthateveningandeveryonefeltexcited,awaitingthewonderfulperformances.Infact,theperformanceswereundoubtedlysensationallyterrific,butIjustcouldn’tbefullyabsorbedinthem.Iwasabitnervous.Atthesummonoftheteacher,nearly200SeniorThreestudents,includingme,wenttothebackofthestagetoprepareforoursingingperformance.Everyonetookhisplaceandafterthat,Icouldn’thelpthinkingthatitwasmylastArtFestivalandthatIshouldsparenoefforttoaddabrillianttouchtoit.Slowly,thecurtainwasdrawnup.Thereburstoutaloudapplauseintheaudience,louderthanwhateverI’dheard.Allthepeoplewereexpectingagreatdealofusandwewerestandingstill,everymuscleready.Atthesoundofthemusic,wethrewallthenervousnessintothewindandsangtoourheart’scontent.Togetherwesangoutourpassion,ourbeliefandourdreams.Thecharmofthesongfascinatedeveryoneandourresoundingvoicelastedintheauditorium.Absolutely,wesangfarbetterthananyofthepreviousrehearsalsandourperformanceturnedoutasuccess. Verysoon,we’llbidfarewelltoourbelovedAlmaMaterandheadedintoourbrightfuture.However,theunforgettablesceneofthatdaywillimpressmeuponmymindpermanently.演练4Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120~150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.疫情期间，作为社区青年志愿者的你，计划帮助老人团购生活必须品。你的计划如下：（1）计划团购那些物品（选择2至3件）；（2）选择的原因。【56题答案】【答案】Asamunityvolunteer,Iwanttohelptheelderlytobuysomedailynecessities,becausemanyofthemarenotabletousemobilephonestoorderandpayonline.Withobservationandconsideration,Ithinkfoodwhichishighinproteinandeasytocookshouldbebought.Iplantobuyeggs,noodles,fishandmilk,sothattheircookingcanbemucheasier.Inaddition,freshfruitsandvegetablesareequallyimportant,whichhelptokeeptheirdietbalancedandmakethemeathealthilyduringthisspecialtime.Ofcourse,dailyprotectiveappliancessuchasalcohol,disinfectantandfacemasksshouldalsobeincluded.Olderpeoplehaveweakimmunityandaremorelikelytobeinfectedwiththevirus.Ihopetohelptheelderlyduringtheepidemictoexpressourgratitudeandletthemfeelthewarmthofthemunity.【解析】【导语】这是一篇开放作文。假设作者是社区青年志愿者，计划帮助老人团购生活必须品，谈谈自己的计划购买什么以及原因。【详解】1.词汇积累能够做某事：becapableofdoingsth,→beabletodosth.计划做某事：intendtodosth.→plantodosth.重要的：significant→important差的，弱的：poor→weak2.句型拓展简单句变复合句原句：Ihopetohelptheelderlyduringtheepidemictoexpressourgratitudeandletthemfeelthewarmthofthemunity.拓展句：Ihopetohelptheelderlyduringtheepidemicthroughwhichwecanexpressourgratitudeandletthemfeelthewarmthofthemunity.【点睛】[高分句型1]Withobservationandconsideration,Ithinkfoodwhichishighinproteinandeasytocookfoodshouldbebought.（运用了which引导的定语从句）[高分句型2]Iplantobuyeggs,noodles,fishandmilk,sothattheircookingcanbemucheasier.（运用了sothat引导的目的状语从句）演练5（25分）Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.读书之妙趣，不仅在于书，还在于读书的人和事。请把你读书的趣事写下来，参加某一英文报征文大赛，与人分享。在征文中，你必须：1.回忆与同学或教师或家人的读书生活场景。2.简要谈谈对读书的感受。___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________参考范文：Whenyoung,Iwasaddictedtoreading,whethericstripsornovels.Itfeelslikeakindofbreathwithoutwhich