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WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.
So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”
Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewassilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.
Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.
Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.
WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”
Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.Paragraph1:
Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Paragraph2:
Iwenttotheteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.语篇分析Conflict1Solution1①WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest,Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.②So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.③IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny,andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.语篇分析Conflict2Solution2④Whatdidthehorsethink,asspedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.…④…But,likeRevere'shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheekedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.⑤WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloudandsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin.Iwouldn’tcare.Teacher:看到我,表达祝贺1234512345Para.2:Iwenttotheteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.续写框架:五五拍戏法Para.1:WhenIalmostforgotthecontest,thenewscame.承上Teacher:消息内容——获奖I:决定亲自感谢老师被邀请参加颁奖典礼I:听后反应——开心承上永远不要让自我怀疑定义我们的生活I:继续写作+成为一名优秀作家I:表达感谢故事结局Teacher:鼓励我继续写作启下情感态度价值观升华①⑥⑦②③⑧⑨④⑤奖杯不仅属于我,也属于老师
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Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.第一句:Iwonthefirstprize.MyteachertoldmethatIhadwonthefirstprize.IwasinformedthatIhadwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest.Muchtomydisbeliefandjoy,IwasinformedthatIhadwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest.IwasinformedthatIhadwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest,feelingincredibleandoverjoyed.第二句:Iwashappyandsurprised.Hearingtheunexpectednews,Iwasovercomewithastonishmentanddelight.Hearingtheunexpectednews,IwassodelightedthatIjumpedupanddown.ThemomentIheardthenews,
myfacelitupwithdelight.第三句:Iwasinvitedtoattendtheawardpresentation.Thenextday,Iwasinvitedtoattendtheawardpresentation.
第四句:Theschoolmasterpresentedatrophytome.Atthepresentationceremony,theschoolmasterpresentedatrophytome,witharoundofthunderousapplause.第五句:Iknowthistrophynotonlybelongstome.Iknowthis
trophynotonlybelongstome,butalsobelongstomyteacher,withoutwhomIwouldbeunlikelytobeawardedtheprize.第六句:Idecidedtothankhiminperson.Therefore,
Idecidedtothankhiminperson.Para2:Icametotheteachersofficeaftertheawardpresentation.第一句:Myteacherstoodupandcongratulatedme.Atthesightofme,myteacherstoodupandhuggedmeenthusiastically,saying“Congratulations!Youreallyhaveagoodshotattellingstory.Iamproudofyou.”Seeingmycomingwiththetrophy,myteacherstoodupandhuggedmeenthusiastically.Atthesightofme,hesaidwithanadmiringsmile“Congratulations!Youreallyhaveagoodshotattellingstory.Iamproudofyou.”第二句:Iexpressedmythankstomyteacger.“Thankyou.Withoutyourhelp,Iwouldn'thaveachievedwhatIhavetoday.”Irespondedgratefully.“Thankyou.It’syouthatmakemefallinlovewithwriting.Withoutyourrecognitionandencouragement,Iwouldn'thavewonthep
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