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I书面表达aletterofthanks(感谢信)aletterofapplication(申请信)aletterofinquiry(咨询信)aletterofaskingforhelp(求助信)aletterofsuggestions(建议信)aletterofapology(道歉信)aletterofcomplaint(投诉信)aletterofcongratulations(祝贺信)aletterofrecommendation(推荐信)…Wehavelearnedtowrite…书面表达评讲:

假设你是光明中学的学生Mary，你答应了要去参加你好朋友Helen周末的生日聚会，但你因故不能赴约。请根据以下要点用英语给她写一封电子邮件：1.表示歉意；2.解释原因；3.另约时间见面。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。DearHelen,

Yourstruly,MaryAletterofapology(道歉信)Apieceofstudent’swork(学生作品）DearHelen,Iamwritingtotellyoumyapoligize.

IamsorryaboutthatIcouldn’ttakepartinyourbirthdayparty.BecauseImustdealwithsomethingimportantathome.Ihopeyoucanforgiveme.I’mverydisappointedandunhappyforcannottojoinyourbirthdayparty,soIdecidetohaveamealwithyounextweekend.Doyouagreemyidea?Ifyoucan,pleasereplymequickly.Thanks.Finally,Iwanttosaysorryagainandtellyou“Happybirthday!”Yourstruly,Mary

15分21-25分upgrade1.neatwriting书写3.content内容2.structure结构4.language语言WellorganizedandsmoothlydevelopedEverythingrequiredincludedNoChinglishNoGrammaticalmistakesExactlyusedwordsandrelativelychangedsentencepatternsWhatmakesagoodpieceofwriting?Goodfirstimpression★

content内容★

structure结构★language语言Upgradeyourwriting★structure结构道歉信写作“三步曲”：

表示歉意；

说明具体原因提出补救办法；

再次致歉希望得到理解。Para.1Para.2Para.3★content内容1.表示歉意；2.解释原因；3.另约时间见面。Task:Comparethe“explanation”givenbystudentAandB,CandDanddecidewhichoneisbetter.Why?A:

BecauseImustdealwithsomethingimportant.B:Thismorning,Iwasinformedthatthisweekend,I,togetherwithmyteammates,wouldrepresentourschooltotakepartinabasketballmatchinGuangzhou.Youknowplayingbasketballismydream,andchanceslikethisarerare.SoIhopeyoucanunderstandmysituation.

过于粗略，欠诚挚C:

BecauseIamill.YouknowIampoorinhealth.IneedtogotoseethedoctorsoIhavenotime.D:

Yesterday,onmywayhomeIwascaughtinaheavyrain.Asaresult,Ihavecaughtabadcold.AlthoughIhavetakensomemedicine,itdoesn’thelpmuch.Thedoctoraskedmetostayathomeforafewdays.Therefore,Ihavetobeabsentfromyourbirthdayparty.Iamreallysorryaboutthat.

叙述逻辑性差，解释欠说服力英语段落的三个基本特质：

围绕一个中心（Unity）；

句间联系紧密、过渡自然、合乎逻辑(Coherence)；

发展充分（Well-developedness）。B:Thismorning,Iwasinformedthatthisweekend,I,togetherwithmyteammates,wouldrepresentourschooltotakepartinabasketballmatchinGuangzhou.Youknowplayingbasketballismydream,andchanceslikethisarerare.SoIhopeyoucanunderstandmysituation.D:Yesterday,onmywayhomeIwascaughtinaheavyrain.Asaresult,Ihavecaughtabadcold.AlthoughIhavetakensomemedicine,itdoesn’thelpmuch.Thedoctoraskedmetostayathomeforafewdays.Therefore,Ihavetobeabsentfromyourbirthdayparty.Iamreallysorryaboutthat.解释原因(意外事件发生)---“记叙”段落

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(be)onabusinesstrip…takecareof/lookaftertaketurnstodobeinhospitalbeinformedthat…attendalectureberequiredtodobepresent(at…)beabsent(from…)Haveatry!

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get/be(seriously)injuredintheleg/haveone’slegbrokenstayinbed“解释原因”:构思--写下关键词—正式书写★language语言Correctthefollowingsentences1)Iamwritingtotellyoumyapologize.2)IamsorrythatIcan’tpresentyourbirthday.4)IamsorryaboutthatIcan'ttakepartinyourbirthdayparty.5)I’mverydisappointedandunhappyforcannottojoinyourbirthdayparty3).Ihopewecanbookothertimetomeet.1.正确表达1)Iamwritingtotellyoumyapologize.1.正确表达…toapologizetoyou.…tomakeanapologytoyou.2)IamsorrythatIcan’tpresentyourbirthday.bepresentat词汇使用3).Ihopewecanbookothertimetomeet.fix/setanothertime短语搭配4)IamsorryaboutthatIcan'ttakepartinyourbirthdayparty.5)I’mverydisappointedandunhappyforcannottojoinyourbirthdaypartyfornotbeingabletojoininasIcannotjoinin…句子结构2.优化表达Groupwork:improvethefollowingsentences.

①Lastweek,youaskedmetogotoyourbirthdayparty,andIsaidIwouldgo.②Wecanmeetnexttime.Pleasetellmeyourfreetime.③Shallwemeetnextweekend?Iwanttotellyoumanyinterestingthings.④Yesterday,myclassmatesaskedmetoplayfootballafterschoolandIagreed.Afterweplayedforsometime,Ibrokemylegseriously.2.优化表达Groupwork:improvethefollowingsentences.

①Lastweek,youaskedmetogotoyourbirthdayparty,andIsaidIwouldgo.Lastweek,Ipromisedyoutoattendyourbirthdayparty.②Wecanmeetnexttime.Pleasetellmeyourfreetime.Wecanmeetnexttimewhenitisconvenienttoyou.a.短语优先原则b.运用句型整合“零散”单句③Shallwemeetnextweekend?Iwanttotellyoumanyinterestingthings.Ican’twaittosharemyrecentexperiencesatschool/…withyou.④Yesterday,myclassmatesaskedmetoplayfootballafterschoolandIagreed.Afterweplayedforsometime,Ibrokemylegseriously.Yesterday,whileplayingfootballwithclassmates,Ihadmylegbroken/Iwasseriouslyinjuredinmyleg.c.用“具体词”代替“笼统词”/多“实”少“虚”d.弃“拖沓”，简练整合有用信息3.得体表达“另约时间见面”C:IwilltakethegifttomeetyouandsaysorrywhenIamfree.B:Ithinkwecanhaveapicnicnextweekendinthecentrepark.A:…soIdecidetohaveamealwithyounextweekend.Doyouagreewithmyidea?Ifyoucan,pleasereplytomequickly.Thanks.

Isitpossiblethat…?Ifso,pleaseletmeknowwhenitisconvenienttoyou/whenitisOKwithyou.

Shallwe…?

Howabout…?

Wouldyouliketo…?Ilookforwardtoyourreply.礼貌提议句型：应用商量口吻，礼貌表达道歉信中开头及结尾段常用句式和套话

Iamwritingtoexpressmyregretthat…

Iamwritingtoapologizefor…

Iamwritingtosaysorryfor…

Iwouldliketogiveyoumyapologyfor…

Iamverysorrytosaythat…

Iamterriblysorry,but…

Pleaseallowmetosaysorryagain.

Onceagain,Iamsorryforanyinconveniencecaused.

Pleaseacceptmyapologiesformyoversight(疏忽).

Isincerelyhopeyoucanunderstandmysituation/thinkinmypositionandacceptmyapologies.DearHelen,Iamwritingtotellyoumyapologize.

IamsorryaboutthatIcan’ttakepartinyourbirthdayparty.BecauseImustgotodealwithsomethingimportantathome.Ihopeyoucanforgiveme.I’mverydisappointedandunhappyforcannottojoinyourbirthdayparty,soIdecidetohaveamealwithyounextweekend.Doyouagreemyidea?Ifyoucan,pleasereplymequickly.Thanks.Finally,Iwanttosaysorryagainandtellyou“Happybirthday!”Yourstruly,Mary

正确表达优化表达得体表达★content★

structure★language三段恰当展开解释清楚Upgradeyourwriting：DearHelen,

Iamsorrythat

Ican’ttakepartinyourbirthdaypartyontheweekend.

Ihopeyoucanforgivemeif

youknowthereason.Thismorning,mygrandmasuddenlyfellillandnowsheisinhospital.Thedoctorsaidshehadtostayinhospitalforafewdays.AsmyfatherisawayonabusinesstripinShanghai,mymotherandIhavetotaketurnstolookafterher.Therefore,Icannotsparethetimetoattendyourbirthdayparty.

Isitpossiblethatwehaveamealtogetheronanotherday?Ifso,pleaseletmeknowyourdateofpreference.

Pleaseallowmetosaysorryagainandbestwishestoyou!

Yourstruly,

Mary

21-25分upgradeTipsinyourdailyEnglishlearning:1.Collectgoodwords/phrases/sentences;2.Readmore;3.Practicemakesperfect;4.Beconfidentanytime.Homework:

Recitethemodelessay;Rewriteyourwritinginyourcompositionbook.DearHelen,

I’mverysorrythatIcan’tgotoyourbirthdaypartythisweek