应用文技巧5：细节的增添与润色

musicMUSIC细节的增添与润色musicMUSIC1.列举具体的实例进行补充说明(1)我们青少年应尽我们所能保护环境、拯救地球。Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.→Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.Forexample,we

can

use

recyclable

bags

instead

of

plastic

bags,refuse

to

use

single-use

products,plant

more

trees

and

save

water

and

energy(我们可以用可回收袋代替塑料袋,拒绝使用一次性产品,种植更多的树木,节约水和能源).musicMUSIC(2)我要花一些时间和父母在一起。I’llspendsometimestayingwithmyparents.→I’llspendsometimestayingwithmyparents,chatting

with

them

and

doing

some

housework(与他们聊天和做一些家务).(3)我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。Iwouldliketoseekapenpalwhoisinterestedintravelingjustlikeme.→Iwouldliketoseekapenpalwhoisinterestedintravelingjustlikeme.If

possible,we

can

travel

together

or

share

traveling

experiences(如果可能的话,我们可以一起旅行或者分享旅行经历).musicMUSIC2.增添与所写信息相关的神态、动作、心理描写以及背景渲染等内容我发现了一些不良行为。Ifoundsomebadbehavior.→Ifoundsomebadbehavior.Some

people

scribbled

on

the

wall,some

people

played

soccer

on

the

lawn

and

some

people

threw

rubbish

everywhere(有些人在墙上乱涂乱画,有些人在草坪上踢足球,有些人到处扔垃圾).musicMUSIC3.增加相关信息的时间、地点等内容(1)我要和父母一起去超市购物。I’mgoingtodosomeshoppingwithmyparentsinthesupermarket.→I’mgoingtodosomeshoppingwithmyparentsinthesupermarketand

won’t

be

back

until

about

5:00

in

the

afternoon(直到下午五点左右才回来).(2)我已经带来了你让我归还的这两本书。Ihavebroughtwithmethetwobooksyouaskedmetoreturn.→Ihavebroughtwithmethetwobooksyouaskedmetoreturnto

the

City

Library(去市图书馆).musicMUSIC4.适当增加与所给信息相关的原因、结果、条件、让步、手段、目的等内容(1)假设你是李华,你的英国笔友Henry最近来信询问你高考后的暑假安排。请根据下面要点写一封回信,说明你的计划,并简述理由。要点:a.休息;b.读书;c.参加社会活动。①Ineedagoodrest.I’lldosomereading.→Ineedagoodrestbecause

I

do

feel

tired

after

the

hard

work

of

all

these

years(因为经过所有这些年的辛苦工作,我确实感到累).Ofcourse,I’lldosomereadingfor

fun,and

for

knowledge

as

well(为了乐趣也为了知识).musicMUSIC②I’lltakepartinsomesocialactivities.→If

I

have

free

time(如果我有时间),I’lltakepartinsomesocialactivities.→If

possible(如果可能的话),I’lltakepartinsomesocialactivities.(条件状语)→I’lltakepartinsomesocialactivitiesso

that/in

order

that

I

can

know

more

about

society(为了更好地了解社会).musicMUSIC(2)Tracy来电话说和你在博尔顿咖啡屋(BoltonCoffee)的见面取消。Tracycalled,sayingthatshecouldn’tmeetyouatBoltonCoffee.→Tracycalled,sayingthatshecouldn’tmeetyouatBoltonCoffeeas

she

had

something

important

to

do(因为她有重要的事情做).musicMUSIC5.结尾适当发挥,写出个人感受、评价、希望、愿景、倡议等(1)TiredasIwasthissummerholiday,IfeltveryhappyforwhatIdid.(个人感受)(2)AsfarasI’mconcerned,suchactivitiesarenecessaryandmeaningful.(评价)(3)Inaword,ifshewouldliketolearnChinese,Ihopeshewilldoitwell.(愿景)(4)Asstudents,it’sourdutytoprotectourschoolenvironmentandmakeitclean.(倡议)musicMUSIC【拓展训练】假如你是班长,你们学校本周日将组织一次参观首都博物馆的活动,请你写一个通知。相关内容如下:安排:1.上午8:00在学校大门口集合,集体乘车去首都博物馆;2.上午8:40在导游的带领下参观首都博物馆;3.中午12:00参观结束,集体乘车返回学校。musicMUSIC要求:1.参观过程中请自觉遵守公共秩序;2.馆内禁止录像和开闪光灯拍照;3.参观后每人写一篇日记。musicMUSIC注意:1.写作词数应为80个左右;2.通知的开头已为你写好,不计入总词数。Dearstudents,Attention,please.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________musicMUSIC【参考范文】Dearstudents,Attention,please.Ihavesomethingtotellyou.WearegoingtopayavisittotheCapitalMuseumthisSunday.Besuretoarriveattheschoolgatebefore8:00a.m.Wewillgotherebybustogether.Atabout8:40a.m.,we’llvisitthemuseumfollowingaguide.Thevisitwillbeoverataround12:00,andthenwe’llreturnbybus.Pleaseobservep