短文+教育、亲子互动类读后续写 讲义-2024届高三英语一轮复习

题型3：短文&教育/亲子互动类读后续写

一、短文

短文可以是叙述某个活动、自己的经历或说明某事物，介绍活动或事物时应条理清楚。时

态常用一般现在时或一般过去时。

短文的写作步骤：

1）简要概括事物/活动；

2）简要介绍活动/事物；

3）简要评价/感想。

【案例分析】

（2023•全国乙卷改编）学校英文报组织同学们分享自己在假期中学到的新技能，请你以此为

主题写一篇短文投稿内容包括：

1.简要描述；2.体验和感受。

注意:写作词数应为80左右

LearningaNewSkill

Lastsummer,Ilearnedhowtomakesomehome-cookeddisheslikeFriedEggwithTomato,

whichturnedouttobearewardingandfulfillingexperience.

Previously,IconsideredcookinghardsoIneverthoughtoflearningit.However,underthe

patientguidanceofmymother,IlearntFriedEggwithTomatobytrialanderror.ThemomentIserved

thedishmade,myparentscouldn'twaittotakeabiteofitandgavemeathumbs-up.

Overall,notonlydidacquiringtheskillgivemethejoyofsuccessbutalsoencouragedme

toembracenewchallenges.

你校正在组织英语作文比赛请你以“对我影响最大的一本书”为题，写一篇短文参赛,内

容包括:1.书籍简介2对你的影响。注意:写作词数应为80左右。

TheMostInfluentialBooktoMe

AmongthebooksI'veread,theLittlePrinceinfluencesmemost.

It'saboutapilotwhocrasheshisplaneandisstuckinthedesertuntilhemeetsthelittleprince

fromanotherplanet.Thelittleprincetellsthepilotstoriesofhismagicaljourneyfromhislittleplanet

andofhisencounterswithdifferentgrown-ups.

,simpleasthestoryis,itinspiresmeinmanyways.I'venotonlyrealized

theimportanceofcompanybutalsolearnedtoopenmyheartandlovethepeoplearoundme.

②（改写加粗黑体部分的句子）_____________________________________________________

二、生活与学习类素材积累

夺人眼球开头句（开篇点题）

1.Therearemanyvaluableexperiencesinourlife.Asforme,cookingformymotheronherbirthday

isanunforgettableone.

2.Weparticipatedinaone-daytriptotheForestParklastSunday,theaimofwhichwastogetusclose

tonatureandlovenature.

3.Withgraduationapproaching,Ican'thelpconsideringmycollegemajor.

亮点出彩篇中句（说明学习内容）

4.Whatimpressesmemostisthefriendshipformedintheperiod.

5.ItwasthefirsttimeIhadcookedandsomehowtheeggsendedupburnt.

6.At7am,westartedonfootandittookaboutoneandahalfhoursbeforewereachedourdestination.

7.Duringthewalk,notonlydidwebreathethefreshairbutwealsoappreciatedthefantastic

surroundingviews.

韵味无穷结尾句（评价）

8.Notonlydoestheactivityallowusstudentstorelaxinastressfulschoollife,butitalsoprepares

usforthefuturebothphysicallyandmentally.

9.Thankstothisopportunitytoexperiencenature,thisactivityrewardeduswithanunforgettable

memory.

10.Autumnprovidesuswithachancetofeelthesweetnessoflaboringtogetherwithfarmers.

三、教育/亲子互动类读后续写

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Iwasangrywithmyfatherinthefirstyearofcollege,becausehedidn'tcareaboutmyfeelings

atall.

OnedayIhadaseriousquarrelwithhim.Iwasfedupwithhisdirectionandcorrection.How

couldheinterferewithmylifeandmystudyplans?"Howcouldheunderstandtheimportanceofmy

universityactivities?Theonlythingthathecaredaboutwasmyacademicperformance!"Hedidn't

understandmyworldand|didn'tunderstandhis,either.

Istormedoutandsighedallthewaytoschool.SuddenlyIrealizedthatldidn'thavetheassignment

thatwasdue:athoughtcard.ThisclasswastaughtbyDr.SidneyB.Simon.Thethoughtcardwasthe

admissiontickettohisclass,Hewouldreturnthemtouswithhiscomment.

Myfirstthoughtcardread,"Allthatglittersisnotgold."Hecommented,uWhatdoesthisquote

meantoyou?Isitsignificant?"Obviously,hewastakingitseriously.Isurelydidn'twanttoreveal

myselftohim.

Theweekprogressed.Dr,Simon'sclasswasquitebrilliant.Hechallengedustothinkandcome

upwithourownresponses,ButIhadnohandlingstrategiestodealwithit.

ThesecondTuesdaycame.Iwroteonmycard,nThemostimportantthingincommunicationistohear

whatisn'tbeingsaid,"Thenextdaythecardcameback;"Youseemtoneedalistener.Isthisimportant

toyourlife?"Icouldn'trememberateachercaringpersonallyaboutmesinceprimaryschool.

Withallthesememoriesfillingmymind,1racedtoclass.0Justoutsidethedoor,1tookacardand

wrote,UIhavethemostterribleDadoftheworld!"Then1dashedin.Lookingupatme,hereached

outforthecard,and1tookmyseat,"ThemomentIsatdown,1feltterrible,Ididn*tmeantOetthatout.

ThatnightIhaddifficultysleeping.Whatifhecontactedmydad??

注意:1.续写词数应为150左右；

Pl:OnWednesdaymorningIcametoclasswithmixedfeelings.

P2:1heldthecardtightly,thinkingabouthiswords.

主题特点：在这个话题中会涉及:①亲子之间紧张关系的处理、矛盾的化解、相互包容和帮助、

家长或孩子个人的成长、家长或孩子对自我的反思。②亲子之间缺乏沟通、交流或陪伴,原因可

以是完全被电子产品吸引或者忙于工作等;③家长和孩子因为共同做出的一些改变，有了各自不

同程度的成长。

三步法：第一步:家庭环境或氛围描写十不满、忧或排斥等情绪;第二步:冲突过程+动作和情感:

第三步:冲突化解、亲子交流+高兴/如释重负+关系融洽（+升华）。

续写步骤：

步骤1：读原文理基本要素和2线

Character：____________________________________

When：____________________________________

Where：____________________________________

What:“我”与父亲之间发生矛盾:在课堂上写的卡片中,老师了解到了“我”当下所遇到的问题,

充当学生的倾听者

2情线：

1）情节线:和父亲有矛盾-生气回校-老师的任务-和老师之间的卡片交流-“我”的卡片吐露

心声_（续写）：____________________________________

2）情感线:生气-纠结-担心、害怕

步骤2思续写情节“以旧带新”2原则（421原则-4街接、2情线、1主题;ARE原则-action、

response、emotion）

两段首句定一框衔接：①:开头句衔接首句“星期三早上，我怀着复杂的心情来上课。”可写“我”

在课堂上的心理活动过渡句:课下Simon老师叫住“我”-老师和“我”说了什么?衔接

②:尾句衔接第二段首句中的“thecard”可写老师给了“我”卡片，卡片上写了什么

二框二首1主题：衔接③:开头句衔接首句“我紧紧握着卡片，想着他的话。”可写“我”受到老师

的启发后，揣摩是否与父亲交流。

过渡句:见到父亲-与父亲的交流、和解-父亲的回应。

衔接④:尾句衔接原文，融景于情,从侧面

描写表现父子关系的拉近。1主题:沟通拉近父子关系

情感线：worried-frightened-confused-surprised-delighted—relieved

步骤3思伏笔添细节原续更融洽

捕捉原文所设伏笔，充盈过渡句细节并合理衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上更符合原文

基调。

原文伏笔点

Para6：Youseemtoneedalistener...

续写第一段添加细节可写Simon老师说愿意做“我”的倾听者。

Para.2Howcouldheinterferewithmylifeandmystudyplans?Howcouldheunderstandthe

importanceofmyuniversityactivities?Hedidn'tunderstandmyworldandIdidn'tunderstandhis.......

续写第二段描写“我”思考是否告诉父亲自己的学习计划大学活动等;思考是否尝试去了解父

杀O

必备物品:thoughtcard

thoughtcard穿续写部分,推动故事情节发展。

步骤4沿原文特点写了好表达（准确、丰富、地道）

原文语言丰富、地道,如利用构建动作链和with复合结构描写人物动作;利用疑问和感叹句描

写人物内心活动等。续写时应借鉴和仿效，如在第一段可描写作者没收到老的卡片的担忧、害

怕的心理活动;第二段可描写作者内心活动，纠结是否与父亲交流。这样才能与原文语高风格保

持一致

OnWednesdaymorningIcametoclasswithmixedfeelings.Asmythirdcarddidn'tcomeback

tome,Itookmyusualseat.feelinganxiousandfrightened.WhatifDr.Simontoldmyfatherabout

mycard?Whatwaswaitingformewouldbeanothermoreseriousquarrel!Afterclass,asIwas

approachingthedooroftheclassroom,Dr.Simonstoppedme,andtoldmethathewouldbemylistener.

Hereturnedmycardwithhiscomment"Goodmedicinetastesbitter,andgoodadviceisharshtothe

ear”

Iheldthecardtightly,thinkingabouthiswords.ShouldIsharewithmyfathermystudyplansand

universityactivities?ShouldItrytoknowabouthisworld?Withthesethoughtsfillingmymind,I

spottedmyfatherwaitingattheschoolgate.Thatday,Iwanderedhomewithmyfather.Thesetting

sunshoneonus,castingourshadowsontheroad,Carsofvariouscolorspassedbyus,buttheydidnot

affectourconversation.Wetalkedalotthatdayanditseemedthatthejourneyfromschooltohome

hadalsobeenshortened.

【练习】

翻译下列词块

1.与某人大吵一架

2厌倦

3.气冲冲地走出

4认真对待

5处理策略

6伸手够

7猛冲进

8干扰；妨碍

9.百感交集

n.翻译原句并仿效写句

1.我气冲冲地离开，一路叹息着回校。

［仿写］她挥舞着一封信怒气冲冲地闯进我的房间。

2.带着满脑的回忆，我疾步奔向教室。

［仿写］童年的往事涌上心头，她飞奔回故乡。(flood)

3.那晚我辗转难眠。要是他联系了我爸怎么办呢?

［仿写］那周我寝食难安。要是他泄漏了我的秘密怎么办呢?

in.阅读原文故事梗概，在空白处填入一个适当的单词或所给单词的正确形式

Iwasangry①myfatherinthefirstyearashedidn'tcare②my

feelings.Onedaywehad(3)seriousquarrel.®(feed)upwithhis

interference,Istormedout.Filledwithmemories,Iracedtoclass.⑤(realize)Ihad

forgottheassignment,athoughtcardforDr.SidneyB.Simon'sclass,Iwrote,UA11thatglittersisnot

gold.Myfirstthoughtcardwasreturnedwithhiscomment.I⑥(sure)didn,twantto

give⑦(I)away.Theweek(8)(progress)withDr.Simon's

challengingclass.OnthesecondTuesday,mycardread,"Themostimportantthingincommunication

is⑨(hear)whatisn'tbeingsaid."Dr.Simoncared⑩(personal).

Withmemoriesflooding,I(11)(write)JIhavethemostterribleDadoftheworld!Dr.

Simontookthecard,and(12)(feel)terrible,Sleepwasdifficultthatnight.Whatif

hecontactedmydad?

阅读下面的范文，在空白处填入一个适当的单词或所给单词的正确形式

OnWednesdaymorningIcametoclasswith®(mix)feelings.Asmy②

(three)carddidn'tcomebacktome,Itookmyusualseat,feeling(3)(anxiety)and

frightened.WhatifDr.Simontoldmyfatheraboutmycard?(4)waswaitingforme

wouldbeanothermoreseriousquarrel!Afterclass,asIwasapproachingthedooroftheclassroom,

Dr.Simonstoppedme,and⑤(tell)methathewouldbemy⑥

(listen).Hereturnedmycardwithhiscomment“Goodmedicine©(taste)bitter,and

goodadviceisharshtotheear.”

I(hold)thecardtightly,thinkingabouthiswords.ShouldIsharewithmyfathermy

studyplansanduniversity®(activity)?ShouldItrytoknowabouthisworld?⑩

thesethoughtsfillingmymind,Ispottedmyfather(11)(wait)atthe

schoolgate.Thatday,Iwanderedhomewithmyfather.Thesettingsun(12)

(shine)onus,castingourshadowsontheroad.Carsofvariouscolors(13)(pass)byus,

buttheydidnotaffectourconversation.Wetalkedalotthatday,and(14)seemedthat

thejourneyfromschooltohomehadalsobeen(short).

【拓展