(幻灯片)2017年上海中考英语作文讲评课

Writing1中考英语备考必知的复习策略英语是一门工具性的学科，注重考查学生的听、说、读、写能力。报告会上，面对中考，英语的复习方法都是唯一的，即多听、多看、多读，关键在于坚持。2从学生们的实际情况来看，听力理解和阅读往往是失分比较集中的题型。影响英语听力得分的原因主要有三个：一是学生语言基础知识不扎实成理解困难。如单词、词组、动词的过去式掌握不牢固。学生所掌握的词汇量的大小、词汇的类别直接影响着学生的听力理解；二是自身存在语音问题，造成理解障碍。如长期读不准单词发音，特别是发音相近的词；三是语速的变化所引起的一系列问题。要解决上述的问题，方法便是坚持每天听读，起床时听、睡觉前听，听得多了自然就有了感觉。3

在阅读速度方面，要以较快的速度从大量材料中捕捉有关信息，必须养成良好的将遇良才习惯。方法不是逐词阅读，而是按意群扫视、连贯阅读，阅读速度加快，理解的准确率才会提高。4Leavingschool（毕业时分）Growingpainsandgains（成长的烦恼与欢乐）Ihaveadream（我有一个梦想）ThingsIhatetodo（我不喜欢。。。）Lovearoundme（我身边的爱)Iwanttodosomethingformyschool(我为学校做件事）I’mproudofmyself（我为自己感到自豪）与生活相关与“我”相关5另外，在英语复习中突破词汇关是很重要的。学生不管做什么题目，词汇都是基础，词汇关不过是无法取得好成绩的。但是学习词汇的过程也是很枯燥的，如何让这个过程变得生动、高效？建议在复习过程中根据读音规则来记词汇，也可以用串连、对比、转换、联想记忆的方法来记词汇。6英语是一门语言，语言就要进行交流。学生们可以互相交谈，进行对话、单词的复习，还可以从交谈中看出对方的问题，也提醒自己要注意。如学生们两两一组，默写首字母相同、尾字母相同、字母数量相同的单词，通过竞争的游戏来记忆单词。在记忆中循环记忆法也是很重要的，如果一个阶段不使用单词就会遗忘，所以要不断地记忆单词。学生们每一次背单词的时候不要从头开始背，而要找出自己不太熟悉的，经常看看。7在做题方面，并不是越多越好，做50道题目和做30道题目没有多大的区别，关键在于做了题目后学会分析、总结，因此希望学生们在完成老师布置的作业后不要再盲目地大量做题，将做过的题目进行重温、总结，避免再犯相同的错，这样更有意义。8Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic"Thebestwaytomakemehappy".(以“最能使我快乐的方法”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)9内容（8分）+语言（8分）+文采（4分）一、认真审题，结构合理*写什么(题目，参考问题）10Whatshouldwewriteabout?Whatshouldn’twe(only)writeabout?Freetalk1.Myschoollife2.Mydreamteacher3.ThethingIhatetodo4.Myopinionsofkeepingpetdogs5.Thebestwaytomakemehappy11内容（8分）+语言（8分）+文采（4分）一、认真审题，结构合理*写什么(题目，参考问题）12Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic"Thebestwaytomakemehappy".Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)13

Thebestwaytomakemehappyisachievinggoodmarks.IthinkthiswayisthebestonetomakemehappybecauseitistheeasiestwaysanditcanimprovemyabilitysoIthinkitisthebestway.Inthisway,Icangetsomeprizes,soIwillfeelhappy,what’smoreitcanalsomakemyparentshappy.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)内容不全14therearealotofwaystomakemehappy.Thebestwaytomakemehappyistoplaybasketball.Toplaycomputergamesisalsoawaytomakemehappy.EverydaywehavePElesson.Thesearealotofinterestsinit.SoIfeelhappyinthisway.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)内容不全15

thebestwaytomakemehappyistohelpanother.WhenIfeelsad,Icanhelpanother,becauseIhopetheothershappy.Icanhelpoldpeoplecrosstheroadandplaywithsmallchildren.InthiswayIfeelanotherhappy,thenIalsowillhappy.Helpothersnotonlymakemehappy,butalsomakeothershappy.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)内容不全16ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?内容不全1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1’)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4’)3.Whydoyouthinkit’sthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2’)Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingholidaysintheyear.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysismakingabirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherboughtthethingsweneededfromthesupermarket.Wemixedtheflourandeggs,thenaddedsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheoven.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilymembers.Itwasreallydelicious.Iwillneverforgetthatday.内容得分5’17MyspokenEnglishusedtobeverypoor.Itriedtoimproveit,butfailed.SoItoldittomyEnglishteacherandwishedhimtogivemesomeadvice.HetoldmethatIcouldimprovemyspokenEnglishbyspeakingmoreEnglish.Hesaid,‘ThemoreyoupracticespeakingEnglish,themoreprogressyouwillmake.’ThenIfollowedhisadviceandspokeasmuchEnglishaspossible.Atlast,myspokenEnglishimproved.MytroubleWhatismissedinthisarticle?Whatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2’)Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3’)Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2’)内容得分5’18Theenvironmentisimportanttousall.Weneedfreshair,cleanwaterandsoon.Thereusedtobemanytreesaroundus,theairwasfreshandtheriverwasclean,butnowtheydisappearedforonereasonoranotherandwerereplacedbydirtywaterandpollutedair.Becauseoftheterriblepollution,people’shealthisgettingworseandworse.What’smore,thegreenhouseeffectischangingourclimate,whichmayleadtoevenmoreserioussituation.EnvironmentaroundusWhatismissedinthisarticle?1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4’）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3’）内容得分4’19ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?内容不全1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1’)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4’)3.Whydoyouthinkit’sthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2’)Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingholidaysintheyear.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysismakingabirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherboughtthethingsweneededfromthesupermarket.Wemixedtheflourandeggs,thenaddedsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheoven.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilymembers.Itwasreallydelicious.Iwillneverforgetthatday.内容得分5’20MyspokenEnglishusedtobeverypoor.Itriedtoimproveit,butfailed.SoItoldittomyEnglishteacherandwishedhimtogivemesomeadvice.HetoldmethatIcouldimprovemyspokenEnglishbyspeakingmoreEnglish.Hesaid,‘ThemoreyoupracticespeakingEnglish,themoreprogressyouwillmake.’ThenIfollowedhisadviceandspokeasmuchEnglishaspossible.Atlast,myspokenEnglishimproved.MytroubleWhatismissedinthisarticle?Whatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2’)Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3’)Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2’)内容得分5’21Theenvironmentisimportanttousall.Weneedfreshair,cleanwaterandsoon.Thereusedtobemanytreesaroundus,theairwasfreshandtheriverwasclean,butnowtheydisappearedforonereasonoranotherandwerereplacedbydirtywaterandpollutedair.Becauseoftheterriblepollution,people’shealthisgettingworseandworse.What’smore,thegreenhouseeffectischangingourclimate,whichmayleadtoevenmoreserioussituation.EnvironmentaroundusWhatismissedinthisarticle?1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4’）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3’）内容得分4’22Nowadays,ourenvironmentisbecomingworseandworse.Ourbadhabitscausemanyproblemslikeairpollution,landpollutionandwaterpollution.Tomakeourenvironmentbetter,Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector.WecanplanttreestomaketheaircleanbecausetreescantakeinCO2andreleaseO2intotheair.Weshouldbuyanduseenvironmentallyfriendlygoods.Finally,wemustn’tleavealotofrubbishintotheriver,pondorsea.Solet’sbeenvironmentprotectorsandenjoylivingabetterlifeontheearth.Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector23内容（8分）+语言（8分）+文采（4分）一、认真审题，结构合理*写什么(题目，参考问题）*重点写什么(提示问题）24

Nowadays,therearemanyproblemsofourenvironmentsuchasairpollution,waterpollutionandlandpollution.Peoplecutdownandburntheforest.Peopleusethingsonceandthrowthemaway.Peopleusechemicalstoproducemanythings.Becauseofthesereasons,ourearthisingreatdanger.Weliveontheearth,it’sourdutytoprotectit.IwilldoalotofthingssothatIcanprotecttheearth.Forexample,Iwillreusetheplasticbags.Therearealotofwaystobegreenconsumers.IwanttobeanenvironmentprotectorUsethefollowingpointsasaguide.(下列要点仅供参考）

Whataretheproblemsofourenvironment?Whydoyouwanttobeanenvironmentprotector?Whatwillyoudotoprotecttheenvironment?25

Everybodyhasmanywaystomakehappy.SodoI.First,Ilistensomefavoritemusic.Second,Ireadsomebooksandmakesomenotes.Ithinkitisgood.Third,Iplaybasketballwithmyfriends.Inmyopinion,playingbasketballisthebestwaytomakemehappy,becauseIfondofit.Becauseofthose,Ibecomehappyandstrong.1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)26内容（8分）+语言（8分）+文采（4分）一、认真审题，结构合理*写什么(题目，参考问题）*重点写什么(提示问题）*时态(参考问题）”Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector(保护者)”Usethefollowingpointsasaguide.(下列要点仅供参考）

Whataretheproblemsofourenvironment?Whydoyouwanttobeanenvironmentprotector?Whatwillyoudotoprotecttheenvironment?27MytroubleWhatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2’)Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3’)Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2’)ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1’)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4’)3.Whydoyouthinkit’sthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2’)Environmentaroundus1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4’）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3’）28二、理清思路，列出提纲Writeapassageofatleast60wordsonthetopic”Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector(保护者)”(以”Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)Usethefollowingpointsasaguide.(下列要点仅供参考）1.Whataretheproblemsofourenvironment?2.Whydoyouwanttobeanenvironmentprotector?3.Whatwillyoudotoprotecttheenvironment?29Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic"Thebestwaytomakemehappy".(以“最能使我快乐的方法”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)30三、连词成句，初步成形四、检查修改，内容无误Environmentisveryimportantforus.Inourlife,theproblemsofourenvironmentareveryimportant.Wehavehurtittoomuchbycuttingdowntreesandpollutewaterandland.Iwanttobeaenvironmentprotectorsothatsaveit.I’dsuggestmyparentstotakebusinsteadofdrivecar.Iwillprogressmyhabbitssuchasuseabasketorapaperbag.Iwillpreventpeoplethrowrubbisheverywhere.Ifeverybodycandosomethingstoprotecttheearth,ourenvironmentwillbemuchbeautiful.Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector31Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingdaysintheyear.Ididalotofthingsthiswinterholidays.themostunforgetablethingistomakemybirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherbuythethingsweneedfromthesupermarket.Wemixedthefloorandeggs.Thenaddsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheiron.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilynumbers.Itwasreallydelicions.IwillneverforgetthatdaybecauseIlearnedtomakecakesaswellassharemyhappinesswithothers.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?错误太多10’32Findoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.1.Iclimedslowlyandwasverytried.2.IthinkitisanunforgetablethingbecauseIhelpedsb.climbedtiredunforgettablesomebody3.Onafridayafternoon,

Iwentshoppingwithmymother.Spelling（拼写）（others)Friday4.Ican’tforgetthatday.Becauseitisthelasttimewecancelebrateherbirthdaytogether.Ican’tforgetthatdaybecause5.Whatacrazydayitwas,Iwillrememberitforever.!Capitalletter（大小写）Punctuation（标点符号）336.Iwillrememberedthatdayforever.remember7.Ithoughtitishungry.was8.Mygrandmotheralwaystidyupmyroom.tidies9.Howunforgettablethisthingsis!thingFindoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.Tense（时态）Verbagreement(主谓一致)Wordform(词形）3410.Inmyfather’shelp,Ibecamemorepatientthanbefore.Withmyfather’shelp,11.Tocutalongstorytoshort,….Tocutalongstoryshort,…12.IwenttoShihuabyabuswithmymother.bybus13.Mymothertoldmedon’tgiveitup.toldmenottogiveitupFindoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.Phrases(短语和固定搭配）14.Isawanoldladylayinthemiddleoftheroad.sawanoldladylying…3516.Weplayedsnowinfrontofhouse.playedwith15.Isatonaseat,listeningmusic.listeningto17.Thenaladyaskedwhohadbrokenherwindow.Weallwereafraid.wereallFindoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.Missingwords（漏词）18.Weshoulddothingsbyourownhands.withthehouse19.Itistiredwork.tiringWords’order（词序）Usingwrongword（选词错误）3622.Heencouragedmetolookforthewatchbyheart.carefully21.OneSundaymorning,IwenttoShihuabybusandsatbesidemewasagirl.IwenttoShihuaonabusandtherewasagirlsittingbesideme.Findoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.ChineseEnglish（中式英语）Inmylife,manythingshappened.20.Inmylifehavemanythingshappened.371.Environmentisveryimportantforus.2.Inourlife,theproblemsofourenvironmentareveryimportant.3.Wehavehurtittoomuchbycuttingdowntreesandpollutewaterandland.4.Iwanttobeaenvironmentprotectorsothatsaveit.5.I’dsuggestmyparentstotakebusinsteadofdrivecar.7.Iwillprogressmyhabbitssuchasuseabasketorapaperbag.8.Ifeverybodycandosomethingstoprotecttheearth,ourenvironmentwillbemuchbeautiful.6.Iwillpreventpeoplethrowrubbisheverywhere.topollutinginordertosaveit/sothatIcansaveittakeabusinsteadofdrivingacarfromthrowingdevelopgoodhabitsusingsomethingmuchmorebeautifulserious

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是否有标点错误(punctuationmistakes)4.是否有语法错误

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…CommonErrorsinEnglishwriting39Duringthewinterholidays,Ithappenedalotofthings.Oneofthethingswashelptasmallgirltofindhermother.Whenmyfriendsandmeshoppinginashoppingmall,wesawasmallgirlcriedinacorner.Weaskedwhathappenedonher.Shesaidshecuond’tfoundhermother.Sowestartedtohelptshetofoundhermother.Luckily,wefoundhermother,theywereveryhappyandwewerehappy,too.IthinkitwasthemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysbecauseIfoundIalsocanhelpothers.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Checkandcorrectthisarticle.alotofthingshappened.helpingIwereshoppingcryinghappenedtocouldn’tfindhelpherfind.Theycouldalso,so40Duringthewinterholidays,Ithappenedalotofthings.Oneofthethingswashelptasmallgirltofindhermother.Whenmyfriendsandmeshoppinginashoppingmall,wesawasmallgirlcriedinacorner.Weaskedwhathappenedonher.Shesaidshecuond’tfoundhermother.Sowestartedtohelptshetofoundhermother.Luckily,wefoundhermother,theywereveryhappyandwewerehappy,too.IthinkitwasthemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysbecauseIfoundIalsocanhelpothers.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.alotofthingshappened.helpingIwereshoppingcryinghappenedtocouldn’tfindhelpherfind.Theycouldalso,so=9’7’+2’+0’Commentonthisarticle.1.What?(1’)

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(2’)41Howshouldwecheckthepassage?1.查主题，文章是否符合题目要求，内容是否完整。(checkthetheme)

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查语法，是否有时态错误，是否有主谓不一致，是否