读后续写魔术师的秘密（拉波夫叙事理论分析）课件高考英语复习写作专项

Continuationwriting——Textanalysis解题技巧“拉波夫”叙事分析模式312654点题（Abstract）是对语篇的简要概括，即：Whatisthestoryabout？指向（Orientation）是故事发生的时间、地点、人物或当时的情景，即故事的背景。进展（Complication）指故事发生的经过，占据语篇的最大篇幅，包含一系列事件，同时包括事件的冲突和转折点。回应（Coda）与主题前后照应，增强故事的完整性，使听者对叙述有一个完整的了解，对故事有一个有头有尾的满意感。结局（Resolution）指一系列事件的结束，包括故事的结局以及人物命运的变化。评议（Evaluation）是叙述者或他人对人物、事件等的看法、评议和态度。AMagician’ssecret阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事Martywasnewatschool.Usuallywhenyou’rethenewkid,youlaylow,butnotMarty.Onhisfirstday,hemadeatoothpick(牙签)disappear.Onesecondhewasholdingthetoothpick,andthenextseconditwasgone!Everyonewasaskinghimhowhedidit.“It’smagic!Atmyoldschool,theyactuallycalledmeMagicMarty.”Martysaidproudly.“Isheserious”IaskedmyfriendBrian.“Idon'tknow,butthatwasprettycool,”Briansaid,stillwatchingMarty.IknewMarty’smagicwasfake,butIjustcouldn’tproveit.Anothertime,Martypulledawaterbottleoutofhisbag,alongwithacupandcarefullypouredwaterintoit.Martygotahandfuloficecubes!Applausefilledthehallway.Whenaskedhowhedidit,hejustsmiled,“Sorry,butthat’sthefirstlawofmagic.Amagicianneverreveals(揭露)hissecrets.”Well,hewon’thaveto,Ithoughttomyself.I’llrevealhissecretsforhim.Thatnight,athome,Isatatthekitchentableforalmostanhour,tryingtofigureoutthetrick.Mymomwatchedmewiggle(摆动)myfingershopelesslyoveracupofwater.“He’strickingpeople!”Icried.“Soundsasifhe’stryingtomakefriends.”Mymompattedmyarm.MagicMartyhadmestumped(把...难住)，butthenextdayIcaughtaluckybreak.Atlunch,Martywasgoingonabouthowhecouldmakethingsfloat.Hehadaringinonehandandapencilintheother.That’swhenIsawit:athinpieceoffishinglinetiedaroundtheendofthepencilandattachedtoabuttononMarty’sshirt!Sureenough,hemadethering“float”byslidingitoverthepencilandhangingitfromtheline.Nooneelsenoticed,andsoonthewholecafeteriawasclapping.However,Iwasn’t.续写：Paragraph1:ItwastimetoputanendtotheMagicMartyshow.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:“Wait!”Martyjumpedinfrontofme.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.Abstract(点题):IwantedtorevealMarty’ssecret.Whatisthisstoryabout2.Orientation(指向)whoMartyBrianIMomclassmatesclassmatesnewatschoolnotlaylowwhereinmyschoolwhenOnhisfirstday...Anothertime...Thenextday...3.ComplicationandEvaluation(进展和评议)threemagictricks①②③OnhisfirstdayAnothertimeThenextdayFirstmagic:Martymadeatoothpickdisappear.Secondmagic:Martyturnedwaterintoicecubes.Thirdmagic:Martymadetheringfloat.timeorder1.Inwhatorderisthetextorganized2.WhatarethethreemagictricksOnhisfirstday---thefirstmagicMarty’sactionsandwordsReactionsorComments:I

Others3.ComplicationandEvaluation(进展和评议)proudcurious,doubtful,envious/jealousHemadeatoothpickdisappear.Onesecondhewasholdingthetoothpick,andthenextseconditwasgone!“It’smagic!Atmyoldschool,theyactuallycalledmeMagicMarty.”Martysaidproudly.IknewMarty’smagicwasfake,butIjustcouldn’tproveit.Brian:Thatwasprettycool.Everyone:Askinghimhowhedidit.HowdidMartyandIfeel3.ComplicationandEvaluation(进展和评议)Anothertime---thesecondmagicMarty’sactionsandwords:ReactionsorComments:IOthersHowdidMartyandIfeelMartypulledawaterbottleoutofhisbag,alongwithacupandcarefullypouredwaterintoit.Martygotahandfuloficecubes!Whenaskedhowhedidit,hejustsmiled,“Sorry,butthat’sthefirstlawofmagic.Amagicianneverrevealshissecrets.”confident1.I’llrevealhissecretsforhim!3.“He’strickingpeople!”Icried.2.Myfingerswiggledhopelesslyoveracupofwater.angry,anxious,hopelessEveryone:Applausefilledthehallway.Mother:

“Soundsasifhe’stryingtomakefriends.”Thenextday---thethirdmagicMarty’sactionsandwordsReactionsorComments:IOthers3.ComplicationandEvaluation(进展和评议)Hehadaringinonehandandapencilintheother.AthinpieceoffishinglinetiedaroundtheendofthepencilandattachedtoabuttononMarty’sshirt!contentIwasstumped(把...难住),butthenextdayIcaughtaluckybreak.InoticedafishinglineandIdid’tclap!Everyone:Nooneelsenoticed,andsoonthewholecafeteriawasclapping.delightedHowdidMartyandIfeel4.Resolution(结局)Paragraph1:ItwastimetoputanendtotheMagicMartyshow.____________

Paragraph2:“Wait!”Martyjumpedinfrontofme._________________Questions1)Did“I”reallyendthemagicshow3)DidMartydiscovermyintentionWhatdidhesayordoHowdidhefeelQuestions1)WhydidhejumpinfrontofmeWhatdidhedoHowdidhefeel2)WhatwasmyresponseHowwouldthisstoryend解读续写首句Maybenot!2)WhatdidIsayordoHowdidIfeel5.Coda(回应)Whatdidthestorywanttotellus2.Themagicis

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衔接情节语言连贯ScoringCriteria(评分标准)Martywasnewatschool.Usuallywhenyou’rethenewkid,youlaylow,butnotMarty.一系列事件的结束，包括人物的下场，目的的实现或失败四、结局/结果result/resolution指向部分：(照应）结尾：

Aftertheshow,Martywasstillnotalow-keyboybutatruesuperstar.Hekeptperformingmagicshowsforus,withmeashisonlyassistant.品读首段Onhisfirstday,hemadeatoothpickdisappear.Onesecondhewasholdingthetoothpick,andthenextseconditwasgone!Everyonewasaskinghimhowhedidit.“It’smagic!Atmyoldschool,theyactuallycalledmeMagicMarty.”Martysaidproudly.“Isheserious”IwhisperedtomyfriendBrian.“Idon'tknow,butthatwasprettycool,”Briansaid,stillwatchingMarty.IknewMarty’smagicwasfake,butIjustcouldn’tproveit.关注特定情节照应（结尾）Martykeptperformingmagicshowsatschool.Hefinallybecameour“MagicMarty”.照应（续写第一段)Luckily,theevidencebroughtthepossibilityofprovinghismagicwasfake.Anothertime,Martypulledawaterbottleoutofhisbag,alongwithacupandcarefullypouredwaterintoit.Martygotahandfuloficecubes!Applausefilledthehallway.Whenaskedhowhedidit,hejustsmiled,“Sorry,butthat’sthefirstlawofmagic.Amagicianneverrevealshissecrets.”Well,hewon’thaveto,Ithoughttomyself.I’llrevealhissecretsforhim.Thatnight,athome,Isatatthekitchentableforalmostanhour,tryingtofigureoutthetrick.Atitagain,honey”Mymomwatchedmewiggle(摆动）myfingershopelesslyoveracupofwater.“He’strickingpeople!”Icried.“Soundsasifhe’stryingtomakefriends.”Mymompattedmyarm.照应（结尾）：Weperformedthemagicshowstogether,withapplausefillingthewholeroom.照应（第二段）：（Marty向我解释）withdetermination,helookedintomyeyes,”IknowyouthinkI’mtrickingpeople.Butasamagician,neverrevealinghissecrectsisthefirstlawofmagic.Ijustwanttobringhappinesstoothers.I...I’mjusttryingtomakefriendsinthisschool.”Helookedovermyshoulders,astronglonelinessenvelopinghim.照应（第一段）：（afterdiscoveringthesecret)”Cheater!”Curlingmyfistangrily,Icouldn’twaittorevealhissecrets,关注高频词MagicMartyhadmestumped(把...难住)，butthenextdayIcaughtaluckybreak.Atlunch,Martywasgoingonabouthowhecouldmakethingsfloat.Hehadaringinonehandandapencilintheother.That’swhenIsawit:athinpieceoffishinglinetiedaroundtheendofthepencilandattachedtoabuttononMarty’sshirt!Sureenough,hemadethering“float”byslidingitoverthepencilandhangingitfromtheline.Nooneelsenoticed,andsoonthewholecafeteriawasclapping.However,Iwasn’t.照应（续写第一段）Iwouldnevermissedtheluckybreak--Imustprovehewastrickingeveryone.Thefishinglinewasthesecret.照应（续写第一段）Hearingmywords,thewholecafeteriawasboiling.possibleversion1Paragraph1：ItwastimetoputanendtotheMagicMartyshow.Iwalkedover.“Itwasfishingline.”Isneered,foldingmyarms.Martysubconsciouslyfingeredthefishinglineandnervouslywhispered,“So,areyougoingtotellpeople”Seeingthepanicinhiseyes,somehow,Ihesitated.ShouldIrevealthesecret,Martymightlosehisnewfriends.Finally,afterstrugglingforamoment,Ireplied,“Nah,Iwon’tsayanything.”Martyletoutarelievedsigh,andIturnedtowalkaway.Paragraph2：“Wait!”Martyjumpedinfrontofme.Unexpectedly,hepattedmyarm,grinning,“You’vegotaprettygoodeyeformagic.Wanttojoinme”Inoddedjoyfully.That’showtheMagicMartyandMysteriousMattLunchShowbegan.Nowwe’vebeenamagicteamforthreemonths.AndsinceIbecameafellowmagician,Martyhasletmeinonsomeofhisothertricks.Itturnsoutthatinsteadofafakemagician,Martyisarealfriend.照应原文结尾照应特定情节照应开头照应厨房练习情节照应文章主题结果/结局:Ididn’trevealthesecret.Martyandbecamefriends,andplayedmagictogether.回应:魔术假，友情真。Possibleversion2:Paragraph1：

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