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CONTENTS

（武汉市二月调考2023）

Amandalivedinabigmoderncity.Duetothehigh-speed

developmentofeconomy,familiesfromdifferentbackgroundscame

heretofindabetterlife.Amanda'sclassmateandfriend,Rama,was

fromoneofthosefamilies.Onedayafterschool,AmandaandRama

werechattingandRamamentionedhowmuchshemissedherfriends

andhometown."Itishardtoleave/5Ramasighed,"butmyfamily

neededtobesomewherethatiseasiertomakealiving.Holding

Rama'shands,Amandaencouragedhertosharemoreandsheknew

Ramalovedtosinganddancewithherfriendsbackinherhometown.

AfterlearningaboutRama'sstory,Amandastartedtonoticemore

studentslikeRamainherschool.Forthefirsttimesherealizedthat

thosestudentslookedsadintheireyes.Sometimesbecauseoftheir

differentaccents,theycouldn'tcommunicatewellwithothers,which

madethemalwayssitorstandsilentlyatthebackoftheclassroom.

“Theyarehavingahardtime,weshouldshowthemkindnessand

love!”shetoldhermotheroneday.Amandaaskedhermotherwhat

shecoulddotohelpmakethemfeelwelcome.Amanda'smother

suggested,"Whataboutusingart?Maybeitwillbeeasierto

communicatethroughart."Amandathoughtforawhileandnodded.

LikeherfriendRama,Amandalovedallformsofart,likepainting,

singing,dancing,andperforming,throughwhichshecouldtell

differentstories-aboutherfamily,andherlife.

Thenextday,AmandawenttotheActivityCenterinherschooland

proposedherplanofanartshow.Theofficerthoughtitagreatidea.

Inspiredandexcited,Amandasetaboutherplanwithseveralfriends.

AttheActivityCentertheyfiledaroomwithpaper,paintandpencils.

Theyevenmadeasmallstage!Everythingready,theyinvitedallthe

newstudentsinherschoolandAmandaencouragedthemtoshare

somethingspecialabouttheirhometowninanyartform.ToAmanda's

surprise,nooneresponded.

Amazingly,Ramasteppedforwardtobreaktheice.___________

Everythingseemedtochangeafterthatartshow.______________

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与所给短文融洽度高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接

•1.考查考生对原文的理解以及根据原文的

I内容创作结尾的能力合理；内容丰曷；J

所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错

52.考查与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程误，但完全不影响意义表达；有效地使用了语句间

的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。

I度

第一档（1・5分）

1・3.续写内容的丰富性

与所给短文和开头句的衔接较差；

产出内容太少；

•4.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性

卜5.续写内容上下文的连贯性语法结构单调，有较多语法错误结构与词汇错误严

重影响了意义的表达；

缺乏语义间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。

错误归因：文本理解不透彻;Howtoimprove:

fullyunderstand

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plotlogically

・••02方法指导

Stepl.彳q用"5ws”理清原文大急

Amanda,thenextdaytheActivityCenter

Rama

whowhenwhere

5ws

whydidwhatdidAmandado?

Amanda

TohelpstudentslikeRamathat?Amandaorganizedanartshow

adapttothenewlife

S+ep2.刊用“曲仪©”焚取徇节值息

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climax(conflict/problem)

ending

beginning

onepossbileversion'ToAmanda'ssurprise,noone]

responded.J

AmandawenttotheAcHVityCente

andproposedherplanofanartshov

climax

Amandaaskedhermotherwhatshe1Amazingly,Ramastepped

^coulddotohelpmakethemfeelwelcome..forwardtobreaktheice.

AmandastartedtonoticemoreAmanda's

，studentslikeRamainherschool1

character:

Amandaencouragedhertokind/heloful...

sharemoreandsheknewRama

Everythingseemedtochan年

Jovedtosinganddance______

aftert\_h_a_t_a_r_tshow.

Ramamentionedhow

muchshemissedherWhatwouldha

friendsandhometownTheme:

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Step3.刊用“两句话”合理病思供骂内幕

Paral:Amazingly,Ramasteppedforwardto[breaktheice」

时间：Atthebeginningoftheartshow

空间：IntheActivityCenter

主要人物:Amanda,Rama,othernewstudents

关键情节Plotl.WhatdidRamadotobreaktheice?

Plot2.Howdidotherstudentsrespond?

Plot3.Whatwastheartshowlike?

Para2:Everythingseemedto|changeafterthatartshow.]

时间：Aftertheartshow

空间：Atschool

主要人物：Amanda,Rama,othernewstudents

关键情节•Plotl.Whatwasthechange?

Plot2.WhatdidRamasaytoAmanda?

Plot3.HowdidAmandafeel?

Conclusion

Step1Step2Step3

利用"5ws”理清利用“曲线图”获利用"两句话”合

原文大意取细节信息理构思续写内容

Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromseven

differentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwere

warmingupandwalkingtheroute（路线）throughthickevergreen

forest.

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himselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.

Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandasked

himwhyhewasn'twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthen

saidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!

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wouldlaughathim,"heexplaineduncomfortably."Igavehimthe

choicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”

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thoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavid

couldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,his

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runninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtof

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inwhatevertheyweredoing.Thatwaswhynoneofthechildren

thoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-country

team.Itjusttookhimlonger--that'sall.Davidhadnotmisseda

singlepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongafterthe

otherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherat

theschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwas

proudofhisstrongdetermination.

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me.

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runners.

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时间：beforetherun

空间：thickevergreenforest

主要人物：David,I

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