专题09上海高考夹叙夹议类作文（原题版）

►专题09上海高考夹叙夹议类作文_________________________________________________________________________________________考点精考点精讲【考情链接】夹叙夹议文是一种比较常见的写作文体,以记人叙事为主,记叙人物的经历或事物/事件发生、发展、变化的过程。兼有总结全文，深化主题。材料常涉及社会生活现象、人物或自然景物。无论记人还是叙事都要通过叙述、描写来加以表达,把人物的经历或行为、发生的事情/事件用一定的顺序和语言技巧叙述出来。在叙述过程中“人以事显,事由人生”,人和事是密不可分的。在一篇记叙文中记人、写景、叙事往往是交织在一起的,不能简单地分裂开。高考作文一般都不会单纯的记叙某事，而是夹叙夹议。围绕主题开展叙述、讨论—结论段（结尾部分Concludingparagraph）对全文的总结和概括。论说文的类型通常有：观点对比型、问题解决型、道理/观点论证型、说明利弊型等，各类型的论证方式有相异之处，每一种类型都有相对固定的论证方式及句型。值得注意的是近年试题中经常出现记叙与结论相结合的叙议形式。【典例剖析】【上海市南模2022-2023学年高三上学期开学考】假设你是李华，你要竞选模拟联合国社团主席，请写一篇竞选演讲稿，内容包括：1.你认为自己具备什么条件2.如果当选，你会为大家做什么_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Ladiesandgentlemen,I’mLiHua,I’mnowrunningforthepositionofbeingthechairmanoftheModelUnitedNationsClub.I’msureIcandothejobwell.Tobeginwith,municatingwithothersisnotaproblemforme,whichmakesmeworkefficiently.Moreover,IusedtobethechairmanoftheStudents’Unionofmyhighschool,andIbelievesuchexperiencewillhelpalot.Thelastbutnotleast,beingfriendswithmanyexchangestudentsfromallovertheworldallowsmetoknowmoreaboutdifferentcultures.IfIbeethechairman,Iwilltrymybesttouniteeverysingleclubandholdmeaningfulactivities,whichwillenrichourschoollife.Thankyouforyourlistening!【解析】【导语】本文是一篇应用文。要求考生写一篇演讲稿来竞选模拟联合国社团主席的职位。【详解】1.词汇积累帮助：help→assist首先：tobeginwith→firstofall此外：moreover→what’smore/besides最后：thelastbutnotleast→atlast/aboveall/intheend2.句式拓展简单句变复合句原句：I’mLiHua,I’mnowrunningforthepositionofbeingthechairmanoftheModelUnitedNationsClub.拓展句：I’mLiHua,whoisnowrunningforthepositionofbeingthechairmanoftheModelUnitedNationsClub.【点睛】【高分句型1】Thelastbutnotleast,beingfriendswithmanyexchangestudentsfromallovertheworldallowsmetoknowmoreaboutdifferentcultures.（运用了动名词短语做主语）【高分句型2】IfIbeethechairman,Iwilltrymybesttouniteeverysingleclubandholdmeaningfulactivities,whichwillenrichourschoollife.（运用了非限制性定语从句）【真题回顾】【2018上海高考}Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120—150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.假设你是明启的高三学生卢平。《英语报》向高三学生进行征文，题目为MyTeachers。卢平也想投稿。具体要求是：1.请你将认识的老师进行分类；2.具体描述每一类老师的特征。___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考答案】MyteachersOnthepathofpursuingknowledge,numerousteacherswehaveencounteredmayhavealifelongimpactonus,andevencontributetoshapingwhoweare.Lookingbackonmyschoollife,myteacherscanbegenerallyclassifiedintothreetypes:dedicated,approachable,andirresponsible.Dedicatedteachersaremostpopularamongstudentsnotonlybecauseoftheiroutstandingprofessionalknowledgebutalsobecauseoftheirdevotiontothecareerofteaching.Youcanexpectmorethanclasstimeofthem.Theymayhaveaface-to-facemunicationwithyouafterclasstoenlightenyouwithatrickymathproblem.Theymaysacrificetheirfamilytimetokeepyoupanysothatyoucansmoothyouremotionalproblemcausedbyyourownfamily.Needlesstosay,mostteachersfallintothiscategory.Thesecondtypeofteachermayseemlessqualifiedintermsoftheirteachingskills,buttheycanalsoeasilywinstudentheartsbecausetheycanbeentrustedwithourdeepestsecrets.Childhoodandadolescenceareawkwardperiodswhenwestruggletoexploreourownwayintheworld.Ourpeersmaybejustasinexperiencedasuswhileourparentsseeminglyliveonanotherplanet.Soafriendlyadultlikeapproachableteacherscanbealifesaver.Wetendtobecarefulwhenlabelingateacherirresponsible,buttheydoexist.Someofthemmayhavetemperissue,whileothersmaydisregardtheirownjob.Oneofmyteachersfitthedescription,whowasdirectlylinkedtomypooracademicperformanceduringhisstint.

Inthefuture,asmylearningcontinues,Iwillhaveopportunitiestomeetmoreteachers.Whereas,neverwillIforgettheassistancefrommypreviousteachersortheirpassionforknowledge.【分析】本篇书面表达属于命题作文，要求考生以MyTeachers为题，描述老师的种类并写一写各种老师的特征。【详解】第一步：审题体裁：命题作文时态：根据提示，时态主要为一般现在时和一般将来时。结构：总分法总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。要求：1.介绍老师的种类；2.描述每一种老师的特征。第二步:列提纲（重点词组）onthepathof;havealifelongimpacton;contributeto;lookbackon;beclassifiedinto;becauseof;morethan;enlightenyouwithatrickymathproblem;keepyoupany;needlesstosay;fallinto;intermsof;tendto;belinkedto;academicperformance;passionforknowledge第三步：连词成句1.Onthepathofpursuingknowledge,numerousteacherswehaveencounteredmayhavealifelongimpactonus,andevencontributetoshapingwhoweare.2.Lookingbackonmyschoollife,myteacherscanbegenerallyclassifiedintothreetypes:dedicated,approachable,andirresponsible.3.Dedicatedteachersaremostpopularamongstudentsnotonlybecauseoftheiroutstandingprofessionalknowledgebutalsobecauseoftheirdevotiontothecareerofteaching.4.Theymaysacrificetheirfamilytimetokeepyoupanysothatyoucansmoothyouremotionalproblemcausedbyyourownfamily.5.Thesecondtypeofteachermayseemlessqualifiedintermsoftheirteachingskills,buttheycanalsoeasilywinstudentheartsbecausetheycanbeentrustedwithourdeepestsecrets.6.Oneofmyteachersfitthedescription,whowasdirectlylinkedtomypooracademicperformanceduringhisstint.

7.Whereas,neverwillIforgettheassistancefrommypreviousteachersortheirpassionforknowledge.根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）1.表并列补充关系：and;notonly…butalso…2.表转折对比关系：but,Whereas,Some…,whileothers…3.表因果关系：Because,So连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，【点睛】[高分句型1]Theymaysacrificetheirfamilytimetokeepyoupanysothatyoucansmoothyouremotionalproblemcausedbyyourownfamily.（非谓语动词作后置定语和目的状语和结果状语从句）[高分句型2]Oneofmyteachersfitthedescription,whowasdirectlylinkedtomypooracademicperformanceduringhisstint.（非限制性定语从句）[高分句型3]Whereas,neverwillIforgettheassistancefrommypreviousteachersortheirpassionforknowledge.（不完全倒装句）_____优选操练优选操练01【上海市控江2022-2023学年学高三上学期9月月考】假设你是李红，你的即将迎来100周年的校庆，校长就如何举行校庆活动向在校学生广泛征求建议。请你用李红的名义给校长写一封信，就校庆活动提出你的建议，并陈述理由。信的内容需包括：1.校庆的形式。内容和参加对象2.你的理由_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________02【上海市吴淞2022-2023学年高三上学期10月调研】Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120—150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.假设你是明启学生王磊，你校下个月将举行中外学生交流活动，现向学生征求活动方案。你主动向校长写信，表达你的想法。你的信包括以下内容：1.活动的主题；2.你设计的1-2个活动的具体内容；3.你设计该活动的理由。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________好题必好题必测（2021·上海杨浦·一模）Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120-150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.红星为了创建文明校园，促进和谐社会，举办题为“ConflictManagement”的征文比赛。假定你是李林，请给校报投稿，你的文章需包括：1）你亲身经历的最严重或令你最难忘的冲突；2）你对处理冲突的反思或从到的经验教训。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【上海市复旦大学附属2022-2023学年高三上学期11月教学质量检测英语试题】假如你是明启高三学生李明，你校正在为即将于高一高二年级举办的英语辩论赛（EnglishDebateContest）和英语电影配音赛（EnglishFilmDubbingContest）在高三学生中招聘学生评委（judge），你对此很有兴趣。请写一封电子邮件给相关负责老师，申请担任其中一项比赛的评委。邮件内容需包括：1.你希望担任该比赛评委的意愿；2.简单的相关自我介绍；3.你适合担任该比赛评委的理由。________________________________________________________________________