读后续写助人类-我自制取水装置帮助村民们 讲义 高考英语作文复习专项

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文Thirtyyearsago,Iwasasixteen-year-oldboy,tallandthin.Itwastheendofsummerandthecoolwindsoffallwereintheair.Infrontofahouse,therewasatruckloadofwoodwhichmyfather,mybrotherandIhadunloadedthedaybefore.Myfatherandmybrotherwereouttodofarmwork,soIneededtomovethesepiecesofwoodaroundthehouseagainandagaintowherewewerepilingthechoppedwood.Andthen[wouldcoveritwithoilclothtokeepitfromgettingwet.Inthosedays,weusedtousethesewoodfirestocook.Wetriedourbesttocollectfirewoodbecausewestillneededsometogetthroughthewholewinter.Iworkedfastatfirst,butsoonIrealizedthatIneededtogoslowerifIdidn'twanttomakemyselftootired.ThenIspentmuchtimepilingthewoodandtyingittogetherwitharopeincaseoffallingdown.Tostartwith,Ithoughttheworkwasboring.Butthenitbecameagameforme.SeeingthatIcouldpilethewoodsoneatly,Ismiledduringthehardwork.Afterawhile,thewoodwasallpiledup,andmyskinnyarmsfeltalittlesore,HoweverIdidn'tstopworking.IstillneededtofetchsomewaterwithcontainersfromthespringnearourhomeOurwellwaterwassofullofironthatittastedterrible,soallcookinganddrinkingwaterhadtocomefromthespring.Thefive-galloncontainersfeltliketheyweighedaton,butIpickedoneatatimeandcarriedthemallupthehilltomyhouse.AsIcarriedthelastcontainerbackhome,Isawmymothersmilingatmeatthedoorwithaglassofteainherhand,Shesaidtome,“Hereyouarebaby.Justtakeabreak."Wesatdownwithourdogsatourfeet,watchingtheleavesblowinginthewindRelaxinginthemomentofpeaceandharmony,Ifiguredoutagoodwaytogetwatereasier.注意:1续写词数应为150左右2请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答Idecidedtomakeapipetoconveywater.Myneighborscametomyhousetogetwateratdusk.原文大意：

本文讲述16岁时的我，把一车的木材一块一块整理堆放好之后，又去山泉那里打泉水回家，忙碌了一天之后，和母亲坐下来休息时，“我”决定建一个取水装置方便打水。续写思路分析：

我们来看看给出的首句。第一段给出的首句“Idecidedtomakeapipetoconveywater.”接下来应该续写如何建水管，即：材料和方法。很多学生想不出用什么材料和方法，就避开来，而大篇幅去写如何号召邻居父母来帮忙建水管。我认为续写第一段就是要你写建水管过程，因为从原文“我”的辛勤劳动描述中，可以看出“我”是吃苦耐劳、独立、爱思考的一个人。所以后面要突出“我”怎样建水管，而不是怎样号召父母邻居来修建。所以，有些不会表达的小细节你可以避开，但是续写重点没法避开。

那第一段怎么结尾呢？我们来看第二段的首句是“Myneighborscametomyhousetogetwateratdusk.”于是倒推出第一段结尾处写:水管建成了，并邀请邻居来打水。接下来第二段自然写邻居打到水之后，夸赞我的好办法，感谢我提供的便利。所以，故事的主题就是：用自己的办法，帮助家人和邻里的幸福感。但是，光写这两个内容字数不够，得添加细节。我根据原文最后一段“我”和母亲的对话，就在续写的第二段添加了如下细节：

"Youdidagoodjob,mybaby."Mymotherthunbedupmyinvention."Youmakeallofusabletotakeabreakaftera-whole-daytiringlabor."基于以上分析下水作文：Idecidedto.makeapipetoconveythewater.ButwhatcanIusetomakeapipelongandstrongenough?Catchingaglimpseofthepiledwoodagoodideastruckme.Thebamboo.treeswereperfect!Withofmyparents,Imanagedtocutdownseveralbambootreesandattachedthesehollowplantstogethertomakethepipe.Then,anenginewasfittedtodrawthespringwaterupthehilltomyhouse.Finally,Itriedtheequipmentanditdidwork!Iintroducedittomyneighbors.Myneighborscametomyhousetogetwateratdusk.Justpressthebuttonoftheengineandthewatercouldbetransporteddirectly.Withtheirbucketsfull,myneighborscheeredfortheconvenientwayandspokehighlyofmyintelligence.“Youdidareallygoodjob,mybaby.”Mymotherthumbedupmyintention.Youmakeallofusabletotakeabreakafterawholedayoftiringlabor.”Seeingtheirdelightedsmiles,Ifeltproudandsatisfiedtohelptheminmyownway.参考范文:Idecidedtomakeapipetoconveywater.Ifoundthelocationofthespringonthehillsidewashigherthanthatofmyhouse,Ichosetomakeapipeoutofbamboosbecausetherewerethickbambooseverywhere,Iputwoodensupportsonthewaterlines,andthenlcutalotofbamboos.Iconnectedthebamboopolestogetherandfixedthemtothesupports.ltworked!Theclearspringflowedtomyhouse.Itwasveryconvenientformyfamilytousewater,AndIalsoaskedmyneighborstocometomyhousetofetchdrinkingwater.Myneighborscametomyhousetogetwateratdusk,Myfamilywarmlywelcomedthem.MyparentsjustfinishedcookingdumplingsThefoodcookedwithwoodfireswasreallydelicious,Whenmyneighborsfilledtheircontainerswithwater,mybrotherandIinvitedthemtotastethedumplings.Theyallpraisedus,“Whatpoliteboys!”Ifeltveryhappyandwantedtodomoreforthem,ThenIofferedtofixwaterpipesforthem,too.Theywereverysupportiveofmyidea.Finally,withthehelpofmyneighbors,Ihadmyneighbors'pipesinstalled,withwhichtheydidn'thaveto