读后续写人与动物-天使狗狗的守护讲义 高三英语作文复习写作专项

续写原文AFour-leggedGuardianAngelSnowhadjustmeltedoffthegroundthatAprildayatourhouseinReginaBeach,Saskatchewan.Ihadjustcleanedupthepoolinpreparationforsellingthehouse.Theyearbefore,Ihadlostmyjobwiththeprovincialgovernment,andnowourfinancialsituationwasgrim.Indespair,Ihadfinallyputthehomeonthemarket,andarealestateagentwasduetoshowuplaterthatday.

Evenworse,IwouldhavetogiveupmybelovedGreatDane（大丹犬）,

Brigitte,becauseIcouldnolongeraffordthecostoffeedingit.ThethoughtoflosingthedogandourbeautifulhomewasalmostmorethanIcouldbear.Deepindespair,Isattypingupresumesandcoverletters.OutofthecornerofmyeyeIcouldseemythirteen-month-oldson,Forrest,ashelayonthecarpet,playingnearourbig,gentlenanny-dog,Brigitte.Itseemedasif

Brigittewasalwaysmeanttobeinthisfamilyandsheturnedouttobeaperfectcompanion.BrigittecametoourhouseonChristmasevewhenthedoorbellrangandIwassuresomeofmyChristmaspackageshadarrived.Irantothedoorandswungitopen,butnoonewasthere.Isensedsomethingandlookeddown,onlytofindabeautifulGreatDanesittingthere,lookingupatmewithbig,intelligenteyes.Therewasnowaythatshecouldhaverungthedoorbellbyherself,wasthere?Perhaps,someonehadfoundthepuppysomewhereandleftherthere,andthenrangthedoorbellandranaway.TheyaccuratelyguessedIwouldwelcomeanadditionalfamilymemberandtakecareofher.Thinkingofthese,Icouldn'thelpheavingasighandwentstraightbacktowork.However,Ihadn'ttypedmorethantwosentenceswhenBrigittebeganbarkingfuriouslyandrunningbackandforthtotheslidingglassdooroverlookingourpool.Iracedtosee

whatwashappening

andnoticedthattheslidingdoorwasslightlyopen.Suddenly,Irealized

Forrestwasnowheretobeseen.

Inpanic,Iopenedthedoorandranoutside.

续写段首句：P1:ThereIwassurprisedtoseeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwater,diveintothepool.P2:Finally,thedoctorsaidForrestwasallrightandcouldbereleasedfromhospital.解题思路：

step1:

根据读原文时所划关键信息确定故事问题/矛盾（通常有两层：事情本身一层；事情背后所展现的信息又一层）读原文时需划的关键信息主要包括：①负面否定信息

②与前者形成对比的信息

③反复出现信息

④问题信息

⑤转折信息

故事主要问题/矛盾：1浅层：孩子去哪儿了；

狗为何叫；

孩子是否得救2深层：是否放弃小狗；对小狗的新的认识

step2:根据已给段首句与主要矛盾确定每段发展到什么程度P1:

小狗救起孩子

孩子被送往医院P2:

决定不放弃小狗

认识到它是守护天使

step3：每段具体设计：确定描写对象，从行为动作/语言、心理感受/神态表情两大方面交替描写各个对象，必要处添加环境等其他描写

具体设计构思示例

P1：

描写对象——我、

小狗我：

震惊

紧张

焦虑，祈祷小狗：快速蹬腿

游向孩子我：急切

拿出手机

拨打急救电话

小狗：咬住孩子衣服

用力蹬

往回游我：拍/抱一下小狗

快速将孩子送上救护车

P2:描写对象——我、小狗小狗：一路陪伴在孩子身边。到家之后坐在孩子身边

，不时地看孩子。我：感悟（小狗是守护天使，不能放弃）。蹲下

拍它

亲它

说（语言内容主要是表达对小狗的肯定

感谢

不放弃）注意：感悟与语言内容多从文中找线索加以利用

谨记：1.必写高级句式：

非谓

、独立主格、定从、

名从、

倒装、

强调2.多从原文找线索，利用相关词汇，提高与原文的契合度

英文写作示例

P1:ThereIwassurprisedto

seeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwater,diveintothepool.Wavesofastonishmentandanxietysurginginmyheart,IrealizedwhatwashappeningandcrossedmyfingerforthesafetyofbothForrestandBrigitte.StruggleasBrigittedid,sheswiftlykickedherlegsandsparednostrengthtoreachForrestwithintheshortesttime.Meanwhile,Igrabbedmyphoneoutofpocketanddialedforrescuewithtremblingvoice.Afterwhatseemedtobeacentury,therewasBrigitte,rightunderForrest.ShegrippedForrest’sclothtightlywithherteethandkeptkickingherfourlegs,attemptingtoswimbacktowardsme.Themomentshelanded,wetallover,ItookoverForrest,spreadmyarmsaroundBrigitteandthenrushedtotheambulancebywhichForrestwassenttohospitalforcheckandtreatment.

P2:Finally,thedoctorsaidForrestwasallrightandcouldbereleasedfromhospital.Sincewesteppedonthewaybackhome,BrigittehadbeenstayingbesideForrestasifshewasconcernedaboutanotheraccident.AfterwearrivedandwhenForrestplayedonthecarpet,Brigittestillsitnearhimandfrequentlystaredathimwithherintelligenteyes.ItwasthisexperiencethatconvincedmeBrigittewasnotjustaperfectcompanion,butapricelessguardianangelwhocaredaboutusevenmorethanherself.Howsillyitwastogiveherup.Isquatteddown,pattedheronherbackandkissedherforehead,whisperinginherear,“youarealwaysmeanttobeinthisfamily,youareourguardianangel,andnothingcouldpress/forcemetogiveyouup.”下水文：P1:ThereIwassurprisedto

seeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwater,diveintothepool.Quickly,sheswamtowardsForrest,whoundulatedupanddowninthewater.ShebitonForrest'sclothesandsparednoefforttodraghimaside.Ialsojumpedintotheswimmingpoolwithoutthinking.Myson'sheartbrokencriesforhelppromptedmetosavebothofthemassoonaspossiblebecausetheycouldn'tswimatall.Itriedmybesttoswimtowardsthem.Nowasteoftime!IsentForresttothenearesthospitalforathoroughphysicalexamination.P2:Finally,thedoctorsaidForrestwasallrightandcouldbereleasedfromhospital.Sinceweembarkedonourwayhome,BrigittehasbeenbyForrest'sside,asifsheisworriedaboutanotheraccident.Afterwearrived,whileForrestwasplayingonthecarpet,Brigittestillsatnexttohim,oftenstaringathimwithherclevereyes.ItwasthisexperiencethatmademebelievethatBrigittewasnotonlyaperfectcompanion,butalsoaninvaluableguardianan