虚拟语气在写作中的提分技巧-作文练习评讲课件

欣赏下列两个语段，并指出它们的技巧1.Briefasthepassageis,itstillarousesmyendlessimaginationtothepasttime.WereIinthepast,IwouldlikethatIstayed

inBritaininthe19thcentury,whereandwhentheRevolutionofIndustrywasflourishing.

Withtheinspiringatmosphereofthecreativetimes,

Iwouldtrymyutmosttodomyfavorite

scientificexperiment,sinceIhavegreatinterestinscience.What’smore,thescientificloverswouldbeinvitedtojoinmylittleclubtoinventsomebrand-newinventionsandcreatenewdesignsofourdailylife’sproducts,cooperatingtoputthetheorywelearnedfrombookstoourpracticallife.InthiswayIcouldget

inspirationofwisdomandresourcefulnesstobringconvenienceandimprovementstoourlife.欣赏下列两个语段，并指出它们的技巧12.ShouldIbegiven

theopportunitiestotraveltothepast,IwouldliketogobacktoQingDynastyofearly20thcenturywhenChinawasinadisaster.

WereIbackinthelateQingDynasty,Iwould

makeeveryendeavortorescueChinafromtheforeigninvadersandpreventitfrombeingbullied

withoutresistance.Firstly,

Iwouldteach

mymoderntheoryandknowledgetothegovernors,instructingthemtofightagainsttheenemiesandconstructpowerfularmies.Secondly,allthecitizenswouldbecalledontounitetogetherandresistothercountries’invasionbravely.What’smore,joiningsomeanti-invaderspartieswouldalsobemychoice.2.ShouldIbegiventheoppo2亮点句型写作指导除了虚拟语气外，有许多亮点句型可以应用到写作中，增分添彩。亮点句型写作指导除了虚拟语气外，有许多亮点句型可以应用到写作3比喻AistoBwhatCistoD.Likethesunshine,kindnesscanhelpthoseintrouble.Kindnessislikethelighthouse,whichcandirectthewayforthosewhoareindimsituation.比喻AistoBwhatCistoD.4排比IfIcould

gobacktothepastanddotheabovementionedthings,thelastthingmygrandparememberedwouldnotbe

theindifferenceandthebackofhisbelovedgrandson.

IfIcouldtravelbackthroughtime,thelastmemorybetweenhimandmewouldnotbehisclosedeyesandthedeadlookofhalf-unconscioussuffering.Thennow,Iwouldnothavetolivewiththisunbearableregretandpainfortherestofmylife.IfonlyIcould!

排比5倒装（赢在写作P37-38）Simpleasthestoryis,Heregoesthesayingthat___.Onlywhen_____canwe___.Onlyinthisway,canweOnlybydoing-,canwe____.Onlyafterdoingsth,canweOnthewestoftheschoolliesapond,wheremanyfishareswimming.Undernocircumstanceshouldwe-类似的用法：Never/Bynomeans/onnoaccount/innoway/atnotimeshouldI.Hardly/scarcelyhadIgotintotheroomwhenitbegantorain.(nosooner，than)倒装（赢在写作P37-38）Simpleasthes6

Haditnotbeenforherstickingtobeingontime,shewouldn’thaveearnedherselfawell-paidjobandmoreimportantlybuiltupanimageofreliabilityandintegrity.倒装

ShouldIbegiven

theopportunitiestotraveltothepast,IwouldliketogobacktoQingDynastyofearly20thcenturywhenChinawasinadisaster.

WereIbackinthelateQingDynasty,Iwouldmake

everyendeavortorescueChinafromtheforeigninvadersandpreventitfrombeingbulliedwithoutresistance.Haditnotbeenforherst7亮点写作的注意事项1.过多的亮点，显得堆砌对策：亮点分布，尽量首句2.亮点单一，例如全段排比或比喻对策：最好总—排比---总的结构。照顾段落的完整性。3.华而不实，不重视内容，徒有框架没有内容对策：先想内容，再想修辞手法4.过多注重运用亮点，没有注意谋篇，顾此失彼对策：谋好篇，定好每点行数，才能下笔亮点写作的注意事项1.过多的亮点，显得堆砌8亮点句型写作训练练习：1.说明挫折的意义2.你怎样看待老师对学生的影响。3.说说你对母爱的理解4.谈谈决心对人的影响亮点句型写作训练9使用虚拟语气写作的注意事项：1.确定到底要不要“虚”？2.确定到底使用哪个时态的“虚”？3.所谓“一虚到底”，其实是指在该假设情境中的虚拟的时态的一致性。而非一定是通段都使用虚拟！一切要看情况进行选用。使用虚拟语气写作的注意事项：10说说挫折的意义1.Hardandpainfulasfrustrationis,itisofsignificanceinourlife.Astheoldsayinggoes,“stormmakestreestakedeeperroots”,withoutfrustration,nevercouldwegrowupasastrong-willedperson.Werewesurroundedby

over-praiseandimmersedintheprideandhappiness,frustrationwouldbeatimelyalarm,urgingusnottostopattheso-calledpeakandcontinueyourpaceofpursuit.Wereweconfrontedwithobstacles,frustrationcouldbeaphilosopher‘sstone（魔法石）,withwhichwecouldtransformthetemporarysetbackstogreatopportunitiestobecomestrongerInaword,lifeisnotonlyabouthowtolivethroughthestormbutalso

howtodanceintherain.说说挫折的意义1.Hardandpainful11说说挫折的意义2.Nevercanweemphasizethesignificanceofsetbacktoomuch.Withoutsetback,ourlifewouldbearoselackingfragrance.Withoutsetback,ourlifewouldbeavoyagelackingdirection.Itisnoexaggerationtosaythat

frustrationhassowntheseedofmaturityandself-developmentinmyinnerheartandhasmadeitpossibleformetoachievegreatsuccess.说说挫折的意义2.Nevercanweemph12老师对学生的影响1.Supposethatteacherswereabsentinourlife,students’lifewouldbeapicturewith

intensedarkness.Withoutteachers,

thelaboriousengineersofoursoul,students’personalitiesandcharacters

wouldnotbeshaped.Withoutteachers,

theladderwithselflessdevotion,ourheartwouldnotbeliftedupbyencouragementandgrowmature.Withoutteachers,thesparklinglighthouseintheoceanofknowledge,nevercouldteenagersfindaccesstothesuccessfullifeinthefuture.老师对学生的影响1.Supposethatte13老师对学生的影响2.Withoutthepatientandcarefulteachers,nevercouldstudentsgrowfromachildishanddependentchildintoamatureandindependentadult.Withouttheselflessandaffectionatepreachingofteachers,nevercouldstudents

stepontoapathwithabrightandpromisingfuture.Withouttheknowledgeableteachers,neverwouldstudentsmasterthenecessaryknowledgeanddevotethemtotheconstructionofamoreharmonioussocietyandcountry.老师对学生的影响2.Withoutthepatient14母爱的理解1.Without

maternalaffection,wewouldchangefromfragrantflowersintoweedsabandonedbyotherswithoutashelterandcare.Without

thisever-lastingemotion,

neverwouldweliveasfullandrichalifeasotherchildrensurroundedbymerrimentandhappiness.母爱的理解1.Withoutmaternalaffec15母爱的理解2.Maternalloveislikeacircle.Ithasnobeginningandnoending.Butformotherhood,wewouldbe

thelittlestrayedlambs

whosteponthemistakentrack.Butformotherhood,nevercanwe

beenvelopedinwarmthandmerrimentby

apatchofsunlight.Butformotherhood,wecouldbe

overwhelmedbyendlessdarknessandtheworldwouldfadefromcolorfulandwonderfultodimandcold.母爱的理解2.Maternalloveislike16决心的影响1.Determinationisthefuelofships,

withoutwhich,nevercouldwearriveattheshoreofsuccess.Determinationisthewalkingstickoftheclimber’s,withoutwhich,nevercouldwereachthepeakoflife.Determinationistheverycondition,withoutwhich,nevercouldwe

getridofthedarkdepthofdepression.决心的影响1.Determinationisthef17决心的影响2.Withoutthefirmdetermination,nevercould

individualsgrowintostrongtreesstrugglinginthewindandrain.Withoutthesteadfastmind,nevercouldteamsunitetogethertocreatemiracle.Withouttheunswervingresolution,nevercouldcountriesuniteandfightfortheflourishingandbrightfuture

aswellasaharmoniousworld.决心的影响2.Withoutthefirmdeter18虚拟语气在写作中的提分技巧-作文练习评讲ppt课件19说说挫折的意义1.Hardandpainfulasfrustrationis,（倒装）itisofsignificanceinourlife.Astheoldsayinggoes,“stormmakestreestakedeeperroots”,（名言）

withoutfrustration,nevercouldwegrowupasastrong-willedperson.（虚拟）Werewesurroundedby

over-praiseandimmersedintheprideandhappiness,frustrationwouldbeatimelyalarm,urgingusnottostopattheso-calledpeakandcontinueyourpaceofpursuit.Wereweconfrontedwithobstacles,frustrationcouldbeaphilosopher‘sstone（魔法石）,withwhichwecouldtransformthetemporarysetbackstogreatopportunitiestobecomestronger.(虚拟+排比+非限制性定从)

Inaword,lifeisnotonlyabouthowtolivethroughthestormbutalso

howtodanceintherain.(总结部分可以用现在时)说说挫折的意义1.Hardandpainful20说说挫折的意义2.Nevercanweemphasizethesignificanceofsetbacktoomuch.(倒装)

Withoutsetback,ourlifewouldbearoselackingfragrance.Withoutsetback,ourlifewouldbeavoyagelackingdirection.Itisnoexaggerationtosaythat

frustrationhassowntheseedofmaturityandself-developmentinmyinnerheartandhasmadeitpossibleformetoachievegreatsuccess.（虚拟反说+比喻+排比）说说挫折的意义2.Nevercanweemph21老师对学生的影响1.Supposethatteacherswereabsentinourlife,students’lifewouldbeapicturewith

intensedarkness.Withoutteachers,

thelaboriousengineersofoursoul,students’personalitiesandcharacters

wouldnotbeshaped.Withoutteachers,

theladderwithselflessdevotion,ourheartwouldnotbeliftedupbyencouragementandgrowmature.Withoutteachers,thesparklinglighthouseintheoceanofknowledge,nevercouldteenagersfindaccesstothesuccessfullifeinthefuture.（虚拟反说+排比）

老师对学生的影响1.Supposethatte22老师对学生的影响2.Withoutthepatientandcarefulteachers,nevercouldstudentsgrowfromachildishanddependentchildintoamatureandindependentadult.Withouttheselflessandaffectionatepreachingofteachers,nevercouldstudents

stepontoapathwithabrightandpromisingfuture.Withouttheknowledgeableteachers,neverwouldstudentsmasterthenecessaryknowledgeanddevotethemtotheconstructionofamoreharmonioussocietyandcountry.（虚拟反说+排比）老师对学生的影响2.Withoutthepatient23母爱的理解1.Without

maternalaffection,wewouldchangefromfragrantflowersintoweedsabandonedbyotherswithoutashelterandcare.Without

thisever-lastingemotion,

neverwouldweliveasfullandrichalifeasotherchildrensurroundedbymerrimentandhappiness.（虚拟反说+排比）母爱的理解1.Withoutmaternalaffec24母爱的理解2.Maternalloveislikeacircle.Ithasnobeginningandnoending.（比喻，多一句进行补充说明，使得比喻更具体形象）Butformotherhood,wewouldbe

thelittlestrayedlambs

whost