高考读后续写模拟七大话题训练共75张

读后续写话题素材一

人际交往阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Therewasonceaguywhosufferedfromcancer,acancerthatcan'tbecured.

He

was18yearsoldandhecoulddieanytime.Oneday,hewantedtogooutforwalking.Sohis

mother

gavehimpermission.

Hewalkeddownhisblockandfoundalotofstores.Hepasseda

CD

storeandlookedthroughthefrontdoor

forasecond

ashewalked.Hestoppedandwentbacktolookintothestore.Hesawabeautifulgirlabouthisageandheknewitwas

love

atfirstsight.Heopenedthedoorandwalkedin,notlookingatanythingelsebuther.Hewalkedcloserandcloseruntilhewasfinallyatthefrontdeskwhereshesat.

Shebegantolookedupandasked,"CanIhelpyou?"

Shesmiledandhethoughtitwasthemostbeautifulsmilehehadeverseenbefore.

"Uh...Yeah...Umm...IwouldliketobuyaCD,"helookedatherand

said.

Hepickedoneoutandgavehermoneyforit.

"Wouldyoulikemetowrapitforyou?"sheasked,smilinghercutesmileagain.人际交往主题语境：社会交往语篇类型：短篇小说语篇难度：★★★★关键词：aCDstore短文词数：348建议时间：20minsHenoddedandshewenttotheback.ShecamebackwiththewrappedCDandgaveittohim.Hetookitandwalkedoutofthestore.

Fromthenon,hewenttothatstoreeverydayandboughtaCD,andshewrappeditforhim.HetooktheCDhomeandputitinhis

closet.Hewasstilltooshytoaskherout.Hismotherfoundoutaboutthisandtoldhimtojustaskher.Sothenextday,hetookallhiscourageandwenttothestore.HeboughtaCDonceagain.Shewenttothebackofthestoreandcamebackwithitwrapped.Hetookitandleft

apieceofpaper

ofhisphonenumberonthedeskandranout.

"RRRRRING!"She

wassurprisedto

findthat.

Onedaythephonerang,andthemother

pickeditup

andsaid,"Hello?“注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Paragraph1：Itwasthegirl!

Paragraph2：Themotherwasdeeplymovedbyherson.

语篇解读这是一篇记叙文类读后续写。通过阅读原文，可以归纳其发展脉络：身患绝症——憧憬美好——音响店购买CD——邂逅美丽女孩——暗自眷恋——发出爱的信号……原文的情节提示设置的悬念：男生邂逅美丽的女孩后，激发了他怎样的勇气和动力？在生命走向尽头的前夕，他勇敢地迈开了什么步伐？这些勇气反映在哪些方面？或体现在什么东西上？母亲是如何揭示这些秘密的？续写的情节构思：（1）母亲接起电话；（2）女孩的反应；（3）母亲在收拾儿子的遗物；（4）发现的东西；（5）真情实意；（6）令人感动的理由。

难句分析原文：Therewasonceaguywhosufferedfromcancer,acancerthatcan'tbecured.译文：曾经有一个人，他患了癌症——一种无法治愈的癌症。分析：该句含有两个定语从句。第一个定语从句是由指人的关系代词who引导，修饰先行词aguy，该关系代词在定语从句中作主语。第二个定语从句是由指物的关系代词that引导，修饰先行词acancer，该关系代词在定语从句中也作主语，且第二个定语从句是解释说明上文提到的cancer，故翻译时该加上破折号。笔前点睛审题分析☞审要求1.文章属于记叙文；2.顺应文章发展脉络，使用第三人称进行续写；3.以一般过去时为主，适时使用相应的过去时态和一般现在时；4.后续事件须自然过渡、合情合理；5.突出正能量，展示积极向上的勇敢精神。★

思路点拨第一段：1.母亲听闻女孩的电话而抽泣；2.告诉女孩儿子已经故去；3.母亲思绪万千，整理儿子遗物；4.发现儿子写给女孩的情书。第二段：1.母亲极为感动；2.一份朴素的情感；3.让儿子活了更长时间；4.活要活得美好，梦要梦得热烈，爱要爱得完整。高分范文Paragraph1:Itwasthegirl!

The

mother

couldn'thideherdeepsadness,soshebegantocryandsaid,"Lovelygirl,mysonisalreadygone."Thegirlkeptsilent

forasecond,andthencontinuedtocomforttheboy'smother.Afewminuteslater,shehadtosaygoodbyetothemother.Eventually,themotherlostcontrolofheremotionsandburstoutcrying."Whatagoodgirl!"shesaid.Andthenshewascollectinghisson'srelicinhisroom.She

wassurprisedto

findoutanewnotebook,whichwasplacedamongallhisCDs,fromwhichthenotebookdropped.Therewasfulloflove

onit,andonthelastpageitwaswrittenasfollows:"Hi..prettygirl,IwroteRRRRRINGon

apieceofpaper

toyou.Doyouseeit?"

Paragraph2:Themotherwasdeeplymovedbyherson.

Sureenough,thiskindofcouragecouldmakepeopletouched.Whatislove?Asanoldsayinggoes,"Livebeautifully,dreampassionatelyandlovecompletely."

(157words)篇章分析

重要短语hideone'sdeepsadness

隐藏某人的深痛keepsilent

保持沉默saygoodbyeto

向……说再见losecontrolof

失去对……的控制burstoutcrying

突然哭起来befulloflove

满满的爱asfollows如下sureenough足够了

☛高级句型1.Whatagoodgirl！（what引导的感叹句）2.anewnotebook,whichwasplacedamongallhisCDs,fromwhichthenotebookdropped.（句中含有两个定语从句，即which引导的非限制性定语从句和“介词from+which”引导的非限制性定语从句）3.Asanoldsayinggoes,"Livebeautifully,dreampassionatelyandlovecompletely."（关系代词as引导非限制性定语从句）高分解密1.作者从语篇材料内容的阅读到段落开头语和标注的关键词的综合分析，再到想象力的自由发挥，充分展示了高超的续写文章的能力。表达逻辑性强，层次分明，上下文衔接完美。

2.语言运用丰富。使用了较多的高级词汇，如hideone'sdeepsadness、keepsilent、saygoodbyeto、losecontrolof、burstoutcrying、fulloflove、asfollows以及sureenough等。高级句式运用得体，如which引导的非限制性定语从句，as引导的非限制性定语从句等。

3.过渡性词语的使用恰到好处，如so、andthen、afewminutelater、eventually以及sureenough等。模拟训练参考范文写作思路读后续写话题素材二

人生态度人生态度阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Everybodyhastoface

baddays

intheirlife.Somefacediseases,somefacefears,somefacepoverty,somefacehelplessness,etc.Noonecanescapefromit.Itisaruleoflife.Twothingsalwayscombinetogetherlikejoyandsadness,laughandcry,healthandillness,profitandloss,morningandnight,victoryandfailure.Likewise,

gooddays

andbaddaysalwayscombinetogether.

Youknowwhatisthebiggestadvantageofbaddays?Firstofallinharddaysyoucometoknowyourskills

and

yourpotential.Allthesuperheroswewatchinthetelevisionhadbadlypastlifethereforetheyarewhattheyaretoday.Inbadtimeswetryhardtocomeoutofit.Rememberonethingthatwhenbaddaysfinishandgooddaysstartapersonchangeshisattitude

andforgetshispainandthisis

thereason

thatgooddaysandbaddayskeeponcomingandgoing.

OnethingImustsayisthatyourharddaysareyourteacherandnobodycanunderstandwhatyouface.Makesurewhateveryouhavefacedyouwillneverdothatwithothersthoughyourwholelifepassesingooddaysorbaddays.主题语境：人生态度语篇类型：论说文语篇难度：★★★★关键词：life短文词数：320建议时间：25mins

Whenbaddayscomea

person

firstofallcannotunderstandwhatisgoingon,whyme?Butaftersometimeherealizeshisstrengthandstartsdoingeverysinglethingtocomeoutofit.That

journey

isverypainfulbutwhenyouoncecrossityouwillfindyourjourneyverymeaningful.Youhavetotallychangedyourthoughts,yourperception（感知）,andyoucanunderstandlifebetter.Youget

themeaningofyourlife.Inshort,youstartbecomingwise.

Thebiggest

lesson

oflifeduringbaddaysaccordingtomeisthatapersonbecomeswiseandagiverwhomhewasn'tbefore.Lifemeanstocreateit.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语

Paragraph1：Therefore,youshouldn'tfearharddaysinyourlife.

Paragraph2：However,whenyougointothegooddays...

语篇解读生活中的事情是五彩缤纷、绚丽多彩的，是喜怒哀乐的混合体，所以在艰辛的日子望不气馁，在阳光明媚的日子里不自做，要有清醒的生活理念，才能成为生活的强者、胜者。难句分析原文：OnethingImustsayisthatyourharddaysareyourteacherandnobodycanunderstandwhatyouface.译文：有一件事我必须说，你的艰难日子是你的老师，你所面对的，没有人能理解。分析：这是一个主从复合句。主语中Imustsay为省略关系词的定语从句，that引导表语从句，其中从句中的what引导宾语从句。文章来源本文选自英文网站，原文题目为：“Life'sBiggestLessonsDuringHardDays”《在艰苦岁月中生活的最大的教训》，作者为SoniaKaur。笔前点睛审题分析☞审要求读后续写，本文属于议论文；☞审人称、时态第二人称、兼顾第一人称，以一般现在时为主；☞审要点艰辛的日子不气馁，生活态度积极，光明就在眼前；好日子要珍惜，否则会家破人亡，遗憾终生。☞原文所给的关键词分类人物：person事件：baddays、life、gooddays、skills、attitude、themeaningofyourlife、thereason、journey、lesson在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词，还需要注意以下线索：1.Whatdoestheauthorthinkofbaddays？2.Whatdobaddaysbringyou？3.Howdoyouspeakofbaddays？4.What'stherelationshipbetweenbaddaysandgooddays？5.Howcanyoubecomeawinneroflife？思路点拨本篇续写内容难度大，涉及对生活的感悟，该话题对学生来说较深奥，可以先把文章理解透，正确把握原文内容，根据最后段落，发现规律和逻辑关系，结合提示语、提示词从而找到续写线索，本文着重写了baddays对人生的影响以及人们如何才能把不利条件变为有利条件，从中汲取教训避免走弯路，然后再过渡到gooddays的叙述上，但要珍惜来之不易的生活，不能让它流失，这样才能成为生活的胜者。此外，要注重提升表达层次，多用复杂句式和高级词汇。高分范文Paragraph1：Therefore,youshouldn'tfearharddaysinyourlife.

①Youshouldfirstthinkwhatyouwantinyourlife,andthenyoushouldsmileateverythingandhaveapositive

attitude

tostartfindingagoodideaofsolvingitwithyour

skills.

②ThisisoneofthemostimportantthingsIhavelearntinmylife.Topassthrough

thebaddays

isthesameasfora

person

tohaveahard

journey.

③However,bydoingthat,you'llchangeyourselfandgetabrightfutureintheend."

Paragraph2:However,whenyougointothegooddays,youshouldvaluethemandworkhardthanever.Otherwise,you'lllosethethingsbelongingtoyou.④Forexample,oneofmyfriendsoncehadarich,happyfamily,buthedidn'tworkhardsothathehadtodropoutofschool,whichmadehisparentssad.

⑤Evenworse,hisparentsgotpartedbecauseofhimsomeday,sothathefeltsadandregretful.Soyoushouldknow

themeaningofyourlife.

(152words)高分解密本篇续写能够依据提示句、提示词并结合原文内容合理安排了所要补充的内容，较好地完成了续写任务；另外，作者在使用复杂句式的同时，注重段、句之间的逻辑关系，较多地使用了过渡词，如however、otherwise、forexample、evenwo

篇章分析①first..andthen..首先……接着……，表示做某事的顺序，此处说明做事情的逻辑性，句中的what引导宾语从句。②Ihavelearnt...为省略关系代词的定语从句。③过渡词However起到承上启下的作用，表示意思转折。④本句为并列复合句。but连接前后两个并列分句，后一分句中sothat引导结果状语从句，which引导非限制性定语从句。⑤本句中的过渡词Evenworse强化观点，而sothat引导结果状语从句。rse等，使得全文结构紧凑，成为得高分的亮点之处。模拟训练参考范文

Paragraph1Paragraph2范文解析Paragraph1Paragraph2读后续写话题素材三

法治意识法治意识阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Oneday

Kavya

andIwereplayingwiththeracketball

andtheballwentinto

Takku'shouse.Thoughwewerescared,wewenttohishouseandaskedhimifhecouldgiveusourball.

Hesaid,"No."Wefelthelpless.Suddenly,Ihadanidea.Therewas

awatertank

behindTakku'shouse.IlookedatitandsaidtoKavya,"Kavya,lookatthis.Wecanclimbthewatertankandjumpoverthegate."Kavyaagreed,butwewerebothwearingskirts.Wecouldn'tclimb."Itdoesn'tmatter.Wecanseetomorrow.Don'tforgettowear

trousers,"saidKavya.Isaidbyetoherandwentback

home.

ThenextdayIwenttoKavya'shouseearly.Wewerebothwearingtrousers."Bestofluck,"saidKavya'sbrother

Vijay.Hekneweverything.Hesaid,"Shoutloudlyifyouneedme."Wewenttothewatertank."Whowillclimbfirst?"askedKavya."You"Isaid.Sheagreed.SheclimbeddownintoTakku'shouse.Ifollowedherandthenwewerelooking

underabed

fortheballwhenweheardanoise.ItwasVijay."Motheriscallingyou,"hewhispered.Wehurriedandtookoutthelostball.Butalongwiththeballwasagoldbar!Wequicklytookboththeballandthegoldbarandclimbedupthewatertankagain.主题语境：法治意识语篇类型：个人故事语篇难度：★★★关键词：ball短文词数：311建议时间：21mins

WhenwereachedKavya'shouse,theTVwason.Itwasnewstime.Icouldn'tbelievemyearswhenitsaidthat20

goldbars

werestolenfromagoldshop.Theyshowedapictureofthegoldbarsanditwasexactlyliketheonewehadfound.Weallknewitbecausetherewasalookofsurpriseoneveryone'sface.Wequicklytoldthestoryto

Kavya'smother.

注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1：Whenwefinishedit,Kavya'smotherfeltshocked.

Paragraph2：Whenwearrivedhome...

语篇解读本文是记叙文，叙述了作者与朋友一起寻找丢失的球的过程中，偶然发现了一块金条，而那块金条与新闻报道中丢失的金条一模一样，然后快速地告诉了朋友的妈妈……难句分析原文：Thoughwewerescared，wewenttohishouseandaskedhimifhecouldgiveusourball.译文：尽管我们很害怕，我们还是去了他家并且问他是否可以把球给我们。分析：这是一个主从复合句。连词though引导让步状语从句，主句中并列连词and连接两个并列谓语；连词if引导的从句作动词asked的宾语。文章来源本文选自英文网站，原文题目为“TheLostBall”《丢失的球》。笔前点睛审题分析☞审要求读后续写，本文语篇类型属于记叙文；☞审人称、时态以第一人称为主，兼顾第三人称；时态主要是一般过去时。☞审要点报警

☞

到Takku的家

☞

警察搜寻

☞

找到赃物——偷来的金条收获

☞

奖品

☞

同学的欢迎和尊敬☞原文所给的关键词分类地点：Takku'shouse、home、underabed人物：Kavya、Vijay、Kavya'smother事件：ball、goldbars事物：awatertank、trousers在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词，还需要注意以下线索：1.Whydidn'tTakkugivetheirlostball？2.WhatdidKavya'smotherdoafterlisteningtotheirstory？3.Whatwouldthepolicegivethem？4.Whyweretheypleasedwithareward？5.Howdidtheirclassmatesfeel？

思路点拨本篇续写暗示有两方面的事情，第一是发现Takku家有偷来的金条后的处理方式。第二是Kavya和“我”协助警察抓到小偷后警察、家人和同学等对她们的看法。只要把这两件事情弄清楚，注意两段之间的联系就能完成这篇续写。另外要把握好提示语，结合提示词，适当运用高级句式就能写出高质量的作文。高分范文Paragraph1:Whenwefinishedit,Kavya'smotherfeltshocked.

Soshedecidedtocallthepolice.①Afterthepolicecamequickly,theyfollowedusto

Takku'shouse.②Whentheyenteredthehouse,theysearchedthehouseatonce.Tooursurprise,thepolicefoundmoregoldbars

underabed.Asaresult,theycaughtTaktu.Atthesametime,thepolicesaidthankstousandtheygaveuseachabagasareward.③Whatmademepleasedwasthatwehelpedthepolicecatchathief.Sowereturned

home

excitedly.Paragraph2:Whenwearrivedhome,

wecouldn'twaittoopenthebags.Therewasaninvestigativebookandapenfor

kavya.Andtherewasaninvestigativebookanda

ball

forme.SoIgavemyinvestigativebooktokavya'sbrotherVijay.④After

Kavya'smother

sawwhatwedid,shefeltverysatisfied.⑤Thenextday,whenwewenttoschool,ourclassmateswereallwaitingforusatthegateoftheschool.Theyhuggedustogetherfirmlyandtreatedusasheroes.

(164words)

高分解密本篇续写内容与原文融合度高，故事性强，是原文恰如其分的补充和延伸，没有这部分续写，读者就不知道最后的结论，坏人就不能得到惩治，好人不能得到肯定，故事就不完整，尤其是原文的最后一句把经过很快地告诉Kavya的妈妈，那么接下来会发生什么事情呢？读者肯定会努力地猜测。另外，作者虽然多次使用时间状语从句，但不显得单调，分别用了连词after、when等，是语境中的自然运用；再者，本文中大量使用了高级词汇：callthepolice、tooursurprise、asaresult、reward、couldn'twaitto、investigative等。模拟训练参考范文Paragraph1Paragraph2读后续写话题素材四

公益事业公益事业阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

“Canyoutellmeifanyoneinourstoredoescommunity

service?”Billasked.Apersonsaid,“IknowthatRosedoes.Shehelpsthehomelessather

church.”Bill,myhusband,hadrecentlybeentransferredtothisstoreasthestoremanager.Billlikedtorecognizeemployeeswhoworkedincommunityservice.HemetwithRoseandfoundoutabouttheoutreachprogramoperatingoutofherinner-citychurch.BilltoldRosethathethoughtIwouldenjoyhelpingher.

WhenBillcamehome

thatnight

afterthetwo-hourcommute,hetoldmeabouthisconversationwithRose.Iwasexcited

attheideaofhelping

insuchaprogram.IstartedtospreadthewordthatBillhadanemployeewhowashelpingthehomelessoutofherchurch.Iaskedifanyonewantedtohelpby

donatingusableitems.Theresponsewasamazing.Differentkindsofdonationswerefloodingin.主题语境：公益事业语篇类型：个人故事语篇难度：★★★关键词：snowmobilesuit短文词数：346建议时间：24mins

Itookthisopportunitytocleanouttheclosetsinourhome,too.Billhadanovercoatheseldomwore.Iputtheovercoatin,alongwithclothesourchildrenhadoutgrownandseveralarticlesofclothingofmyown.EverysooftenRosewouldstopinBill'sofficeandtellhimstoriesabout

themission.Onedayshetalkedaboutanovercoatthatherministerhadtakenfromtheclotheswehaddonated.AsRosedescribedtheovercoat,Billknewitwashis.Hewashappythathehadbeenabletoprovidethisyoungministerwiththewarmcoat.

OnecolddayIwalkedbyourdownstairscloset.Inoticeda

snowmobile

suit

thathadbeenouroldestson,Todd's.Thethoughttoputthissnowsuitinforthemissionimmediatelycametomymind.IdismissedthethoughtasIhadbeensavingthissnowsuitforBrandon,ouryoungestson.

Todd

haddiedinacaraccidentafewyearsagoandforsomereason,Ihadsavedthissnowmobilesuitfor

Brandon.ThiswasoneoftheveryfewthingsIhad

saved

ofTodd's.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语

Paragraph1：Ishouldn'thavedecidedtogiveupthis"special"snowsuitIhadbeensavingalltheseyears.

Paragraph2：Wordaboutthemissionspreadlikewildfire.

语篇解读你曾经做过社区服务吗？Bill所在商店的员工Rose常做社区服务。在Bill夫妇的帮助下，很多人参与社区服务，无偿捐赠物品帮助穷人。篇章分解★backgroundBillwanttoknowwhodoescommunityservice☟HaveconversationwithRose☟Spreadthenewsthatpeoplecanhelpthehomelessbydonatingsomething☟Todd's

snowmobilesuit

★whethertodonateornot

ThiswasoneoftheveryfewthingsIhad

saved

ofTodd's.But...

★developmentofthemission

Whatdoeschurchesget?Whatdoespeopledoinourcommunity?笔前点睛

审题分析☞审要求读后续写，文章语篇类型属于记叙文；☞审人称、时态第一人称、一般过去时；☞原文所给的关键词分类地点：community、church人物：Todd、Brandon事件：attheideaofhelping、donatingusableitems、themission、saved时间：thatnight事物：snowmobilesuit在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词，还需要注意以下线索：1.What'sthestorybehindthesnowmobilesuit?2.Didtheauthordonatethesnowmobilesuit?3.Howdidthemissionspread?Didanyonejoininthedonation?

Ifyes,how？思路点拨1.研读试题中要求的四条注意事项。2.续写时注意“上下求索”，读懂上下文的逻辑关系，读懂提示句。根据关键词语，顺着原来文章的思路续写，并适当发挥。3.注意使用各种语法结构和丰富、准确的词汇，尽可能少犯语法、拼写以及标点等方面的错误。难句分析原文：IstartedtospreadthewordthatBillhadanemployeewhowashelpingthehomelessoutofherchurch.译文：我开始传播消息，即比尔有一个雇员在帮助她教堂外的那些无家可归的人。分析：这是一个主从复合句。句中thatBillhadanemployeewhowashelpingthehomelessoutofherchurch为同位语从句，该从句中who引导定语从句。高分范文Paragraph1:Ishouldn'thavedecidedtogiveupthis"special"

snowsuitIhadbeensavingalltheseyears.However,thethoughtcameagain,"Putthesnowmobile

suitin."Iwalkedoverandtookitoffthehanger.Ilookedatthetaginside.When

Todd

died,hewassixfeettall.

Brandon

wasn'tquitethreeyearsoldwhenTodddied.Evennowhewasn'tbigenoughforthissuit.Idecideditwastimetopartwiththis"special"snowmobilesuitI'dbeensaving.Ilaiditlovinglyontopofabagofotherclothesfor

themission.Paragraph2:Wordaboutthemissionspreadlikewildfire.

Churcheswerecalling,offeringclothingandfood.OnceaweekIstoppedbya

church

inanearbytown.EachweekIloadedthebackendofourvanwiththethingsthepeopleintheircommunitiesgaveaway.Anoldercouplefromour

community

gaveusacheckandtoldustousethemoneytobuythingstotaketothemission.WhenBilldrovetoworkeveryday,hiscarwasloadedwithhelpforthehomeless,givenbytotalstrangers.(159words)高分解密与所给短文衔接紧密，与所提供各段开头语衔接合理；内容丰富，应用了短文中标出的大部分关键词语；文中运用了现在分词作伴随状语及定语从句、过去分词作定语等；此外，文中较好地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构比较紧凑。

篇章分析☞重要短语partwithsth.

放弃，交出（尤指不舍得的东西）take...off...

从……上取下……giveaway

捐赠beloadedwith

装载着

☞

高级句型1.Idecideditwastimetopartwiththis"special"snowmobilesuitI'dbeensaving.（定语从句）2.Churcheswerecalling,offeringclothingandfood.（现在分词短语作伴随状语）3.WhenBilldrovetoworkeveryday,hiscarwasloadedwithhelpforthehomeless,givenbytotalstrangers.（when引导时间状语从句；过去分词短语作定语）模拟训练参考范文Paragraph1Paragraph2高分解析读后续写话题素材五

家庭生活家庭生活

主题语境：家庭生活语篇类型：个人生活语篇难度：★★关键词：son短文词数：303建议时间：23mins阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

JameswasacaptainintheUnitedStatesArmy,butnowarzonecouldhavepreparedhimfortakingcareofthree-year-oldsonShawnonhisown.JameshadtakenleavefromtheArmysohiswifeJessicacouldgototakecareofhersickmother.HewasexcitedaboutplayingMr.Momforafewweeks,buthehadgreatlyunderestimatedShawn.Morningonestartedoutinterestingly.Shawnwokeat7:00a.m,readytostarttheday.JameswasstillfastasleepwhenShawnmadehiswayintothebedroom.Jameswasawokentoafirmslapontheforeheadandausuallysweetlittlevoicedemandingthat"Daddygetup".Jamesyawnedandrubbedhishead,saying,"Goodmorning,littleman.Howareyou?""Getup,Daddy.I'mhungry.""Okay,I'mgettingup."Jameswasoutofbed,hadhisteethbrushed,hisfacewashed,andwasfullydressedinlessthanfiveminutes.Yearsofmilitarytrainingandrepetitioncameinhandyattimes.PoorJameshadnoideajusthowmuchofthattraininghewouldneedtopullfromtogetthroughthemorning."Daddy,I'mhungry,"Shawnrepeated,notsomuchinforming,butratherordering."Howaboutwegogetyoudressedfirst?""No.""Yes.Let'sgetdressedandthenwewillhavebreakfast.""No!"Shawnranfromtheroom."Excuseme,sir.Youcomebackhere!""No,sir!"onceJamesfinishedlaughingandregainedhiscomposure,heranafterShawnwhowaswaitingforhiminthekitchen."Shawn,weneedtogetdressedandthenwe'llhavebreakfast.""Carryme,"Shawnordered,liftinghisarmsuptowardJames,"Aren'tIsupposedtobegivingtheordersaroundhere?"JamesquestionedashepickedupShawnandcarriedhimtowardsthebedroom.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1：Jamesthrewhissontothebedandorderedhimtotakeoffhissleepingclothes.Paragraph2：Therefore,Shawnorderedhisdaddyto文章来源文章来源本文选自英文网站，原文题目为“CaptainDaddy”《上校爸爸》，作者为JenBeaney，IzzyWingham语篇解读

本文是记叙文。作者描述了一位上校军官，在家照顾孩子的令人啼笑皆非的故事。孩子不是军人，但孩子模仿军人，军人对待孩子不能只是命令，而是启发引导。这个故事说明了淘气是孩子的天性，而因材施教是成年人的必修功课。难句分析原文：PoorJameshadnoideajusthowmuchofthattraininghewouldneedtopullfromtogetthroughthemorning.译文：可怜的詹姆斯不知道他需要从那个训练中拿出多少（技能）才能熬过那天下午。分析：这是一个主从复合句。howmuchof...为同位语从句，其中thattraining后的hewouldneedtopullfrom作定语，是一个省略关系词的定语从句。笔前点睛审题分析☞审要求读后续写，本文语篇类型属于记叙文；

☞审人称、时态以第三人称为主兼顾第二人称，以一般过去时为主兼顾一般现在时态；

☞审要点爸爸的命令

☛

换衣服的命令没有见效

☛

商量换衣服后去吃饭的效果显著儿子的命令

☛

吃饼干的命令见效

☛

哭闹想要见妈妈见效

☞原文所给的关键词分类地点：kitchen、bedroom人物：James、son、Shawn、captain事件：breakfast、orders事物：bed、forehead

在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词，还需要注意以下线索：1.What'sJames？2.WhydidJamesunderestimatehisson？3.Whatkindofwayscouldbeeffective？4.WhatwouldDaddyusuallydowhilestayingalonewithachild？思路点拨

本文的第一段最后一句提到James低估了儿子Shawn，暗示着这篇续写短文要依据与儿子的相处，写出儿子的淘气和不容易管理；本文强调James是一位上校，显然管理士兵与管理儿子所用方式是不同的，结合生活经验，围绕孩子的衣、食、住等内容来续写；续写时要注意提示句以及提示词的导向作用，不能偏离这些内容，同时注意两段之间的关联以及亮点句式、词汇的运用。高分范文Paragraph1:

Jamesthrewhissontothebedandorderedhimtotakeofhissleepingclothes.

However,his

son

cried,"No,I'munwillingtochangethem."①

Atthatmoment,Hehadnoideabuttostop

Shawn'scrying.Suddenly

James

pattedhimselfontheforehead,andthenagoodideaoccurredtohim.

②Hewasn'ta

captain,butafather.Soheshouldshowlovetohisson,notjustgive

orders."Mydear,wechangeclothesinordertohave

breakfast,OK?""Oh,OK!Daddy!"Afterthat,Shawnwantedtoeatbiscuits.Paragraph2:

Therefore,Shawnorderedhisdaddytomakesomebiscuitsforhim.Hesaid,"Daddy,I'mhungryagain,soyoumustgivemesomebiscuits."Hedidthatjustlikehisfatheraskedsoldierstoobeyhisorders.③AtfirstJamesdidn'trespond,butShawnrushedtothe

kitchen."④

Seeingthat,Jamesquicklysaid,"OK,sir.

⑤Thenoonwascomingnear,andJamesputhissonontothe

bed,buthecriedagain,"Whereismymummy?IwantMummy."Jamesfeltangry,

⑥shoutingathisson,"Youmustshutupyourmouth.However,therewasnoeffectatall.Hehadtoaskhiswifetocomebackintheend.

(170words)

高分解密本篇范文能够从原文中找到underestimate、captain等要点提示，续写内容合乎生活规律并且科学严谨，语句有条理、过渡自然，把淘气的儿子、无奈的爸爸以及爸爸教育孩子采用的方式变化生动地写了出来，故事性强。作者使用了一些高级语法结构，如not...but...、hadnoideabutto...等，成为范文的亮点；本题满分25分，本篇范文得24分。篇章分析①havenoideabuttodosth.“除了做某事别无办法”②not…but...不是……而是……③连词but连接表示转折意义的并列分句④现在分词短语Seeingthat作时间状语⑤连词and连接并列分句；连词but连接表示转折意义的并列分句⑥现在分词短语shouting...为伴随状语读后续写话题素材六

人与环境人与环境语境考察例题展示主题语境：人与环境语篇类型：短篇小说语篇难度：★★关键词：magichole短文词数：311建议时间：21mins阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。PennywasalittlegirlwholivedinAlaska.Itwasice-coldthere.Shekeptprayingthatshecouldplaygreenandwarmgardenslikewedobutofcourse,shecouldn't.Herfather,likeallthementhere,didn'thaveajob.Hehuntedsealsandcaughtfishes,aswasthecustom.Soherfatherhadn'tevenheardofmoneyandevenifhehadmoney,thereweren'tan