2020年中考英语作文专项训练

中考英语作文专项训练一、考点分析：在中考中，写作占20分，分值所占比例大，而写作考察学生的英文综合运用能力，因此非常关键。【中考英语作文的评分标准】比较为学生所熟悉的就是“8+8+4”结构，即：（一）内容：7-8分：内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚、完整。5-6分：内容基本切题，意思大致连贯，表达基本清楚、但不够完整。2-4分：内容不够切题，意思不够连贯，表达不够清楚、有些离题。0-1分：文不对题，表达不清。（二）语言：词数：每少5个字扣0.5分，以此类推。只写出个别单词、词不成句不给分。拼写：每错扣0.5分，同一错误不重复计数。语法：同②标点符号、大小写：每两处错误扣0.5分，但扣分总和不超过1分。（三）组织结构：内容充实、上下文连贯、用语规范、表达准确、无语法错误；词汇和句型句式运用恰当，多见好句型和习惯表达用语者，可给3-4分。内容充实、不写废话；上下文连贯、用语规范、表达准确、无或少见语法错误；词汇和句型句式运用恰当，多见好句型和习惯表达用语者，可给2分。一般情况下，内容和语言累计得分在15分以上者（含），方可得到1-2分组织结构分。内容和语言在15分以下者，如文中有值得肯定的好句型和表达，可酌情考虑给1分组织结构分。通篇句型、句式单一、词汇贫乏者，即使无语法错误，一般也不予给组织结构分。二、写作中常见问题：内容空洞，没有清晰的思路，表达能力不强，表达生硬呆板，甚至中式英语翻译思维。议论过多，描写不足。大多数情况下，把议论当成的作文的重点，常常跑题。句式单一，都是简单句，缺少复合句。结构散漫，思维跳跃，文章缺乏条理性。连词的使用较少，并且使用单一，句子之间的连接很生硬。文章平淡，无亮点短语和句型，连接词等。三、写作技巧分析：【高分作文的必备元素】书写工整，书面整洁，很少有涂改痕迹。2.不出现语法，拼写，标点，大小写等错误。3.文章字数最好控制在80-100字之间，切记过长或者过短，8-10句即可。4.要点齐全。为了避免遗漏要点，可以将题目中给出的要点标注出来。5.开头言简意赅，不啰嗦，不偏题，迅速引入主题。6.连接词使用恰当，不重复，上下文有连贯性，使之自然成一体。应用词汇:高级词汇的合理使用、同义词的变化使用、短语的恰当使用。多用亮点短语，并且使短语多样性，尽可能使用多种表达方式。比如：同一个意思“帮助”，假如你就用一个动词“help”，显得词汇贫乏。如果能在作文中不断地变换方式，用help、givesb.ahand、dosb.afavor、beinneedof等以表达“帮助”，表达更灵活生动。句式多样性，可适当使用陈述句，疑问句，祈使句及感叹句，强调句，倒装句，定语从句，状语从句，宾语从句等。能够恰当使用谚语、格言、名言等给文章添彩。语法结构多样性,主动被动交叉用，原级比较级灵活用，非谓语动词恰当用。灵活使用万能句型，增添文章亮点。四、中考经典范文解读：VII.Writing（作文）（共20分）94.Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Iwanttoinvent”（以“我想要发明”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格）（注意：1、在答题纸上将题目补充完整。2、短．文．中．不．得．出．现．任．何．人．名．、．校．名．及．其．他．相．关．信．息．，．否．则．不．予．评．分．。）Thefollowingisforreferenceonly.（以下表达仅供参考）Itcanbeusedto...Itwillbeexciting/necessary/helpfhlto.范文精选一及点评：IwanttoinventaflyingcarItisnotuncommontomeettrafficproblemsandseriousairpollutioninbigcity.Itisamusttohaveaplantoimprovetheseriouscondition.Igetanideatodesignmyownflyingmachinelikeacarwhichcandrivewellinthestreetaswellasflybetweenthehighrisestoavoidthetrafficjam.What'smore,whenitismoving,itcantransformthemotionenergyintoelectricitytodrivetheengine.Thus,itispossibletosavealotoffuelandreducetheairpollution.Itisofgreatusetosolvetheproblemsoftrafficjamandairpollution,andevensavethenaturalresource.Brightideacanonlybeachievedwiththedeterminationandcourage.Ibelievemyideawillturnanewleafoffuturelife.精彩亮点分析：亮点一：高分短语亮点二：itisamust活用高频词亮点三：定语从句描述自己设计的汽车亮点四：高分短语亮点五：beofgreatuse名词结构更高端亮点六：被动语态，丰富句式亮点七：turnanewleafoffuturelife翻开未来生活的新篇章范文精选二及点评：IwanttoinventatimemachineAsastudentwhoisexperiencingunprecedentedmodernlifenowadays,Iwouldratherlearnaboutthehistoryandthefuturelifeofhumanbeingfromarealexperiencethanlearnfromatextbook.That'swhyifIcanworkasagreatinventor,inventingatimemachinewillbemyfirstchoice.ThemostimportantusageofmytimemachinewillbevisitingoneofbestschoolsinTangDynasty.Asweallknow,TangDynastyisfamousforitsopen-mindededucation.Therefore,whenIvisittheschooloftheancientcity,Icannotonlytrydifferentwaysofstudyingbutcommunicatewithpeoplefromdifferentcountriesaswell.Usingatimemachineisthemostvividwaytolearnhistoryasitisbotharecordofmankindandamirrorofpast,Iamlookingforwardtothedaywhenmytimemachinecomesout.精彩亮点分析：亮点一：定语从句修饰对学生现在的生活亮点二：用wouldrather…than…表达学生的意愿亮点三：用if条件状语从句表达主题亮点四：befamousfor因…而著名亮点五：notonly...but...aswell不但…而且…亮点六：用动名词词组做主语亮点七：用idiom突出历史的重要性亮点八：定语从句表达学生的期待范文精选三及点评：IWantToInventAFamilyDoctorRobotIwanttoinventafamilydoctorrobot,whichcanbeusedtocuretheillnesswithoutgoingoutoftheirhome.AsfarasI'mconcerned,itwillbeextremelyhelpfulandusefulbecauseofthefollowingreasons:First,youcanseethedoctorimmediatelyathomewhenyoufeelsickorgethurt.Itcansaveusalotoftime,especiallyinemergencysituations.Furthermore,hospitalstodayarealwaysfilledwithpatients,noteveryonecanbetakengoodcareof.However,withthehelpofourrobotdoctors,youcantalktoyourpersonaldoctoronetoonewheneveryouwant.Inshort,familydoctorrobotscanmakegreatcontributiontooursociety.精彩亮点分析：亮点一：全文巧用“first,furthermore,inshort”等连接词，把家庭机器人医生的好处写的非常清晰，让阅卷老师一目了然。亮点二：全文采用了定语从句、状语从句、并列句等多种长难句，为文采分增色不少。亮点三：文中出现了“extremely,makecontributionto”这些超纲单词及词组，恰到好处地强调了家庭机器人医生的重要性，且为文采再次进行润色。VII.Writing（作文）（共20分）94.Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“I'mready”（以“我准备好了”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标题符号不占格）你对明天一定有着美好的憧憬，为此，你已经做好了哪方面的准？请结合你的经历或特长等，选取一个角度具体谈谈你是如何做准备的。（注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名以及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）Thefollowingisforreferenceonly.（以下内容及供参考）Independentbegoodat...Responsibletakepartin...Hardworkingithelpsmeto...范文精选一及点评：I'MREADYSummerholidayiscoming,allmyclassmatesarepreparingtohaveawonderfulholiday,includingme.IamreadytogotoBeiDaihe,theseasideholidayresort,forswimmingandhavingagoodtimeontheseaside.Icannotonlyappreciatethebeautifulscenerybutalsobreathethefreshair.Itlooksgood,isn'tit?BeforeIgototheseaside,Ithinkit'simportanttotakesomethingusefulwithmesuchassunglasses,bathingsuit,suntanoilandmyhomeworkandsoon.Well,thelastIwanttocarryissomemedicine,whichcankeepmesafe.AfterthatIshouldplanwhereIstay,playandhowtogetthere.Inconclusion,IdobelieveIcandoitperfectlyandenjoymyself.精彩亮点八、、分析：亮点一：八、、•非谓语动词including的巧妙使用。亮点二：同谓语的恰当使用，说明目的地是一个海滨度假圣地。亮点三：notonly…butalso…表达度假不仅可以欣赏美景还可以呼吸新鲜空气。亮点四：运用反义疑问句，加强语气。亮点五：运用定语从句，修饰medicine。亮点六：巧妙使用“do“这个词，加强语言表达力度。范文精选二及点评：I'MREADYI'MAreyouapersonwhoalwayslikestogetreadyforeverything?Doyouoftenmakeafullpreparationfor

somethingbeforedoing?Iamsuchaguyduetoanunforgettableexperience.Istillrememberitwasafinalexam,Ihadbeenplayingalldaybeforeit,believingthatIamcleverenoughtogetahighscore,however,theresultwasveryawful.Fromthenon,Iknowifyouwanttosucceed,themostimportantthingistogetreadyforit.Therefore,duringthelastwholeyear,Idevoteallmytimetoreviewingmylessons.TheonlyreasonisthatIknowthereisn'taluckydogintheworld,andonthewaytosuccess,hardworkingisthekey.精彩亮占八、、分析:亮占一-•八、、・疑问句开头,引发阅读兴趣亮点味二：过去完成进行时的使用使文章意思表达的更清晰亮占三：八、、・分词做伴随状语,使文章档次提升亮点四：be+adj.+enoughtodosth.足够…做某事亮点五:条件状语从句的使用亮占八、、六:不定式做表语亮点七：devoteone'stime(in)to...把…奉献给亮点八：表语从句的使用五、连接词汇总：表起始:firstofall,tobeginwith,inmyopinion,accordingto,sofar,asfaras等表时间:first,atfirst,then,later,intheend,finally,afterwards,afterthat,sincethen,forthefirsttime,atlast,assoonas,thenextmoment,meanwhile,lateron,soon,finally等表空间:ontheright/left,totheright/leftof,ononesideof...ontheothersideof..atthefbot/top/endof,inthemiddle/centreof,nextto,farfrom,infrontof等表因果:for,becauseof,onereasonisthat.anotherreasonisthat...,since,as,asaresult(of),so,thus,therefore,asaresult等表转折:but,yet,however,afterall,infact,while,insteadof,unlike,although,afterall等表列举:forexample,suchas,like,inotherwords,andsoon等表推进:what'smore,furthermore,ononehand.ontheotherhand.,inadditionto,aswell,still,also,inotherwords,notonly.butalso.,besides,moreover.等表总结:generalllyspeaking,inshort,inaword,ingeneral,inbrief,inall等表示目的：forthispurpose,forthisreason,sothat,inorderthat,soasto,inorderto.表示让步：although,though,eventhough/if,nomatterwh—六、从句在写作中的使用：1.不用说..Itgoeswithoutsayingthat.=(Itis)needlesstosay(that)=Itisobviousthat.例：不用说早睡早起是值得的。Itgoeswithoutsayingthatitpaystokeepearlyhours.在各种……之中，……Amongvariouskindsof…，…/=Ofallthe…，…例：在各种运动中我尤其喜欢慢跑。Amongvariouskindsofsports,Ilikejogginginparticular.就我的看法……；我认为……Inmyopinion,…=Tomymind,…=AsfarasIamconcerned,…=Iamoftheopinionthat…例：Inmyopinion,playingvideogamesnotonlytakesmuchtimebutisalsoharmfultohealth.就我的看法打电动玩具既花费时间也有害健康。随着人口的增加……Withtheincrease/growthofthepopulation,…随着科技的进步……Withtheadvanceofscienceandtechnology,…例：WiththerapiddevelopmentofTaiwan'seconomy,alotofsocialproblemshavecometopass.随着台湾经济的快速发展许多社会问题产生了。……是必要的Itisnecessary（forsb.）todo/that………是重要的Itisimportant/essential（forsb.）todo/that………是适当的Itisproper（forsb.）todo/that………是紧急的Itisurgent（forsb.）todo/that…例：Itisproperforustokeepthepublicplacesclean.Itisproperthatwe（should）keepthepublicplacesclean.我们应当保持公共场所清洁。花费spend…onsth./doingsth.…例：我们不应该在我们不感兴趣的事情上花太多的时间。Weshouldn'tspendtoomuchtimeonsomethingwearen'tinterestedin.how引导的感叹句例：那至少可以证明你很诚实。Atleastitwillprovehowhonestyouare.状语从句A）如果你不，你就会Ifyoudon't...，you'll...例：Ifyoudon'tkeepworkinghard,you'lllosethechance.如果你不坚持努力工作，你就会失去这次机会。B）如此..，以至于..so.that.例:Atthatmoment,IwassoupsetthatIwantedtogiveup.当时，我非常伤心，最后都想放弃了。C）每当我听到..我就忍不住感到兴奋。WheneverIhear.，Icannotbutfeelexcited.每当我做..我就忍不住感到悲伤。WheneverIdo.，Icannotbutfeelsad.每当我想到我就忍不住感到紧张。WheneverIthinkof...,Icannotbutfeelnervous.每当我遭遇……我就忍不住感到害怕。WheneverImeetwith…，Icannotbutfeelfrightened.每当我看到..我就忍不住感到惊讶。WheneverIsee.，Icannotbutfeelsurprised.例:WheneverIthinkofthecleanbrooknearmyhome,Icannotbutfeelsad.=EverytimeIthinkofthecleanbrooknearmyhome,Icannothelpfeelingsad.每当我想到我家附近那一条清澈的小溪我就忍不住感到悲伤。9.宾语从句我认为，../我认为..不Ithink/Idon'tthinkthat.我想知道是否..Iwonderwhether.例：Hedoesn'tthinkIshouldstophimjoiningtheclub.他认为我不应该阻止他参加这个俱乐部。10.Since+S+过去式，S+现在完成式。例：Sincehewenttoseniorhighschool,hehasworkedveryhard.自从他上高中，他就一直很用功。专项练习（p