读后续写练习写作指导 讲义-2023届高考英语写作备考

读后续写阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasakidabouttwelveyearsold,Ihadalotoffreckles（雀斑）.IhadreachedtheagewhenIhadbeguntoreallylookatmyselfinthemirror,andIwasoverwhelmed.Apparentlymymotherwastoo,becausesometimesshe'dlookatmeandshakeherhead.IhadacousinwhosenamewasJanetteElizabeth.Shelookedexactlylikehernamesoundsbecauseshehadaflawlesspeaches-and-creamcomplexion（肤色）.Icouldn'thelpcomparingmyselfwithherandthinkingthatmylifewouldbealotdifferentifIhadbeautifulskintoo.Andthen,inthebackpagesofJanetteElizabeth'smagazine,Ifoundtheanswer:anadvertisementforfreckle-removercream.IknewthatIcouldafforditifIsavedmymoney,andIdid.Theadassuredmethattheproductwouldworkwell.ForthreeweeksIwenttothemailboxeverydaypreciselyatthetimethemailwasdelivered.Iknewthatifsomeoneelseinmyfamilygotthemail,Iwouldneverheartheendofit.Therewasnowaythattheywouldletmeopentheboxinprivate.Threeweekslater,mypackagefinallycame.Iwenttomyroomwithit,satontheedgeofmybed,andopenedit.IwassurethatIwaslookingatamiracle.WhenIgotupthenextmorning,Iappliedthecreamallovermybody.ThenItookmyhoe（锄头）andwentwithmybrotherandcousinstohoethefield,whereIgotridofsometigerlilies（虎百合），seeminglyuglywithblackandsmallspots.Thesunwassostrongthatevenmyfacestartedtoburn.Bytheendoftheday,whenIcamebacktothehouse,myfamily,knowingnothingaboutthefreckle-removercream,begantosaythingslike'Tveneverseenyouwiththatmanyfrecklesbefore//WhenIsawmyselfinthemirror,Ifoundmyfrecklesevendarkerandclearer.Idissolvedintotearsandhidinthebathroom.注意：.续写词数应为150左右；.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Mymothercalledmetothedinnertable,butIignoredher.Afterwhatseemedacentury,Iheardagentleknockonmybedroom'sdoor.写作解析■前文分析•人物>I:akidabouttwelveyearsoldhadalotoffreckles（雀斑）hadbeguntoreallylookatmyselfoverwhelmed>JanetteElizabeth:acousinlookedexactlylikehernamesounds(hadabeautifulskin)＞mymother:lookedatmeandshakedherhead•主题人与人、人与自我(否定--b肯定，心态的转变)•主要情节当我12岁的时候，脸上有很多雀斑，爱美之心已经隐约出现，自己对雀斑不知所措，妈妈看了也摇头。表妹JanetteElizabeth倒是长的很水灵，非常羡慕，希望有跟她一样好的皮肤。有一天，在她订阅的杂志最后几页看到了祛斑霜的广告。于是，我就积攒了足够的钱去买来试试。三周后，祛斑产品终于送到，第二天我就把祛斑霜把全身擦了个遍，然后就跟着哥哥和表兄弟们下地去了。我把地里看上去有小的黑斑点的虎百合除掉。太阳很烈，晒的脸都感觉焦了一样。干完活回家，家人们看着我的脸说，从来没看到过我脸上竟然长了那么多的雀斑。我去照了照镜子，发现确实这些雀斑比用祛斑霜之前显得更黑更清楚了。瞬间，泪如雨下，我跑进了洗手间。……■下文分析•续写两段：＞段1：Mymothercalledmetothedinnertable,butIignoredher.＞段2：Afterwhatseemedacentury,Iheardagentleknockonmybedroom/sdoor.•续写主线：对脸上的雀斑不能接受，想去改变，改变失败，接受现实•两段情节安排＞段1：①与开头句衔接，为什么不理睬妈妈，同时要注意"场地"转换。②冲进卧室后，我想了些什么做了些什么。③明白雀斑会更明显的原因，然后继续伤心(与段2开头句衔接)。＞段2：①起身开门，虽然不太愿意。②开门看到妈妈拿着虎百合进来。妈妈借虎百合说明人生道理。③让我的悲伤之情有所转变，了解了实情后，寻求解决的办法。范文1Mymothercalledmetothedinnertable,butIignoredher.Thinkingoftheuglyface,Ifellintocompletecollapse,tearscoursingdownmycheeksagain.Dashingintothebedroom,Ilockedmyselfinit.What'swrong?Wasthefreckle-removercreamfaIse?AnythingIcandotorescuemyface?...Puzzlesranaroundmymind.WhenIreadtheinstructionsofitsusagecarefully,allcametothelightIshouldn'thavebeenexposedinthesunimmediatelyafterusingthecream.SosadwasIthatIthrewmyselfontothebedsobbing,notknowingwhattodo.(91words)Afterwhatseemedacentury,Iheardagentleknockonmybedroom'sdoor.SorrowfulasIwas,Igotoutofbedanddraggedmyselfslowlytowardsthedoor.Openingthedoor,Imetmymother'ssmilingface,abunchoftigerliliesinherhand.Shecameover,satonthebedandhandedmethelilieswithblacksmallspots,sayingthevalueofdifferentflowerslayintheirbeautymakingacolorfulworld,thoughtheysometimesseemedalittleimperfect.Mother'swarmwordsrelievedmysadness.Analyzingthefact,weeventuallyfoundawayouttodealwithwhatIsuffered.(91words)范文2Mymothercalledmetothedinnertable,butIignoredher.WhenshecametothebathroomdooranddemandedthatIcomeoutandhaveameal,Iburstoutofthedoor,tearsstreamingdownmycheeks.Beforeshestoppedme,Istormedintomyroomandslammedthedoorshutbehindme.Lookingintothemirror,Isawagirlwithmoreanddarkerfrecklesonthefaceinsteadofpeaches-and-creamcomplexion.OnlythendidIrealizethatthecreamhadareverseeffectwhenwearingitinthesun.Ithrewmyselfdownonthebedandsobbed.(91words)Afterwhatseemedacentury,Iheardagentleknockonmybedroom'sdoor.Hesitatingforamoment,withpuffyeyesandstillwetcheeks,Ishuffledacrosstheroomtoopenthedoor.AtthedoorstoodmymotherandJanettewithabigbunchoftigerlilies,whichwerecoveredwithblackspotsbutamazinglybeautiful.Istaredattheminstunnedsurprise,notknowing