读后续写之烘焙的梦想 讲义-高三英语写作专项

1、Walking along the narrow brick sidewalk, Aram took a deep breath. The air smelled of lemons and baked bread and coffee, coming from Rossis Italian Bakery. He was almost there.Aram still couldnt believe his luck. All his friends were working boring summer jobswaiting tables and babysitting. And here

2、he was, about to start as an actual baker*s assistant doing what he loved. It was all thanks to his Aunt Rita. She knew Mrs Rossi and had arranged everything. It was the perfect experience for his future career. Rossis Bakery, he was sure, would one day be known as the place where he got his start.A

3、h, here he was-the bakery. A faded wooden sign over the door read Rossis Bakery. Aram straightened his shoulders and entered. Mrs Rossi was sitting at the counter, looking old and wise. Aram greeted her and stuck out his hand. Mrs Rossi looked a second before turning around and waving him inside. Im

4、 ready to learn everything, Aram said.Great. Lets start with the cash register/ Mrs Rossi said, “because thats what-youll be doing. She showed him how to use the cash register. It wasnt hard. The pastry trays were all marked by price, and there werenft-that many choices anyway. nThat*s it?” Aram sai

5、d, his heart sinking. But when do we bake?Hf“Bake? I order wholesale now. No more baking. Im too old/ Then Mrs Rossi silently held up her hands. Aram took in her knotted, swollen fingers, and he understood. A wave of disappointment struck him. Sadness overwhelmed him so suddenly that he couldnt thin

6、k of a word to say.He sighed, and Mrs Rossi sighed, too. nI used to bake it all. Bread and cakes. And no one did it better than me. But that was when these things worked/ said MrsRossi holding up her hands once more and glancing across the shelves filled with empty bottles labelled with names of the

7、 various ingredients （配料）she once used.Suddenly she came alive, waving her arthritic （关节炎的）hands, People used to lineup around the corner. Everyone wanted my baked bread/*第一段 Then a thought occurred to Aram that he could ask Mrs Rossi to teach him.第二段 Mrs Rossi finally said, Lets buy the ingredients

8、 first.”Mrs.Rossie同意并且交给他1. Aram 问， Mrs.Rossie 同意 语言描写方法动作描写+心理描写+语言描写1. Aram问（激动，不安+说“你如果教我做可以吗？）普通版本：Aram felt excited but nervous. He said , “ can you teach me how to make the bread?” 升级 1 ： Overwhelmed by a feeling of excitement and uneasiness , he stood up , saying in a trembling voice Jcould y

9、ou please teach me how to make the bread ?” 升级 2： Overwhelmed by a feeling of excitement an:d uneasiness , he stood up , saying in a trembling voice Jwhat if you teach me how to make the bread and i help you bake it ?升级 3： Overwhelmed by a feeling of excitement an:d uneasiness , he plucked up his co

10、urage to saywhat if you teach me how to make the bread and i help you bake it ?” 2. Mrs.Rossi感到惊6,问“这很困难，你确定不？普通版： Mrs.Rossi felt surprised and asked , this is so difficult ,Are you sure ?升级 1： 惊讶：to my surprise，/动作+in astonishment /Feeling surprised ,Raising her head in astonishment ,Mrs.Rossi aske

11、d in a soft voice/with a big smile , this is quite challenging .are you sure to learn it ?”3. Aran说他可以Aran answered , yesYes ! I will try my best =make efforts to do it /devote myself to doing it !” Aram replied in a determined v. oice .4Mrs.Rossi 同意A feeling if delight and comfort welling up in her

12、 heart, she was deeply moved by his words , nodding her head slowly.P2:大思路：Mrs.Rossie同意教他 买+开始做+怎么做+卖出去+开心 1. A开心，去超市买Aram jumped to his feet with excitement, rushing to the supermarket.东西准备好了，他开始做，With everything ready , he got down to making cakesWith everything ready , he set out to make cakes .W

13、ith everything ready , he filled the empty bottles with ingredients .在R指导下，他把材料放进碗里，搅拌，放进烤箱动作要详，多写过程性动作，少写结果性动作,拿出来，香气弥漫整间房子When taking out of it, the house was flooded with the smell /flagrance of cakes.顾客们都被吸引，买了Many customers came to the store and bought the cakeAttracted by the smell of the cake

14、 , lots of /a number of customers came to the shop and the cakes were soon sold out.Attracted by the smell of the cake , the shop was crowded wit lots of customers and the cakes were soon sold outTo their surprise , with the shop crowded with lots of customers , the cakes were soon sold out.他们开心一一一一一升华A gr