2022年PEP小学英语六年级上册各单元作文范例及点评

1、学习资料收集于网络,仅供参考 PEP学校英语六年级上册各单元作文范例及点评2022-05-15 00:11:03 转载 标签：分类： 英文学习杂谈Li Ying S HobbyLi Ying likes English very much. She works hard at it. She reads English every morning. She likes speaking English. She often listens to the radio. She watches TV only on Saturday evening. Does she like dancing.

2、No, she doesnt. But she likes drawing and singing. Her parents love her. And all the teachers and her friends like her, too. She says her hobbies make her happy. 【要领点评】这一篇写爱好的文章 ,小作者的写作思路很值得我们学习,他没有详细写到刘莹的某一种爱好 学习资料,而是从学习到课余学习资料收集于网络,仅供参考 的多种爱好入手 ,对刘莹的各种爱好进行了粗线条地勾画 .从“爱好 ”这个角度来看刘莹的话,我们会觉得这个形象很 饱满；小伴

3、侣们写这种 “叙事写人 ”作文时,可以从两个角度下 手：一是详细地描画；二是和上面小伴侣一样,粗线条地 勾画,二者各有所长,另处在行文中使用一些问句,使用 一些转述的话,可以使作文更有灵气,防止了平铺直叙的缺点；比如上文的 “ Does she likedancing. No, she doesnt. ”和“ she says her hobbies make her happy. 就是特别不错的句子,使读者眼前为之一亮；Dont be against the traffic rulesI go to school from Monday to Friday .I go to school b

4、y bike at 7:30 in the morning .I must cross two busy roads .If the traffic light is red or yellow,I know I cant cross the road ,so I wait. If the light turns green, I know it means “ Go” , and walk across the road .I always ride on the right side of the road .I am never against the traffic rules. 学习

5、资料学习资料收集于网络,仅供参考【要领点评】这篇作文的题目是 “不要违反交通规章 ”,小作者没有说一些空话,而是从自己的经受写起,表达自己以什么方式去上学,在上学的路上是怎么做的,很形象；小伴侣们在作文时留意不要图大,那样很简单使文章显得空洞,而要写自己身边熟识的事情；要留意行文中字母的大小写、句子的标点符号等；I Love My FamilyHere is a photo lf my family. These are four people in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother and I. My father is

6、 a doctor. He works in a hospital far away. He goes to work by subway. My mother is a teacher. She works in a school near my home. She goes to work by bike. After work, they like reading books. Who is the tall boy. He is my brother. He is five years older than me. He is a singer. Henow in Beijing. H

7、e goes there by plane. 学习资料学习资料收集于网络,仅供参考I love my family. 【要领点评】一个平凡的题材,一篇生动的作文；这样的命题,我们 可能面对几次,甚至几十次了；但这位小伴侣的笔端很是 灵活,了了数言,让一个幸福的家庭跃然纸上,很值得我 们去摸索,我们能做到吗？小伴侣的这篇作文除了语言美丽之外,在结构上也有闪 光之处；先总说,将自己的家人逐个介绍一遍,后分说,把家人的工作、上班方式,爱好一一细说；最终以一句话 进行概括,起到点题的作用；我们在写类似的作文的时候 是不是也可以借鉴呢？How to get to the science museumWe

8、 are going to the science museum tomorrow. There is an old thing show in the Museum. Do you know how we can get to the science museum. 学习资料学习资料收集于网络,仅供参考The science museum is next to the Peoples Park. Itfar from our school. So we can go there on foot .Walk straight to the west from our school, next

9、turn left at the post office and walk for about 5 minutes, then turn right at traffic lights. You can find the Peoples Park on the right . Walk straight, and you ll see the science museum.【要领点评】这篇作文的题目是 “怎样去科学博物馆 ”；怎样才算是一 篇好作文呢？通过你的表达, 能让别人很简单找到博物馆,这应是最基本的要求；小作者在文中告知我们什么呢？首先他写了去博物馆的位置,最终浓墨重彩,指明从学校去博

10、物馆的详细路线,这条路线够清晰吧！小伴侣们在写这类作文的时候,总有些无从下手的感 觉,不知从何说起；其实介绍路线,无非就是告知他人某 学习资料学习资料收集于网络,仅供参考 段路的起点和终点,仍有就是如何从起点走到终点；要给 他人说清晰, 你自己第一得清晰, 然后再通过自己的表达,将路线清清晰楚得出现出来；肯定要留意行文中一些关键 的地方,如在哪儿转弯,向哪儿转,经过哪些重要的交通 标志或惹眼的标志建筑等；这样,你就能说清,别人也能 弄明白；Planting TreesIt s spring. Its time to plant trees.I want to plant a tree in o

11、ur garden. Dad and Mum are very happy. They like green. Dad helps me plant the tree. First, we dig the soil. Then I put a little tree into the soil. Next I water it. I am so excited and I wait for the tree to grow. Two weeks later, my tree has some little leaves. I water it every day. Now it has lot

12、s of leaves. It grows fast. We should plant more trees. They make our world beautiful. 学习资料学习资料收集于网络,仅供参考【要领点评】小作者写了一次植树的经受, 但他并没有单纯拘泥于植 树的过程；既有过程,也有感觉,能使文章打动读者,给 人以启示；作文的最终一段就特别好,两句话胜似千言万 语；我们可以学习一下这种写法；既描述过程,又适时提自己的看法或想法的写法,在作文 中叫做 “夹叙夹议 ” ,描述过程为了提出一种思想服务,提出 看法或想法使原本平实的描述有了意义；我们在以后的写 作中也可以试一试；Let

13、s have a nice day学习资料学习资料收集于网络,仅供参考It s Sunday tomorrow .Im going to the bookstore with my friends tomorrow morning .We are going to look for some good books .We all like reading books .We are going to eat our lunch at the restaurant. I like chicken, beef and vegetables .After lunch, we are going to the Summer Palace by bus. We are going to play near the Kunming Lake. Maybe we are going to row a boat on the lake .Wow, that will be relaxing. We are coming back at 5pm. 【要领点评】怎样才称得上是 “美好的一天 ”？有两点不能遗忘, 一是 支配得充实,二是支配得有意义；这两点小作者无疑都想到了,上午去书店看书买书,中午在饭店吃饭,下午去颐和园玩耍、划船,丰富多彩！文章以时