读后续写--心理描写： 归还手机--2022届高考英语专训.docx

1、读后续写一（南通一模续写）心理描写：归还手机题目：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。One afternoon after school, Mary and her brother, Keith, were eating at a cafe near their home. That afternoon, they had to share their table with another person. That person was a young lady in her twenties. A代er eating, she went to the

2、restroom. Without realizing, she had left her hand phone on the table. Five minutes later, she came out and walked out of the cafe without looking back.Mary saw the hand phone on the table. She quickly told Keith, "Keith, the girl left behind her hand phone.HKeith looked at the hand phone. It t

3、ook his breath away. It was one of the latest models on the market. Keith had always wanted a hand phone. But his parents had told him, "You donrt need one. You can always use the house phone.HHe stared at it for some minutes. Then he said slowly, pausing on every word, "I want to take the

4、 hand phone."Mary could not believe her ears. She merely stared at her brother. "You can't! What if the owner comes to look for it?"Having made the decision, Keith quickly grabbed the hand phone and put it in his schoolbag. Then, he took Mary's hand and led her out of the cafe

5、 quickly.Once back home, Keith locked his house door with trembling hands. Inside his room, he took out the piece of beauty. Oh, he liked it so much. Now he had his own hand phone. Soon, he was polishing it happily.But Mary told him, "Keith, you cannot keep the hand phone. What will you tell Fa

6、ther about this? He will ask you how you got the hand phone."Keith said quickly, “I will say a friend lent it to me."Mary said, "Now you are lying too." Oh dear! When had Keith turned so dishonest?Then Mary saw a house phone number on the plastic cover of the hand phone. "Th

7、is is the girl's phone number. Why don't we just call this number? We will talk to her and ask her to come and take back her hand phone.M She was trying to talk some sense into him.注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。That night, Keith turned over in bed from time to time.Mary was very hap

8、py to hear that.指导：1. 文章的主题本文的主题是比较容易开出来的，即：诚实。剩下就是如何去体现主题。体现主题的句子：But Mary told him, "Keith, you cannot keep the hand phone. What will you tell Father about this? He will ask you how you got the hand phone.”Mary said, "Now you are lying too." Oh dear! When had Keith turned so dishone

9、st?2. 文章的语言本文的语言是很生动的，通过动作描写和心里描写展现了人物的特点，下面看神态描写+语言描写：He stared at it for some minutes. Then he said slowly, pausing on every word, Z,I want to take the hand phone."Mary could not believe her ears. She merely stared at her brother. "You can't! What if the owner comes to look for it?&q

10、uot;动作描写：Once back home, Keith locked his house door with trembling hands. Inside his room, he took out the piece of beauty. Oh, he liked it so much. Now he had his own hand phone. Soon, he was polishing it happily.心里活动：Oh dear! When had Keith turned so dishonest?3. 物体线索Then Mary saw a house phone n

11、umber on the plastic cover of the hand phone.从以上我们可以得出：1. 心理描写要通过自问或反问：Oh dear! When had Keith turned so dishonest?2. 内心的表达更多要通过动作：Keith locked his house door with trembling hands. Inside his room, he took out the piece of beauty.3. 内心的表达还要通过评注话语:Oh, he liked it so much. Oh dear! When had Keith turn

12、ed so dishonest?根据极简写作321原则推理情节：That night, Keith turned over in bed from time to time.衔接1 : Keith的思想斗争过渡1 ：相通了。衔接2 : Keith找到Mary并告诉他的决定。Mary was very happy to hear that.衔接3 :两人一起打电话给女主，说明情况。过渡2:归还主题：感悟诚实的重要性。基于此，下水文如下：That night, Keith turned over in bed from time to time.He looked into the darknes

13、s and kept sighing, then covering his head with the pillow. It was difficult for him to return the new hand phone! Whenever he closed his eyes, it will appear in his mind. But how could he bear to think of the young lady heartbroken for her lost hand phone? When had he become a thief? Shame overcame

14、 him. Mary was right! The next morning, he found Mary. am going to phone the owner," he told Mary, stressing each word.Mary was very happy to hear that.They phoned the girl with her house phone number and got through. After being told about her hand phone, the girl expressed her gratitude repea

15、tedly. Even on the other end of the line, Keith could feel her excitement. Then the three met at the same cafe. Seeing the girl' s broad smile, Keith never felt more relieved. He was grateful that he resisted the evil temptation and stuck to being honest. (156 words)说明：第一段：本段主要是心里的纠结，我采用以下手段动作描写

16、:He looked into the darkness and kept sighing, then covering his head with the pillow.心里评注：It was difficult for him to return the new hand phone!虚化梦 :Whenever he closed his eyes, it will appear in his mind.反问:But how could he bear to think of the young lady heartbroken for her lost hand phone? When

17、had he become a thief?直述:Shame overcame him.评注决定:Mary was right!其次语言描写完全模仿原文的Keith所说：he told Mary, stressing each word.第二段：本段主要是思考如何用很简洁的话串联很多过程，我没有描述电话过程，直接说打通电话后，交代 事情。因为重点在Keith看到自己的决定给她带来的快乐以及他的庆幸。主题句的呈现我实际上是通过心里活动来转述。原文答案：That night, Keith turned over in bed from time to time.He had difficulty

18、sleeping, uncertain about what he should do. Of course, he liked the new hand phone. However, he was feeling sorry for the owner. When he thought how sad the young lady would be at the loss of her hand phone, he was full of guilt and shame. The next morning, after a long and restless night, he was determin