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1、书面表达分析书面表达分析广州市作文评分标准：广州市作文评分标准：A档档(15-13.5分分) 内容要点全部涵盖，表达清楚，并有一定的发内容要点全部涵盖，表达清楚，并有一定的发 挥挥;语言知识运用准确，文章结构严谨，行文连语言知识运用准确，文章结构严谨，行文连贯，得体性好。贯，得体性好。B档档(13-9.5分分) 内容要点基本涵盖，语言知识运用基本准确，内容要点基本涵盖，语言知识运用基本准确， 有少量错误，但表达基本清楚，文章组织结构有少量错误，但表达基本清楚，文章组织结构 条理性、连贯性、得体性一般。条理性、连贯性、得体性一般。C档档(9-7分分) 超过超过1/3的内容要点表达欠缺，语言知识运

2、用错的内容要点表达欠缺，语言知识运用错 误较多，但尚能表达基本意思；文章组织、连误较多，但尚能表达基本意思；文章组织、连贯性欠缺。贯性欠缺。D档档(6-3分分) 超过超过1/2至至1/3的内容要点表达欠缺，语言知识的内容要点表达欠缺，语言知识 运用能力差，文章结构、连贯性差，表达不清运用能力差，文章结构、连贯性差，表达不清E档档(2-0分分) 白卷、直言片语，或文不对题、不知所云，谈不白卷、直言片语，或文不对题、不知所云，谈不上内容及表达的合理性。上内容及表达的合理性。评卷老师喜欢的文章评卷老师喜欢的文章评卷老师不喜欢的文章评卷老师不喜欢的文章字体工整，卷面干净字体工整，卷面干净涂涂抹抹，斑斑

3、点点涂涂抹抹，斑斑点点紧扣主题，调理清晰紧扣主题，调理清晰层次不清，段落不分层次不清，段落不分语言地道，过渡自然语言地道，过渡自然语句不通，杂乱无章语句不通，杂乱无章长度适中，一气呵成长度适中，一气呵成书写潦草，卷面不洁书写潦草，卷面不洁 为了使同学们与人交往时举止更加文雅，你校学生为了使同学们与人交往时举止更加文雅，你校学生会正在举办以会正在举办以 how to behave well ? 为主题的英文征为主题的英文征文比赛，请你用英语写一篇文比赛，请你用英语写一篇80词左右的短文。词左右的短文。 短文要点如下：短文要点如下： 1. 学生应该守时，守信，不撒谎，不说脏话；学生应该守时，守信，

4、不撒谎，不说脏话； 2. 礼貌待人，热心助人。礼貌待人，热心助人。 3. 遵守交通规则，不在公共场所喧哗，不乱扔垃圾。遵守交通规则，不在公共场所喧哗，不乱扔垃圾。 4. 请你就此话题再补充一至两点个人看法。请你就此话题再补充一至两点个人看法。 参考词汇：参考词汇：dirty words脏话脏话 keep promises守信守信 be polite to对对-有礼貌有礼貌 be ready to do乐意做某事乐意做某事 obey traffic rules遵守交通规则遵守交通规则 短文开头已给出：短文开头已给出： Behaving well is the secret of getting

5、on well with others. 学生例文学生例文1 But how to behave well? Here are some advice. First of all, as a student, you should do everything on time, keep promise, not to tell lies and not to say dirty words. Its also import to be polite to others and helpful. But if you break traffic rules, speak loudly in st

6、reet, hospital or restaurant or throw rubbishes everywhere, you wont be a man who behave well. To behave well, the most important is to keep gentle everywhere, everytime.不会写不会写in public, 用举例说明，聪明的方法！用举例说明，聪明的方法！红色字体下划线字体使文章连贯，流畅，加分点！红色字体下划线字体使文章连贯，流畅，加分点！2.5分分要点是否齐全，有发挥的一至两点吗？要点是否齐全，有发挥的一至两点吗？ 有！有！

7、内容内容6分！分！再看看表达是否有错误。再看看表达是否有错误。不要象中文那样一逗到底，英文是一个主谓就成一句。不要象中文那样一逗到底，英文是一个主谓就成一句。rubbishBehaves无把握的句型不要用，尤其是定语从句！无把握的句型不要用，尤其是定语从句！分析此句，分析此句，and helpful是否位置放错或另开一句？是否位置放错或另开一句？内容内容6分，表达有分，表达有4处错，有一处较严重错误，给处错，有一处较严重错误，给4.5分，流畅性分，流畅性2.5分。共分。共13分。分。 As student should get to school on time and keep promis

8、e. So we should not tell a lie and speak dirty words. Certainly, we should be polite to others and be helpful to others . We also obey traffic rules. And we shouldnt speak loudly in the public and throw rubbish anywhere. I think that it is also important for us to respect the old. More importantly,

9、we should always with a smile on the face and make a good impression on others. In order to behaving well, try the following advice.学生例文学生例文2要点要点 内容内容 流畅流畅 严重错误！有谓语吗？严重错误！有谓语吗？Above以上的以上的624 To be a student, we do anything should on time, and we cant tell the lie. Yes! We should keep promise, we can

10、t say dirty words. Second, we should be polite to others, most important, is we should help the other people. Third, obey traffic rules, dont make noise and dont throw rubbis here and there are we should do.In my opinion, Dont eating in the class is most important for us.学生例文学生例文36 + 3 + 1.5 = 10.5学

11、生学生例例文文4 Students should keep promise, dont tell a lie and talk impolite. And we need be polite to other, also be ready to help others. It is important for us to obey traffic rules. Dont speak loudly and dont throw rubbish everywhere. Lets try our best to do this things well. 没写没写“不讲脏话不讲脏话”，没有发挥，表达过

12、去简单，次数不，没有发挥，表达过去简单，次数不够。内容得够。内容得4.5分分这是结束语，这是结束语， 不是观点的发挥。不是观点的发挥。4.5 + 3 + 1.5 = 9 学生例文学生例文5 Student should keep promise in the daily life. Dont tell a lie and talk impolite. And we need be polite to other. also be ready to help other. It is, important for us to obey traffic rules. Dont speak loud

13、ly and throw russish every where. 4+1+0.5 = 5.5范文范文 Behaving well is the secret of getting on well with others. As a student, I think its very important to do everything on time and keep promises. Never lie to others or say dirty words. We should be polite to others and ready to help people in need. Wed better not talk loudly in public. Dont throw litter or spit about.