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1、Assessment & practice of WritingAssessment & practice of Writing 2008年奥运会刚刚落幕,一家英文报刊在其网站上征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议假设你叫李华,是该报的一名读者,请给该报编辑部写一封信,谈谈你的建议和理由内容包括 向公众开放,用于健身 租给体育公司,创造经济效益 开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客 Dear editor, I am Li Hua, a reader of your paper. 内容内容语法语法思想思想框架框架-组织结构组织结构要点全,拓展有度,有效要点全,拓展有度,有效连接词,作文结
2、构紧连接词,作文结构紧凑;凑;流畅流畅准确,复杂语法结构,准确,复杂语法结构,高级词汇,多种句型高级词汇,多种句型开放能引起读者的共鸣开放能引起读者的共鸣,灵魂灵魂 1.单词拼写或用错:Give you some advise I just provide you my own suggests.They can attact visitors.advicesuggestionattract2.2.时态语态问题时态语态问题 We may given it to the PE company.We may given it to the PE company. We may We may giv
3、e give it to the PE company.it to the PE company.3. 3. 主谓一致问题主谓一致问题 The sport stadiums is very great and is highly spoken The sport stadiums is very great and is highly spoken of by the foreigners.of by the foreigners. The sport stadiums The sport stadiums areare very great and very great and are hi
4、ghly are highly spokenspoken of by the foreigners of by the foreigners. .4. 4. 逐字翻译问题逐字翻译问题 The stadiums can open to people for do The stadiums can open to people for do exercise use.exercise use.The stadiums can The stadiums can be openedbe opened toto people for doing people for doing exercises.ex
5、ercises.5. 5. 词性混淆问题词性混淆问题It can creative money.It can creative money.It can create/bring in money.It can create/bring in money.Many people can use them to strong our body.Many people can use them to strong our body.Many people can use them to Many people can use them to strengthenstrengthen our bod
6、y. our body.6. 6. 介词短语的运用问题介词短语的运用问题I am writing to make some advice for how to make I am writing to make some advice for how to make full use of the sports stadium.full use of the sports stadium.I am writing to make some adviceI am writing to make some advice on on how to make how to make full use
7、of the sports stadium. full use of the sports stadium. 7.7.句子结构不完整句子结构不完整Only make full use of them does it make senseOnly make full use of them does it make sense . .Only Only by makingby making full use of them does it make sense full use of them does it make sense The 29th Olympic Games which hos
8、ted in Beijing The 29th Olympic Games which hosted in Beijing were held successfully.were held successfully.The 29th Olympic Games The 29th Olympic Games which were hostedwhich were hosted in in Beijing wereBeijing were held successfully.held successfully.1. 审题审题2. 列提纲列提纲/要点要点3.连词成句连词成句4.连句成篇连句成篇5.
9、润色修正润色修正6. 定稿定稿体裁体裁时态时态 结构结构要求要求字数内容信息信息2信息信息3信息信息4开头开头正文正文结尾结尾体裁体裁人称人称时态时态 要求要求结构结构字数字数内容内容一般现在时一般现在时Para.1Para.1Para.2Para.2Para.3Para.3抓要点抓要点,100-120数数信息信息1信息信息50808年奥运会刚刚落幕年奥运会刚刚落幕. .征集奥运会后如何综合利征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议用体育场馆的建议. .你想写一些建议你想写一些建议. .向公众开放,用于健身向公众开放,用于健身总结,意愿总结,意愿书信格式书信格式租给体育公司,创造经济效益租给体育
10、公司,创造经济效益开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客第一第一,三人称三人称08年奥运会刚刚落幕年奥运会刚刚落幕.征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议.你想写一些建议你想写一些建议 开头开头信息信息10808年奥运会刚刚落幕年奥运会刚刚落幕. .征集奥运会后如何综征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议合利用体育场馆的建议. .你想写一些建议你想写一些建议. .Want to write some advice/Would like to give you some adviceContribute some suggestions to yo
11、u.Collect some adviceHow to use/make use of /make the best of the stadiums.After the Olympic GamesAfter Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games .The 2008 Beijing Olympic/ were over/finished/held successfully in Beijing.向公众开放,用于健身向公众开放,用于健身.租给体育公司,创造经济效益租给体育公司,创造经济效益.开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客 .Use it as
12、/be used for/as; take it as; open it forPlaces of interest/tourist attractionsAttract tourists/appeal to visitors/ be attraction for visitorsGive to/Rentto/be rented toSport company/companies which organize matches/organizing matchesMake/ create money; bring in money/make more profitsOpen/be opened
13、to the people/public/open them to public.Be used for/as; be made to;Do some exercise/build our bodies/strengthen our bodies信息信息2信息信息3信息信息4向公众开放,用于健身向公众开放,用于健身租给体育公司,创造经济效益租给体育公司,创造经济效益开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客正正文文 .信息信息5 总结,意愿总结,意愿结尾结尾In my opinion/ as far as I am concerned./from my point of view.I w
14、ould appreciateI would you will think of /takeinto consideration. 开头开头信息信息10808年奥运会刚刚落幕年奥运会刚刚落幕. .征集奥运会后如何综征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议合利用体育场馆的建议. .你想写一些建议你想写一些建议. .The 2008 Beijing Olympic Games were over/finished.The 2008 Beijing Olympic Games were over/finished.The 29th Olympic Games were held successfull
15、y in Beijing.The 29th Olympic Games were held successfully in Beijing.Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games with a great success.Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games with a great success.The 29th Olympic Games The 29th Olympic Games were hostedwere hosted in Beijing in Beijing with a with a great s
16、uccess.great success.Beijing Beijing achieved its dream ofachieved its dream of hosting the 29th Olympic hosting the 29th Olympic Games successfully.Games successfully. Collect some adviceCollect some adviceHow to use/make use of /make the best of the stadiums.How to use/make use of /make the best o
17、f the stadiums.After the Olympic GamesAfter the Olympic GamesAfter Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games .After Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games .You are collecting some advice You are collecting some advice on how to make use ofon how to make use of the the stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29
18、th Olympic Games .stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games .I hear you are collecting some advice I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best ofon how to make the best of the the stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games successfully.stadiums after Beijing ho
19、sted the 29th Olympic Games successfully.Want to write some advice/Would like to give you Want to write some advice/Would like to give you some advicesome adviceContribute some suggestions to you.Contribute some suggestions to you.I I would like towould like to give you some advice. give you some ad
20、vice.I would like to I would like to contribute contribute the following suggestions the following suggestions to to youyou 4.Use it as/be used for/as;take it as;open it forPlaces of interests/tourist attractionsAttract tourists/appeal to visitors/ be attraction for visitors3.Give to/Rentto/be rente
21、d toSport company/companies which organize matches/organizing matchesMake/creat mony; bring in money/make more profits信息信息2信息信息3信息信息4向公众开放,用于健身向公众开放,用于健身租给体育公司,创造经济效益租给体育公司,创造经济效益开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客正正文文2.Open/be opened to the people/public/open them to public.2.Open/be opened to the people/publ
22、ic/open them to public.Be used for/as; be made to;Be used for/as; be made to;Do some exercise/build our body/strengthen our bodiesDo some exercise/build our body/strengthen our bodies2.The stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can build their bodies/strengthen their bodies 3.The stadiums c
23、an be rented to sport company which organize matches.It can bring in more money/make more profits4.They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. .信息信息5 总结,意愿总结,意愿结尾结尾In my opinion/ as far as I am concerned./from my point of view.I would appreciateI would you will think of /ta
24、keinto consideration.In a wordFrom my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use of the stadium. I would appreciate it if you would take my advice into deep considerationPara.1: The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. I hear you are collecting some advice on
25、 how to make the best of the stadiums. I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.Para.2:The stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can build their bodies/strengthen their bodies. The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in more mone
26、y/make more profits. They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors.Para.3: From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it if you would take my advice into deep considerationPara.1: The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beiji
27、ng with a great success. I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums. I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.Para.1: I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijin
28、g with a great success. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.Para.2:The stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. They can be used as
29、 tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors.Para.2: First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can strengthen their bodies. Secondly,The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be use
30、d as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors.First of all Firstly,To begin with,In addition,Besides,Moreover,Whats moreFinally,Whats worse,使用恰当的连接词使用恰当的连接词逻辑角度逻辑角度合适的过渡性词汇合适的过渡性词汇排序关系排序关系 并列关系并列关系举例关系举例关系转折关系转折关系因果关系因果关系归纳总结归纳总结递进关系递进关系first; firstly; second; secondly; last but not least an
31、d; too; as well as; along with; together withfor example; for instance; like; such as; as to but; however; while; though; on the contrarybecause; since; thanks to; as a result /consequence (of); thus; therefore in a word; in short; to sum up; in conclusionwhats more; besides; to make matters worse;
32、whats worse; worse still; furthermore I heard you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. First of all, the stadiums can be opened to
33、 the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. Secondly, The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. From my point of view, we should do what we
34、can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into deep consideration二二. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档三三. 巧用倒装增强句子表现力巧用倒装增强句子表现力四四. 尝试多尝试多样化表达方样化表达方式式一一.使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力强调句强调句With短语复合结构短语复合结构定语从句定语从句名词性从句名词性从句(主宾表同从句主宾表同从句)各种状语从句各种状语从句被动语态
35、被动语态 1. Many people want to visit the stadium . 2. The stadium is useful. Many people are dying to visit the stadium.(唐珊唐珊) The stadium is of great value.(王淑敏王淑敏)一一.使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力 1.The 29th Olympic Games were successfully ended. It left many stadiums unusedThe 29th Olympic Games wer
36、e successfully ended, leaving many stadiums unused(孙诒)(孙诒).二二. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档 1.we can let stadium make sense Only when we make full use of the stadium 2. The stadiums can be rented to the physical company to create more economic profits. they can be the places to appeal visitors to pa
37、y a visit.Only when we make full use of the stadium can we let stadium make sense(张文雪张文雪).Not only can the stadiums be rented to the physical company to create more economic profits, but also they can be the places to appeal visitors to pay a visit.(张蕾张蕾)三三. 巧用倒装增强句子表现力巧用倒装增强句子表现力 We should take the
38、 Olympic stadiums into consideration after Beijing hosted the games successfully. The 29th Olympic Games were ended successfully. we start talking about how to use the stadiums properly for our daily livesIt is the Olympic stadiums that we should take into consideration after Beijing hosted the game
39、s successfully.With the 29th Olympic Games ended successfully, we start talking about how to use the stadiums properly for our daily lives.四四. 尝试多样化表达方式尝试多样化表达方式强调句强调句With短语复合结构短语复合结构You can open them for the public. The stadiums can be used to take exercise.You can open the stadiums which can be us
40、ed to take exercise for the public.(高玉华高玉华).四四. 尝试多样化表达方式尝试多样化表达方式定语从句定语从句各种状语从句各种状语从句我们锻炼的越多,我们就越健康。我们锻炼的越多,我们就越健康。The more exercises we take, the healthier we will become.被动语态被动语态We should pay more attention to the stadiums.More attention should be paid to the stadiums.(潘畅潘畅) I heard you are colle
41、cting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. Second
42、ly, The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it ver
43、y much if you would take my advice into deep consideration高考书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求高考书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求第五档(第五档(21-2521-25分)分) 完全完成完全完成了试题规定的任务了试题规定的任务: :l准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容,要点无遗漏准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容,要点无遗漏l应用了较多的语法结构和词汇应用了较多的语法结构和词汇l语法结构和词汇有少许错误,但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式语法结构和词汇有少许错误,但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式 所致;具备较强的语言应用能力所致;具备较强的语言应用能力l有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑完全达到了预期的写作目的。完全达到了预期的写作目的。第四档(第四档(16-2016-20分)分) 完成完成了试题规定的任务了试题规定的任务: :l比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容
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